ISSUE55 ....求批改。。。必回拍

charleqinUID: 2854380

OPIC: ISSUE55 - "Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education."
WORDS: 362
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/7/26 20:03:16

Although I agree with the speaker's broad assertion that high grades plays a very important role in education. However, the speaker's assertion is too extreme and one-sided, and I disagree with the assertion for following reasons.

As I can see, the competition is existing in all level of the education. Albeit, the competition for high grades is more intense and make a important sense of education. However, the speaker claimed that competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education, and this is unfairly. In my view, each of the grade played a important role of education. For example, the speaker may think that low grade of education is more unnecessary in the quality of learning of education, and let me prove that the speaker is totally wrong. As we known, the high grade students or scholars are coming from the low. If the low grade's education was ignored, how can the high grade receive the students or scholars who are excellence in the education? The answer is obviously can be seen.

Furthermore, the speaker accentuated that competition for high grades SERIOUSLY limits the quality of learning at all levels of education. In my opinion, although I concede the speaker's broad point of view that high grades limits the quality of learning. It is because high grades has the most important influence of education, and it has a more serious competitions. Thus, we should pay more attention to the high grades insofar as we care about the low one either.

As far as I am concerned, the education is very important in human's life, even the low levels of education. We should pay attention from where we begin the education, and it will pay back a well consequent when we are in the high grade of education. In order to make people have a great competitiveness, we also should have done something that make students or scholars have more competition in low grade of education.

In sum, competition for all levels of education is important and limits the quality of learning, especially the high grades. Importantly, we should treat the education comprehensive.

hugeseaUID: 190158

OPIC: ISSUE55 - "Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education."
WORDS: 362
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/7/26 20:03:16

Although I agree with the speaker's broad assertion that high grades plays a very important role in education. （i'm confused, i don't understand what you mean "speaker's broad assertion", and the first sentence is uncomplete, only "Although"- clause is there.) However, the speaker's assertion is too extreme and one-sided, and I disagree with the assertion for following reasons. (The second sentence makes some sence.)

As I can see, the competition is existing in all level of the education. ( I don't think this sentence make any sence. Is it your point? what's you point?) Albeit, the competition for high grades is more intense and make a important sense of education. ( uncomplete sentence) However, the speaker claimed that competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education, and this is unfairly.(OK! finally, I find your point!)  In my view, each of the grade played a important role of education. For example, the speaker may think that low grade of education is more unnecessary in the quality of learning of education, and let me prove that the speaker is totally wrong. As we known, the high grade students or scholars are coming from the low. If the low grade's education was ignored, how can the high grade receive the students or scholars who are excellence in the education? The answer is obviously can be seen.(i'm totally lost in your reasoning...and i think your reasoning make no sence...what you should do is to persude readers to believe your point of view..you should tell them how and why.)

Furthermore, the speaker accentuated that competition for high grades SERIOUSLY limits the quality of learning at all levels of education. In my opinion, although I concede the speaker's broad point of view that high grades limits the quality of learning. It is because high grades has the most important influence of education, and it has a more serious competitions. Thus, we should pay more attention to the high grades insofar as we care about the low one either. (Is this your body 2?)

As far as I am concerned, the education is very important in human's life, even the low levels of education. We should pay attention from where we begin the education, and it will pay back a well consequent when we are in the high grade of education. In order to make people have a great competitiveness, we also should have done something that make students or scholars have more competition in low grade of education. (Yes! I know education is important, you needn't have put much of your attention on this! what i wanna know is that you opinion  on the issue that "Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.")

In sum, competition for all levels of education is important and limits the quality of learning, especially the high grades. Importantly, we should treat the education comprehensive.charleqin 发表于 2010-7-26 20:14

well, are you kidding me? is this really your issue?

i'm sorry, i have to say this argumentation is bad one...sorry...i don't know how to appraise it...

Please make sure you really understand what the theme says before you write your composition....

charleqinUID: 2854380

2# hugesea 改的太好了，受益匪浅。。。我只能说努力了，毕竟考试马上来了。。。当头一棒，也很清醒啊，谢谢

charleqinUID: 2854380

2# hugesea 我发现我审错题了，GRADES是高分的意思。。。我理解成年级的意思了。。。

mitchelllcUID: 2793083

4# charleqin
强烈建议考前把题库看一遍~