7.27 小野 作文

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10.7-xiaoye 作文作业

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我传不了附件～见谅^^
Many people disagree with the view it is more important than achieving success to remain happy and optimistic when we fail, and they may think achieving success is a very happy thing. However, others could (would) support the view because many people often fail (may inevitably fail, 用often感觉语意不太准)
when they pursue success. As far as I am concerned, I give my vote to latter view.

To begin with, people must keep happy and optimistic to face fail. There is a long process for people to pursue success, and people may face much challenge in such process. For example, Edison faced thousands time fail in order to find good（proper） material to make bulb. He always remained optimistically (optimistic) heart to repeat experiments, to the end, he obtained success. Because the process of success is very long, people should keep a clam heart to deal with fail.

Secondly, remaining happy and optimistic when we fail is very strong power to stimulate us to go ahead. People should have strong confidence (abundant confidence) to face fail (failure). The fail (Failure or To fail) is not terrible; the terrible thing is that we lost confidence to face fail. So remaining happy and optimistic is the best way to foster strength confidence to fail, which help people find good ways to obtain success.

Finally, the important thing is that failure is very painful, which demand people have long term plan to deal with. However, it is very obvious that achieving success is a kind state of one process(没看懂呢), which make people happy and optimistic in short time. Therefore, people are ready to face long term failure. It is undeniable that to remain happy and optimistic when we fail is very important to help people come over such long term failure.

In sum, to obtain success demand people have enough capacity to face fail. To remain happy and optimistic is very important to foster people's confidence to go ahead in the process of fail. Therefore, achieving success is our aim, we should pursue such aim and don’t worry(not worry about) fail.


alien注：粉色的是我觉得表达更符合语意的。红色的是不对的——个人觉得^^
你的结构很清楚，语法也挺清晰~要是能平时用一些从句之类的会锦上添花~~加油吧！