I153【六人行】7.29作业byD

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首先对抽出宝贵时间帮我改AW的同学表示感谢
希望改的时候侧重于逻辑错误，关于语法：比如词汇重复，句型简单或者句子长度问题的就不必费心了，我个人就是意思能表达明白足矣，虽然也很纠结，但因为短时间这些很难提高，如果意思表达不明，逻辑不正确，请狠狠的暴力的指出，并直接说出来，我不会介意，反而是感谢这些宝贵的意见，再次感谢

Issue No.153【六人行】by D

WORDS: 413
TIME: 00:43:13


According to the statement , the speaker says that the students should doubt what the teachers' teaching instead of accepting it passively and should wonder whether he studied is right or not. I fundamentally agree with what the statement says because of the following reasons.

The skepticism make the new ideas ,and creating makes a better future. The students are always believe the teachers' talking. So they have a low efficiency of studying and don't interested in learning at all, they hate studying, But the level of one's understanding ability is raised in continuing doubt, the doubting urging the students to take more time on what they learned and have a better understanding and the interesting to studying. And it is the skepticism make the science developing at such high level .So we should trained the students with the spirit of doubting what he learned when they were young, It take advantage to the development of the modern science.

From the old age to now. there are too many people who had the spirit of doubting making contribution to the development of the history, In thousands years ago in China , there a militarist named Sun Bin ,he never command the soldiers to fighting as the books said . he always did opposite to the books and made his enemy confused, finally, he beat the enemy and write the famous book <The art of the war>. Why could he did such magical thing?
because he always bring a certain skepticism to the old books which were write by the former people. So the famous Goldbach's conjecture is also a wonderful example of the advantage of doubting. So no doubting, no progressing. Nobody is perfect. we should doubt the old rules and break it and make a better one.

Not everything in the book is right , but when we educating the child, there something we should make the children
thinking is right force. because they are too young to tell the good and bad to one thing apart. That the foundation of one's mind. we can make the mistake like that. when they grow up to a right age ,we can train the spirit of doubting.

So, having said the reasons above. we should say that the children's education decides the development of the society, and the skepticism could make the science step into a higher level . That is a important task to spread the spirit and apply it into the reality.


Issue 提纲【六人行】by D


I30 TG

1.科技带来的好处已经使我们效率大大增高，飞机汽车电话
2.虽然比相比以前办事少了，但只是让我们更忙
3.科技节省的时间绝对不是为了休息，而是为了更高效率

I8 TG

1.有些时候封锁消息是必要的，涉及国家机密，如果只泄露一点反而会是大众误解，为不法分子提供煽动的机会，或者不利于治安，
2。但是大多数时候公开信息是很有利的，可以防止贪污，腐败，可扫清官场不良风气。
3.政府是为人民服务的，人民有权利了解与自己利益有关的事情，比如账目。。。；公开信息会更好的得到人民的支持，把事情办好，报纸上市长与网民互动

I5 TG
1.统一的课程培养向学生传达传统价值观的优点，使得一个国家的民族特征凸显出来，比如中国的传统美德：爱好和平，诚实，热情
2.统一课程是全国处在同一起跑线上，这样在大学录取时具有公平性，否则。。。
3.当然某些地区需要单独课程，比如中国的少数民族自治区
4.虽然提倡因材施教是正确的，但是个人的因材施教可能还达不到


I63 TG

1.世界各地文化不一样，多元化
2.不与外面比较不知道文化是否有利于自己，中国的清朝自以为天朝圣国，闭关锁国，不想不去了解外面世界，给自己带来灭亡
3.了解外国文化使得生活丰富，是自己文化更充实，进一步看清自己，像一面镜子。


I94 TG

1.知识多元化的重要性，全面发展的重要性
2.学习其他科目有时也会有助于加深对本学科的理解，例如：建筑有时需要艺术；计算机需要逻辑
3.在保证专业课基础上，可适当选修，但学校不必强制性，精力有限，有些同学搞不定，会弄巧成拙

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Issue No.153【六人行】by D
WORDS: 413
TIME: 00:43:13

According to the statement, the speaker says that the students should doubt what the teachers' teaching instead of accepting it passively and should wonder whether he studied is right or not. I fundamentally agree with what the statement says because of the following reasons.
The skepticism make[makes] the new ideas, and creating makes a better future. The students are always believe[believed] the teachers' talking. So they have a low efficiency of studying and don't interested in learning at all, they hate studying, [有点偏了吧。直接接在主题句后面让人怀疑这是不是走题了，建议先说怀疑对新想法等等的重要性，再说学生在学习过程中怀疑与不怀疑对他们未来以及对科学发展的不同影响。然后再接你后面的那些怀疑精神的培养云云。] But the level of one's understanding ability is raised in continuing doubt, the doubting urging the students to take more time on what they learned and have a better understanding and the interesting to studying. And it is the skepticism make the science developing at such high level .So we should trained the students with the spirit of doubting what he learned when they were young, It take advantage to the development of the modern science.
From the old age to now, there are too many people who had the spirit of doubting making contribution to the development of the history, In thousands years ago in China , there a militarist named Sun Bin ,he never command the soldiers to fighting as the books said. he[He] always did opposite to the books and made his enemy confused, finally, he beat the enemy and write the famous book <The art of the war>[是这样翻译的？……]. Why could he did[do] such magical thing? Because he always bring[brings] a certain skepticism to the old books which were write by the former people. So the famous Gold Bach’s conjecture is also a wonderful example of the advantage of doubting. So no doubting, no progressing. Nobody is perfect. we[We] should doubt the old rules and break it and make a better one.
Not everything in the book is right, but when we educating the child, there something we should make the children thinking is right force. Because they are too young to tell the good and bad to one thing apart. That [is] the foundation of one's mind. we[We] can make the mistake like that. When they grow up to a right age, we can train the spirit of doubting.[这段要是再有一点例子就好了，自己编个科学实验之类的]
So, having said the [by the] reasons above. We should say that the children's education decides the development of the society, and the skepticism could make the science step into a higher level. That is a[an] important task to spread the spirit and apply it into the reality.

总体逻辑蛮清晰，论证段例子有点少。但限时能写成这样真的很棒,我很羡慕。建议看看段落和句群的连接词，连接方式，看看模板，会对组织文章时的连接词枯竭有很大帮助。