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Music and art play a key role in the development of human; they are a kind of record of history and the splendid civilization. As the technology developing, people pay more attention to the math and science. They believe that science, math and history will contribute more to the further development. This belief even extends to the education of the younger children. However, as for me, music and art would are crucial in the development of children as they are in the development of human.

It is known that math language, science and history are essential in the early education of children. The math language gives children a basic concept of the technology and the nature, since the math language is the language of the universe. Besides, science bring children an idea that how things happen in this way and a deep understanding about the nature. As you see, just teaching children about these subjects seems like what we have done to computer, we merely store some information in the memory and use them to do some calculations and analyses.

Of course, we want our children to be elites not computers. Consequently, we should teach our children music and art. The music and art can contribute to the all-round development of children, not only a sense of artistic but also inspire them in the study of math and technology. For example, when the children study the famous painting Mona Lisa, they may find a hidden factor contribute to the mysterious smile--the Golden Division. This can undoubtedly deepen their understanding of this concept in mathematics.

What' more, learning music and art can help children develop a critical ability to handle the pressure from work and study. Obviously, our brains need relaxation when working to much time. For instance, if I study all day without any relaxation, my performance will drop and I wound soon have a headache. Moreover, it is not rare that the extensive pressure from work makes people sick or even drives them to go suicide. Music and art are definitely a good way to relieve the pressure from work and study. If the children learned how to use music to control their mental status, we can assume that they are less likely to be overwhelmed by the pressure.

In conclusion, learning math, science and history only are not enough for children to adapt to the changing society. With the help of the music and art, children will adapt these changes more easily. The experience of learning music and art will definitely be helpful in children's later life.

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加油哦

kunterUID: 2687844

哎   这篇完全不行   整个没灵感

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改好了，请查收！
请川川也尽快给小夕改哦~~

kunterUID: 2687844

我自己重新修改了下  如果那位还没改的同学看到就下这篇吧

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抱歉，现在才回复……
已经改好了~见附件~~

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Nowadays, people pay more attention to their career development. They prepare it from university, attending associations in university, applying for internship to gain working experience, taking courses about how to behave appropriately in working place. And then, they may face a dilemma that whether they should show their strengths and accomplishments to their employers or influential people. Someone may argue it is needless to let them know our advantages. However, I believe showing our merits and accomplishments can definitely help us stand out.

To begin with, those who think they can be successful without showing their advantages should consider, how to get the attention of their supervisors, how to obtain enough opportunities to show their abilities, how to persuade the manager to give them a suitable position to perform their genius. Nertherless, showing their advantages and successful past can guarantee these things.

In addition, showing our strengths can give us a right position. Everyone has different merits, and only in a suitable position can perform their merits to full play. If people do something that they are not good at, they may do these tasks badly. For example, in a soccer game, people have different position, goalkeeper, backward, midfield and forward. If we let a goalkeeper to play as a forward, he may have no shoot in the entire game. Nonetheless, if the goalkeeper shows his strengths at goalkeeping and his accomplishment that he only loses several goals in the entire season, the coach will let him be a goalkeeper. Obviously, the goalkeeper may have a brighter future than to be a forward.

What's more, showing our accomplishments can provide us more opportunities. Think of this, if we are the leader, we wouldn't give a special and important task to an unfamiliar employee, instead, we would assign tasks to these who we familiar with and trust. For example, in ancient times, the emperor was more willing to assign essential tasks to the generals they familiar with and experienced than those who lack of experience. Without enough chances, these who do not show their strengths cannot prove that they are capable of doing difficult tasks. Even though they gain the managers' trust gradually, their career developments are far behind than those who show their advantages.

In conclusion, people who show their strengths and accomplishments are undoubtedly having a easier career development than those who do not. They can acquire more opportunities and more desirable positions to prove their outstanding abilities to complete the tasks.

kunterUID: 2687844

上面的文章写错了   改的同学稍等

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25# kunter
好的，那你好了通知我一下我再来给你改吧

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Movie and TV programs play a key role in people's life, they are not only a way to relax but also a way to open their eyes. Nowadays, as the world become more
and more open, people can watch movies from different countries. Nevertheless, people may be asked a question, are movie and TV programs made in their own country more interesting than in other countries. Someone prefers the domestic ones. However, as I see it, I prefer the foreign movies and TV programs.

To begin with, foreign movies and TV programs give us a chance to know other countries. Apparently, people are curious. They like to find something new such as how foreign countries are like, how the pyramid were made, how their attitude toward religious. Foreign movies and TV programs provide us a better way to know these. For example, some movies can reveal their countries' culture and custom, like in Arab countries, woman should wear veils. Furthermore, some foreign TV programs are better than domestic ones. For instance, Discoveries and Nation geography are the most excellent ones in my heart. They have a better quality of video, vivid and easy-understanding interpretations. While, domestic ones only show something about our own countries, like the Great Wall and the Summer palace, which we all familiar with.

In addition, foreign movies and Tv programs can satisfy our imagination. Obviously, most people have seen the great series of movies called Star War. They talk about the stories intergalaxy, about justice and evil. This new world expends people's imagination about the universe and aliens. Another example is Harry Potter. In that film, people can fly with a broom, the man in the photo can move and speak. In a word, it provides us a magic world. Compared to these foreign movies, domestic movies are lack of imagination and special techniques to make the movie vivid.

However, we cannot deny the fact that some domestic movies and TV programs are outstanding. They can deepen our understanding about our own countries and different culture in different parts of country. Besides, it is easier to understand these movies because we have the same culture.

In conclusion, the domestic movies and TV programs have their merits. However, compared to the foreign ones, people prefer something new and high quality, since the foreign movies and TV programs have much more merits and meet people's desire to find something new.



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给你修改好了
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Movie and TV programs play a key role in people's life, they are not only a way to relax but also a way to open their eyes. Nowadays, as the world become more
and more open, people can watch movies from different countries. Nevertheless, people may be asked a question, are movie and TV programs made in their own country more interesting than in other countries. Someone prefers the domestic ones. However, as I see it, （删掉吧，简单点） I prefer the foreign movies and TV programs.

To begin with, foreign movies and TV programs give us a chance to know other countries. Apparently, people are curious. They like to find something new such as how foreign countries are like, how the pyramid were made, how their attitude toward religious. Foreign movies and TV programs provide us a better way to know these. For example, some movies can reveal their countries' culture and custom, like in Arab countries, existing the custom that （有点语法问题，试着改改看）
woman should wear veils. Furthermore, some foreign TV programs are better than domestic ones. For instance, Discoveries and Nation geography are the most excellent ones in my heart. They have a better quality of video, vivid and easy-understanding interpretations. While （On the other side）, domestic ones only show something about our own countries, like the Great Wall and the Summer palace, which we all familiar with.

In addition, foreign movies and Tv programs can satisfy our need in imagination. Obviously, most people have seen the great series of movies called Star War. They talk about the stories intergalaxy, about justice and evil. This new world expends people's imagination about the universe and aliens. Another example is Harry Potter. In that film, people can fly with a broom; the man in the photo can move and speak. In a word, it provides us (brings us to, 更好) a magic world. Compared to these foreign movies, domestic movies are lack of imagination and special techniques to make the movie vivid.

However, we cannot deny the fact that some domestic movies and TV programs are outstanding. They can deepen our understanding about our own countries and different culture in different parts of country. Besides, it is easier to understand these movies because we have the same culture （前面刚讲了different culture）.

In conclusion, the domestic movies and TV programs have their merits. However, compared to the foreign ones, people prefer something new and high quality, since the foreign movies and TV programs have much more merits and meet people's desire to find something new.

结构合理，理由充分，例子也很到位。但是需要注意前后句子的连贯性.

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