几个问题~~求助各位

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issue 写了5 篇了， 可是都没在规定的时间内完成。可能是打字速度的问题，还有就是看到题目头脑一片空白。写的过程也比较煎熬，思来想去，一句话得琢磨个半天。
1个小时过去了，可算完成了。对照下范文，看看别人的文章，发现大量的拼写错误，最重要的是结构混乱。每次修改都是颠覆性的，很多都重写了。改完在写还是感觉没啥收获
拿不准的还是拿不准，结构也没形成套路。请各位为我指点迷津，我将不胜感激。附上一篇issue 130

Issue 130

Have we Have we learned how to raise children who can
bring about a better society

The speaker asserts that the fate of our society is firmly hinges on how children are socialized today. It might be tempting to approve of this statement, but the speaker hastily sums up this question in one category. Then the speaker renders a pessimistic statement that we are not able to raise the elites in different realms without compelling and persuasive evidence supporting.

Admittedly, it is incontrovertible that socialization is practical method to get involved into society and get along well with others. Through frequently close communication and mutually beneficial cooperation, we can triumph over many pragmatic constrains that we are incompetent to overcome. In my observation, socialization is not only a process of being acquainted with other and introducing yourself to other but sufficient opportunities to connect our inner apace with physical world. Further more, some
typical fundamental affection with momentous meaning and sacred symbolization, such as love and friendship, needs this accumulating experience to form. All the characters we should process are the elemental points directly determining the qualities of our abilities to be competent citizens during socialization.

However, the claim that socialization is the only one factor influencing the extent to which one individual can contribute to a better society lacks of admissible recommendation and elaborate explanation. Thus, seeing this angle mentioned above, in order to prove this, there is no denying that we need to retrospect and scrutinize the consistence of human history. Martin Luther King, the leader of African American civil rights movement, devoted himself to secure progress on civil rights in US and be recognized as martyr for his contribution after his death. The era when Martin Luther King of tender age lived is shrouded with the darkness of racial discrimination, accordingly we cannot assume that he lived in peace and harmony. Diligence, bravery, and wisdom---the most significant characters of human kind---shaped in the process of triumphing over the difficulties and hardship, and ultimately influence the path of evolution and innovation of human civilization. Understandably, socialization is a partial factor determining the society’s fate.

Another argument goes against the speaker that we haven’t learned how to raise the future elites who can contribute to a better society. A society cannot develop in chaos, so it is necessary to clarify our goals. If we decide a clear direction of development of society and make a precise definition of a “better society”, a corresponding strategy will shape. There is no doubt that education is the most applicable and efficient method of cultivating and training future elites. That means that emphasizing the significance of education and provide some sponsors is extremely requisite, because educational standard is a objective and convincing indicator mirroring one country’s storage of potential developing power. Apart from education, parental instrument and societal assistance should be credited as two significant formative factors. As far as I’ am concerned, before being adult,
one spends the majority of time with parents and form the initiative cognition of self and world forms in this period. Because of the difference of social status, governmental welfare and social supports are urgently needed by the families suffering from starvation, unemployment, homelessness and other grim situations. Consequently, it is a rational behavior that inhibits this tendency involve next generation in this cruel predicament. Therefore, the aspects I mentioned could assuage the anxiety of the destiny of society and make us faithfully believe that we are capable to raise the children, as we hope, who can bring about a better society.

In sum, socialization of children is not the only way we convert the society into perfection and realize the dream of pushing our civilization into a high level the history has never see. Although realities we have encountered always
be cruel and even unconquerable, we still have reasons to have faith in the society where we will belong in the future. I the final analysis, I disagree with both of aspects of this duel claim of speaker.


Issue 130

Have we