Issue147，第一次模考，受伤了，刚写上400，留链必返~

shadow1987UID: 2605840

TOPIC: ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
WORDS: 404           TIME: 00:45:00            DATE: 2010-7-31 21:34:48

思路：

第一段：时代变化很快，观念改变很快，造成传统和现代化有时确实得打架，但是他们并不是不相容的，我的观点是传统和现代化可以互相学习，并且一同创造新东西。

第二段：让步段，说确实有时候会打架，比如说中国传统的消费观念，主张节约省钱，但是这样就抑制了经济的发展因为后者的发现需要活跃的经济活动。

第三段：立论段，说传统和现代化可以互相利用，比如说中国的元宵节，大家开始都自己做灯笼，后来量产了，大家都可以买了，再有用灯泡替换了蜡烛，都得感谢现代化。

第四段：立论段，说传统和现代化还能融合，比如说中国的流行音乐融入了很多传统音乐的元素，传统的乐器和现代的乐器同台演奏，这种新风格有很好的效果。

第五段：Conclusion

In this era, the society changes rapidly and our traditional ideas and values might some time conflict with the modern ones. Hence, it is in accordance to the common sense that tradition and modernization are incompatible, and being the participators in our society, we can only choose one of them. However, the speaker's claim, while appealing in some respects, is an over-statement at best and I totally disagree with it. In my view, tradition and modernization can benefit from each other, moreover, when we try to integrate the two, they might bring about a surprising effect.

In the first place, I must concede the existing of conflict between tradition and modernization. With the development of our science and technology, people change their traditional ideas and values gradually and significantly. People of different ages may have different opinions toward a custom, a historical event, or a famous person and we believe this phenomenon is so-called "generation gap". Consumption idea in China might serves as a proper example. Traditional consumption idea in China encourages saving, under this circumstance, whether people have a purchase plan or not should be economical and save on expenses for the unknown situation in the future. In this case, the traditional save-it-but-not-spent-it theory would hinder the process of modernization due to the prosperity economic activities required here.

However, we must be aware of that, tradition and modernization can benefit from each other. For instance, China has the Lantern Festival held to celebrate the New Year’s coming and which is taken as an opportunity to reunite with families as well as friends. During this day, people usually hold various lanterns and hang out in the streets, and as a tradition, they would appreciate each others' lanterns. In ancient time, people made the lanterns themselves, considering the process is difficult and complex, we seek help from modernization. After the popularizing of mass production system, people can simply buy the lanterns. Nonetheless, it is still not perfect due to the candles in lanterns which were made of paper might easily set off the fire. Likewise, thanks to the invention of small light bulb, in modern China, people hold the safe lanterns and enjoy this festival happily.

Moreover, when we integrate the tradition and modernization together, we might create something new. In other words, different ideas and thoughts can enlighten us to achieve a brand new idea. For instance, some bands and singers in China nowadays are trying to mix the traditional art styles such as Beijing opera and Kun opera with modern ones like rap and hip-hop. Likewise, these young and creative artists bring the traditional musical instruments into their composing. Surprisingly, they attain amazing effect and we should know that this revolutionary style is actually the mixture of tradition and modernization.

To sum up, I find the speaker's assertion to some extent too extreme, because tradition is not on the opposite position of modernization, and they actually represent two sorts of ideas and values. In some occasions, they would indeed conflict with each other, yet we are trying to avoid. On the other hand, they would not only benefit from each other but also create something new together. Hence, they absolutely compatible and we can choose both of them.

doraliuUID: 2842061

In this era, the society changes rapidly and our traditional ideas and values might some time conflict with the modern ones. Hence, it is in accordance to（with） the common sense that tradition and modernization are incompatible, and being the participators in our society, we can only choose one of them. However, the speaker's claim, while appealing in some respects, is an over-statement at best and I totally disagree with it. In my view, tradition and modernization can benefit from each other, moreover, when we try to integrate the two, they might bring about a surprising effect.
In the first place, I must concede the existence of conflict between tradition and modernization. With the development of our science and technology, people change their traditional ideas and values gradually and significantly. People of different ages may have different opinions toward a custom, a historical event, or a famous person and we believe this phenomenon is so-called "generation gap". Consumption idea in China might serves as a proper example. Traditional consumption idea in China encourages saving, under this circumstance, whether people have a purchase plan or not should be economical and save on expenses for the unknown situation in the future. 这句没看懂In this case, the traditional save-it-but-not-spent-it theory would hinder the process of modernization due to the prosperity economic activities required here.
这两句是不是要说明tradition 跟modernization 的冲突？是要说Chinese
traditional of saving money goes against the theory of consuming-promoted economy？不过说明的不清晰额，due to the prosperity economic activities 这三字感觉上还是有点饶的required here 意思不明确啊，here说的是哪里呢？

however, we must be aware of that, tradition and modernization can benefit from each other. For instance, China has the Lantern Festival (元宵节应该不是coming吧？)held to celebrate the New Year’s coming and which is taken as an opportunity to reunite with families as well as friends. During this day, people usually hold various lanterns and hang out in the streets, and as a tradition, they would appreciate each others' lanterns. In ancient time, people made the lanterns by themselves, considering the process is difficult and complex, we seek help from modernization. After the popularizing of mass production system, people can simply buy the lanterns. Nonetheless, it is still not perfect due to the candles in lanterns which were made of paper might easily set it off the fire( 这句感觉怪怪的，the candles in lanterns can easily set the paper made lanterns on fire?不知道会不会好一些). Likewise, thanks to the invention of small light bulb, in modern China, people hold the safe lanterns and enjoy this festival happily.
Moreover, when we integrate the tradition and modernization together, we might create something new. In other words, different ideas and thoughts can enlighten us to achieve(come up with, achieve应该是达到目标) a brand new idea. For instance, some bands and singers in China nowadays are trying to mix the traditional art styles such as Beijing opera and Kun opera with modern ones like rap and hip-hop. Likewise, these young and creative artists bring the traditional musical instruments into their composing. Surprisingly, they attain amazing effect and we should know that this revolutionary style is actually the mixture of tradition and modernization.（这个例子很好）
To sum up, I find（发现不好，我们发现什么东西是用find） the speaker's assertion to some extent too extreme, because tradition is not on the opposite position of modernization, and they actually represent two sorts of ideas and values. In some occasions, they would indeed conflict with each other, yet we are trying to avoid（还不如说 we need to choose between them，恰好切题，这个也没啥好avoid的，没法融合就选个合适的）. On the other hand, they would not only benefit from each other but also create something new together. Hence, they are absolutely compatible and we can choose both of them.


我觉得思路很好啊，两者有冲突的例子，有帮助的例子，有融合创造的例子，应该能写长的。。。。。。

shadow1987UID: 2605840

2# doraliu

感谢修改，做几点记录如下：

In this era, the society changes rapidly and our traditional ideas and values might some time conflict with the modern ones. Hence, it is in accordance to（with）1:其实with和to貌似都行，但是我觉得这里我没把意思表达出来，我想说“这样想是符合常识的”Hence, the assumption that……coincide with the common sense the common sense that tradition and modernization are incompatible, and being the participators in our society, we can only choose one of them. However, the speaker's claim, while appealing in some respects, is an over-statement at best and I totally disagree with it. In my view, tradition and modernization can benefit from each other, moreover, when we try to integrate the two, they might bring about a surprising effect.
In the first place, I must concede the existence of conflict between tradition and modernization. With the development of our science and technology, people change their traditional ideas and values gradually and significantly. People of different ages may have different opinions toward a custom, a historical event, or a famous person and we believe this phenomenon is so-called "generation gap". Consumption idea in China might serves as a proper example. Traditional consumption idea in China encourages saving, under this circumstance, whether people have a purchase plan or not should be economical and save on expenses for the unknown situation in the future. 这句没看懂2：whether people have extra money must be economical and save on expenses In this case, the traditional save-it-but-not-spent-it theory would hinder the process of modernization due to the prosperity economic activities required here.
这两句是不是要说明tradition 跟modernization 的冲突？是要说Chinese traditional of saving money goes against the theory of consuming-promoted economy？不过说明的不清晰额，due to the prosperity economic activities 这三字感觉上还是有点饶的required here 意思不明确啊，here说的是哪里呢？3：主要是想把阻碍现代化进程这个点给说出来，跟某理论冲突并不能很好的突出这个点，一开始想用active活跃的，但是active activities觉得怪怪的，改成prosperity，确实有点绕。here很口语化，能理解，但是书面表达得不清楚。active economic activities required in economic development怎么样？

however, we must be aware of that, tradition and modernization can benefit from each other. For instance, China has the Lantern Festival (元宵节应该是ending了吧？)4：什么意思？held to celebrate the New Year’s coming and which is taken as an opportunity to reunite with families as well as friends. During this day, people usually hold various lanterns and hang out in the streets, and as a tradition, they would appreciate each others' lanterns. In ancient time, people made the lanterns by themselves, considering the process is difficult and complex, we seek help from modernization. After the popularizing of mass production system, people can simply buy the lanterns. Nonetheless, it is still not perfect due to the candles in lanterns which were made of paper might easily set it off the fire( 这句感觉怪怪的，the candles in lanterns can easily set the paper made lanterns on fire?不知道会不会好一些). Likewise, thanks to the invention of small light bulb, in modern China, people hold the safe lanterns and enjoy this festival happily.
Moreover, when we integrate the tradition and modernization together, we might create something new. In other words, different ideas and thoughts can enlighten us to achieve(come up with, achieve应该是达到目标) a brand new idea. For instance, some bands and singers in China nowadays are trying to mix the traditional art styles such as Beijing opera and Kun opera with modern ones like rap and hip-hop. Likewise, these young and creative artists bring the traditional musical instruments into their composing. Surprisingly, they attain amazing effect and we should know that this revolutionary style is actually the mixture of tradition and modernization.（这个例子很好）
To sum up, I find（发现不好，我们发现什么东西是用find）5：兄弟，北美范文都是这么写的哦 the speaker's assertion to some extent too extreme, because tradition is not on the opposite position of modernization, and they actually represent two sorts of ideas and values. In some occasions, they would indeed conflict with each other, yet we are trying to avoid（还不如说 we need to choose between them，恰好切题，这个也没啥好avoid的，没法融合就选个合适的）6：有道理. On the other hand, they would not only benefit from each other but also create something new together. Hence, they are absolutely compatible and we can choose both of them.


我觉得思路很好啊，两者有冲突的例子，有帮助的例子，有融合创造的例子，应该能写长的。。。。。。
这个字数是足够了，因为我补完整了= =！真的挺难的，如果在考场上遇到没写过的题目，瞬间破题，瞬间整理出思路，瞬间找到例子，要求实在太高！

doraliuUID: 2842061

5。。。。。我错了，直觉上觉得find太符合中国口味了。。。。我回去看范文。。。。
4， lantern festival,不是用来庆祝new year's coming 的吧，是spring festival的ending么。。。
2 是再说，if people want to have extra money, they must be economical and save on expense?
activies 这句用主动的会不会更合适些？because economic development needs active economice activities........

shadow1987UID: 2605840

4# doraliu

我不懂啊，忽悠外国人呗，哈哈

主动？嗯，不错，旁观者清啊，谢了^o^