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40"Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem."


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As Einstein put it, interests are one's best teacher. Interests bring people intense motivation to delve a problem, which is regarded as a key spirit for science. On one hand, researchers pursuing their career according to their research can inspire them to success; on the other hand, the benefit of research is difficult to predict at the beginning of research. Hence, I agree that researchers choose their interested area. But, research should never sacrifice the profit of human and those urgent problems are prior to one’s interests.

The value of research is somehow hard to evaluate, so most people embark on a special research according to their interest. Mostly, great discoveries originate for scientist's interests. For example, if Faraday had no cravings in relating magnetism to electricity, there never happens the invention of dynamo; If Watson and Crick had possessed no ardor for x-ray diffraction data collected by Rosalind Franklin, the double helix structure of the DNA molecule would never proposed; if Mendel had not been interested in understanding the secret of peas, the secrets in inheritance had not decoded. After all, playing with magnets and coils did not seem profitable. Nor building blocks or counting pea is a decent and prim job. If not for interests, none of these great figures in natural science would have ever accomplished their éclat.

On the other hand, interest is the paramount impetus of research, which requires people to overcome great pressure and loneliness. Compelling academicians to focus on disinterested areas would force many to waste their true talents. Lack genuine interest or motivation, many scholars are more likely to contribute nothing to their designed field. Research is not an easy thing, since researchers may come across numerous failures when they find the truth. Consider Edison tried thousands times of experiments before he invented incandescent electric light. Interest spurs researchers to move on to the summit of success.

But, scholars must not let their research damage society. The science may bring unpredictable disasters to human. In the history, Dr. Alfred Nobel, who devoted himself to the study of explosives and became rich by dynamite, found a new way to kill more people faster than ever before. In world war two, in order to develop the biochemical weapons, some noxious Japanese scientists during research so cruelly that they use numbers of Chinese people, leaving great pain to the Chinese offspring. There still are moral and ethic commitment that scientists must obey. Research which turns out controversial, like the ethical issue of cloning, should restraint.

Despite research has no harm to society, the research area concentrating the pressing problems should take prior to others. After all, expensive research always carries significant opportunity cost-in terms of the money might be spent toward addressing society’s more immediate problems. One is that most of the energy we use comes from fossil fuels, including coal, petroleum, and natural gas. These natural resources are not renewable. Another one is global warming, which will a rise in sea level, an average increase in the Earth's temperature, which in turn causes changes in climate. If these urgent problems can be solved, once problems went worse to threaten lives, all research loses their value.

In conclusion, it is advisable for researchers to choose their research area according to their interests on the premise that it has no harm to society. Despite scholars’ interests has no harm, the research focus on urgent problems on earth need consider at the first place.

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As Einstein put it, interest is one's best teacher. Interests bring people intense motivation to delve a problem, which is regarded as a key spirit for science. On one hand, researchers pursuing their career according to their research can inspire them to success; on the other hand, the benefit of research is difficult to predict at the beginning of research. Hence, I agree that researchers choose their favorite area. But, research should never sacrifice the profit of human and those urgent problems are prior to one’s interests.

The value of research is somehow hard to evaluate in the beginning, so most people embark on a special research according to their interests. Mostly, great discoveries originate from scientists' interests. For example, if Faraday had no cravings in relating magnetism to electricity, the dynamo would haven't came to the world; if Watson and Crick had possessed no ardor for x-ray diffraction data collected by Rosalind Franklin, the double helix structure of the DNA molecule would never be proposed; if Mendel had not been interested in understanding the secret of peas, the secrets in inheritance had not been decoded. After all, playing with magnets and coils did not seem profitable. Nor building blocks or counting pea is a decent and prim job. If not for interests, none of these great figures in natural science would have ever accomplished their éclat.

On the other hand, interest is the paramount impetus of research, which requires people to overcome great pressure and loneliness. Compelling academicians to focus on disinterested areas would force many to waste their true talents. Lack genuine interest or motivation, many scholars are more likely to contribute nothing to their designed field. Research is not an easy thing, since researchers may come across numerous failures before they find the truth. Consider Edison tried thousands times of experiments before he invented incandescent electric light. Interest spurs researchers to move on to the summit of success.

But, scholars must not let their research damage society. Science may bring unpredictable disasters to human. In history, Dr. Alfred Nobel, who devoted himself to the study of explosives and became rich by dynamite, found a new way to kill more people faster than ever before. In World War Two, in order to develop the biochemical weapons, some noxious Japanese scientists conduct such heinious research that they use numerous of  Chinese people, leaving great pain to the Chinese offspring. There are still moral and ethic commitment that scientists must obey. Research which turns out to be controversial, like the ethical issue of cloning human, should restraint.

On the condition that research has no harm to society, the research area concentrating the pressing problems should take prior to others. After all, expensive research always carries significant opportunity--in terms of the money might be spent toward addressing society’s more immediate problems. One of them is that most of the energy we use comes from fossil fuels, including coal, petroleum, and natural gas. These natural resources are not renewable. Another one is global warming, which will result in a rise in sea level, an average increase in the Earth's temperature, which in turn causes changes in climate. If these urgent problems cannot be solved, once problems went worse to threaten lives, all research loses their value.

In conclusion, it is advisable for researchers to choose their research area according to their interests on the premise that it has no harm to society. Despite scholars’ interests has no harm, the research focus on urgent problems on earth need consider at the first place.

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Rose 我们有相互吹捧之嫌~~~~
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As Einstein put it, interest is one's best teacher. Interests bring people intense motivation to delve a problem,which is regarded as a key spirit for science. On one hand, researchers pursuing their career according to their research can inspire them to success; on the other hand, the benefit of research is difficult to be predicted at the beginning of research. Hence, I agree that researchers choose their favorite area. But, research should never sacrifice the profit of human and those urgent problems are prior to one’s interests.

The value of research is somehow hard to evaluate in the beginning, so most people embark on a special research according to their interests. Mostly, great discoveries originate from scientists' interests. For example, if Faraday had no cravings in relating magnetism to electricity, the dynamo would haven't came to the world; if Watson and Crick had possessed no ardor for x-ray diffraction data collected by Rosalind Franklin, the double helix structure of the DNA molecule would never be proposed; if Mendel had not been interested in understanding the secret of peas, the secrets in inheritance had not been decoded. After all, playing with magnets and coils did not seem profitable. Nor building blocks or counting pea is a decent and prim job. If not for interests, none of these great figures in natural science would have ever accomplished their éclat.


On the other hand, interest is the paramount impetus of research, which requires people to overcome great pressure and loneliness. Compelling academicians to focus on disinterested areas would force many to waste their true talents. Lacking genuine interest or motivation, many scholars are more likely to contribute nothing to their designed field. Research is not an easy thing, since researchers may come across numerous failures before they find the truth. Consider Edison tried thousands times of experiments before he invented incandescent electric light. Interest spurs researchers to move on to the summit of success.
But, scholars must not let their research damage society. Science may bring unpredictable disasters to human. In history, Dr. Alfred Nobel, who devoted himself to the study of explosives and became rich by dynamite, found a new way to kill more people faster than ever before, which mada him miserable for this function. In World War Two, in order to develop the biochemical weapons, some noxious Japanese scientists conduct such heinious research that they use numerous
of  Chinese people, leaving great pain to the Chinese offspring. There are still moral and ethic commitment that scientists must obey. Research which turns out to be controversial, like the ethical issue of cloning human, should restraint.

On the condition that research has no harm to society, the research area concentrating the pressing problems should be supported prior to others.
After all, expensive research always carries significant opportunity because the money are more likely to be spent toward addressing society’s more immediate problems. One of them is that most of the energy we use comes from fossil fuels, including coal, petroleum, and natural gas. These natural resources are not renewable. Another one is global warming, which will result in a rise in sea level, an average increase in the Earth's temperature, which in turn causes changes in climate. If these urgent problems cannot be solved, once problems went worse to threaten lives, all research loses their value.

In conclusion, it is advisable for researchers to choose their research area according to their interests on the premise that it has no harm to society. Although some scholars’ interests has no harm, the research focus on urgent problems on earth need consider at the first place.

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Albert Einstein had ever said: Interest is the best teacher. Nowadays, plenty of scholars and researchers are engaged in the academic working in colleges and other institutions because of various reasons, including the individual interest and other factors.这一点在你的后文似乎只讲到了profit

Do the scholars and researchers think about the question whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society? It seems that whether they themselves will benefit from the researches【research一般不可数，极少数情况下可数（做调查报告解）】 has nothing to do with the society. 可以举例说明诶，求真相Actually, they must consider the question above. On one hand, scholars and researchers are the pioneers in academic fields, where the basis of the scientific technologies of the whole society is formed. In my humble opinion, the academic workers have the responsibility to make the best use of their job and a contribution to the society. On the other hand, without the consideration of that question, they will probably neglect the harm from their researches to the society.
例子几乎没有！本段说明是责任让科学家需要考虑社会。
However, sometimes there will be a conflict between individual interest and responsibilities in scholars' heart. Individual interest, just like paramount impetus, can light up the fire of passion in the dull academic work. It is because that scholars and researchers get more, money or fun【money属于profit，而fun应该属于interest吧】, that they choose the academic job, no matter how boring the job is. As a result of that, lots of scholars and researchers are keen on the dull academic work because of the pursuit of their individual interests, which could be unusual or even idiosyncratic. If the scholars blur the boundary between the individual interests and social responsibilities, their achievement from the academic work will not only make no contribution to the society, but also probably do great harm to other people. Consider, for instance, that nowadays human clone has always been an controversial issue in society, and scientists from all over the world are keen on the human clone research and eager to see the result. Nevertheless, human clone by far is unethically[unethical] 中间加and unacceptable, so if some scientist tends to go on his or her research in the dispute, what he or she will get must be the unstable medical field and society. There must be the ethic and moral standard controlling the academic field in the scholars' hearts because their academic achievement can not only be a useful tool making contribution to society, but also a deathly weapon that could destroy the peaceful world.我认为这里有些重复且冗余了，可删除
本段说明，兴趣引领科学家前行，但是如果没有科学和道德的界限的话，会做伤害社会的事情。
As a result, a delicate balance is supposed to be found between individual interests and social duties on scholars and researchers. On the basis of not disturbing the beauty and peace of our society, scholars have chances of their own to choose what they are eager to research most. For instance, during World War II after Madam Curie accidentally found the element radium, Nazi countries wanted to buy the pure radium from the great woman. Knowing the harm from Nazi to the whole world, Madam Curie rejected the offer and contributed the precious element to the medical application decisively. With the ethic and moral standard, Madam Curie combined the individual interest and social duties perfectly.
说明需要平衡！
Individual interest is definitely not the most important thing in the academic fields, but to find the best way to deal with the conflict among their various benefits. In every human being's heart, there is a balance of ethic and morality to make out right and wrong, let alone the scholars and researchers. Moreover, it is also society's job to oversee the direction of development in academic fields.

你的文章从说了一个问题就是需要在不危害社会的前提下做科学研究。
你的文章我一向很喜欢~~

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Nowaday utilitarianism has influenced the world deeply. Before taking an action, what goes into people's minds are whether this action is useful in some way. This trend has also influenced science and research. Scientists and reasearchers are more willing to devote their energy and time to areas where possible discoveries with high potential benefits could be made. However, this practise might be detrimental to the advancement of science generally. They should follow their interest, even if their interest is uncommon.

First of all, the ultimate aim of scientific research is to serve the entire society and bring humanity to a higher level of civilization. But it does not mean that scholars, scientists or researchers should place too much concern on this question: how their studies and research can meet that goal. Since science and research evolve貌似很不恰当，这个词是只生物进化呀 gradually, more often than not, it takes a lot of time from the inception of a scientific idea to the point when that idea can be materialized and serve the human beings directly, and many scientists could not see the utilization of their ideas in their whole life span. Take Newton for example. He discovered the gravity in the 16th century, but until four centuries later did man first come into the space.牛顿发现重力的作用只是人类进入太空吗？我很怀疑 This remarkable achievement was partly due to the law of Universal Gravity and Newton could never imagine the significance of his discovery.我不是很赞同你说的 In a word, all the scholars and researchers should not concern too much about whether their work is useful. What they need to do is to follow their interest along the way to scientific achievements.
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One【The】 famous scientist Einstein has【delete】 said that interest is the best teacher. It is indeed true. When people are interested in a scientific area, they are highly motivated and are quite delighted and willing to explore everything in this area thus making some extraordinary discoveries is possible. In fact, many discoveries and inventions were made because the scientist and research involved in it were following their指代有点混乱 interest. History has abounding examples. Bill Gates, the former CEO of Microsoft, was so fascinated with the computers, from programming to hardware, and later he decided to withdraw from Harvard University and started Microsoft. At that time, personal computers were just considered to be the toys of some technological nerds like Bill, yet since the beginning of Microsoft, PC have greatly changed many people's way of life and bring the world into the information age. While driven by the impetus of their interest, the people concentrating in his particular areas often make accomplishments which might seem to be quite uncommon but later turned out to be of huge value.

However, there is a warning that we should pay special attention to. Some researchers【从后面来看你这应该用research呀】 are not only unusual but also quite controversial and the conduct of such researches would present many problems to man. The cloning of human is an example. Although we should not deny the fact that cloning might greatly push the advancement of modern medicine by offering the cure of such incurable diseases like cancer, cloning a human should not be permitted which make people encounter many ethical dilemmas. All scientists and researchers should not deviate from this principle that science and research is used to serve the people.

To sum up, scholars and researchers should follow their interests no matter how idiosyncratic they might be, 我很怀疑这句的因果关系so that they could make scientific discoveries. Meanwhile they should be careful about how their research could not be used for evil purposes.

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TOPIC: ISSUE40 - "Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem."
WORDS: 663
TIME: 01:00:00
DATE: 2010-8-3 16:29:46

With development of the technologies, our life has changed in all aspects from the ancient time. There are so many technologies are created by accident or before they are made, no one can foresee the result, which make me believe that scholars and researches should not only be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. However, it is too extreme to claim that their individual interests are more important in all cases. Both their contributions and their interests are the basement of the sustainable development of society most of the time.

First of all, the purpose of researches is to explore the unknown, which make it nearly impossible to predict the result of scholars and researcher’s tasks. If a scholar or a researcher focus too much on his or her work's contribution to the larger society, he or she would be frustrated, because the answer in most cases would be null. The example is all around us. No one knows, including the scholars and researches themselves, what the electricity and magnetism can bring us before the industry revolution, which actual boomed the whole society. Oersted can see nothing about the contribution of his found, when a line is electrified, the magnetic needle near the line moved. Such exploration need further research like what the Faraday and Maxwell had done to dig out its value and the industry revolution to contribute the who society. So it will be meaningless to ask the contribution of their research before their research is done.

What seem to be more important are the interests of these scholars and researches, which can provide comprehensible thinking and consistent effort. Take the Faraday and Maxwell as examples again. Both of them devote their life to the research of electricity and magnetism. When we try to reveal what makes them to do so, the answer is interest. When they are young, they are curious about everything and one day they found one of the most mysterious things in that era, the electricity. They can not help "falling in love with" electricity, which means they are attracted the whole attention by electricity. After lifelong research, the secret in the electricity and magnetism was found. It is obviously that the interests lead them to such an acme of success.

However, we should not overlook the disadvantages of doing all the researches only based on the scholars' and researches' interests. If the result of these researches can be forecasted, we should consider what contribution they can make, especially when the result can cause uproars in the whole society. The most famous examples are the clone and nuclear weapons. In every nation, no matter what the culture or custom there, those two researches are both banned or restrained at least. The reason is we can easily predict the catastrophic "contribution" they can make to the whole society.

Furthermore, we have to get a standard, even it is a little vague and random, to decide which of the researches should have more priorities and which should not. I would use nuclear weapons as examples again. The Manhattan Project, which is definitely governed by the contribution instead of interests of those scholars and researchers, successfully created the A-bomb and played a significant role in stopping World War II. The arguer may argue that it is Einstein who builds the fundamental knowledge of the A-bomb by his interests. However, what should be noticed is that without the help of the government, Einstein can no little to stop the World War II, which is the reason why he take part in the Manhattan Project instead of interests.

To sum up, without interests scholars and researchers would not be able to focus on their study; without the concern of their work's contribution they may mislead the human to chaos. In my opinion, both their work's contributions and their interests should be concerned before making the final decision.
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With development of the technologies, our life has changed in all aspects from the ancient time. There are so many technologies are created by accident or no one can foresee the result, before they coming true, which make me believe that scholars and researches should not only be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. However, it is too extreme to claim that their individual interests are more important in all cases. Both their contributions and their interests are the basement for the sustainable development of society most of the time.
First of all, the purpose of researches is to explore the unknown, which make it nearly impossible to predict the result of scholars and researcher’s tasks. If a scholar or a researcher focuses too much on his or her work's contribution to the larger society, he or she would be frustrated, because the answer in most cases would be null. The example is all around us. No one knows, including the scholars and researches themselves, what the electricity and magnetism can bring us before the industry revolution, which actual boomed the whole society. Oersted can see nothing about the contribution of his discover, when a line is electrified, the magnetic needle near the line moved. Such exploration need further research like what the Faraday and Maxwell had done to dig out its value and the industry revolution to give these contributions to the whole society. So it will be meaningless to ask the contribution of their research before their research is done.
What seem to be more important are the interests of these scholars and researches, which can provide comprehensible thinking and consistent effort. Take the Faraday and Maxwell as examples again. Both of them devote their life to the research of electricity and magnetism. When we try to reveal what makes them to do so, the answer is interest. When they are young, they are curious about everything and one day they found one of the most mysterious things in that era, the electricity. They can not help "falling in love with" electricity, which means they are attracted the whole attention by electricity. After lifelong research, the secret in the electricity and magnetism was found. It is obviously that the interests lead them to such an acme of success.

However, we should not overlook the disadvantages of doing all the researches only based on the scholars' and researches' interests. If the result of these researches can be forecasted, we should consider what contribution they can make, especially when the result can cause uproars in the whole society. The most famous examples are the clone and nuclear weapons. In every nation, no matter what the culture or custom there, no matter how interests those two researches seem to be, they are either banned or restrained at least. The reason is we can easily predict the catastrophic "contribution" they can make to the whole society.

Furthermore, we have to get a standard, even it is a little vague and random, to decide which of the researches should have more priorities and which should not. I would use nuclear weapons as examples again. The Manhattan Project, which is definitely governed by the contribution instead of interests of those scholars and researchers, successfully created the A-bomb and played a significant role in stopping World War II. The arguer may argue that it is Einstein who builds the fundamental knowledge of the A-bomb by his interests. However, what should be noticed is that without the help of the government, Einstein can do little to stop the World War II, which was the reason why he took part in the Manhattan Project instead of interests.

To sum up, without interests scholars and researchers would not be able to focus on their study; without the concern of their work's contribution they may mislead the human to chaos. In my opinion, both their work's contributions and their interests should be concerned before making the final decision.

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I generally agree with the assertion that scholars and researchers should devote their time and energy to the area they are interested, even if their interests may seem unusual or idiosyncratic and have no practical use at the first glance.(虽然不是没有高分的issue上来就直接表明观点，但是大多数高分作文还是不仅仅是复述了下题目。你说呢？)

First of all, the ultimate aim of scientific research is to serve the entire society and  bring humanity to a higher level of civilization. But it does not mean that scholars, scientists or researchers should place too much concern on this question: how their studies and research can meet that goal. Since science and research evolve gradually, more often than not, it takes a lot of time from the inception of a scientific idea to the point when that idea can be materialized and serve the human beings directly, and many scientists could not see the utilization of their ideas in their whole life span. Take Newton for example. He discovered the gravity in the 16th century, but until four centuries later did man first come into the space. This remarkable achievement was partly due to the law of Universal Gravity and Newton could never imagine the significance of his discovery. In a word, all the scholars and researchers should not concern too much about whether their work is useful. What they need to do is to follow their interest along the way to scientific achievements.（这段的开头句子和本段的内容有点不太相同，所以最好能够换个开头句来明确表达本段观点可能比较好。）

One famous scientist（写出来是Einstein可能更有说服力。） has said that interest is the best teacher. It is indeed true. When people are interested in a scientific area, they are highly motivated and are quite delighted and willing to explore everything in this area thus making some extraordinary discoveries is possible（这里的逻辑不太明确，只有xxx才能做出extraordinary discoveries？xxx有帮助没错，但是没有这么绝对吧。）. History has abounding examples. Bill Gates, the former CEO of Microsoft, was so fascinated with the computers, from programming to hardware, and later he decided to withdraw from Harvard University and started Microsoft. At that time, personal computers were just considered to be the toys of some technological nerds like Bill, yet since the beginning of Microsoft, PC have greatly changed many people's way of life and bring the world into the information age. At the impetus of（上google查了下，貌似没有这么个用法。） their interest, the people concentrating in his particular areas often make accomplishments which might seem to be quite uncommon but later turned out to be  of huge value.

However, there is a warning that we should be pay special attention to. Some researchers are not only unusual but also quite controversial and the conduct of such researches would present many problems to man. The cloning of human is an example. Although we should not deny the fact that cloning might greatly pushes the advancement of modern medicine by offering the cure of such incurable diseases like cancer, cloning a human should not be permitted which make people encounter many ethical dilemmas. All scientists and researchers should not deviate from this principle that science and research is used to serve the people.

To sum up, scholars and researchers should follow their interests no matter how idiosyncratic they might be, so that they could make scientific discoveries. Meanwhile they should be careful about how their research could not be used for evil purposes.(文章中没有提到evil purposes，在结尾中最好不要出现文中没有的内容，你说呢？)
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The speaker asserts that the scholars' and researchers' individual interests no matter they are unusual or idiosyncratic or not, should be given precedence over(貌似没有这个用法，上google没有搜索到这样的用法。) whether their work will make a contribution to the larger society. I find the speaker has emphasized the importance of interests, while has overlooked the consequence of them, or he/she has decisively considered all the outcomes of scientific researchers are useful to society or human beings.

First of all, in terms of researchers, they are all right themselves（没明白这句话的意思）, and most of time their outcomes are always open to doubt. However（没看出来哪里转折了), the researchers’ current research can reflect their interests in some tune, if they are not interesting what they are researching at hand, why they focus on it? （逻辑不太严密吧，可能因为有人给予资金，或者boss需要。）In addition, most of time the researchers do not know about the result of their researches at hand. For example, the discovery of X ray by Roentgen, it is completely by accident. Another example is not very hard to get as well, Einstein invented relativity, then it boomed the science in astronautics and many other up-to-date technologies, while he never anticipated that it would be the foundation of A-bomb, and it would kill numerous of lives in Japan. It is, therefore, whether the works they are engaging in will contribute to society, the researcher may cannot（not） anticipate at his/her time.

As for interest, I concede the importance of it and respect it. As the famous saying goes "Interest is the best teacher", a man can make any accomplishment in his field when he loses the interest in it.（首先少了not，其次没有说明为什么，不够convincing）
To wit it in action, on needs pay attention to Leibniz, a prominent philosopher and mathematician. In spite of poverty and aloofness（超然姿态和poverty并列？）
throughout most of his life and only few people attended his funeral after his death, he had made grand contribution to the history of mathematic and philosophy by the aid of his strong interest. It is the same situation to Einstein, his interests helped him introduced the theory relativity. Thus, the famous accomplishment in science and, even other fields（没有例子说明other field）, are usually based on the interests of individuals.

However, when it comes to the scientific research and the interests of scholars and researcher, we should draw attention to what field they are working. Although most of the scientific researches are should be supported, some researches have transgressed（现在完成时？） the morality and ethnics, such as human cloning, and the result of some researches still have not proved or can not be explicable, such as transgenic plants（好例子） and GM food, there are some researches are conducive to development of human and can save large number of energies, such as nuclear, but if it is misused, they will bring severe disasters. It is, therefore, not rational for researches to
（to后面接副词？没看出来这两个副词修饰那个谓语动词。Concern with是连词）excessively and blindly concern with what are the interests of the scholars and researchers, and the government and related administrative authority should restrain and even forbid researches and scholars plunge into these researches. What the researches will bring to human may be more important in a manner.

In conclusion, the interests of scientific research are always good things, but more assessment must be carried out, and some necessary regulations should be formulated before realizing them and putting them into practice. Perhaps, we can’t immediately benefit from some researches in some scholars' interests, but it will be likely to fulfill in foreseeing future and serve humanity, but to some researches which have violated basic human morality and ethics should be stopped immediately.

逻辑结构方面就没看出来有什么问题了。

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TOPIC: ISSUE40 - "Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem."
WORDS: 563
TIME: 00:41:35
DATE: 2010/8/3 16:41:30

The author claims that for scholars and researchers, it is more important to achive their own goals of interests no matter how unusual or idiosyncratic the interests are. However, should it be able to put this behavior above the desire of making a contribution to the larger society?

From the analytical perspective, indeed, for the researchers and scholars, interest is their best guide which gives them enthusiasm to study and to be the paramount impetus of research. Without it, scientists perhaps get influenced by lack of inspiration. Being apatheic to research and the complexity of study itself consequently become the restrain to innovation, which is not the final end we expect to see. Furthermore, discoveries are always conceived in accidents. Only motivated by interest and inclination can scholars and researchers enhance their academic capacity to pursuit their own dream. For instant, date back hundreds of years ago, the Whites, motivated by the ambition to fly finally thrived the civilization. Without a strong willing of realizing idea, the Whites couldn't probably fulfill this work.

However, it doesn't mean that one's interests are in all of the above, at least not above social interests. First and foremost, there is one thing we should recognize that as a scholars or researchers, not normal person who loves to do some experiments, they have the ability to do something over all society even for the humanity. Government supports them with a large numbers of finance, this is not for them to satisfy their own interests, if so, everyone could ask government for money. Making a contribution to the larger society indicates the study and research done by the scholars is beneficial to people's lives, which is undoubtedly historic. Since once as an "ist", he or she is no longer an ordinary people but someone who may possible influence the public through any behaviors he or she has done. Thus, it is the society's benefits that above scholars and researchers' own interests.

Secondly, there are many scientific developments done by scholars and researchers may harm the democratic essence: freedom, peace and respect. We have on idea whether a scientist's next study is within the scope of the moral. Given one of the most famous examples that scientists invented the cloning technology, which turns out to be this kind of technology that triggered another thought-provoking ethical issues of human. And as a result, this experiment caused the first relevant legal document in 1998: violation of the ethics of human cloning should be strictly prohibited. What's more, there are some researches and development done by some investigators harm the humans' lives instead of setting for the step of human society. In some circumstance, people may do some unethical experiments due to their own profits while their interests are out of the line of morality. And such researches even harm the peace and freedom which we always pursue. Therefore in my view chances are that tragedy happens if we let scholars and researchers pursue their individual interests however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem.

To sum, the pursuing of scholars and researchers' individual interests is a strong power for them to explore, but progresses in every field rely on a notion that no harm to human society, especially when the person who called "ist" and being respected by the masses. In this context can scholars and researchers pursue their individual interests.

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The author claims that for scholars and researchers, it is more important to achive their own goals of interests no matter how unusual or idiosyncratic the interests are. However, should it be able to put this behavior above the desire of making a contribution to the larger society?

From the analytical perspective, indeed, for the researchers and scholars, interest is their best guide which gives them enthusiasm to study and to be the paramount impetus of research. Without it, scientists may get influenced by lack of inspiration. Being apatheic to research and the complexity of study itself consequently become the restrain to innovation, which is not the final end we expect to see. Furthermore, discoveries are always conceived in accidents. Only motivated by interest and inclination can scholars and researchers enhance their academic capacity to pursuit their own dream. For instant, date back hundreds of years ago, the Whites, motivated by the ambition to fly finally thrived the civilization. Without a strong willing of realizing idea, the Whites couldn't probably fulfill this work.

However, it doesn't mean that one's interests are in all of the above, at least not above social interests. First and foremost, there is one thing we should recognize that as a scholar or researcher, not normal person who loves to do some experiments, they have the ability to do something over all society even for the humanity. Government supports them with a large numbers of finance, this is not for them to satisfy their own interests, if so, everyone could ask government for money. Making a contribution to the larger society indicates the study and research done by the scholars is beneficial to people's lives, which is undoubtedly historic. Therefore since once as an "ist", he or she is no longer an ordinary people but someone who may possible influence the public through any behaviors he or she has done. It is the society's benefits that above scholars and researchers' own interests.

Secondly, there are many scientific developments done by scholars and researchers may harm the democratic essence: freedom, peace and respect. We have on idea whether a scientist's next study is within the scope of the moral. Given one of the most famous examples that scientists invented the cloning technology, which turns out to be this kind of technology that triggered another thought-provoking ethical issues of human. And as a result, this experiment caused the first relevant legal document in 1998: violation of the ethics of human cloning should be strictly prohibited. What's more, there are some researches done by some investigators harm the humans' lives instead of developing for the step of human society. In some circumstance, people may do some unethical experiments due to their own profits while their interests are out of the line of morality. And such researches even harm the peace and freedom which we always pursue. Thus in my view chances are that tragedy happens if we let scholars and researchers pursue their individual interests however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem.

To sum, the pursuing of scholars and researchers' individual interests is a strong power for them to explore, but progresses in every field rely on a notion that no harm to human society, especially when the person who called "ist" and being respected by the masses. In this context can scholars and researchers pursue their individual interests.

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The speaker assumes that scholars and researchers should place their individual interests first while their contribution to the whole society should not be highly emphasized. However, from my perspective, though individual interests do play an important role in one's development and achievement, when doing researches, scholars and researchers must be concerned with their contribution to the larger society on top of the list.
Individual interests are the state of curiosity or concern about or attention to something. When one's interest on something is aroused, it is much more likely for him to do a good job or achieve a goal than the time （这边比较级前后比的不是同一个东西）when he loses any interest. That is to say, individual interests provide people with the enthusiasm to do everything, no matter how tough it is. What's more, Einstein once said, "Interest is the best teacher of everything," leaving us the thought that interests can cultivate people's ideas and ability of innovation, which will determine their performance under any circumstance.
As we all know, many artists are all of great imagination and have individual interests on art, which directly leads to their wonderful achievements on the field of art. Van Gogh, the brilliant painter, was keen on color and such interest allows him to achieve his present fame all over the world. Therefore, it is important for artists to play full advantage of their individual interests.这段并没有展开一个分论点，而是讲了同一个论点在art领域方面的作用，那么最好还是合到上一段中间去，因为如果就这么自成一段的话，这一段论证就显得很薄弱。
However, when it comes to the scholars and researches, individual interests should be considered not as important as that of artists or others. Since scholars and researches are acting on researches which are always related to hundreds or even millions of people, it is better for them to leave their individual interests behind. For example, when a politician is conducting a national policy related to the housing price, he/she should not think about what policy can bring benefits to his/her family but consider what policy can help release the burden of the ordinary people and contribute to establish a harmonious society. 这个例子是怎么说明了individual interests should be considered not as important ？这例子大概就是说，当政府要出台关于房屋价格的政策时，他或她不应该考虑这项政策能给他们的家人带来什么好处，而应该考虑到什么样的政策能够帮助普通市民解决负担并且对建立一个和谐的社会做出贡献。这个例子就不去考虑到底能不能说明论点，例子本身就是上下不一的。Their concerns with the whole society should be second to none when doing researches or making decisions.
Furthermore, scholars and researchers should be highly aware of the significance of their contribution to the larger society, avoiding doing anything in their individual interests and at the mercy of the interests of other people. Take the 2009 movie "Splice" as an example, in this film, Elsa and Clive, 2 young rebellious scientists, defy legal and ethical boundaries and forge ahead with a dangerous experiment: splicing together human and animal DNA to create a new organism, which finally cause plenty of problems threatening the existence of human. Elsa and Clive are so interested in splice that they haven't taken the hazards of such experiment into consideration, which eventually bring tragedy to themselves and others. 这个例子能换一下么？人兽杂交毕竟是个商业片，不是纪录片，电影是个很主观的东西，用商业电影来做例子的话恐怕无法客观地去论证问题吧，毕竟这些剧情是编出来的。当然我也不确定是不是就完全不能用商业电影来举例，但是如果有更好的更客观的例子最好还是换一下吧。We can draw a conclusion from this that individual interests alone can always cover the eye of scholars and researchers, it is only with the concerns about the whole society that will help them to make great achievements both beneficial to themselves and other people.
In sum, the speaker' statement has its own merits but has gone to an extreme. I believe that though individual interests are essential for scholars and researches, the public good should not be left behind. Only with the concerns about the larger society can scholars and researchers make great achievements in everyone's interest.

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Many people argue that scholars and researchers should make contribution to the issues(没有make contribution to the issue这样搭配的) that may contribute most to the human society（病句，改成contribute to the most of the human society） rather than to select the researcher fields by their own interest. This statement seems rational at first glance. However, a precarious situation appeared from the different identifications of the term "contribution" because different people has different comprehension toward the standards of this term. In order to preclude the confusions of the above argument, many people declares that providing the scholars and researchers with the opportunity to select their research fields should benefit the evolution of human world in the long run.没有明白最后这一句话说出来是要干吗的。这一段，你先说明了一下题目，然后说第一眼看上去是有道理的，然而不同的人对“contribution”有不同的看法，接着说为了排除这种疑惑，许多人声称提供学者和研究人员机会去选择自己的研究领域应该要有利于长远发展的人类世界。可是，不管什么不同的看法，不管many people declare了什么，你都完全没有说明你的态度，你到底是赞成题目还是反对题目。全文第一段你写了那么多，可是该表明的东西却没表明，却写了一些无关紧要的东西。

Firstly, it is no doubt that some subjects help push the developing of (去掉)society forward. From the reality angle, government and international institution have more interest in investing the subjects which can help solve certain social problems and their outcomes can apply to society at once. For example, many scholars and researchers are studying the ways（没有study ways这种搭配的，要么改成find the ways或是study how to） to solve the air pollution, in order to reduce the impacts on our world of air pollution(the air pollution of our world) as much as possible. However, the research contributions (the research’s contributing)to the community are uncertain before the end(加comes out). The discovery of electricity is a case in point. When the scientist first found the phenomena of electricity, some reporters asked him to predict the potential use of it. The scientist replied like this: could you predict the contribution of a man when he was just a baby? As time passes, electricity becomes one of the fundamental factors in people's everyday life in modern world.（这个电的运用的例子举不好，如果你是用了一个however来带出这个在研究结果出来之前是没办法知道它是否能对社会做出贡献小论点的话，你举一个正例是没有意义的，你要么举一个负面例子，要么把however换成although.）
这一段，依然不知道跟题目要辩证的东西有什么关系，感觉你是要说科学研究的目的，可是科学研究的目的最多是你支持或反对题目观点的其中一个分论点的论据论证，并且是需要你用因果关系将它与你的论点连接起来的。可是，在这段依然找不到你的态度以及你的论点。这个题目是在辩证，科学家做研究应当以是否对社会做出贡献为主，还是以实现自己的兴趣为主。
Secondly, as often mentioned, the main purpose of research is to help human beings understand the unknown things. Admittedly, from this point of view, almost all research are beneficial to our society to get people use the knowledge to explore and change the world. Consider, by human nature we are motivated to pursue those activities in which we excel. For instance, Albert Einstein who simply put his effort in the theoretical physics eventually promoted the advances in natural science. Watt James who just interested in the mechanism of the steam engine eventually propelled the Industrial Revolution in the eighteen century.(这一段没看明白你想要表达什么，首句你写the main purpose of research is to help human beings understand the unknown things，但是不知道跟题目有什么关系，还是这句话，题目在讨论的问题是is it more important for scholars and researchers to meke contribution to the larger society or to pursue their own individual interests,完全看不出你这段的论点是什么)

Finally, of course, scholars and researchers should consider the likely effects on the society. And their research should not cause serious problems to society. Clone of Human is an example. Although some scientists have strong interests in cloning human beings, they should not do that, because such research will cause many problems in ethics and morality.依然没有论点，大概能看得出来你想说明的是科学家不能随意依照自己的兴趣去做研究，但是没有明确的提出观点了，甚至都不知道你是在赞同题目观点还是反对。

In sum, history informs us that a lot of greatness, beyond people’s ken, cannot be recognized by its contemporary society, stemming from limitation of traditions and conventional wisdom. We have to assign priority to the most profitable research on the basis of the scant resources. Talents should be guided, but not by what people think they ought to do, but by the value others attach on the results which scientists aim.

完全没看出来这篇ISSUE与题目的观点辩证有什么关系，我自己也怀疑我是不是有看错了，我想你看到的话也一定会觉得怎么会这样，所以如果你愿意的话，我们QQ详谈。

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I generally agree with the assertion that scholars and researchers should devote their time and energy to the area they are interested, even if their interests may seem unusual or idiosyncratic and have no practical use at the first glance.

First of all, the ultimate aim of scientific research is to serve the entire society and  bring humanity to a higher level of civilization. But it does not mean that scholars, scientists or researchers should place too much concern on this question: how their studies and research can meet that goal. Since science and research evolve gradually, more often than not, it takes a lot of time from the inception of a scientific idea to the point when that idea can be materialized and serve the human beings directly, and many scientists could not see the utilization of their ideas in their whole life span. Take Newton for example. He discovered the gravity in the 16th century, but until four centuries later did man first come into the space. This remarkable achievement was partly due to the law of Universal Gravity and Newton could never imagine the significance of his discovery. In a word, all the scholars and researchers should not concern too much about whether their work is useful. What they need to do is to follow their interest along the way to scientific achievements.

One famous scientist has said that interest is the best teacher. It is indeed true. When people are interested in an scientific area, they are highly motivated and are quite delighted and willing to explore everything in this area thus making some extraordinary discoveries is possible. History has abounding examples. Bill Gates, the former CEO of Microsoft, was so fascinated with the computers, from programming to hardwares, and later he decided to withdraw from Harvard University and started Microsoft. At that time, personal computers were just considered to be the toys of some technological nerds like Bill, yet since the beginning of Microsoft, PC have greatly changed many people's way of life and bring the world into the information age. At the impetus of their interest, the people concentrating in his particular areas often make accomplishments which might seem to be quite uncommon but later turned out to be  of huge value.

However, there is a warning that we should be pay special attention to. Some researches are not only unusual but also quite controversial and the conduct of such researches would present many problems to man. The cloning of human one example. Although we should not deny the fact that cloning might greatly push the advancement of modern medicine by offering the cure of such incurable diseases like cancer, cloning a human should not be permitted which make people encounter many ethical dilemmas. All scientists and researchers should not diviate from this principle that science and research is used to serve the people.

To sum up, scholars and researchers should follow their interests no matter how idiosyncratic they might be, so that they could make scientific discoveries. Meanwhile they should be careful about how their research could not be used for evil purposes.

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Nowaday utilitarianism has influenced the world deeply. Before taking an action, what goes into people's minds are whether this action is useful in some way. This trend has also influenced science and research. Scientists and reasearchers are more willing to devote their energy and time to areas where possible discoveries with high potential benefits could be made. However, this practise might be detrimental to the advancement of science generally. They should follow their interest, even if their interest is uncommon.

First of all, the ultimate aim of scientific research is to serve the entire society and  bring humanity to a higher level of civilization. But it does not mean that scholars, scientists or researchers should place too much concern on this question: how their studies and research can meet that goal. Since science and research evolve gradually, more often than not, it takes a lot of time from the inception of a scientific idea to the point when that idea can be materialized and serve the human beings directly, and many scientists could not see the utilization of their ideas in their whole life span. Take Newton for example. He discovered the gravity in the 16th century, but until four centuries later did man first come into the space. This remarkable achievement was partly due to the law of Universal Gravity and Newton could never imagine the significance of his discovery. In a word, all the scholars and researchers should not concern too much about whether their work is useful. What they need to do is to follow their interest along the way to scientific achievements.

One famous scientist Einstein has said that interest is the best teacher. It is indeed true. When people are interested in a scientific area, they are highly motivated and are quite delighted and willing to explore everything in this area thus making some extraordinary discoveries is possible. In fact, many discoveries and inventions were made because the scientist and research involved in it were following their interest.History has abounding examples. Bill Gates, the former CEO of Microsoft, was so fascinated with the computers, from programming to hardware, and later he decided to withdraw from Harvard University and started Microsoft. At that time, personal computers were just considered to be the toys of some technological nerds like Bill, yet since the beginning of Microsoft, PC have greatly changed many people's way of life and bring the world into the information age. While driven by the impetus of their interest, the people concentrating in his particular areas often make accomplishments which might seem to be quite uncommon but later turned out to be  of huge value.

However, there is a warning that we should pay special attention to. Some researchers are not only unusual but also quite controversial and the conduct of such researches would present many problems to man. The cloning of human is an example. Although we should not deny the fact that cloning might greatly push the advancement of modern medicine by offering the cure of such incurable diseases like cancer, cloning a human should not be permitted which make people encounter many ethical dilemmas. All scientists and researchers should not deviate from this principle that science and research is used to serve the people.

To sum up, scholars and researchers should follow their interests no matter how idiosyncratic they might be, so that they could make scientific discoveries. Meanwhile they should be careful about how their research could not be used for evil purposes.

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Nowadays utilitarianism has influenced the world deeply. Before taking an action, what goes into people's minds are whether this action is useful in some way. This trend has also influenced science and research. Scientists and researchers are more willing to devote their energy and time to areas where possible discoveries with high potential benefits could be made. However, this practice might be detrimental to the advancement of science generally. They should follow their interests, even if their interests are not shared by many people.

First of all, the ultimate aim of scientific research is to serve the entire society and bring humanity to a higher level of civilization. But it does not mean that scholars, scientists or researchers should place too much concern on this question: how their studies and research can meet that goal. In some way, it is impossible to answer the question before or during their research time. A historical perspective is needed on this question. Because science and research evolve gradually, more often than not, it takes a lot of time from the inception of a scientific idea to the point when that idea can be materialized and serve the human beings directly, and many scientists could not see the utilization of their ideas in their whole life span. Take Newton for example. He discovered the gravity in the 16th century, and proposed Theory of Gravity and Law of Motion, but until four centuries later did man put his theories into practice, building space shuttles to travel in the space.牛顿发现重力的作用只是人类进入太空吗？我很怀疑 This remarkable achievement was partly due to the findings of Newton, but he could possibly never imagine man landed on the moon using his theories.我不是很赞同你说的 In a word, all the scholars and researchers should not concern too much about whether their work can be used practically. What they need to do is to follow their interest along the way to scientific achievements.
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The famous scientist Einstein said that interest is the best teacher. It is indeed true. When people are interested in a scientific area, they are highly motivated and are quite delighted and willing to explore everything in this area thus making some extraordinary discoveries is possible. In fact, many discoveries and inventions were made because the scientist and researchers involved in their projects were following their interest. History has abounding examples. Bill Gates, the former CEO of Microsoft, was so fascinated with the computers, from programming to hardware, and later he decided to withdraw from Harvard University and started Microsoft. At that time, personal computers were just considered to be the toys of some technological nerds like Bill, yet since the beginning of Microsoft, PC have greatly changed many people's way of life and bring the world into the information age. While driven by the impetus of their interest, the people concentrating in his particular areas often make accomplishments which might seem to be quite uncommon but later turned out to be of huge value.

However, there is a warning that we should pay special attention to. Some researches are not only unusual but also quite controversial and the conduct of such researches would present many problems to man. The cloning of human is an example. Although we should not deny the fact that cloning might greatly push the advancement of modern medicine by offering the cure of such incurable diseases like cancer, cloning a human should not be permitted which make people encounter many ethical dilemmas. All scientists and researchers should not deviate from this principle that science and research is used to serve the people.

To sum up, scholars and researchers should follow their interests no matter how idiosyncratic they seem to be at first glance, it is time we need to judge the values of these uncommon ideas. Meanwhile they should be careful about that their research could not be used for evil purposes like cloning human.

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As Einstein put it, interests are one's best teacher（单复数不一致）. Interests bring people intense motivation to delve a problem, which is regarded as a key spirit for science. On one hand, researchers pursuing their career according to their research can inspire them to success; on the other hand, the benefit of research is difficult to predict at the beginning of research. Hence, I agree that researchers choose their interested （不能形容事物吧）area. But, research should never sacrifice the profit of human and those urgent problems are prior to one’s interests.

The value of research is somehow hard to evaluate （in the beginning), so most people embark on a special research according to their interest.(我觉得用复数好） Mostly, great discoveries originate for（from） scientist's（scientists') interests. For example, if Faraday had no cravings in relating magnetism to electricity, there never happens the invention of dynamo(好别扭）; If(if) Watson and Crick had possessed no ardor for x-ray diffraction data collected by Rosalind Franklin, the double helix structure of the DNA molecule would never (be) proposed; if Mendel had not been interested in understanding the secret of peas, the secrets in inheritance had not decoded. After all, playing with magnets and coils did not seem profitable. Nor building blocks or counting pea is a decent and prim job. If not for interests, none of these great figures in natural science would have ever accomplished their éclat.

On the other hand, interest is the paramount impetus of research, which requires people to overcome great pressure and loneliness. Compelling academicians to focus on disinterested areas would force many to waste their true talents. Lack genuine interest or motivation, many scholars are more likely to contribute nothing to their designed field. Research is not an easy thing, since researchers may come across numerous failures when(before) they find the truth. Consider Edison tried thousands times of experiments before he invented incandescent electric light. Interest spurs researchers to move on to the summit of success.

But, scholars must not let their research damage society. The(去掉） science may bring unpredictable disasters to human. In the（去掉） history, Dr. Alfred Nobel, who devoted himself to the study of explosives and became rich by dynamite, found a new way to kill more people faster than ever before. In world war two（专有名词大写）, in order to develop the biochemical weapons, some noxious Japanese scientists during research （前一半句没有动词）so cruelly that they use numbers of （numerous比较好）Chinese people, leaving great pain to the Chinese offspring. There still are （are still比较好）moral and ethic commitment that scientists must obey. Research which turns out controversial, like the ethical issue of cloning, should restraint. （应该被动，中间那个插入语应该修饰research，但没有：“有争议的研究，譬如克隆的伦理问题，应该被禁止”）（克隆不是有争议的，有争议的是克隆人）

Despite research has no harm to society, the research area concentrating the pressing problems should take prior to others. After all, expensive research always carries significant opportunity cost-in terms of the money might be spent toward addressing society’s more immediate problems. （语法）One（of them) is that most of the energy we use comes from fossil fuels, including coal, petroleum, and natural gas. These natural resources are not renewable. Another one is global warming, which will a rise in sea level, an average increase in the Earth's temperature, which in turn causes changes in climate. If these urgent problems can be solved, once problems went worse to threaten lives, all research loses their value. (consider revising)

In conclusion, it is advisable for researchers to choose their research area according to their interests on the premise that it has no harm to society. Despite scholars’ interests has no harm, the research focus on urgent problems on earth need consider at the first place.

（兴趣的激励作用——不能做坏事——解决棘手的问题；貌似二三部分之间是递进的关系，despite不妥；
不知道为什么要应用那么多例证来证明兴趣的激励作用，个人觉的与其对了一堆例子，不如对一个进行展开）

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With development of the technologies, our life has changed in all aspects from the ancient time. There are so many technologies are created by accident or no one can foresee the result, before they coming true, which make me believe that scholars and researches should not only be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. However, it is too extreme to claim that their individual interests are more important in all cases. Both their contributions and their interests are the basement(没有基础的含义，只有地下室） for the sustainable development of society most of the time.

First of all, the purpose of researches is to explore the unknown, which make it nearly impossible to predict the result of scholars and researcher’s tasks. If a scholar or a researcher focuses too much on his or her work's contribution to the larger society, he or she would be frustrated, because the answer in most cases would be null. The example is all around us. No one knows, including the scholars and researches themselves, what the electricity and magnetism can bring us before the industry revolution, which actual boomed the whole society. Oersted can see nothing about the contribution of his discover, when a line is electrified, the magnetic needle near the line moved. Such exploration need further research like what the Faraday and Maxwell had done to dig out its value and the industry revolution to give these contributions to the . So it will whole societybe meaningless to ask the contribution of their research before their research is done.

What seem to be more important are the interests of these scholars and researches, which can provide comprehensible thinking and consistent effort. Take the Faraday and Maxwell as examples again. Both of them devote their life to the research of electricity and magnetism. When we try to reveal what makes them to do so, the answer is interest. When they are young, they are curious about everything and one day they found one of the most mysterious things in that era, the electricity. They can not help "falling in love with" electricity, which means they are attracted the whole attention by electricity.（定语从句改为和签名并列的分句比较好） After lifelong research, the secret in the electricity and magnetism was found. It is obviously that the interests lead them to such an acme of success.

However, we should not overlook the disadvantages of doing all the researches only based on the scholars' and researches' interests. If the result of these researches can be forecasted, we should consider what contribution they can make, especially when the result can cause uproars in the whole society. The most famous examples are the clone and nuclear weapons. In every nation, no matter what the culture or custom there, no matter how interests those two researches seem to be, they are either banned or restrained at least. The reason is we can easily predict the catastrophic "contribution" they can make to the whole society.

Furthermore, we have to get a standard, even it is a little vague and random, to decide which of the researches should have more priorities and which should not. I would use nuclear weapons as examples again. The Manhattan Project, which is definitely governed by the contribution instead of interests of those scholars and researchers, successfully created the A-bomb and played a significant role in stopping World War II. The arguer may argue that it is Einstein who builds the fundamental knowledge of the A-bomb by his interests. However, what should be noticed is that without the help of the government, Einstein can do little to stop the World War II, which was the reason why he took part in the Manhattan Project instead of interests. （E没有参加M，他只是提议造A）

To sum up, without interests scholars and researchers would not be able to focus on their study; without the concern of their work's contribution they may mislead the human to chaos. In my opinion, both their work's contributions and their interests should be concerned before making the final decision.

要是例子可以多样化一点就好了，电磁用了两次，原子弹用了两次

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TOPIC: ISSUE40 - "Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem."
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TIME: 00:59:04
DATE: 2010/8/3 18:16:45

Albert Einstein had ever said: Interest is the best teacher. Nowadays, plenty of scholars and researchers are engaged in the academic working in colleges and other institutions because of various reasons, including the individual interest and other factors.

Do the scholars and researchers think about the question whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society? It seems that whether they themselves will benefit from the researches has nothing to do with the society. Actually, they must consider the question above. On one hand, scholars and researchers are the pioneers in academic fields, where the basis of the scientific technologies of the whole society is formed. In my humble opinion, the academic workers have the responsibility to make the best use of their job and a contribution to the society. On the other hand, without the consideration of that question, they will probably neglect the harm from their researches to the society.

However, sometimes there will be a conflict between individual interest and responsibilities in scholars' heart. Individual interest, just like paramount impetus, can light up the fire of passion in the dull academic work. It is because that scholars and researchers get more, money or fun, that they choose the academic job, no matter how boring the job is. As a result of that, lots of scholars and researchers are keen on the dull academic work because of the pursuit of their individual interests, which could be unusual or even idiosyncratic. If the scholars blur the boundary between the individual interests and social responsibilities, their achievement from the academic work will not only make no contribution to the society, but also probably do great harm to other people. Consider, for instance, that nowadays human clone has always been an controversial issue in society, and scientists from all over the world are keen on the human clone research and eager to see the result. Nevertheless, human clone by far is unethically unacceptable, so if some scientist tends to go on his or her research in the dispute, what he or she will get must be the unstable medical field and society. There must be the ethic and moral standard controlling the academic field in the scholars' hearts because their academic achievement can not only be a useful tool making contribution to society, but also a deathly weapon that could destroy the peaceful world.

As a result, a delicate balance is supposed to be found between individual interests and social duties on scholars and researchers. On the basis of not disturbing the beauty and peace of our society, scholars have chances of their own to choose what they are eager to research most. For instance, during World War II after Madam Curie accidentally found the element radium, Nazi countries wanted to buy the pure radium from the great woman. Knowing the harm from Nazi to the whole world, Madam Curie rejected the offer and contributed the precious element to the medical application decisively. With the ethic and moral standard, Madam Curie combined the individual interest and social duties perfectly.

Individual interest is definitely not the most important thing in the academic fields, but to find the best way to deal with the conflict among their various benefits. In every human being's heart, there is a balance of ethic and morality to make out right and wrong, let alone the scholars and researchers. Moreover, it is also society's job to oversee the direction of development in academic fields.

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Albert Einstein had ever said: Interest is the best teacher. Nowadays, plenty of scholars and researchers are engaged in the academic working in colleges and other institutions because of various reasons, including the individual interests.

Do the scholars and researchers think about the question whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society? It seems that whether they themselves will benefit from the research has nothing to do with the society. Actually, they must consider the question above. On one hand, scholars and researchers are the pioneers in academic fields, where the basis of the scientific technologies of the whole society is formed. In my humble opinion, the academic workers have the responsibility to make the best use of their job and a contribution to the society. On the other hand, without the consideration of that question, they will probably neglect the harm from their researches to the society.

However, sometimes there will be a conflict between individual interest and responsibilities in scholars' heart. Individual interest, just like paramount impetus, can light up the fire of passion in the dull academic work. It is because that scholars and researchers get more that they choose the academic job, no matter how boring the job is. As a result of that, lots of scholars and researchers are keen on the dull academic work because of the pursuit of their individual interests, which could be unusual or even idiosyncratic. If the scholars blur the boundary between the individual interests and social responsibilities, their achievement from the academic work will not only make no contribution to the society, but also probably do great harm to other people. Consider, for instance, that nowadays human clone has always been a controversial issue in society, and scientists from all over the world are keen on the human clone research and eager to see the result. Nevertheless, human clone by far is unethical and unacceptable, so if some scientist tends to go on his or her research in the dispute, what he or she will get must be the unstable medical field and society. There must be the ethic and moral standard controlling the academic field in the scholars' hearts.

As a result, a delicate balance is supposed to be found between individual interests and social duties on scholars and researchers. On the basis of not disturbing the beauty and peace of our society, scholars have chances of their own to choose what they are eager to research most. For instance, during World War II after Madam Curie accidentally found the element radium, Nazi countries wanted to buy the pure radium from the great woman. Knowing the harm from Nazi to the whole world, Madam Curie rejected the offer and contributed the precious element to the medical application decisively. With the ethic and moral standard, Madam Curie combined the individual interest and social duties perfectly.

Individual interest is definitely not the most important thing in the academic fields, but to find the best way to deal with the conflict among their various benefits. In every human being's heart, there is a balance of ethic and morality to make out right and wrong, let alone the scholars and researchers. Moreover, it is also society's job to oversee the direction of development in academic fields.

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I agree with this opinion, so【没太明白这个so的用法？是因此？】 many contribution has been made from the scholars and researchers. Whether their work 【is，这个从句没有谓语了】making the contribution to the society or not needs a long time research. Merely care about what is the contribution is too perfunctory. 【这句话里的care不能做主语，改成caring】The more important thing is we also need to think about the process that taken all the scholars and researchers career【没明白这句的意思】.【这两句是中心句，可以并起来，第二句开头改成，and ,the most ..】

First of all, the contribution of the work probably cannot be found at the present, [but]maybe after a lot of times【表述不恰当，改成a long period of time] it is considered. As a matter of fact, history is the best critic. For example, the string theory in the physical is a unsubstantial theory. His[who?] contribution is[改成hadn't] not been judged, [仍然是这个错误，这句话应该不能做插入语的，如果要成为一个分句，要用连词连接】maybe it is beneficial to the people, at the same time; there is a possible【possibility】 to wastes the money from the taxpayer. Mendel is another example, Mendel reaching the hereditary law in 1865 but none of the research supports to去掉 him. Until to删 1900, his meaningful achievements was be affirmed.【这句话改成，His meaning achievements hadn't been affirmed until 1900.] As a result, he was considered as the founder of modern genetics.

In addition, so many people [删掉 so many people, 表达不是每个人，用not every one in the world 就可以了】but not everyone can be a scholar or researcher. Not every area has a real scholar or researcher. Why they can be the one whose contribution is great for society? The reason is that, not only the contributions bring them the attention from the society but also his clinging minds come from the curiosity to their interesting【改成，out of their interests】. Their special mind deserves our learning and inheriting. In china, Chen Jing run is a great mathematician which【定于从句，which不能修饰人，用who】 is【was】 researching on the Goldbach conjecture more 【加上than】the ten years and making a great contribution on【+toward】 the mathematic. Deng XiaoPing said that "if there are one thousand scientists like Chen Jingrun in China, it is extraordinary."

Actually, there are some achievements are good for the present. People pay more attention on them. Just like the research about environment and business. The contribution is so obvious that people 【+are】also interesting in them. The car which is using the hybrid power is very popular, because the new skill is able to saving more resource and reducing the pollution for the environment. There is another example about Jack Welch. His autobiography is treating【改成treated】 as the bible about the CEO【改成CEO’s work，关于CEO的工作的圣经】. The managers learns many knowledge from it and improving 【improve和learn是并列的，为什么要用进行时呢？】their management more efficiency.

In a nutshell, not only the work which is making contribution at the present should be respected but also the interesting work on which the researcher and scholars spending.中心句 As a student, I should learn from the good scientist when the problem is puzzle【puzzling】 me. The melting spirit will be continued.
个人建议哦：有点偏题了。你的开头的论点是：仅仅关注科学家对社会的贡献是不够的，更重要的是要关注学者职业生涯中的过程，就是开头后半句没看懂。可是你的分论点有点站不住脚跟，第一段科研对社会有没有贡献不是一天两天就能看出来的，但是你说完弦理论和门德尔的例子之后缺少了一点评论，把这个分论点你的观点联系在一起。第二个分论点，不是每个人都能做科学家，而是因为兴趣使然。第三个是，许多科研成果在现在看来是对社会有利的。我想问一句，issue40的题目里说的，科学家不要考虑学术工作对社会的贡献，这个观点在你的文章里有没有体现呢？你的论点定的有点偏差，题目里说的更多的是，兴趣和社会责任的比较，你的观点仅仅是两个观点放在一起，而没有把他们之间的关联说出来~
另外，你的语法错误很多，主要问题在连词和谓语。不少地方你把两句话放在一起，却没有连词。建议你把以前的语法书翻出来做些练习吧，集中训练那么几天就能改过来啦~写完之后要通读一遍哦，注意每句话里面不能有两个谓语，多了一个谓语就是病句啦！！
说了直白了些，不要介意哈！大家一起努力~~！！加油~有问题直接QQ我i！

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As Einstein put it, interest is one's best teacher. Interests bring people intense motivation to delve a problem, which is regarded as a key spirit for science. On one hand, researchers pursuing their career according to their research can inspire them to success; on the other hand, the benefit of research is difficult to predict（改成to be predicted) at the beginning of research. Hence, I agree that researchers choose their favorite area. But, research should never sacrifice the profit of human and those urgent problems are prior to one’s interests. 典型的开头的写法，学习

The value of research is somehow hard to evaluate in the beginning, so most people embark on a special research according to their interests. Mostly, great discoveries originate from scientists' interests. For example, if Faraday had no cravings in relating magnetism to electricity, the dynamo would haven't came to the world; if Watson and Crick had possessed no ardor for x-ray diffraction data collected by Rosalind Franklin, the double helix structure of the DNA molecule would never be proposed; if Mendel had not been interested in understanding the secret of peas, the secrets in inheritance had not been decoded.（三个例子连举，十分有说服力） After all, playing with magnets and coils did not seem profitable. Nor building blocks or counting pea is a decent and prim job. If not for interests, none of these great figures in natural science would have ever accomplished their éclat.因为兴趣才去研究

On the other hand, interest is the paramount impetus of research, which requires people to overcome great pressure and loneliness. Compelling academicians to focus on disinterested areas would force many to waste their true talents. Lack（lack是动词，改成lacking） genuine interest or motivation, many scholars are more likely to contribute nothing to their designed field. Research is not an easy thing, since researchers may come across numerous failures before they find the truth. Consider Edison tried thousands times of experiments before he invented incandescent electric light. Interest spurs researchers to move on to the summit of success. 强调了兴趣推动研究的进行

But, scholars must not let their research damage society. Science may bring unpredictable disasters to human. In history, Dr. Alfred Nobel, who devoted himself to the study of explosives and became rich by dynamite, found a new way to kill more people faster than ever before. （感觉这里可以再说一下诺贝尔后来知道了炸药用于战争很痛苦，使之成为一个正面的例子）In World War Two, in order to develop the biochemical weapons, some noxious Japanese scientists conduct such heinious research that they use numerous of  Chinese people, leaving great pain to the Chinese offspring. There are still moral and ethic commitment that scientists must obey. Research which turns out to be controversial, like the ethical issue of cloning human, should restraint.

On the condition that research has no harm to society, the research area concentrating the pressing problems should take prior to others. （这句没怎么明白，是指科研领域要走在其他领域之前吗？）After all, expensive research always carries significant opportunity--in terms of the money might be spent toward addressing society’s more immediate problems（这句有点奇怪，这里in terms of 的用法不是很清楚）. One of them is that most of the energy we use comes from fossil fuels, including coal, petroleum, and natural gas. These natural resources are not renewable. Another one is global warming, which will result in a rise in sea level, an average increase in the Earth's temperature, which in turn causes changes in climate. If these urgent problems cannot be solved, once problems went worse to threaten lives, all research loses their value.

In conclusion, it is advisable for researchers to choose their research area according to their interests on the premise that it has no harm to society. Despite （despite后只能跟名字，要跟句子的话改成although）scholars’ interests has no harm, the research focus on urgent problems on earth need consider at the first place.
小谦的文章很有说服力，结构很好，赞！！就是最后一个分论点我没怎么看明白，例子没有分析的很到位~再看下~

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TOPIC: ISSUE40 - "Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem."
WORDS: 448
TIME: 00:44:18
DATE: 2010-8-3 15:50:39

The speaker asserts that the scholars' and researchers' individual interests no matter whether they are unusual or idiosyncratic or not, should be precedence over whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society when they are concerned. I find the speaker has emphasized the importance of interests, while overlooked the consequence of them, or he/she has decisively considered all the outcomes of scientific researches are useful to society or human beings.

First of all, I concede the importance of the interests. And as the famous saying goes "Interest is the best teacher", a man can make any accomplishment in his field when he loses the interest in it. To wit it in action, on needs pay attention to Leibniz, a prominent philosopher and mathematician. In spite of poverty and aloofness throughout most of his life and only few people attended his funeral after his death, he had made grand contribution to the history of mathematic and philosophy by the aid of his strong interest. It is the same situation to Einstein, his interests helped him introduced the theory relativity. Thus, the famous accomplishment in science and, even other fields, are usually based on the interests of individuals.

However, we can neglect the contribution to the larger society which was made by scholars and researchers. Their current researches can reflect their interests in some tune, if they are not interesting what they are researching at hand, why they focus on it? Especially, the results of their research have contributed to the larger society; I believe without the driving of interest, the result of their research will be fruitless.

Moreover, when it comes to the scientific research and the interests of scholars and researcher, we should draw attention to what field they are working. Although most of the scientific researches are should be supported, some researches have transgressed the morality and ethnics, such as human cloning, and the result of some researches still have not proved or can not be explicable, such as transgenic plants and GM food, there are some researches are conducive to development of human and can save large number of energies, such as nuclear, but if it is misused, they will bring severe disastrous. It is, therefore, not rational for us to excessively and blindly concern with what are the interests of the scholars and researchers. What the researches will bring to human may be more important in a manner.

In conclusion, the interests of scientific research are always good things, but more assessment must be carried out before realizing them and putting them into practice. Perhaps, we can’t immediately benefit from some researches in some scholars' interests, but it will be likely to fulfill in foreseeing future and serve humanity.

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The speaker asserts that the scholars' and researchers' individual interests no matter they are unusual or idiosyncratic or not, should be given precedence over whether their work will make a contribution to the larger society. I find the speaker has emphasized the importance of interests, while has overlooked the consequence of them, or he/she has decisively considered all the outcomes of scientific researches are useful to society or human beings.

First of all, in terms of researches, they are all right themselves, and most of time their outcomes are always open to doubt. However, the researchers’ current research can reflect their interests in some tune, if they are not interesting what they are researching at hand, why they focus on it? In addition, most of time the researchers do not know about the result of their researches at hand. For example, the discovery of X ray by Roentgen, it is completely by accident. Another example is not very hard to get as well, Einstein invented relativity, then it boomed the science in astronautics and many other up-to-date technologies, while he never anticipated that it would be the foundation of A-bomb, and it would kill numerous of lives in Japan. It is, therefore, whether the works they are engaging in will contribute to society, the researcher may cannot anticipate at his/her time.

As for interest, I concede the importance of it and respect it. As the famous saying goes "Interest is the best teacher", a man can make any accomplishment in his field when he loses the interest in it. To wit it in action, on needs pay attention to Leibniz, a prominent philosopher and mathematician. In spite of poverty and aloofness throughout most of his life and only few people attended his funeral after his death, he had made grand contribution to the history of mathematic and philosophy by the aid of his strong interest. It is the same situation to Einstein, his interests helped him introduced the theory relativity. Thus, the famous accomplishment in science and, even other fields, are usually based on the interests of individuals.

However, when it comes to the scientific research and the interests of scholars and researcher, we should draw attention to what field they are working. Although most of the scientific researches are should be supported, some researches have transgressed the morality and ethnics, such as human cloning, and the result of some researches still have not proved or can not be explicable, such as transgenic plants and GM food, there are some researches are conducive to development of human and can save large number of energies, such as nuclear, but if it is misused, they will bring severe disasters. It is, therefore, not rational for researches to excessively and blindly concern with what are the interests of the scholars and researchers, and the government and related administrative authority should restrain and even forbid researches and scholars plunge into these researches. What the researches will bring to human may be more important in a manner.

In conclusion, the interests of scientific research are always good things, but more assessment must be carried out, and some necessary regulations should be formulated before realizing them and putting them into practice. Perhaps, we can’t immediately benefit from some researches in some scholars' interests, but it will be likely to fulfill in foreseeing future and serve humanity, but to some researches which have violated basic human morality and ethics should be stopped immediately.

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The speaker asserts that the scholars' and researchers' individual interests no matter they are unusual or idiosyncratic or not, should be precedence over whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society when they are concerned. I find the speaker has emphasized the importance of interests, while has overlooked the consequence of them, or he/she has decisively considered all the outcomes of scientific researches are useful to society or human beings.

First of all, I concede the importance of the interests. And as the famous saying goes "Interest is the best teacher", a man can make any accomplishment in his field when he loses the interest in it. To wit it in action, one needs to pay attention to Leibniz, a prominent philosopher and mathematician. In spite of poverty and aloofness throughout most of his life and only few people attended his funeral after his death, he had made grand contribution to the history of mathematic and philosophy by the aid of his strong interest. It is the same situation to Einstein, his interests helped him introduced the theory relativity. Thus, the famous accomplishment in science and, even other fields, are usually based on the interests of individuals.

However, we can not neglect the contribution to the larger society which was made by scholars and researchers. Their current researches can reflect their interests in some tune, if they are not interesting what they are researching at hand, why they focus on it? Especially, the results of their research have contributed to the larger society; I believe without the driving of interest, the result of their research will be fruitless.

Moreover, when it comes to the scientific research and the interests of scholars and researcher, we should draw attention to whether the fields that they are working will ultimately contribute to society. Although most of the scientific researches should be supported, some researches have transgressed the morality and ethnics, such as human cloning, and the result of some researches still have not proved or can not be explicable, such as transgenic plants and GM food, there are some researches are conducive to development of human and can save large number of energies, such as nuclear, but if it is misused, they will bring severe disastrous. It is, therefore, not rational for us to excessively and blindly concern with what are the interests of the scholars and researchers. What the researches will bring to human may be more important in a manner.

In conclusion, the interests of scientific research are always good things, but more assessment must be carried out before realizing them and putting them into practice. Perhaps, when concerning with the researches, it is possible that scholars and researches can’t immediately benefit from some researches in some scholars' interests, but it will be likely to fulfill in foreseeing future and serve humanity, while the interests that have completely violated human morality and ethics should be confined.


The speaker asserts that the scholars' and researchers' individual interests no matter they are unusual or idiosyncratic or not, should be given precedence over whether their work will make a contribution to the larger society. I find the speaker has emphasized the importance of interests, while has overlooked the consequence of them, or he/she has decisively considered all the outcomes of scientific researchers are useful to society or human beings.

First of all, in terms of researchers, they are all right as far as it goes, and most of time their outcomes are always open to doubt. Meanwhile, the researchers’ current research can reflect their interests in some tune, if they are not interesting what they are researching at hand, why they focus on it? In addition, most of time the researchers do not know about the result of their researches at hand. For example, the discovery of X ray by Roentgen, it is completely by accident. Another example is not very hard to get as well, Einstein invented relativity, then it boomed the science in astronautics and many other up-to-date technologies, while he never anticipated that it would be the foundation of A-bomb, and it would kill numerous of lives in Japan. It is, therefore, whether the works they are engaging in will contribute to society, the researcher may cannot（not） anticipate at his/her time.

As for interest, I concede the importance of it and respect it. As the famous saying goes "Interest is the best teacher", a man can not make any accomplishment in his field when he loses the interest in it, by the reason of without the impetus of interest, individuals are entirely possible to treat their work negatively. To wit it in action, on needs pay attention to Leibniz, a prominent philosopher and mathematician. In spite of poverty and aloofness throughout most of his life and only few people attended his funeral after his death, he had made grand contribution to the history of mathematic and philosophy by the aid of his strong interest. It is the same situation to Einstein, his interests helped him introduced the theory relativity. Thus, the famous accomplishment in science and, even other fields, such as art—Vogh and Da Vincin, are usually based on the interests of individuals.

However, when it comes to the scientific research and the interests of scholars and researcher, we should draw attention to what field they are working. Although most of the scientific researches are should be supported, some researches transgress the morality and ethnics, such as human cloning, and the result of some researches still have not proved or can not be explicable, such as transgenic plants and GM food, there are some researches are conducive to development of human and can save large number of energies, such as nuclear, but if it is misused, they will bring severe disasters. It is, therefore, not rational for researches to be excessively and blindly concerned with what are the interests of the scholars and researchers, and the government and related administrative authority should restrain and even forbid researches and scholars plunge into these researches. What the researches will bring to human may be more important in a manner.

In conclusion, the interests of scientific research are always good things, but more assessment must be carried out, and some necessary regulations should be formulated before realizing them and putting them into practice. Perhaps, we can’t immediately benefit from some researches in some scholars' interests, but it will be likely to fulfill in foreseeing future and serve humanity, but to some researches which have violated basic human morality and ethics should be stopped immediately.

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With development of the technologies, our life has changed in all aspects from the ancient time. There are so many technologies are created by accident or before they are made, no one can foresee the result(可否改成no one can foresee the result, before they coming true), which make me believe that scholars and researches should not only be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. However, it is too extreme to claim that their individual interests are more important in all cases. Both their contributions and their interests are the basement of(for) the sustainable development of society most of the time.

First of all, the purpose of researches is to explore the unknown, which make it nearly impossible to predict the result of scholars and researcher’s tasks. If a scholar or a researcher focus(es) too much on his or her work's contribution to the larger society, he or she would be frustrated, because the answer in most cases would be null. The example is all around us. No one knows, including the scholars and researches themselves, what the electricity and magnetism can bring us before the industry revolution, which actual boomed the whole society. Oersted can see nothing about the contribution of his found(discover), when a line is electrified, the magnetic needle near the line moved. Such exploration need further research like what the Faraday and Maxwell had done to dig out its value and the industry revolution to contribute the who society(这句话是什么意思呢？没看懂). So it will be meaningless to ask the contribution of their research before their research is done.

What seem to be more important are the interests of these scholars and researches, which can provide comprehensible thinking and consistent effort. Take the Faraday and Maxwell as examples again. Both of them devote their life to the research of electricity and magnetism. When we try to reveal what makes them to do so, the answer is interest. When they are young, they are curious about everything and one day they found one of the most mysterious things in that era, the electricity. They can not help "falling in love with" electricity, which means they are attracted the whole attention by electricity. After lifelong research, the secret in the electricity and magnetism was found. It is obviously that the interests lead them to such an acme of success.

However, we should not overlook the disadvantages of doing all the researches only based on the scholars' and researches' interests. If the result of these researches can be forecasted, we should consider what contribution they can make, especially when the result can cause uproars in the whole society. The most famous examples are the clone and nuclear weapons. In every nation, no matter what the culture or custom there, those two researches are both banned or restrained at least. The reason is we can easily predict the catastrophic "contribution" they can make to the whole society.(事实上没有国家禁止克隆与核武器的研究)

Furthermore, we have to get a standard, even it is a little vague and random, to decide which of the researches should have more priorities and which should not. I would use nuclear weapons as examples again. The Manhattan Project, which is definitely governed by the contribution instead of interests of those scholars and researchers, successfully created the A-bomb and played a significant role in stopping World War II. The arguer may argue that it is Einstein who builds the fundamental knowledge of the A-bomb by his interests. However, what should be noticed is that without the help of the government, Einstein can no(do) little to stop the World War II, which is(was) the reason why he take(took) part in the Manhattan Project instead of interests.

To sum up, without interests scholars and researchers would not be able to focus on their study; without the concern of their work's contribution they may mislead the human to chaos. In my opinion, both their work's contributions and their interests should be concerned before making the final decision.

感觉文章虽然长，但是比较累赘，虽然有中心，但是论述得不是很清楚，而且反复举同样的例子也不太好


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With development of the technologies, our life has changed in all aspects from the ancient time. There are so many technologies are created by accident or before they are made, no one can foresee the result(可否改成no one can foresee the result, before they coming true), which make me believe that scholars and researches should not only be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. However, it is too extreme to claim that their individual interests are more important in all cases. Both their contributions and their interests are the basement of(for) the sustainable development of society most of the time.

First of all, the purpose of researches is to explore the unknown, which make it nearly impossible to predict the result of scholars and researcher’s tasks. If a scholar or a researcher focus(es) too much on his or her work's contribution to the larger society, he or she would be frustrated, because the answer in most cases would be null. The example is all around us. No one knows, including the scholars and researches themselves, what the electricity and magnetism can bring us before the industry revolution, which actual boomed the whole society. Oersted can see nothing about the contribution of his found(discover), when a line is electrified, the magnetic needle near the line moved. Such exploration need further research like what the Faraday and Maxwell had done to dig out its value and the industry revolution to contribute the who society(这句话是什么意思呢？没看懂). So it will be meaningless to ask the contribution of their research before their research is done.

What seem to be more important are the interests of these scholars and researches, which can provide comprehensible thinking and consistent effort. Take the Faraday and Maxwell as examples again. Both of them devote their life to the research of electricity and magnetism. When we try to reveal what makes them to do so, the answer is interest. When they are young, they are curious about everything and one day they found one of the most mysterious things in that era, the electricity. They can not help "falling in love with" electricity, which means they are attracted the whole attention by electricity. After lifelong research, the secret in the electricity and magnetism was found. It is obviously that the interests lead them to such an acme of success.

However, we should not overlook the disadvantages of doing all the researches only based on the scholars' and researches' interests. If the result of these researches can be forecasted, we should consider what contribution they can make, especially when the result can cause uproars in the whole society. The most famous examples are the clone and nuclear weapons. In every nation, no matter what the culture or custom there, those two researches are both banned or restrained at least. The reason is we can easily predict the catastrophic "contribution" they can make to the whole society.(事实上没有国家禁止克隆与核武器的研究)

Furthermore, we have to get a standard, even it is a little vague and random, to decide which of the researches should have more priorities and which should not. I would use nuclear weapons as examples again. The Manhattan Project, which is definitely governed by the contribution instead of interests of those scholars and researchers, successfully created the A-bomb and played a significant role in stopping World War II. The arguer may argue that it is Einstein who builds the fundamental knowledge of the A-bomb by his interests. However, what should be noticed is that without the help of the government, Einstein can no(do) little to stop the World War II, which is(was) the reason why he take(took) part in the Manhattan Project instead of interests.

To sum up, without interests scholars and researchers would not be able to focus on their study; without the concern of their work's contribution they may mislead the human to chaos. In my opinion, both their work's contributions and their interests should be concerned before making the final decision.

感觉文章虽然长，但是比较累赘，虽然有中心，但是论述得不是很清楚，而且反复举同样的例子也不太好



The speaker assumes that scholars and researchers should place their individual interests first while their contribution to the whole society should not be highly emphasized. However, from my perspective, though individual interests do play an important role in one's development and achievement, when doing researches, scholars and researchers must be concerned with their contribution to the larger society on top of the list.
Individual interests are the state of curiosity or concern about or attention to something. When one's interest on something is aroused, it is much more likely for him to do a good job or achieve a goal. That is to say, individual interests provide people with the enthusiasm to do everything, no matter how tough it is. What's more, Einstein once said, "Interest is the best teacher of everything," leaving us the thought that interests can cultivate people's ideas and ability of innovation, which will determine their performance under any circumstance. As we all know, many artists are all of great imagination and have individual interests on art, which directly leads to their wonderful achievements on the field of art. Van Gogh, the brilliant painter, was keen on color and such interest allows him to achieve his present fame all over the world. Therefore, it is important for artists to play full advantage of their individual interests.
However, when it comes to the scholars and researches, individual interests should be considered not as important as that of artists or others. Since scholars and researches are acting on researches which are always related to hundreds or even millions of people, it is better for them to leave their individual interests behind. For example, when a politician is conducting a national policy related to the housing price, he/she should not think about what policy can bring benefits to his/her family but consider the macro situation according to most people's interests, which might sometimes ruin his/her thought, thus releasing the burden of the ordinary people and contribute to establish a harmonious society. Their concerns with the whole society should be second to none when doing researches or making decisions.
Furthermore, scholars and researchers should be highly aware of the significance of their contribution to the larger society, avoiding doing anything in their individual interests and at the mercy of the interests of other people. Take the 2009 movie "Splice" as an example, in this film, Elsa and Clive, 2 young rebellious scientists, defy legal and ethical boundaries and forge ahead with a dangerous experiment: splicing together human and animal DNA to create a new organism, which finally cause plenty of problems threatening the existence of human. Elsa and Clive are so interested in splice that they haven't taken the hazards of such experiment into consideration, which eventually bring tragedy to themselves and others. We can draw a conclusion from this that individual interests alone can always cover the eye of scholars and researchers, it is only with the concerns about the whole society that will help them to make great achievements both beneficial to themselves and other people.
我觉得例子不错
In sum, the speaker' statement has its own merits but has gone to an extreme. I believe that though individual interests are essential for scholars and researches, the public good should not be left behind. Only with the concerns about the larger society can scholars and researchers make great achievements in everyone's interest.

写得很好啊，崇拜中，根本找不出什么错误