ISSUE51 【六人行】8.2作业by D

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首先对抽出宝贵时间帮我改AW的同学表示感谢
希望改的时候侧重于逻辑错误，关于语法：比如词汇重复，句型简单或者句子长度问题的就不必费心了，我个人就是意思能表达明白足矣，虽然也很纠结，但因为短时间这些很难提高，如果意思表达不明，逻辑不正确，请狠狠的暴力的指出，并直接说出来，我不会介意，反而是感谢这些宝贵的意见，再次感谢

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 450
TIME: 00:43:04
DATE: 2010-8-3 10:09:07

According to the statement, the speaker's claim is that the schools' education
should meet every student's individual needs and interests. I think that pay more attention to every student's interesting is an excellent idea, but that seem hard to come true. The reasons are stated as follows.

Admittedly, we all know that the interesting of one person's has important effect on one's study, the interesting really could urge one person put all his energy into the thing which he likes, but the purpose of the education is create different kinds of outstanding people to the society, if the education is in a popular style, and put too much attention on the grades, how can we train a great person? All the people who receive the same teaching would never have any ability to create. And the science would have not breakthrough, what a horrible thing like that.

However, it seems right that a school should teach the student base on what a student interested, but that seems impossible, most students in school have not any human experience, even they cannot figure it out themselves that what they really like, we should know that only a few students have interested in study, most students just like playing, what the school should deal with it? It is impossible to play with the children. And some subjects like math, language, and science are the basic subjects, everyone should learn them no matter he or she likes them or not, how can a person make sure about his or her individual needs without learning any basic knowledge to be the foundation of one's mind? For example, a famous writer of China named Lu Xun write a lot of books which play an important role in encouraging Chinese people to wake up in mind and fighting with enemy, but before he started writing, he was learn medical science, after a series of matters in his life, he found his own need and switch to another trade to be a writer, maybe he would never find his interesting before he experiences and learned so many things.

So, the main mission of the school is that to help the students to find his or her own needs, the school could increase some elective course based on the teaching of basic subjects, or hold many kinds of matches to encourage the students to strengthen their own needs.

To sum up, Mass Education maybe not suits the society, but putting too much attention on the students' interests also cannot be a better way, so the school should find a balance between them. It is that training the interests of the students based upon the education to the basic subjects.

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抱歉今天有事儿 回复的晚了

According to the statement, the speaker's claim is that the schools' education
should meet every student's individual needs and interests. I think that pay more attention to every student's interesting is an excellent idea, but that seem hard to come true. The reasons are stated as follows.
Admittedly, we all know that the interesting of one person's [the interest of one person]has important effect on one's study, the interesting really could urge one person put all his energy into the thing which he likes, but [这个转折用的好蹊跷啊 有转折么？]the purpose of the education is [to]create different kinds of outstanding people to the society, if the education is in a popular style, and put too much attention on the grades, how can we train a great person? All the people who receive the same teaching would never have any ability to create. And the science would have not breakthrough, what a horrible thing like that.

However, it seems right that a school should teach the student base on what a student interested [based on what the student is interested in], but that seems impossible, most students in school have not any human experience, even they cannot figure it out themselves that what they really like, we should know that only a few students have interested in study, most students just like playing, what the school should deal with it? It is impossible to play with the children. And some subjects like math, language, and science are the basic subjects, everyone should learn them no matter he or she likes them or not, how can a person make sure about his or her individual needs without learning any basic knowledge to be the foundation of one's mind? For example, a famous writer of China named Lu Xun write a lot of books which play an important role in encouraging Chinese people to wake up in mind and fighting with enemy, but before he started writing, he was learn medical science, after a series of matters in his life, he found his own need and switch to another trade to be a writer, maybe he would never find his interesting before he experiences and learned so many things.[鲁迅的例子我觉得用的不好。因为你自己也写到是after a series of events in his life, 而非medical study使得他从文。也就是说，他的专业学习并没有直接导致他从文，而恰恰是他自身的反省和思考使得他发现了从文的必要性。]
So, the main mission of the school is that to help the students to find his or her own needs, the school could increase some elective course based on the teaching of basic subjects, or hold many kinds of matches to encourage the students to strengthen their own needs[后半句看不懂哦。我觉得从这一段看来，整个文章的逻辑应该调整为支持statement为好。把第四段与第三段对调，即先表明个人需求有其合理性，继而展开主要论点，即教育应该如何有条件的尽量满足个人需求：个人需求要区别对待。一方面要在通识教育的基础上推进有区别的选修课，另一方面要引导并纠正不合理的需求。].
To sum up, Mass Education maybe not suits the society, but putting too much attention on the students' interests also cannot be a better way, so the school should find a balance between them. It is that training the interests of the students based upon the education to the basic subjects.

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谢谢