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Issue 144 “It is the artist, not the critic, who gives the society something of lasting value.”
Outline Position Balance
P2 lasting value 的解释，优秀的社会应该是什么样的，铺垫下文
P3 艺术家是通过纯熟的技巧和出色艺术洞察力和创造力，把客观事物还原，给人以感官和精神层面的享受并提高人们的修养，从而提高社会的文明程度。Instance 1 about art Leonardo da Vinci
P4 Critic是通过艺术作品的解读，减少人们欣赏艺术由于受教育水平或所出专业领域不同所带来的不变，把人们带入更加深奥的精神层面。从而增强之前所提到的艺术家对社会作用。
评论家的特征就是客观真实的反应作品的一切，因此有些不能算做艺术的垃圾被平除掉，净化了社会 porn movies ,adult programs 并且从艺术的缺陷中吸取教训，从而改善，使其完美。
也反映了适者生存不适者被淘汰的发展规律。
Conclusion Artist provides treasure and enjoyment of spirit and organ, and critic helps us draw closer and gain them. Thus, both of them make great contribution of momentous value to civil society.



Main Body
The speaker asserts that artist contributes something of lasting value instead of critic. Artist is person who provides us joy of beauty and inspiration of mind in order to enlighten souls and strengthens ambition. While, critic is a person who evaluates works of art，in some extents, with the special and professional insight ,
they offer assistance to appreciators. Fundamentally, both of them make contribution to society in various realms. Thus, they should be placed on the equally significant status in term of function of providing the lasting value.

Firstly, it is necessary to probe into the definition of lasting value at the social level. As far as I am concerned, something of lasting values to society is the most fatal factors influencing the rate of development, stability of country, and the standard of living happiness. Because of the unchangeable fundamental condition to survive, the lasting value is constantly preserved for centuries. The development of society is an objective manifestation of realization and fulfillment of various d acquirements. The appearance of artist and critic successfully solve this enduring question.

Secondly, the function of artist is undoubtedly enormous .The artist by applying dexterous skills and holistic cognition of spiritual world and physical world, present a direct reproduction of everything beautiful and valuable. Only though absorbing the merits from art, our mind can be cleared, feeling sensitive, ambition strengthened, success achieved. Mona Lisa, the supreme level of art and embodiment of beauty, provide the bliss, reassure our soul, even contribute a harmonious world. Thus, artist plays a critical role in maintaining the social basic points.

Thirdly, rather normally, outstanding article works or product consists of profound meaning and amazing power of performance. Accordingly, it is accessible to find that the deeper the hidden meaning art works contain, the more difficult for us to appreciate them. The existence of critic solves this problem successfully. Critic serves to explain and explore the inner thought a work try to deliver and transform it into other more superficial and understandable form. In our era, media tend to keep eyes on critic and investigate this special occupation. Oscar award, the highest award in the realm of movie, according evaluation and criticism from professional critics, renders us the most excellent movies of great value.


In sum, the lasting value artist contribute is to enrich spiritual world and maintain the stability, and lasting value provide by critic is to summarize the merit and offer the recommendation to innovate and develop. And the endeavors they devote and effects they function lift spirit of whole society and offer us bravery and wisdom when crisis and disaster come someday, therein the value of each.

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首先谢谢LZ对我那篇文章的批改~~
以下是我对这篇issue的一点看法，有不当之处还请LZ见谅~~

语法方面：
第一段 While, critic is a person who evaluates...in some extents 这里应该是 a critic is a person...， 在某种程度上应该是to some extent
第二段 standard of living happiness 这句有点奇怪，LZ可以试着换一种表达...
其他还有一些语法及拼写错误还请楼主再看一下~
从段落来看个人认为 Firstly...Secondly...Thirdly...有点单一，LZ可以试着用不同的表达方式改写一下，比如 To begin with...Moreover...Finally...
感觉第三段LZ的Mona Lisa的例子可以再适当拓展一下，具体说明一下它的文化价值主要体现在哪些方面等等
另外感觉第四段奥斯卡奖的例子和critic联系不是特别的紧密，个人认为奥斯卡只是对某些作品起一种认可作用，与critics对作品的社会价值和文化价值的剖析还是有一定区别的~

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谢谢，到位