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221"The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."

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History which is regarded as the teacher of human lives and politics always be emphasized. Traditional historians narrate history answering these questions: 'what happened', "how did it happen " and "why did it happen？”. These questions which differ from event to event emphasize changes and development. But in the early of 19th centuries, there is a new branch of history called psychohistory, which answers the question "why did it happened" using psychological method. The method assimilates all the events, past and present to a signal law in psychology.


Psychohistorians who are committed to Freudian psychoanalysis focus on the individuals who made the history. They abandon all the other factors contributed to history, but using this or that incidence in a historic person's childhood to analyze history. Psychohistory simplify the complex individual events to human's signal determinism that is presumed to be true in all times and in all circumstances. Thus, it proves that people in one period of time are no different from people who lived at any other time in history.

However, it is partial to view history as psychohistorians do because a myriad of other factors contribute to the history, which makes people changes. After the invention of computer, the internet appeared and has dramatically changed our life style. The cavemen worn animal skin, wandered around to predate an animal to survive. People aggregated to form a city, lived in firm house safely. Nowadays people order food, date woman and work through internet that they do not even need walk out there home. These life style changes certainly changes the psycho world of human which shake the psychohistory.

Moreover, from the psychological insight, the faith and value in people's mind is changing, too. Due to the hard working of the churchman, the Christianism has spread from the western countries to China. It is not surprise to find a lot of Christians in Beijing, but now in those undeveloped small town I found a lot of farmers are loyal to the God. It is not hard to imagine the utter changes in people's mind. Take another example, the feminism which aimed at greater right and legal protection for women has proceed for more than one hundred years and
has changed women's society status significantly. Thus, these examples show that people's thought are changing.

Not mention people living in different time, their thought live styles are changing. Even in the same period, people think and behave differently because of different culture. Chinese respect elder citizens but this respect is not obvious in western world. While people in USA promote the personal achievement, the Chinese use the Mean of Cofucian as the criterion.

From all the analysis above, we can conclude that people are different in the history, in their live style and in their thought. The study of psychohistory which assimilates people in history to a simple mode by the Freudian psychohistory is untenable. The history is hardly to repeat.

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谢谢Agnes
History which is regarded as the teacher of human lives and politics is always emphasized. Traditional historians narrate history answering these questions: 'what happened', "how did it happen " and "why did it happen？”. These questions which differ from event to event emphasize changes and development. But in the early of 19th centuries, there is a new branch of history called psychohistory, which answers the question "why did it happened" using psychological method. The method assimilates all the events, past and present to a signal law in psychology.

Psychohistorians who are committed to Freudian psychoanalysis focus on the individuals who made the history. They abandon all the other factors contributed to history, but using this or that incidence in a historic person's childhood to analyze history. Psychohistory simplify the complex individual events to human's signal determinism that is presumed to be true in all times and in all circumstances. Thus, it proves that people in one period of time are no different from people who lived at any other time in history.

However, it is partial to view history as psychohistorians do because a myriad of other factors contribute to the history, which makes people changes. After the invention of computer, the internet appeared and has dramatically changed our life style. The cavemen worn animal skin, wandered around to predate an animal to survive. People aggregated to form a city, lived in firm house safely. Nowadays people order food, date woman and work through internet that they do not even need walk out there home. These life style changes certainly changes the psycho world of human which shake the psychohistory.


Moreover, from the psychological insight, the faith and value in people's mind is changing, too. Due to the hard working of the churchman, the Christianism has spread from the western countries to China. It is not surprise to find a lot of Christians in Beijing, but now in those undeveloped small town I found a lot of farmers are loyal to the God. It is not hard to imagine the utter changes in people's mind. Take another example, the feminism which aimed at greater right and legal protection for women has proceed for more than one hundred years and has changed women's society status significantly. Thus, these examples show that people's thought are changing.



Not to mention people living in different time, their thought and live styles are changing. Even in the same period, people think and behave differently because of different culture. Chinese respect elder citizens but this respect is not obvious in western world. While people in USA promote the personal achievement, the Chinese use the Mean of Confucian as the criterion.


From all the analysis above, we can conclude that people are different in the history, in their live style and in their thought. The study of psychohistory which assimilates people in history to a simple mode by the Freudian psychohistory is untenable. The history is hardly to repeat.

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As time goes by, the society today is greatly different from the society in ancient time. Even so, some people still believes that though studying of history, we can reveal that the people in one period of time is same as people lived at any other time in history改写一下 and that is the chief benefits of history. I do believe that there are always some intellectual factors or aspects that are the same as what they were in the past. 这前后是不是应该是一段啊？However, in most situations, we can be easily distinguished from the people long period ago【觉得live in other period of history要好一点】. And the benefits of the study of history are far more than break down the so called "illusion".

It is definitely true that in some fundamental human nature aspects, such as courage, curiosity and some evil desires, we never change in spite of the passing of time. In the merit aspects, on the one hand, some models in the past are always recognized as heroes in both today and the ear笔误 they live. We can use Copernicus这个例子不能说明你前面所说的，哥白尼在他的那个时代是没有权威可言的，你在说例子的时候要着重出，古今相同的地方 as a great example. He's courage to fight against the religion which is so powerful in that time and the curiosity of the fact is always be remembered. On the other hand, the evil desires are stay the same even though the development of technologies are increasing【technology可以increase the level么，换个说法吧】 the level of people's life rapidly. The cause of World War I and World War II are extremely similar. Both are because some countries become过去时 strong and want to beat others to depredate treasures or soils话说国土能这么说吗？ for themselves. So it is the fact that some of our human nature is always keep the same.

However, the conclusion that people are similar to the people in any other time can not be drawn from the fact that some human nature is always the same. There are some significant changes have already took place. The examples are around us. In America, the present president Obama is black, which is beyond imagination in hundreds years ago.好例子 Only after the 13th and 15th amendment of The Constitution, the black got the power to vote. The racial discrimination is not legal【illicit】 since than and the moral and ethical standards have be modified. This shows significant difference【用复数较好】 between people after these two amendments and the people before them between the people before and after these two amendments. And删除 besides, the moral aspects, our daily life and the way of thinking things are also different. Now people are always asking why. Why is it legal? Why is it illegal? Why we should do this instead of that? If Nazi want to come back to bring a World War III, it is nearly impossible. The process of people is distinct.

Furthermore, the benefit of the study of history is far more than merely break down the "illusion". 你的上文没有认为存在这个illusion，你这个表述不恰当，来一个让步假设？The history is a storehouse for all the treasure left by our ancestor. Why we are different from the people in the past? The answer is the history prevent us from failing in the same way, which is truly the chief benefits of studying history. For instance, I mentioned it is hard for Nazi to come back above and that is lesson we have been taught by history. In Germany, Hitler once successfully built the nation to a Nazi country and the blindness of the people in Germany finally lead to【查了一下，引发战争用set off】 the World War II. The history clearly shows us the catastrophic result of Nazi. After that, we have learnt what Nazi, the influence of Nazi and how to avoid it.

To sum up, even people today have keep some fundamental factors that are same with the people lived at other time in the past, they are totally different. And such difference is caused by the vivid lessons taught by history, which is the chief benefit of the study of history. And we need to learn from the history and select the essence and discard the dross in order to create a better future.我觉得你的and有点多


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The speaker claims that the main benefit of studying history is to break down the illusion that people who lived in different period of time are extremely different from each others. I tend to reach an agreement with the speaker that even though the living conditions and personal conceptions are all changed through the passing history, connection always exists between different periods of time, which is also the main meaning of studying history.
同意作者观点
Admittedly, as time goes by, difference in human history does exist. Human society has entered the Information Age now after the experience in the Stone Age, the Agriculture Age and the Industrial Age. Thanks to the transformation of living tools, human in different era form their different living condition and conceptions.这样看来还以为你后面要举例说tools 呢For example, in the ancient time, people were likely to think that men are superior to women, however, women and men nowadays enjoy the same rights in ordinary life, working place and even the political field. When in the time of wars, human are always ready to solve problems by violence like launching wars while present leaders are reluctant to use violence and acclaim to make peaceful negotiation in order to meet the demands of every side and achieve the aim of sustainable development. That is to say, history has witnessed people's social attitudes and individual perspective.


However, in terms of the basic needs of people, people in one period of time are basically same with those who lived at any other time in history. In 1943, Abraham Maslow, an American psychologist, developed the theory of human motivation now known as Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. He divided human needs into five general categories, from most urgent to most advanced: physiological, safety, belonging/love, esteem, and self-actualization. Though the theory was set more than half a century ago, the Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs is still a classical theory which can be applicable to different people in different time. In other words, time as it passes, the basic needs of people will never changed because of the changing history.
阐述马修斯理论
What's more, history is the continuum of events occurring in succession leading from the past to the present and even into the future and it is because people in every period have something similar that there are so many great theory or conception passed down from generation to generation. The facts warrant that what human have analyzed and what they have researched are all of great reference value for their offspring. For instant, the Art of War, written by Sun Tzu in the 6th century BC, during the Spring and Autumn period, still enjoys its reputation in present time. It has been applied to many fields well outside of the military. It is said that there are business books applying its lessons to "office politics" and corporate strategy. Beside this, the ancient book has been the subject of various law books and legal articles on the trial process. Moreover, the idea expressed in Confucianism also makes effects from generation to generation. To teach students according to their aptitude is what Confucius did when teaching his student- Zi Lu, and such a teaching method has already been widely used in Chinese education system. Quality-oriental education is given more and more attention in order to let students take full advantages of their ability. Therefore, it is because people in different period share the same pursuit that people always use the history for reference and make progress.
这段很多例子讲理论传习，来证明人们有the same pursuit可是作者在论证的过程中却没有把pursuit加进去，什么pursuit，pursuit什么样的》。。难以说服人
To sum up, history does witness the different living situation of people in different period of time. However, what people demand and pursuit haven't changed a lot, and the experience, theory, ideas passed down from the ancient people does make sense in the later life. As a result, the chief benefit of studying history it to realize that people in different time are similar with each other to a large extent.
我不太推荐全同意的写法，最后一段有问题
并且，你在文中没有解释main benefit of history这个问题

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TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
WORDS: 653
TIME: 00:50:00
DATE: 2010-8-5 16:54:29

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在某些fundamental aspects：moral intellectual ethic。 现在的人们和过去是一样的。（World War 的相似）
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但是在其他方面现代人和过去还是有很大的区别的。
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历史的chief benefits are far more than merely xxx

As time goes by, the society today is greatly different from the society in ancient time. Even so, some people still believes that though studying of history, we can reveal that the people in one period of time is same as people lived at any other time in history and that is the chief benefits of history. I do believe that there are always some intellectual factors or aspects that are the same as what they were in the past.
However, in most situations, we can be easily distinguished from the people long period ago. And the benefits of the study of history are far more than break down the so called "illusion".

It is definitely true that in some fundamental human nature aspects, such as courage, curiosity and some evil desires, we never change in spite of the passing of time. In the merit aspects, on the one hand, some models in the past are always recognized as heroes in both today and the ear they live. We can use Copernicus as a great example. He's courage to fight against the religion which is so powerful in that time and the curiosity of the fact is always be remembered. On the other hand, the evil desires are stay the same even the development of technologies are increasing the level of people's life rapidly. The cause of World War I and World War II are extremely similar. Both are because some countries become strong and want to beat others to depredate treasures or soils for themselves. So it is the fact that some of our human nature is always keep the same.

However, the conclusion that people are similar to the people in any other time can not be drawn from the fact that some human nature is always the same. There are some significant changes have already took place. The examples are around us. In America, the present president Obama is black, which is beyond imagination in hundreds years ago. Only after the 13th and 15th amendment of The Constitution, the black got the power to vote. The racial discrimination is not legal since than and the moral and ethical standards have be modified.
This shows significant difference between people after these two amendments and the people before them. And besides the moral aspects, our daily life and the way of thinking things are also different. Now people are always asking why. Why is it legal? Why is it illegal? Why we should do this instead of that? If Nazi want to come back to bring a World War III, it is nearly impossible. The process of people is distinct.

Furthermore, the benefit of the study of history is far more than merely break down the "illusion". The history is a storehouse for all the treasure left by our ancestor. Why we are different from the people in the past? The answer is the history prevent us from failing in the same way, which is truly the chief benefits of studying history. For instance, I mentioned it is hard for Nazi to come back above and that is lesson we have been taught by history. In Germany, Hitler once successfully built the nation to a Nazi country and the blindness of the people in Germany finally lead to the World War II. The history clearly shows us the catastrophic result of Nazi. After that, we have learnt what Nazi, the influence of Nazi and how to avoid it.

To sum up, even people today have keep some fundamental factors that are same with the people lived at other time in the past, they are totally different. And such difference is caused by the vivid lessons taught by history, which is the chief benefit of the study of history. And we need to learn from the history and select the essence and discard the dross in order to create a better future.
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As time goes by, the society today is greatly different from the society in ancient time. Even so, some people still believes that though studying of history, we can reveal that the people in one period of time is same as people lived live in other period of history. and that is the chief benefits of history. I do believe that there are always some intellectual factors or aspects that are the same as what they were in the past. However, in most situations, we can be easily distinguished from the people living in another period of history. And the benefits of the study of history are far more than break down the so called "illusion".

It is definitely true that in some fundamental human nature aspects, such as courage, curiosity and some evil desires, we never change in spite of the passing of time. In the merit aspects, on the one hand, some models in the past are always recognized as heroes in both today and the era they live. We can use Copernicus as a great example. He's courage to fight against the religion which is so powerful in that time and the curiosity of the fact is always remembered, appreciated and honored by all the people, no matter they are living in thousands of years ago or present. On the other hand, the evil desires are stay the same even though the developments of technologies are improving people's life standards rapidly. The cause of World War I and World War II are extremely similar. Both are because after some countries became strong, they choose to invade others to depredate treasures for themselves. So it is the fact that some of our human nature is always keeping the same.

However, the conclusion that people are similar to the people in any other time can not be drawn from the fact that some human nature is always the same. There are some significant changes have already took place. The examples are around us. In America, the present president Obama is black, which is beyond imagination in hundreds years ago. Only after the 13th and 15th amendment of The Constitution, the black got the power to vote. The racial discrimination is illicit since then and the moral and ethical standards have been modified. This shows significant differences between people after these two amendments and the people before them. Besides, the moral aspects, our daily life and the way of thinking things are also different. Now people are always asking why. Why is it legal? Why is it illegal? Why we should do this instead of that? If Nazi want to come back to bring a World War III, it is nearly impossible. The process of society makes people distinct.


Furthermore, the benefit of the study of history is far more than merely break down the "illusion"., no matter this illusion is exist or not in such realm. The history is a storehouse for all the treasure left by our ancestor. Why we are different from the people in the past? The answer is the history prevent us from failing in the same way, which is truly the chief benefits of studying history. For instance, I mentioned it is hard for Nazi to come back above and that is lesson we have been taught by history. In Germany, Hitler once successfully built the nation to a Nazi country and the blindness of the people in Germany finally set off the World War II. The history clearly shows us the catastrophic result of Nazi. After that, we have learnt what Nazi, the influence of Nazi and how to avoid it.

To sum up, even people today have keep some fundamental factors that are same with the people lived at other time in the past, they are totally different. Such difference is caused by the vivid lessons taught by history, which is the chief benefit of the study of history. And we need to learn from the history and select the essence and discard the dross in order to create a better future.

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TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
WORDS: 583          TIME: 01:10:10          DATE: 2010/8/5 22:27:41
History, as a mirror, is used to represent a study of the past in which emerged successful heroes and many ordinary people. However, the formers have passed away, and there have been great changes in course of shifting. So, why do we still focus on the past things and study them------what is that meaning?【首段最好还是表明观点而不是以设问句作为结尾可能比较好。另外 what is that meaning可能才是你想表达的。世界上没有what is that meaning】
There has probably been the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. In ancient times, ancestors made themselves clothes and food from their fields; nowadays, we change clothes every only from our closets. Science, economy, technologies and other newly-developed fields lead the world to roll faster and faster so that people are impeded by our eagerness and greed【没读懂想表达什么ｓｏ　ｔｈａｔ　表示目的是让人们被ｘｘｘ阻碍？】. While the financial crisis in 1929 is still haunted people hearts, we went into another tragedy in 2007. So many bloody facts about wars are still lying in the history textbooks, but politics and army only care about GDP and profits. Ignoring the experience and facts from history is the most foolish thing, which will definitely drive people to a dilemma where they cannot make what they have got and lost【一个他们不能ｍａｋｅ他们已经ｇｏｔ的和ｌｏｓｔ的两难境地？这个不太通顺吧】.
Although there must be a huge amount of diversity between now and past, yet the study of the facts in different times and on various people remains necessary. Firstly,【我找了一辈子也没有找到下一个逻辑连词。。。】 actually, we cannot say that we are quite different from people who lived at any other time because we cannot define the noun 'time'. It means that there is a good criterion to judge how many years compose a 'time'------we are the same as the people three years ago and quite different from 50 years ago. Changes and shifts are deposited in the long course of the history river. For multitude, this illusion has become an excuse used to ignore the past things and get satisfied with the comfortable and peaceful life. 【没看明白这段的中心内容，首先说ｔｉｍｅ是没有一个标准，所以我们不能说我们和其它ｔｉｍｅ时候的人不一样。然后又说对于大多数人来说这个ｉｌｌｕｓｉｏｎ是用来当借口的。　前者和主题句，研究历史是有必要，几乎看不出来任何联系。】
Secondly, there must be something in common among those differences. In medical field, researchers are still focus on the past methods and cases in order to absorb more inspiration and experience because patients are all the same for doctors. In terms of cultural morals, customs, values, and ideals, people in different also have a lot of common points. By understanding these human features, we can know other people's thoughts more deeply and dealing more effectively with out enduring social problems. 【说理比较空洞，各个领域也没有例子用以支撑。】
Now, let's go back to the question in the beginning: What is the meaning of the study of history? The study of history is always representing the stories of heroes who successfully worked though moral dilemmas. However, what the history tells us is not the stories, but the facts of humanity which is an eternal issue.【自己设问，然后回答，然后用ｈｏｗｅｖｅｒ来转折？否定自己先前提出的观点毫无意义啊】
History books usually immortalize the heroes as icon, forgetting other individuals. No matter how successful heroes are, their humanity must consist of desires, motives, fear and so forth. As a result of that, everyone is supposed to remember and learn the past, trying to be aware that do not get into the same trick and that we, as human beings, in order to live better, ought to make the path in front of us by the facts behind ourselves. 【还是空的厉害。你说每个英雄都有ｆｅａｒ什么的人性的一面，我想说Ｊｏｈｎ　ｏｆ　Ａｒｃ。除此以外，我们应该记住并从这些英雄的故事中学习，来避免落入同样的窘境？这个好像历史不光是英雄，就算是英雄也不是让我们学习避免落入同样的窘境的吧。】
In this materialistic age, it is natural that people neglect the study of the past, which seems to be irrespectful【没这个单词。。。】 to our ancestors. What is more important is realizing the wrong and right from the past and make the best use of it to construct a more beautiful world.

总感觉比较乱，到最后一段才给出自己的ｏｐｉｎｉｏｎ，而且这个ｏｐｉｎｉｏｎ还只是说我们应该认识到历史中的对和错然后ｍａｋｅ　一个更好的世界。这个ｏｐｉｎｉｏｎ单拿出来和题目看看，真的有种偏题的感觉。。。个人意见仅供参考。
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History which is regarded as the teacher of human lives and politics is always emphasized. Traditional historians narrate history answering these questions: 'what happened', "how did it happen " and "why did it happen？”. These questions which differ from event to event emphasize changes and development. But in the early of 19th centuries, there is a new branch of history called psychohistory【长见识了~】, which answers the question "why did it happened" using psychological method. The method assimilates all the events, past and present to a signal law in psychology.

Psychohistorians who are committed to Freudian psychoanalysis focus on the individuals who made the history. They abandon all the other factors contributed to history, but using this or that incidence in a historic person's childhood to analyze history. Psychohistory simplifies the complex individual events to human's signal determinism that is presumed to be true in all times and in all circumstances. Thus, it proves that people in one period of time are no different from people who lived at any other time in history.

However, it is partial to view history as Psychohistorians do because a myriad of other factors contribute to the history, which makes people changes. After the invention of computer, the internet appeared and has dramatically changed our life style. The cavemen worn animal skin, wandered around to predate an animal to survive. People aggregated to form a city, lived in firm house safely. Nowadays people order food, date woman and work through internet that they do not even need walk out there home. These life style changes certainly changes the psycho world of human which shake the psychohistory. 【如果能论述下life style 的改变为什么会引起心里世界的改变可能会更好~】

Moreover, from the psychological insight, the faith and value in people's mind is changing, too. Due to the hardworking of the churchman, the Christianism has spread from the western countries to China. It is not surprise to find a lot of Christians in Beijing, but now in those undeveloped small town I found a lot of farmers are loyal to the God. It is not hard to imagine the utter changes in people's mind. Take another example, the feminism which aimed at greater right and legal protection for women has proceed for more than one hundred years and has changed women's society status significantly. Thus, these examples show that people's thought are changing.


Not to mention people living in different time, their thought and live styles are changing【和上一段的论点有重复】. Even in the same period, people think and behave differently because of different culture【这句话和题目没有多少关系。】. Chinese respect elder citizens but this respect is not obvious in western world. While people in USA promote the personal achievement, the Chinese use the Mean of Confucian as the criterion. 【这段像是为了凑字数堆砌而成的。】

From all the analysis above, we can conclude that people are different in the history, in their live style and in their thought. The study of psychohistory which assimilates people in history to a simple mode by the Freudian psychohistory is untenable. The history is hardly to repeat.
【段落的意思，和各段的联系都很明确。表扬的话已经有足够多的人说了。我就说说黑脸的部分吧。问题可能存在于审题和破题方面。题目说的是the main benefit of history is xxx。
这篇issue整个都在分析xxx而对前半句话视而不见。这可能是个问题。】

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TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
WORDS: 643
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/8/5 15:20:09

The author claims that the chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people from the past in which I think should be separated into two aspects. Does study of history truly confirm that we are totally different from people who lived at any other time in history? And is this consequence the chief benefit of the study of history? I fundamentally agree with the former while I couldn't agree the latter as I would discuss below.

Admittedly, there are many differences among different ages. Such as the attitude of treating women, the attitude towards science and the attitude towards religions and the like have change a lot. Cultural mores, customs, values and ideals are often referred by people to make a comparison to the past. As we all know that human being change their living condition from caves to thatched cottage, then to block house and finally to skyscraper. It is, indeed, inaccurate to say that we have nothing change in comparing with the other time in history. One of the most famous examples is that before Twentieth century, the sixties, women's status was in a very low place. However this attitude of women's status totally inverted after the Women's Liberation Movement which took place in Twentieth Century, the sixties in USA. Therefore, people do have something different among different times in history.

However, this assertion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history can't not be judged by those things on the surface. To understand what is really different, first we need to explore the natures of things. For instance, fashion changes every day, however does it mean that the nature of fashion changes every day? I'm afraid not, because the instinct of fashion which is the pursuing of beauty that from women doesn't change at all. And see from the ways of communication and mass media, people only read newspapers early on, then radio televisions are invented and now, internet becomes the quickest way of communication. It seems change a lot, but we need to notice that the essence of seeking information doesn't change that is to record information. Secondly, although our circumstance has made a difference, the law of historical development would never change. That is justice will eventually prevail over evil, residents will always guide the mainstream of history, failure would happen if leaders go without the masses and the like. No matter how the time changes, those regulars of history would never change.

And as to the former of this allegation which in my opinion is thoughtless would have a pile of flaws. Because there are many other more important benefits in study history. To study history is not only to find out differences. History is a mirror which possesses many functions like understand the origin of mankind, prevent the historical tragedy happens again, learn some knowledge of management of natural disasters and the like. For instance, we understand the control of military strategy and even business applications by reading the Three Kingdoms; we study the nuclear accidents at Three Mile Island and Chernobyl to avoid nuclear accident happen again in the future; we get a better guidance in helping our children grow up accurately through research B.S Bloom's pedagogics. Thus in my opinion, in this study, people should place more emphasis on the role of previous generations to apocalypse the offspring.

To sum, beneficial it might be to appreciate the unchanging nature of humankind, however it is equally beneficial to understand and appreciate significant differences between peoples of different time periods----in terms of cultural mores, customs, values and ideals. What's more, to study history is not such a simple thing to find out differences among different eras, there are a great deals of values exist in this job.
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The author claims that the chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people from the past in which I think should be separated into two aspects. Does study of history truly confirm that we are not totally different from people who lived at any other time in history? And is this consequence the chief benefit of the study of history? I fundamentally agree with the former while I couldn't agree the latter as I would discuss below.

Admittedly, there are many differences among different ages. Such as the attitude of treating women, the attitude towards science and the attitude towards religions and the like have change a lot. Cultural mores, customs, values and ideals are often referred by people to make a comparison to the past. As we all know that human being change their living condition from caves to thatched cottage, then to block house and finally to skyscraper. It is, indeed, inaccurate to say that we have nothing change in comparing with the other time in history. One of the most famous examples is that before Twentieth century, the sixties, women's status was in a very low place. However this attitude of women's status totally inverted after the Women's Liberation Movement which took place in Twentieth Century, the sixties in USA. Therefore, people do have something different among different times in history.

However, this assertion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history can't not be judged by those things on the surface. To understand what is really different, first we need to explore the natures of things. For instance, fashion changes every day, however does it mean that the nature of fashion changes every day? I'm afraid not, because the instinct of fashion which is the pursuing of beauty that from women doesn't change at all. And see from the ways of communication and mass media, people only read newspapers early on, then radio televisions are invented and now, internet becomes the quickest way of communication. It seems change a lot, but we need to notice that the essence of seeking information doesn't change that is to record information. Secondly, although our circumstance has made a difference, the law of historical development would never change. That is justice will eventually prevail over evil, residents will always guide the mainstream of history, failure would happen if leaders go without the masses and the like. No matter how the time changes, those regulars of history would never change.

And as to the former of this allegation which in my opinion is thoughtless would have a pile of flaws. Because there are many other more important benefits in study history. To study history is not only to find out differences. History is a mirror which possesses many functions like understand the origin of mankind, prevent the historical tragedy from happening again, learn some knowledge of management of natural disasters and the like. For instance, we understand the control of military strategy and even business applications by reading the Three Kingdoms; we study the nuclear accidents at Three Mile Island and Chernobyl to avoid nuclear accident happen again in the future; we get a better guidance in helping our children grow up accurately through research B.S Bloom's pedagogics. Thus in my opinion, in this study, people should place more emphasis on the role of previous generations to apocalypse the offspring.

To sum, beneficial it might understand and appreciate significant differences between peoples of different time periods, however it is equally beneficial to appreciate the unchanging nature of humankind, ----in terms of cultural mores, customs, values and ideals. What's more, to study history is not such a simple thing to find out differences among different eras, there are a great deals of values exist in this job.

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The author claims that the chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people from the past in which I think should be separated into two aspects. Does study of history truly confirm that we are not totally different from people who lived at any other time in history? And is this consequence the chief benefit of the study of history? I fundamentally agree with the former while I couldn't agree the latter as I would discuss below.

Admittedly, there are many differences among different ages. Such as the attitude of treating women, the attitude towards science and the attitude towards religions and the like have change a lot. Cultural mores, customs, values and ideals are often referred by people to make a comparison to the past. As we all know that human being change their living condition from caves to thatched cottage, then to block house and finally to skyscraper. It is, indeed, inaccurate to say that we have nothing change in comparing with the other time in history. One of the most famous examples is that before Twentieth century, the sixties, women's status was in a very low place. However this attitude of women's status totally inverted after the Women's Liberation Movement which took place in Twentieth Century, the sixties in USA. Therefore, people do have something different among different times in history.

However, this assertion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history can't not be judged by those things on the surface. To understand what is really different, first we need to explore the natures of things. For instance, fashion changes every day, however does it mean that the nature of fashion changes every day? I'm afraid not, because the instinct of fashion which is the pursuing of beauty that from women doesn't change at all. And see from the ways of communication and mass media, people only read newspapers early on, then radio televisions are invented and now, internet becomes the quickest way of communication. It seems change a lot, but we need to notice that the essence of seeking information doesn't change that is to record information. Secondly, although our circumstance has made a difference, the law of historical development would never change. That is justice will eventually prevail over evil, residents will always guide the mainstream of history, failure would happen if leaders go without the masses and the like. No matter how the time changes, those regulars of history would never change.

And as to the former of this allegation which in my opinion is thoughtless would have a pile of flaws. Because there are many other more important benefits in study history. To study history is not only to find out differences. History is a mirror which possesses many functions like understand the origin of mankind, prevent the historical tragedy from happening again, learn some knowledge of management of natural disasters and the like. For instance, we understand the control of military strategy and even business applications by reading the Three Kingdoms; we study the nuclear accidents at Three Mile Island and Chernobyl to avoid nuclear accident happen again in the future; we get a better guidance in helping our children grow up accurately through research B.S Bloom's pedagogics. Thus in my opinion, in this study, people should place more emphasis on the role of previous generations to apocalypse the offspring.

To sum, beneficial it might understand and appreciate significant differences between peoples of different time periods, however it is equally beneficial to appreciate the unchanging nature of humankind, ----in terms of cultural mores, customs, values and ideals. What's more, to study history is not such a simple thing to find out differences among different eras, there are a great deals of values exist in this job.

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The speaker claims that the main benefit of studying history is to break down the illusion that people who lived in different period of time are extremely different from each others. I tend to reach an agreement with the speaker that even though the living conditions and personal conceptions are all changed through the passing history, connection always exists between different periods of time.

Human society has entered the Information Age now after the experience in the Stone Age, the Agriculture Age and the Industrial Age. Thanks to the transformation of living tools, human in different era form their different living condition and conceptions. For example, in the ancient time, people were likely to think that men are superior to women, however, women and men nowadays enjoy the same rights in ordinary life, working place and even the political field. When in the time of wars, human are always ready to solve problems by violence like launching wars while present leaders are reluctant to use violence and acclaim to make peaceful negotiation in order to meet the demands of every side and achieve the aim of sustainable development. That is to say, history has witnessed people's social attitudes and individual perspective. 这段你缺少一个很重要的在句首的中心句，整段看下来了之后才知道你大致意思是要表达现在和过去确实存在着区别，那么你至少要在开头写个Admittedly, people who lived in different period of time have something different from other time.之类的，表明一下你的观点，表明本段的论点。

However, in terms of the basic needs of people, people in one period of time are basically same with those who lived at any other time in history. In 1943, Abraham Maslow, an American psychologist, developed the theory of human motivation now known as Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. He divided human needs into five general categories, from most urgent to most advanced: physiological, safety, belonging/love, esteem, and self-actualization. Though the theory was set more than half a century ago, the Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs is still a classical theory which can be applicable to different people in different time.这个例子不错 In other words, time as it passes, the basic needs of people will never changed because of the changing history.

What's more, history is the continuum of events occurring in succession leading from the past to the present and even into the future. The facts warrant that what human have analyzed and what they have researched are all of great reference value for their offspring. For instant, the Art of War, written by Sun Tzu in the 6th century BC, during the Spring and Autumn period, still enjoys its reputation in present time. It has been applied to many fields well outside of the military. It is said that there are business books applying its lessons to "office politics" and corporate strategy. Beside this, the ancient book has been the subject of various law books and legal articles on the trial process. Moreover, the idea expressed in Confucianism also makes effects from generation to generation. To teach students according to their aptitude is what Confucius did when teaching his student- Zi Lu, and such a teaching method has already been widely used in Chinese education system. Quality-oriental education is given more and more attention in order to let students take full advantages of their ability. Therefore, it is because people in different period share the same pursuit that people always use the history for reference and make progress.同样的，这段还是缺少一个句子将它与题目建立起联系来。看完一整段，因为我是写过这篇的，所以我差不多能猜出你是想反对题目的前半段，即说明历史的最大好处并不是打破某种假象，它还有其他更有用的用处。那么你至少要在本段开头陈述一下你的这个论点吧，要不讲了一大段，却连论点都没有说给读者听，不可能去叫读者根据你的论述来猜你想表达的是什么。

To sum up, history does witness the different living situation of people in different period of time. However, what people demand and pursuit haven't changed a lot, and the experience, theory, ideas passed down from the ancient people does make sense in the later life. As a result, the chief benefit of studying history it to realize that people in different time are similar with each other to a large extent.

存在一个问题，就是你在首段和末段都只说到一个问题就是你同意不同时代的人们其实是具有相同性的，但是这个命题其实隐含了两个，另一个论点是研究历史的最大好处是不是打破某种假象，对于这个论点不管你支持与否，你都应该在首段和末段表明你的态度，否则的话别人就会认为你并没有看到这一点，你只看到了后半句话，即使你正文用了一段在讲这个问题。



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Along a long history river, we come from primitive society, through slavery society, then, feudal society, to now, capitalism or socialism society.这句是完全的中式英语 Everything is changing and today is so much different from yesterday, let along long long (去掉一个)ago. So, to some extent, I cannot agree with what is said in the statement above, for I personally hold a view that everyone is unique especially they live in different times. However, in a not dissimilar way, I also agree there are some things still remains the same as before, and will be in the same, at least similar way forever. As it stands, it is hard to say are there really significant difference between us and our ancestors? （这是个问句啊？问了什么？）

It is not to deny （deny本身是个动词了，前面怎么还有一个be动词）with the development of our society, our life is becoming increasingly convenient. We can use TV to get the latest information of the world; we utilize telephone to communicate with anyone we want no matter where he or she is(of course we should have others’ phone number); we also have the most important tool------computer, or how can I take the test by this way now? But for our predecessors, they might never think about this, they can only write letters when they want to get connect with their families or friends, which would take a long time for this kind of communication, or worse, the letter may be missed so two persons had no chance to reach each other forever. In this way, we are definitely different from what people are in the history.

But, as far as I am concerned, what is different is only on the surface. No matter how rapid our society is advancing, no matter how improved our life is, I strongly believe there are something called spirit will never change. Since long ago, our ancestors are admiring peace, Olympic Games, which has been hold since 776BC to stop wars, is still the most important sports meeting around the world, showing our people now is also adoring peace. This is quite true on the question of freedom, too. Almost every country in the world protects citizens’ freedom in law clearly. What’s more, other virtues, such as loyalty, kindness, love for ones’ country etc，are shared by both the modern world and our forefathers so far and perpetually. As I see, what is the essential part of human beings is just this kind of things.这句话与主题是没有关系的，要么换成一句一个小段的再次总结

However, what remains the same is not only the mores, but also other thing in several aspects. As for science, Newton once said “If I have seen further, it is because I stand on the shoulders of the giants’”, showing scientific research must be based on the forerunners’ experience, which to a certain extent implied the close linkage between ancient science and today’s. Scientists hang down their results generation by generation, including their persistence and creativeness. As for liberal art, the philosophy of Socrates, as well as the theory created by Confucius(a famous pilosopher in China’s history) , has never given up their use in reality as a director of today’s life. Their thoughts are accepted all through the world, applied to solve problems in the reality, which seems unbelievably fascinating. As for The Second World War, people come to the conclusion that wars are of no good to the whole world, even in today’s world, it will still bring a lot of sufferings and tragedies. Historical experience can be borrowed by us to decide what to do and what should we avoid, reflects there must be the same factors in the old times and now.这段逻辑很混乱，开头的中心句貌似是要说除了在道德方面有相同，在其他一些方面也都有相同。可是接下来的一系列论证与本段开头中心句全无关系。并且每个例子之间要论证的东西也都不一样，比如最后一个例子应该是要说明历史可以在一些方面指引我们应该怎么做。不明白你这一段的论点到底是什么。

Whatever else said about this, difference and similarity always exist at the same time, people would never come to the answer whether people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. For the standard to judge difference also differ in everyone’s heart. （这不是一个句子）And in my heart, the chief benefit of the study of history is not to break down any illusion, but to help us pave a way to a brighter future.

你的论证是片面的，你只看到了题目的后半个论点就是历史上不同时期的人其实是相同的，不管你赞同与否，你都没有去注意到题目的另一个论点就是历史最大的作用是什么，那么首先你关于这道题目的论证就是补完整的了。其次，你没有明确的表明你的态度，全文第一段的描写让人觉得你自己都不知道自己是赞同还是反对。最后，中式英文太多了。总之问题很大，你愿意的话或有任何问题，可以在QQ上找我。

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TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
WORDS: 583          TIME: 01:10:10          DATE: 2010/8/5 22:27:41

History, as a mirror, is used to represent a study of the past in which emerged successful heroes and many ordinary people. However, the formers have passed away, and there have been great changes in course of shifting. So, why do we still focus on the past things and study them------what is that meaning?

There has probably been the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. In ancient times, ancestors made themselves clothes and food from their fields; nowadays, we change clothes every only from our closets. Science, economy, technologies and other newly-developed fields lead the world to roll faster and faster so that people are impeded by our eagerness and greed. While the financial crisis in 1929 is still haunted people hearts, we went into another tragedy in 2007. So many bloody facts about wars are still lying in the history textbooks, but politics and army only care about GDP and profits. Ignoring the experience and facts from history is the most foolish thing, which will definitely drive people to a dilemma where they cannot make what they have got and lost.

Although there must be a huge amount of diversity between now and past, yet the study of the facts in different times and on various people remains necessary. Firstly, actually, we cannot say that we are quite different from people who lived at any other time because we cannot define the noun 'time'. It means that there is a good criteria to judge how many years compose a 'time'------we are the same as the people three years ago and quite different from 50 years ago. Changes and shifts are deposited in the long course of the history river. For multitude, this illusion has become an excuse used to ignore the past things and get satisfied with the comfortable and peaceful life.

Secondly, there must be something in common among those differences. In medical field, researchers are still focus on the past methods and cases in order to absorb more inspiration and experience because patients are all the same for doctors. In terms of cultural morals, customs, values, and ideals, people in different also have a lot of common points. By understanding these human features, we can know other people's thoughts more deeply and dealing more effectively with out enduring social problems.

Now, let's go back to the question in the beginning: what is the meaning of the study of history? The study of history is always representing the stories of heroes who successfully worked though moral dilemmas. However, what the history tells us is not the stories, but the facts of humanity which is an eternal issue. History books usually immortalize the heroes as icon, forgetting other individuals. No matter how successful heroes are, their humanity must consist of desires, motives, fear and so forth. As a result of that, everyone is supposed to remember and learn the past, trying to be aware that do not get into the same trick and that we, as human beings, in order to live better, ought to make the path in front of us by the facts behind ourselves.

In this materialistic age, it is natural that people neglect the study of the past, which seems to be irrespectful to our ancestors. What is more important is realizing the wrong and right from the past and make the best use of it to construct a more beautiful world.

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TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
WORDS: 583          TIME: 01:10:10          DATE: 2010/8/5 22:27:41

History, as a mirror, is used to represent a study of the past in which emerged successful heroes and many ordinary people. However, the formers have passed away, and there have been great changes in course of shifting. So, why do we still focus on the past things and study them------what does it mean?

There has probably been the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. In ancient times, ancestors made themselves clothes and food from their fields; nowadays, we change clothes every only from our closets. Science, economy, technologies and other newly-developed fields lead the world to roll so fast that people are impeded by our eagerness and greed. While the financial crisis in 1929 is still haunted people hearts, we went into another tragedy in 2007. Another example is that so many bloody facts about wars are still lying in the history textbooks, but politics and army only care about GDP and profits. Ignoring the experience and facts from history is the most foolish thing, which will definitely drive people to a dilemma where they cannot make out what they have got and lost.


Although there must be a huge amount of diversity between now and past, yet the study of the facts in different times and on various people remains necessary. Firstly, actually, we cannot say that we are quite different from people who lived at any other time because we cannot define the noun 'time'. It means that there is a good
criterion
to judge how many years compose a 'time'------we are the same as the people three years ago and quite different from 50 years ago. Changes and shifts are deposited in the long course of the history river. For multitude, this illusion has become an excuse used to ignore the past things and get satisfied with the comfortable and peaceful life. Secondly, there must be something in common among those differences. In medical field, researchers are still focus on the past methods and cases in order to absorb more inspiration and experience because patients are all the same for doctors. In terms of cultural morals, customs, values, and ideals, people in different also have a lot of common points. By understanding these human features, we can know other people's thoughts more deeply and dealing more effectively with out enduring social problems.


Now, let's go back to the question in the beginning: What is the meaning of the study of history? The study of history is always representing the stories of heroes who successfully worked though moral dilemmas. However, what the history tells us is not the stories, but the facts of humanity which is an eternal issue.


History books usually immortalize the heroes as icon, forgetting other individuals. No matter how successful heroes are, their humanity must consist of desires, motives, fear and so forth. As a result of that, everyone is supposed to remember and learn the past, trying to be aware that do not get into the same trick and that we, as human beings, in order to live better, ought to make the path in front of us by the facts behind ourselves.


In this materialistic age, it is natural that people neglect the study of the past, which seems to be not respectful
for our ancestors. What is more important is realizing the wrong and right from the past and make the best use of it to construct a more beautiful world.

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History keeps a record of change from the very beginning to the present day. Everything has a history including we （改成us宾格）human beings. 论点：From history, we know that humankind evolves gradually which renders the similarities between people from different historical periods. In addition, abrupt changes may occur which makes people in different era have their own features.

First and foremost,（这样说很口语，少用） human, though quite different from other animals, are still a kind of animals. And animals have some basic needs which never changes. For example, when we are hungry, we will find something to eat; whether fast food or Chinese food, it does not matter. When our ancestors were hungry, probably they would take their spears to hunt animals or gather fruits on the ground. From this aspect, we are not different from the people antedating us. These basic needs also including are our biological properties and they stay the same.（我们与过去不同时代的人们没有很大区别。）

Moreover, the theory of evolution by natural selection proposed by Darwin shed some light（good） on this static. Even though living things will change themselves according to the change of the environment they live in, this change often occurs at a very slow pace. It takes thousands of years for people to change from anthropoid to upright person, and in a relatively short time of this long period, no evident change is made. Also, children might be quite like their parents in appearance or disposition, this is due to the children carry the genetic features from their parents. Gene links the generations and it is the foundation of similarities between people from different time. Thus, Human being stay more or less the same as the passage of time.本段与第一段内容有点重复~

Biologically we vary little from our ancestors; also we have inherited some moral values from them. For example, Confucian established Confucianism some 2000 years ago in China , and his philosophic and religious ideas, from then on, have deeply influenced China as well as many other neighboring countries. Therefore, we and the people from his time have some common values and we are not very different from each other in terms of moral values. Another example is about America, when the founding father decided to give birth to the new nation, they had these eternal values in their minds: freedom, liberty, opportunity, the pursuit of happiness and so on. They also wrote them into the Declaration of Independence and the Constitution. Years passing（good）, those values are carved deep in the hearts of generations of Americans. So people from different epochs have much in common.这一段还是在论述来自不同时代的人们是有共同点的。

However, we cannot overlook the fact that drastic changes do happen and people from different time may have quite distinct features. This radical difference often happens on the social level. Before the American Civil War, many people in the southern states claimed it was their legal right to keep slaves and slavery was the backbone of the southern agriculture economy. However, after the Civil War, there were not many people contending the legitimacy of slavery and slavery was totally abolished. This is a big change in the minds of people from two eras. History has provided abundant materials about this dramatic change for us to study.
该段讨论不同时代仍然会产生很大的变化，本段最后只简单说到了history，并没有深入讨论不同时代的不同变化与对历史的学习有什么影响。
第一二段也是这个问题，只是停留在表面说了，不同时代的人有共同点，却没有深入说明有共同点我们是否要去了解。建议联系history多说一些，否则就与题目中的，the study of history偏离了。
To sum up, something about the people has changed whereas others not. A balance should be set up between inheritance and renewal.最后总结的内容有点少~
个人建议：文章很流畅，读起来很舒服，用词表达也很好~学习！破题方面可能还有些问题，没有好好把握题目的精髓哦，版上有些精华帖子说如何破题的还是要好好看看哦~第一次该你的文章，有啥问题，欢迎交流！！~~

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As time goes by, the society today is greatly different from the society in ancient time. Even so, some people still believes that though studying of history, we can reveal that the people in one period of time is same as people lived live in other period of history，and that is the chief benefits of history. I do believe that there are always some intellectual factors or aspects that are the same as what they were in the past. However, in most situations, we can be easily distinguished from the people living in another period of history. And the benefits of the study of history are far more than break down(breaking down) the so called "illusion".

It is definitely true that in some fundamental human nature aspects, such as courage, curiosity and some evil desires, we never change in spite of the passing of time. In the merit aspects, on the one hand, some models in the past are always recognized as heroes in both today and the era they live. We can use Copernicus as a great example. He's (这种不要用缩写） courage（courageous) to fight against the religion which is(was) so powerful in that time and the curiosity of the fact is always remembered, appreciated and honored by all the people, no matter they are (were)living in(去掉in） thousands of years ago or present. On the other hand, the evil desires are stay the same even though the developments of technologies are improving people's life standards rapidly. The cause of World War I and World War II are extremely similar. Both are because after some countries became strong, they choose to invade others to depredate treasures for themselves. So it is the fact that some of our human nature is always keeping the same.

However, the conclusion that people are similar to the people in any other time can not （cannot中间没有空格，这些小地方要注意一下）be drawn from the fact that some human nature is always the same.（喜欢这个表达，一下子说清楚了） There are some significant changes have（having，注意这句话有两个动词了） already took（taken） place. The examples are around us. In America, the present president Obama is black, which is beyond imagination in hundreds years ago. Only after the 13th and 15th amendment of The Constitution, the black got the power to vote. The racial discrimination is illicit since then and the moral and ethical standards have been modified. This shows significant differences between people after these two amendments and the people before them. Besides, the moral aspects, our daily life and the way of thinking things are also different. Now people are always asking why. Why is it legal? Why is it illegal? Why we should do this instead of that? If Nazi want to come back to bring a World War III, it is nearly impossible. The process of society makes people distinct.即使人性没有改变多少，时代的变迁仍然会造成人们的不同。


Furthermore, the benefit of the study of history is far more than merely （to）break down the "illusion"., no matter this illusion is exist（exists） or not in such realm. The history is a storehouse for all the treasure left by our ancestor. Why we are （are we，这又不是从句，为什么要颠倒顺序？）different from the people in the past? The answer is （that）the history prevent us from failing in the same way, which is truly the chief benefits of studying history. For instance, I mentioned it is hard for Nazi to come back above and that is lesson we have been taught by history. In Germany, Hitler once successfully built the nation to a Nazi country and the blindness of the people in Germany finally set off the World War II. The history clearly shows us the catastrophic result of Nazi. After that, we have learnt what Nazi, the influence of Nazi and how to avoid it.这段最后缺了点分析，在总结一下
学习历史的意义远超过打破幻觉

To sum up, even people today have keep some fundamental factors that are same with the people lived at other time in the past, they are totally different. Such difference is caused by the vivid lessons taught by history, which is the chief benefit of the study of history. And we need to learn from the history and select the essence and discard the dross in order to create a better future.
你的文章条例清晰，中规中矩，学习~但是小语病很多，要注意断句和时态~内容上，也挺丰富的~学习了！

agnes2010UID: 2794922

TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
WORDS: 593          TIME: 01:00:00          DATE: 2010-8-5 22:30:51

The speaker claims that the main benefit of studying history is to break down the illusion that people who lived in different period of time are extremely different from each others. I tend to reach an agreement with the speaker that even though the living conditions and personal conceptions are all changed through the passing history, connection always exists between different periods of time.

Human society has entered the Information Age now after the experience in the Stone Age, the Agriculture Age and the Industrial Age. Thanks to the transformation of living tools, human in different era form their different living condition and conceptions. For example, in the ancient time, people were likely to think that men are superior to women, however, women and men nowadays enjoy the same rights in ordinary life, working place and even the political field. When in the time of wars, human are always ready to solve problems by violence like launching wars while present leaders are reluctant to use violence and acclaim to make peaceful negotiation in order to meet the demands of every side and achieve the aim of sustainable development. That is to say, history has witnessed people's social attitudes and individual perspective.

However, in terms of the basic needs of people, people in one period of time are basically same with those who lived at any other time in history. In 1943, Abraham Maslow, an American psychologist, developed the theory of human motivation now known as Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. He divided human needs into five general categories, from most urgent to most advanced: physiological, safety, belonging/love, esteem, and self-actualization. Though the theory was set more than half a century ago, the Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs is still a classical theory which can be applicable to different people in different time. In other words, time as it passes, the basic needs of people will never changed because of the changing history.

What's more, history is the continuum of events occurring in succession leading from the past to the present and even into the future. The facts warrant that what human have analyzed and what they have researched are all of great reference value for their offspring. For instant, the Art of War, written by Sun Tzu in the 6th century BC, during the Spring and Autumn period, still enjoys its reputation in present time. It has been applied to many fields well outside of the military. It is said that there are business books applying its lessons to "office politics" and corporate strategy. Beside this, the ancient book has been the subject of various law books and legal articles on the trial process. Moreover, the idea expressed in Confucianism also makes effects from generation to generation. To teach students according to their aptitude is what Confucius did when teaching his student- Zi Lu, and such a teaching method has already been widely used in Chinese education system. Quality-oriental education is given more and more attention in order to let students take full advantages of their ability. Therefore, it is because people in different period share the same pursuit that people always use the history for reference and make progress.

To sum up, history does witness the different living situation of people in different period of time. However, what people demand and pursuit haven't changed a lot, and the experience, theory, ideas passed down from the ancient people does make sense in the later life. As a result, the chief benefit of studying history it to realize that people in different time are similar with each other to a large extent.

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The speaker claims that the main benefit of studying history is to break down the illusion that people who lived in different period of time are extremely different from each others. I tend to reach an agreement with the speaker that even though the living conditions and personal conceptions are all changed through the passing history, connection always exists between different periods of time, which is also the main meaning of studying history.

Admittedly, as time goes by, difference in human history does exist. Human society has entered the Information Age now after the experience in the Stone Age, the Agriculture Age and the Industrial Age. Thanks to the transformation of living tools, human in different era form their different living condition and conceptions. For example, in the ancient time, people were likely to think that men are superior to women, however, women and men nowadays enjoy the same rights in ordinary life, working place and even the political field. When in the time of wars, human are always ready to solve problems by violence like launching wars while present leaders are reluctant to use violence and acclaim to make peaceful negotiation in order to meet the demands of every side and achieve the aim of sustainable development. That is to say, history has witnessed people's social attitudes and individual perspective.


However, in terms of the basic needs of people, people in one period of time are basically same with those who lived at any other time in history. In 1943, Abraham Maslow, an American psychologist, developed the theory of human motivation now known as Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. He divided human needs into five general categories, from most urgent to most advanced: physiological, safety, belonging/love, esteem, and self-actualization. Though the theory was set more than half a century ago, the Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs is still a classical theory which can be applicable to different people in different time.
In other words, time as it passes, the basic needs of people will never changed because of the changing history.

What's more, history is the continuum of events occurring in succession leading from the past to the present and even into the future and it is because people in every period have something similar that there are so many great theory or conception passed down from generation to generation. The facts warrant that what human have analyzed and what they have researched are all of great reference value for their offspring. For instant, the Art of War, written by Sun Tzu in the 6th century BC, during the Spring and Autumn period, still enjoys its reputation in present time. It has been applied to many fields well outside of the military. It is said that there are business books applying its lessons to "office politics" and corporate strategy. Beside this, the ancient book has been the subject of various law books and legal articles on the trial process. Moreover, the idea expressed in Confucianism also makes effects from generation to generation. To teach students according to their aptitude is what Confucius did when teaching his student- Zi Lu, and such a teaching method has already been widely used in Chinese education system. Quality-oriental education is given more and more attention in order to let students take full advantages of their ability. Therefore, it is because people in different period share the same pursuit that people always use the history for reference and make progress.


To sum up, history does witness the different living situation of people in different period of time. However, what people demand and pursuit haven't changed a lot, and the experience, theory, ideas passed down from the ancient people does make sense in the later life. As a result, the chief benefit of studying history it to realize that people in different time are similar with each other to a large extent.

agnes2010UID: 2794922

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green- 语法错误
blue-好词好句
red-不理解的地方
purple-建议

History which is regarded as the teacher of human lives and politics always be emphasized. Traditional historians narrate history answering these questions: 'what happened', "how did it happen " and "why did it happen？”. These questions which differ from event to event emphasize changes and development. But in the early of 19th centuries, there is a new branch of history called psychohistory, which answers the question "why did it happened" using psychological method. The method assimilates all the events, past and present to a signal law in psychology.
【哇~psychohistory!叹为观止~ 感觉这篇文章一下子好友深度！小谦厉害啊~】

Psychohistorians who are committed to Freudian psychoanalysis focus on the individuals who made the history. They abandon all the other factors contributed to history, but using this or that incidence in a historic person's childhood to analyze history. Psychohistory simplify the complex individual events to human's signal determinism that is presumed to be true in all times and in all circumstances. Thus, it proves that people in one period of time are no different from people who lived at any other time in history.

However, it is partial to view history as psychohistorians do because a myriad of other factors contribute to the history, which makes people changes.【原来psychohistory的用用意在于这句话~很独特的想法】 After the invention of computer, the internet appeared and has dramatically changed our life style. The cavemen worn animal skin, wandered around to predate an animal to survive. People aggregated to form a city, lived in firm house safely. Nowadays people order food, date woman and work through internet that they do not even need walk out there home. These life style changes certainly changes the psycho world of human which shake the psychohistory. 【建议这边再充实一些具体的例子吧，这样看上去会更饱满一些，现在看来有些意犹未尽哦~】

Moreover, from the psychological insight, the faith and value in people's mind is changing, too. Due to the hard working of the churchman, the Christianism has spread from the western countries to China. It is not surprise to find a lot of Christians in Beijing, but now in those undeveloped small town I found a lot of farmers are loyal to the God. It is not hard to imagine the utter changes in people's mind. Take another example, the feminism which aimed at greater right and legal protection for women has proceed for more than one hundred years and has changed women's society status significantly. Thus, these examples show that people's thought are changing. 【人们的思想观念有了变化，此段论证感觉很充实~】

Not mention people living in different time, their thought live styles【？不太理解】 are changing. Even in the same period, people think and behave differently because of different culture. Chinese respect elder citizens but this respect is not obvious in western world. While people in USA promote the personal achievement, the Chinese use the Mean of Cofucian as the criterion. 【这一段是要论证及时在相同时期也会有差异吧~ 首句让我感到疑惑..】

From all the analysis above, we can conclude that people are different in the history, in their live style and in their thought. The study of psychohistory which assimilates people in history to a simple mode by the Freudian psychohistory is untenable. The history is hardly to repeat.

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green- 语法错误
blue-好词好句
red-不理解的地方
purple-建议

The author claims that the chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people from the past in which I think should be separated into two aspects. Does study of history truly confirm that we are not totally different from people who lived at any other time in history? And is this consequence the chief benefit of the study of history? I fundamentally agree with the former while I couldn't agree the latter as I would discuss below.

Admittedly, there are many differences among different ages. Such as the attitude of treating women, the attitude towards science and the attitude towards religions and the like have change a lot. Cultural mores, customs, values and ideals are often referred by people to make a comparison to the past. As we all know that human being change their living condition from caves to thatched cottage, then to block house and finally to skyscraper. It is, indeed, inaccurate to say that we have nothing change in comparing with the other time in history. One of the most famous examples is that before Twentieth century, the sixties, women's status was in a very low place. However this attitude of women's status totally inverted after the Women's Liberation Movement which took place in Twentieth Century, the sixties in USA. Therefore, people do have something different among different times in history.【这一段很漂亮，不过总觉得女权的例子被拦腰截断了...】

However, this assertion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history can't not be judged by those things on the surface. To understand what is really different, first we need to explore the natures of things. For instance, fashion changes every day, however does it mean that the nature of fashion changes every day? I'm afraid not, because the instinct of fashion which is the pursuing of beauty that from women doesn't change at all【？from？不理解...】. And see from the ways of communication and mass media, people only read newspapers early on, then radio televisions are invented and now, internet becomes the quickest way of communication. It seems change a lot, but we need to notice that the essence of seeking information doesn't change that is to record information. Secondly, although our circumstance has made a difference, the law of historical development would never change. That is justice will eventually prevail over evil, residents will always guide the mainstream of history, failure would happen if leaders go without the masses and the like. No matter how the time changes, those regulars of history would never change.【从事物的本质入手分析共性，角度新颖有深度~~学习！】

And as to the former of this allegation which in my opinion is thoughtless would have a pile of flaws. Because there are many other more important benefits in study history. To study history is not only to find out differences. History is a mirror which possesses many functions like understand the origin of mankind, prevent the historical tragedy from happening again, learn some knowledge of management of natural disasters and the like. For instance, we understand the control of military strategy and even business applications by reading the Three Kingdoms; we study the nuclear accidents at Three Mile Island and Chernobyl to avoid nuclear accident happen again in the future; we get a better guidance in helping our children grow up accurately through research B.S Bloom's pedagogics.【这些例子好！】 Thus in my opinion, in this study, people should place more emphasis on the role of previous generations to apocalypse the offspring.【maggie，你改我文章的时候说到类似的问题，我其实享用这些传承的例子来证明因为不同时代的人有共性，所以有东西可以代代相传，可能是我表达的不好，你没有理解吧~ 不过你这里是说学历史的主要好处不在于揭露现象，还有传承的好处，我觉得更说的通~】

To sum, beneficial it might understand and appreciate significant differences between peoples of different time periods, however it is equally beneficial to appreciate the unchanging nature of humankind, ----in terms of cultural mores, customs, values and ideals. What's more, to study history is not such a simple thing to find out differences among different eras, there are a great deals of values exist in this job.
【改maggie的文章总觉得压力很大~写的总是超级棒~以至于我都没有提出什么建设性的意见，光是在学习maggie了～】

czlilacUID: 2842584

When retrospection past, we often tend to look down upon the way of cognizing and changing the world by the ancients, and a sense of superiority will be generated spontaneously. But as the Bacon put it "Histories make men wise", the illusion will be eliminated by comprehensively study of history. Thus, I completely agree with the speaker's assertion.

With the growing development of the technology and increasing progress of society and economic, the world have been changed drastically, and with the help of the up-to-date technology we can learn more essential phenomena about the nature, as well as the world, as a result, we may naturally find that we are much more different than the ancient. However, we have failed to consider that what we are learning and what we have learned are based on the knowledge that accumulated by the ancients. For example, it was always considered that the earth was quadrate, and rain was control by Zeus, but it is common knowledge that the earth is round and rain is liquid precipitation. However, all the scientific knowledge is the process of accumulating by history, we are just standing on the shoulder of the ancients, and it never means we are significantly differing from them.

Furthermore, it is history which recorded all the process of development of technology and how human beings cognizing the world. And we still learn lots of useful knowledge from the ancient by studying history. For example, by learning Chinese education history, we can learn the pith of "Teach according to his ability" which was advocated by Confucius. Another example is that "The Art of War" is still directing many military theories. An even more remarking example is that the Newton's gravity and Einstein's relativity are playing vital role in the modern technology and living, especially in astronomy. It is, therefore, the people at other time is entirely possible never foolish than us, and maybe from current to thousands years latter, we will continue to learn their ideologies and theories.

Finally, the essence of studying history is eliminating its dross and absorbing its pith. We can find some fallacy made by the ancient, and maybe it is very preposterous today, but we should know the disadvantage of their technology at that time, and how hard to get useful information and communicate with other who were dedicating in studying the same field at that time. Today, the advance of network makes man easily communicate with each other, and we can conveniently know what the others are studying and effectively debate with than. It is, so, the headway of society has made the world much smaller than before, but we are doing the same things as the ancient--cognizing and changing the world in the same manner--by using tools. What has been changed is the tools itself.

In sum, the study of history do break down the illusion that we are much differing from the ancients, and no matter how the world will be changed, the essence of human being--cognizing and changing the world, is never changed.

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When retrospection past, we often tend to look down upon the way of cognizing and changing the world by the ancients, and a sense of superiority will be generated spontaneously. But as the Bacon put it "Histories make men wise", the illusion will be eliminated by comprehensively study of history. Thus, I completely agree with the speaker's assertion.

With the growing development of the technology and increasing progress of society and economic, the world have been changed drastically, and with the help of the up-to-date technology we can learn more essential phenomena about the nature, as well as the world, as a result, we may naturally find that we are much more different than the ancient. However, we have failed to consider that what we are learning and what we have learned are based on the knowledge that accumulated by the ancients. For example, it was always considered that the earth was quadrate, and rain was controlled by Zeus, but it is common knowledge that the earth is round and rain is liquid precipitation. However, all the scientific knowledge is the process of accumulating by history, we are just standing on the shoulder of the ancients, and it never means we are significantly differing from them.

Furthermore, it is history which recorded all the process of development of technology and how human beings cognize the world. And we still learn lots of useful knowledge from the ancient by studying history. For example, by learning Chinese educational history, we can learn the pith of "Teach according to his ability" which was advocated by Confucius, and it will well direct the today’s teacher to impart knowledge. Another example is that "The Art of War" is still directing many military theories. An even more remarking example is that the Newton's gravity and Einstein's relativity are playing vital role in the modern technology and living, especially in astronomy. It is, therefore, the people at other time is entirely possible never foolish than us, and maybe from current to thousands years latter, we will continue to learn their ideologies and theories.

Finally, the essence of studying history is eliminating its dross and absorbing its pith. We can find some fallacy made by the ancient, and maybe it is very preposterous today, but we should know the disadvantage of their technology at that time, and how hard to get useful information and communicate with other who were dedicating in studying the same field at that time. Today, the advance of network makes man can easily communicate with each other, and we can conveniently know what the others are studying and effectively debate with them. It is, thus, the headway of society has made the world much smaller than before, but we are doing the same things as the ancient--cognizing and changing the world in the same manner--by using tools. What has been changed is the tools.

In sum, the study of history do break down the illusion that we are much differing from the ancients, and no matter how the world will be changed, the essence of human being--cognizing and changing the world, is never changed.

czlilacUID: 2842584

Along a long history river, we come from primitive society, through slavery society, then, feudal society, to now, capitalism or socialism society. Everything is changing and today is so much different from yesterday, let along long long ago(这句话我不怎么懂). So, to some extent, I cannot agree(就用disagree就行了) with what is said in the statement above(可以把to some extent放到后面来), for I personally hold a view that everyone is unique especially they live in different times(这个表达不好). However, in a not dissimilar way, I also agree there are some things still remains the same as before, and will be in the same(这个可以删除), at least similar way forever. As it stands, it is hard to say are there really significant difference between us and our ancestors.(这句话放这里好像没什么意义哦，没有什么可以转折的)
感觉这一段的内容都是中文式的英语哦，而且相当的啰嗦

It is not to deny with the development of our society, our life is becoming increasingly convenient. We have(use) TV to get the latest information of the world; we have(utilize) telephone to communicate with anyone we want no matter where he or she is(of course we should have others’ phone number)(is 什么?后面没写完); we(We) also have the most important tool------computer, or how can I take the test by this way now? But for our precedences(predecessors), they might never think about this, they can only write letters when they want to get connect with their families or friends, which would take a long time for this kind of communication, or worse, the letter may be missed so two persons had no chance to reach each other forever(这个例子都是用中文式英文啊). In this way, we are definitely different from what people are in the history.
But, as far as I am concerned(I concern), what is different is only on the surface. No matter how rapid our society is advancing, no matter how developed our life is(我们的life用developed不好吧 用improved or amended/meliorated), I strongly believe there are something called spirit will never change. Since long ago, our ancestors are admiring peace, Olympic Games, which has been hold since 776BC to stop wars, is still the most important sports meeting around the world, showing our people now is also adoring peace. This is quite true on the question of freedom, too. Almost every country(countries) in the world protects(protecting) citizens’ freedom in law clearly. What’s more, other virtues, such as loyalty, kindness, love for ones’ country etc，are shared by both the modern world and our forefathers so far and perpetually. As I see, what is the essential part of human beings is just this kind of things.
However, what remains the same is not only the mores, but also other thing in several aspect(aspects). As for science, Newton once said “If I have seen future(further), it is because I stand on the shoulders of the giants’”, showing scientific research must be based on the forerunners’ experience, which to a certain extent implied the close linkage between ancient science and today’s(句子顺序). Scientists hang down their results generation by generation, including their persistence and creativeness. As for liberal art, the philosophy of Socrates, the theory of Confucius, is never giving up their use as a director of today’s life(这个句子也有问题哦). Their thoughts are accepted all through the world, applied to solve problems in the reality, which seems unbelievably fascinating. As for The Second World War, people come to the conclusion that wars are of no good to the whole world(harmful to the whole world), even in(delete) today, it will still bring a lot of sufferings and tragedies. Historical experience can be borrowed by us to decide
the war going forward(不懂) tells us there must the same factors in the old times and now.
Whatever else said about this, difference and similarity always exist at the same time, people would never come to the answer whether people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. For the standard to judge difference also differ(is differece) in everyone’s heart. And in my heart, the chief benefit of the study of history is not to break down any illusion, but to help us pave a way to a brighter future.

austen06UID: 2841836

History keeps a record of change from the very beginning to the present day. Everything has a history including we human beings.
From history, we know that humankind evolves gradually which renders the similarities between people from different historical periods. In addition, abrupt changes may occur which makes people in different era have their own features.

First and foremost, human, though quite different from other animals, are still a kind of animals. And animals have some basic needs which never changes. For example, when we are hungry, we will find something to eat; whether fast food or Chinese food, it does not matter. When our ancestors were hungry, probably they would take their spears to hunt animals or gather fruits on the ground. From this aspect, we are not different from the people antedating us. These basic needs also including are our biological properties and they stay the same.

Moreover, the theory of evolution by natural selection proposed by Darwin shed some light on this static. Even though living things will change themselves according to the change of the environment they live in, this change often occurs at a very slow pace. It takes thousands of years for people to change from anthropoid to upright person, and in a relatively short time of this long period, no evident change is made. Also, children might be quite like their parents in appearance or disposition, this is due to the children carry the genetic features from their parents. Gene links the generations and it is the foundation of similarities between people from different time. Thus, Human being stay more or less the same as the passage of time.

Biologically we vary little from our ancestors; also we have inherited some moral values from them. For example, Confucian established Confucianism some 2000 years ago in China , and his philosophic and religious ideas, from then on, have deeply influenced China as well as many other neighboring countries. Therefore, we and the people from his time have some common values and we are not very different from each other in terms of moral values. Another example is about America, when the founding father decided to give birth to the new nation, they had these eternal values in their minds: freedom, liberty, opportunity, the pursuit of happiness and so on. They also wrote them into the Declaration of Independence and the Constitution. Years passing, those values are carved deep in the hearts of generations of Americans. So people from different epochs have much in common.

However, we cannot overlook the fact that drastic changes do happen and people from different time may have quite distinct features. This radical difference often happens on the social level. Before the American Civil War, many people in the southern states claimed it was their legal right to keep slaves and slavery was the backbone of the southern agriculture economy. However, after the Civil War, there were not many people contending the legitimacy of slavery and slavery was totally abolished. This is a big change in the minds of people from two eras. History has provided abundant materials about this dramatic change for us to study.

To sum up, something about the people has changed whereas others not. A balance should be set up between inheritance and renewal.

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It seems quite natural for us to have this illusion that people from different historical times are significantly different based on our historical knowledge from TV shows, films, historical novels as well as common sense. However, the careful study of real history will help us to have a complete new understanding of this discipline and thus breaking the illusion which we hold to be truth.

Why do people have this illusion that people in one period of time are fundamentally different from people who lived at any other time in history? There are many explanations for this. One is that we could imagine that our ancestors had different appearances, behaviors and even thoughts as we do. Also one explanation is that when we watch movies, people from different times have their unique features. Therefore, we come to believe that illusion.

However, the study of history breaks that illusion. Evidence from the past informs us the same thing happens again and again as the passage of time. War is an activity that people enjoy so much. From the war of Roman Empire to the Crusade, to World War 2, people never stop engaging in that activity and Plato even put it 'only the dead could see the end of the war'. Besides, the Great Depression in 1930s still echoes with the global financial crisis last year. All these facts show that although something has changed, the society and humanity are not completely different from our predecessors because of the continuity in social and human behaviors. The past cause the present and the present causes the future. Only through the study of history can we get the conclusion.

In fact, it is just the illusion that makes us believe that history is of no great significance. Since people from different historical periods are very different, and we live in the present, planning for the future while our ancestors lived in the past, our lives and their lives have nothing in connection. Therefore, knowing what they did does not help us to know what to do and history is of no practical use except for recreational purposes. After breaking the discontinuous view of the history, the study of history presents its essence to us.

History study discloses the law of society and human developments: we can always look back into the past to seek the inspiration we need to solve the problems we face today. Take the example of the establishment of the UN. The world has witnessed two world wars. People used their intelligence to invent and produce better weapons to kill one another. The soldiers and civilians who lost their lives in the wars are not estimable. After the war, all people, including the political leaders to the residents find it an urgent to devise some ways to stop the war. That is the establishment of the UN. From then on, people are more willing to solve the dispute and conflict on the table than in the battlefield. It is history that help us to understand the present and to better plan for the future.

To sum up, history not only break the illusion that people from different times are completely distinct, but also lead us forward into the history.

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ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."

I cannot full agree with the issue. History is a reservoir of human experience. People have been leant a lot from history. The different from people is not the chief benefit. （不明白）We should approach problems in a relatively all-sided way（两方面，写明了最好）

On the（去掉） one hand, no matter when the time（去掉） we（people） lived, people always has common things as the later. The development of human is a grade process. Everyone has the basic desires and motives, just like our fears and other basic characteristics. Set the emperor as a example, almost every emperor has a great desire of aggression. When their country is the stronger one, the emperor wants to invade to the weaker one nearby. Another bad desire is greed which is the one of seven sins. The famous example is He Shen in Qing dynasty. （这个例子美国人不太可能知道）After him dead, the wealth was found more than 415 thousands of tons sliver. It is equal to the 15 years income of the government. At the same time, there are few people also was accused of graft.（这段怎么没有总结？）

On the other hand, the people in different time have different values. Their attitude of everything is changing. Before 1865, the Negro in the American was treating as a slaves and their position is lower than others. Until 1865, the civil war was over and Negro was freed by Abraham Lincoln which is one of the greatest presidents in America. The liberation of Negro slave was changed the attitude（什么attitude？）. Everyone in the world is equal and no one should be discriminated. The Gandhi is another example; he is the greatest（sth is missing here) in India which is called Mahatma Gandhi. His purpose of nonviolent protest has influenced the entire world. Through these change in the past, our attitude is more perfect.

Moreover, history is able to make an amendment from the wrong sense of worth. (What do you mean?)It is cannot be avoid because people always has the historical limitation. The wrong or ridiculous one maybe is true in the future. For example, Mendel is a good example. He is a geneticist who is the founder of modern genetics. Mendel reaching the hereditary law in 1865 but none of the researcher supports him. Until 1900, his meaningful achievements were being affirmed. Furthermore, the later can learn the experience from history to avoid the mistake. Soviet Union is the precursor of the Communist, but it is an example of failures. The government failed to deal with the conflict in the union and has a problem of economy. In China, the government insisted upon the policy with the Chinese characteristics preventing the same mistake from Soviet Union.

The function of history is more than break down the illusion. It is mere a part of history. we should learning the history, understanding the history and utilizing the history.

(很多单复数，时态等的语法错误！另外，主题句不是很突出，往下看了半天才大概知道要讲什么）