高频issue212

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题目：ISSUE212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."
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日期：2010-8-8 下午 05:08:04

【i原文】Several centuries ago, Ablahan Lincoln once asserted, ""

Athough it is just an sentence in the past, it is worth discuss nowadays, even in the future. The speaker, totally agreed with the fomer president of America.
Similarly, I acknowledge the positive effect of the assertion. However, nowadays, regardless of the reputation of Lincoln, in the complex environment, there is some flaws in the sentence.

Whatever the goal is, and whatever the means to attain it is, it doesn't guarantree the overcome is worthy, let alone promoting the progress of the society. In my perspective, the goal and means will be reevaluated, when the consequence comes out. In sum, what we should do, making the best advantage of brainstorm,is to ensures the final result accepted by the society, which propelling the society to develop steadily.

Firstly, the to attain the same goal, there are different ways, whose validity depends on the specific environment. For example, to gain the peace, Franly Rovselt and "Massaha" Gandhi, choose their own different ways. To stop the aggression of Germany and Janpan, President F.Rosvoot, sending American army to all the important areas, including Europe and Pacific. However, as the biograhy of ^, shows to beat the Japanese army. The navy also do some trick, such as ^ and insulting the Japanese soliders. It is hard to imagine America can stop the world invade by the Fressa, without these tricks, so-called injustfiable. However, none blamed the soliders and the president for these unjustiable behaviour. Compared with Rosvoot, Gandhi, the Buddist, advocated "invoilece uncooperation". By the way of ^starving, Gandhi gained the respect of Indians and even the official of England, which finally lead the India to peace and independance. In sum, whatever the the means are, if the final overcome are to benefit the society, the evaluate of the means will be changed.
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In addition, sometimes sticking to the justifiable means will lead to disarster of the society. The justifiable means is just a small part of the whole stradegy^. Only choosing the justifiable means limit the behaviors of us, even make the goal a failure. If we chose Gandhi as the president of America, instead of F.R, Gandhi must fail to send army to fight with Germany and Janpan, because he opposites the voilence, which is unjustiable to him. Then, without the assistant and support of America, England and France would lack enough army to fight with Germany and Japan. And Hilter would not will be
moved by Gandhi's starvng, even waiting. It would be obvious now we must be under the control of the Fessia, which lead the society to the infinite darkness. In conclusion, sometimes the limit set by the sticking to justifiable means, fail to lead to the society to a positive direction.

With the globalization and communication of the culture,there exist more and more values, which makes the judgement of justice varies from individual. If we are still limited by the Lincoln's assertion, the overcome may be the chaos of the society. As the different definitions of justice, everyone has a different reason to achieve their goal in this way or not. For example,

In sum

【i修改】Several centuries ago, Abraham Lincoln once asserted, "When an end is lawful and obligatory, the indispensable means to it are also lawful and obligatory"

Although it is just a sentence in the past, it is worth discussing nowadays, even in the future. The speaker totally agrees with the former president of America.
Similarly, I acknowledge the positive effect of the assertion. However, nowadays, regardless of the reputation of Lincoln, in the complex environment, there is some flaws in the sentence.

Whatever the goal is, and whatever the means to attain it is, it doesn't guarantee the overcome is worthy, let alone promoting the progress of the society. In my perspective, the goal and means will be reevaluated, when the consequence comes out. In sum, what we should do, making the best advantage of brainstorm, is to ensures the final result accepted by the society, which propelling the society to develop steadily.

Firstly, to attain the same goal, there are different ways, whose validity depends on the specific environment. For example, to gain the peace, Franklin Roosevelt and "Mahatma" Gandhi, choose their own different ways. To stop the aggression of Germany and Japan, President F. Roosevelt, sent American army to all the important fighting areas, including Europe and Pacific. However, the memoir of Eugene Sledge, a solider surviving the Pacific War, shows to beat the Japanese army, the navy also do some tricks, such as attacking from the back
and insulting the Japanese soldiers. It is hard to imagine America can stop the world invade by the fascism, without these tricks, so-called unjustifiable. However, none blamed the soldiers and the president for the unjustifiable behavior. Compared with Roosevelt, Gandhi, a Buddhist, advocated "non-cooperation, non-violence and peaceful resistance". By the way of hunger strike, Gandhi gained the respect of Indians and even the official of England, which finally lead the India to peace and independence. In sum, whatever the means are, if the final overcome are to benefit the society, the evaluation of the means will be revised.

In addition, sometimes sticking to the justifiable means will lead to disaster of the society. The justifiable means is just a small part of the whole strategy. Only choosing the justifiable means limit the behaviors of us, even make the goal a failure. If we chose Gandhi as the president of America, instead of F.R, Gandhi must fail to send army to fight with Germany and Japan, because he opposites the violence, which is unjustifiable to him. Then, without the assistant and support of America, England and France would lack enough army to fight with Germany and Japan. And Hitler would not be moved by Gandhi's hunger strike, even waiting. It would be obvious now we must be under the control of the fascism, which lead the society to the infinite darkness. In conclusion, sometimes the limit set by the sticking to justifiable means fail to lead to the society to a positive direction.

With the globalization and communication of the culture, there exist more and more values, which makes the judgment of justice varies from individual. If we are still limited by the Lincoln's assertion, the overcome may be the chaos of the society. As the different definitions of justice, everyone has a different reason to achieve their goal in this way or not. For example, the terrorists believe that the behavior of “suicide bomber” is the justifiable way to build the ideal society. If more and more people are convinced with the same belief, there may be only the sound of exploration in the world- the ideal world in their eyes. The example may be exaggerative; however, these things will happen if we still stick the old sentence.

In sum, to guarantee the overcome is worthy, promoting the progress of the society, we should freed ourselves from the old sentence, achieve our goals by the most suitable method. (643)



重述我的逻辑
我的观点，除了有利于社会的发展的结果什么，目的 手段都不重要。（speaker讨论just的目的手段我都无所谓）
1完成同样结果的手段有很多，手段目的的评价，由结果而定：（为和平罗斯福战争，甘地绝食）但战争取胜，需要耍点不光明的手段。但是为了世界和平，没有人责怪他。那些不正义的手段，也被人们说认可
2反对speaker
2.1拘泥于正当的手段，会导致不利于社会的结果
2.2个人有自己的价值观，对正当的评价，不一，可能。每个人拘泥自己的正当标准，引起社会混乱。


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adaptive
adequate
agreeable
answerable
befitting
calculated
compatible
conformable
congruent
congruous
fit
fitting
proper
propitious
suited
wieldy
回忆录
memoir
memoirs
recollection
偷袭
法西斯
Fascist
非暴力不合作
non-cooperation, non-violence and peaceful resistance

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Several centuries ago, Abraham Lincoln once asserted, "When an end is lawful and obligatory, the indispensable means to it are also lawful and obligatory" Although it is just a sentence in the past, it is worth discussing nowadays, even in the future. 【这句句子很漂亮，但是仔细看没有很多信息量，你觉得呢？】The speaker totally agrees with the former president of America. Similarly, I acknowledge the positive effect of the assertion. However, nowadays, regardless of the reputation of Lincoln, in the complex environment, there is 【are】 some flaws in the sentence. 【提到了正反两方面，从开头看，应该是平衡观点哦，看下文了】

Whatever the goal is, and whatever the means to attain it is, it doesn't guarantee the overcome is worthy, let alone promoting the progress of the society. In my perspective, the goal and means will be reevaluated, when the consequence comes out. In sum, what we should do, making the best advantage of brainstorm, is to ensures the final result accepted by the society, which propelling the society to develop steadily. 【这段作者给了一个很好的诠释，就是要注重结果，而不是方法和过程，感觉又支持林肯了哦，后文是不是就此展开呢？】【不过语句上，我读着不是很理解】

Firstly, to attain the same goal, there are different ways, 【whose? 从句结构问题哦？】whose validity depends on the specific environment. For example, to gain the peace, Franklin Roosevelt and "Mahatma" Gandhi, choose their own different ways. To stop the aggression of Germany and Japan, President F. Roosevelt, sent American army to all the important fighting areas, including Europe and Pacific. However, the memoir of Eugene Sledge, a solider surviving the Pacific War, shows to beat the Japanese army, the navy also do some tricks, such as attacking from the back and insulting the Japanese soldiers. It is hard to imagine America can stop the world invade by the fascism, without these tricks, so-called unjustifiable. However, none blamed the soldiers and the president for the unjustifiable behavior. Compared with Roosevelt, Gandhi, a Buddhist, advocated "non-cooperation, non-violence and peaceful resistance". By the way of hunger strike, Gandhi gained the respect of Indians and even the official of England, which finally lead the India to peace and independence. In sum, whatever the means are, if the final overcome are to benefit the society, the evaluation of the means will be revised. 【方法不重要，方法随条件变】

In addition, sometimes sticking to the justifiable means 【…justifiable means导致灾难？】 will lead to disaster of the society. The justifiable means is just a small part of the whole strategy. Only choosing the justifiable means limit the behaviors of us, even make the goal a failure. If we chose Gandhi as the president of America, instead of F.R, Gandhi must fail to send army to fight with Germany and Japan, because he opposites the violence, which is unjustifiable to him. Then, without the assistant and support of America, England and France would lack enough army to fight with Germany and Japan. And Hitler would not be moved by Gandhi's hunger strike, even waiting. It would be obvious now we must be under the control of the fascism, which lead the society to the infinite darkness. In conclusion, sometimes the limit set by the sticking to justifiable means fail to lead to the society to a positive direction. 【这段理解作者想退一步说，但是，表述有点奇怪哦】

With the globalization and communication of the culture, there exist more and more values, which makes the judgment of justice varies from individual. If we are still limited by the Lincoln's assertion, the overcome may be the chaos of the society. As the different definitions of justice, everyone has a different reason to achieve their goal in this way or not. For example, the terrorists believe that the behavior of “suicide bomber” is the justifiable way to build the ideal society. If more and more people are convinced with the same belief, there may be only the sound of exploration in the world- the ideal world in their eyes. The example may be exaggerative; however, these things will happen if we still stick the old sentence. 【谈到了正义的多样性，恩，思辨了】

In sum, to guarantee the overcome is worthy, promoting the progress of the society, we should freed ourselves from the old sentence, achieve our goals by the most suitable method. 【结尾太简单了哇】

词句不错，但是可能是我个人英语能力的问题，对于你行文的逻辑不是很理解，个人感觉立场还是要鲜明比较好，全文分析思考都标记了，供你参考哦。共勉！

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谢谢。。我细看 再 回复。。你几号考啊？ 2# forkid

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某人评
首先 再谢谢
重述我的逻辑
我的观点，除了有利于社会的发展的结果什么，目的 手段都不重要。（speaker讨论just的目的手段我都无所谓）
1完成同样结果的手段有很多，手段目的的评价，由结果而定：（为和平罗斯福战争，甘地绝食）但战争取胜，需要耍点不光明的手段。但是为了世界和平，没有人责怪他。那些不正义的手段，也被人们说认可
2反对speaker
2.1拘泥于正当的手段，会导致不利于社会的结果
2.2个人有自己的价值观，对正当的评价，不一，可能。每个人拘泥自己的正当标准，引起社会混乱。

Several centuries ago, Abraham Lincoln once asserted, "When an end is lawful and obligatory, the indispensable means to it are also lawful and obligatory" Although it is just a sentence in the past, it is worth discussing nowadays, even in the future. 【名人名言啊！】The speaker totally agrees with the former president of America. Similarly, I acknowledge the positive effect of the assertion. However, nowadays, regardless of the reputation of Lincoln, in the complex environment, there are some flaws in the sentence. 【其实我是小正大负， 后面给出自己观点】

Whatever the goal is, and whatever the means to attain it is, it doesn't guarantee the overcome is worthy, let alone promoting the progress of the society. In my perspective, the goal and means will be reevaluated, when the consequence comes out. In sum, what we should do, making the best advantage of brainstorm, is to ensures the final result accepted by the society, which propelling the society to develop steadily. 【具体哪里不懂？是太多插入语和从句么？】

Firstly, to attain the same goal, there are different ways, 【算了 改成 of which】whose validity depends on the specific environment. For example, to gain the peace, Franklin Roosevelt and "Mahatma" Gandhi, choose their own different ways. To stop the aggression of Germany and Japan, President F. Roosevelt, sent American army to all the important fighting areas, including Europe and Pacific. However, the memoir of Eugene Sledge, a solider surviving the Pacific War, shows to beat the Japanese army, the navy also do some tricks, such as attacking from the back and insulting the Japanese soldiers. It is hard to imagine America can stop the world invade by the fascism, without these tricks, so-called unjustifiable. However, none blamed the soldiers and the president for the unjustifiable behavior. Compared with Roosevelt, Gandhi, a Buddhist, advocated "non-cooperation, non-violence and peaceful resistance". By the way of hunger strike, Gandhi gained the respect of Indians and even the official of England, which finally lead the India to peace and independence. In sum, whatever the means are, if the final overcome are to benefit the society, the evaluation of the means will be revised. 【是那些不正义的手段，也被人们说认可】

In addition, sometimes sticking to the justifiable means 【举反例sometimes! justifiable means导致灾难？】 will lead to disaster of the society. The justifiable means is just a small part of the whole strategy. Only choosing the justifiable means limit the behaviors of us, even make the goal a failure. If we chose Gandhi as the president of America, instead of F.R, Gandhi must fail to send army to fight with Germany and Japan, because he opposites the violence, which is unjustifiable to him. Then, without the assistant and support of America, England and France would lack enough army to fight with Germany and Japan. And Hitler would not be moved by Gandhi's hunger strike, even waiting. It would be obvious now we must be under the control of the fascism, which lead the society to the infinite darkness. In conclusion, sometimes the limit set by the sticking to justifiable means fail to lead to the society to a positive direction. 【是说，拘泥于正义的手段，社会可能得不到好结果，反对speaker】

With the globalization and communication of the culture, there exist more and more values, which makes the judgment of justice varies from individual. If we are still limited by the Lincoln's assertion, the overcome may be the chaos of the society. As the different definitions of justice, everyone has a different reason to achieve their goal in this way or not. For example, the terrorists believe that the behavior of “suicide bomber” is the justifiable way to build the ideal society. If more and more people are convinced with the same belief, there may be only the sound of exploration in the world- the ideal world in their eyes. The example may be exaggerative; however, these things will happen if we still stick the old sentence. 【这段的目的是，反对speaker】

In sum, to guarantee the overcome is worthy, promoting the progress of the society, we should freed ourselves from the old sentence, achieve our goals by the most suitable method. 【你觉得还有什么要说的么？】



我觉得我的表达，有问题，ETS看不懂，就杯具了。
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Although it is just a sentence in the past, it is worth discussing nowadays, even in the future. 【嘿嘿，我是指这句，因为名人名言就是流传长久的，所以显得有些多余，一家之言了，供参考】

Whatever the goal is, and whatever the means to attain it is, it doesn't guarantee the overcome is worthy, let alone promoting the progress of the society.  
Whatever the means to attain it is: 这句语法应该是有问题了，我感觉，你把它倒回去，不太对吧？ 你想表达的是达到不管用什么方法达到目标是吧？  建议用How引导，可能更清楚
再看动词guarantee : the goal and means guarantee the overcome? 感觉读起来有点奇怪 中文可以说不管你的目标和方法是什么，结果不一定好，但是我感觉英语这样读起来就很奇怪，你可以找个高手看看。  

再分析一句哦：
In sum, what we should do, making the best advantage of brainstorm, is to ensures the final result accepted by the society, which propelling the society to develop steadily.
先去掉插入语，主句是what we should do is to ensure the final result accepted by the society.
发觉问题了吗？ensure后面的动词没有了，你可以用being accepted 或者直接是省略that的从句 can be accepted。 再看插入语， making 表示的是一种状态的伴随，但是在这里，你想说的是目的。所以，可以加in order to 把两句拆开说。或者还是用短语， for the purpose to take...  最后一句是用which引导的对前面所有内容的借代，但是用了propelling又没有动词了。个人觉得，你还是把拆开成几句句子说，你看呢？要不就和做GRE阅读一样痛苦了。呵呵~~

结尾的话，我比较偷懒地喜欢总结前文，你可以看看坛子里有人写了conclusion的专题，相信对你会有所帮助。共同学习！：）
另，非常感谢你对我文章的建议！

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不谢啊。。一起努力。。还有4天了。。你看得好仔细。。word上仔细找 才 找到。。 5# forkid