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jywbabyUID: 2874405

09.07.25NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and TV programs made in one’s own country are more interesting than those made in other countries.
As modern society develops, our lives abound with so many movies and TV programs. We have a plenty of choices as with choosing the programs, and this is where the controversy arises. Some think that movies and TV programs made their own country are more interesting than those made in other countries, while others hold a different opinion that foreign programs are more interesting. From my point of view, the latter one is more favorable.
It is admitted that people have lingual problems in understanding the foreign movies and TV programs as every language has its own features that people from another country don’t understand. When I first saw the American TV Show, Friends, I didn’t quite understand many jokes that they made even though I had subtitles. As a result, these movies and TV programs could be less enjoyable.
However, there are many interesting things that watching foreign movies and TV programs can bring us in spite of the lingual problems. The first reason I want to put forward is that watching movies and TV programs abroad can bring us new experiences. By watching the programs, we can learn many new things without having to go abroad. From the movie Forrest Gump, I learnt the American Spirit – keep on trying and never give up. Gump’s humor and little retarded also impressed me very much. Moreover, there exist many cultural and social differences among countries. It is often very interesting to see people from another country behave totally different. The more important is that it helps us avoid mistakes and impoliteness when communicating with foreign people.
My friend jack used to ask people their ages when they first met. However, after he saw many movies and programs depicting western lives, he suddenly realized that it is not polite to ask people especially women their ages. As a result, when he went abroad, he avoided asking such embarrassing question. As now we can see, watching foreign movies and programs can really bring us something new.
Another reason that I’m trying to explain is that watching foreign movies and TV programs is the most interesting and effective way to learn a foreign language. Learning another language is not easy, as it requires many efforts and an atmosphere. Watching foreign programs can easily solve these problems.
Watching the program is much easier than simply doing the listening or speaking practices and it provides the learner a perfect atmosphere where everyone speaks the foreign language. I used to do poor in listening and speaking English and I found the listening and speaking practices really boring. My teacher suggested me to watch American TV shows. It turned out to be a very good way. I can practice my English as well as enjoy the interesting shows at the same time. Finally, my speaking and listening improve dramatically.
To sum up, as the world is emerging into a big family, we should learn more about other countries and cultures. Watching foreign programs is a very good way to achieve the goal. Plus, it also serves as a very interesting way to learn foreign language. So, I don’t agree with the statement that the domestic movies and TV shows are more interesting.

zhuminhappyroseUID: 2517250

As modern society develops, our lives abound with (用词很好~)so many movies and TV programs. We have a plenty of（plenty of） choices as with choosing the programs, and this is where the controversy arises. Some think that movies and TV programs made their own country are more interesting than those made in other countries, while others hold a different opinion that foreign programs are more interesting. From my point of view, the latter one is more favorable.
开头不错啊~It is admitted that people have lingual problems（好啊~）in understanding the foreign movies and TV programs as every language has its own features that people from another country don’t understand. When I first saw the American TV Show, Friends, I didn’t quite understand many jokes that they made even though I had subtitles. As a result, these movies and TV programs could be less enjoyable.
However, there are many interesting things that watching foreign movies and TV programs can bring us in spite of the lingual problems. The first reason I want to put forward is that watching movies and TV programs abroad can bring us new experiences. By watching the programs, we can learn many new things without having to go abroad. From the movie Forrest Gump, I learnt the American Spirit – keep on trying and never give up. Gump’s humor and little retarded also impressed me very much. Moreover, there exist many cultural and social differences among countries. It is often very interesting to see people from another country behave totally different. The more important is that it helps us avoid mistakes and impoliteness when communicating with foreign people.My friend jack used to ask people their ages when they first met. However, after he saw many movies and programs depicting western lives, he suddenly realized that it is not polite to ask people especially women their ages. As a result, when he went abroad, he avoided asking such embarrassing question. As now we can see, watching foreign movies and programs can really bring us something new.$ c& s4 k$ D*（ s2 l% L9 L（（
（这个例子很有说服力哈~）
Another reason that I’m trying to explain is that watching foreign movies and TV programs is the most interesting and effective way to learn a foreign language（好观点啊~）. Learning another language is not easy, as it requires many efforts and an atmosphere. Watching foreign programs can easily solve these problems. 2 h' S/ f; D" }. q& \& CWatching the program is much easier than simply doing the listening or speaking practices and it provides the learner a perfect atmosphere where everyone speaks the foreign language. I used to do poor in listening and speaking English and I found the listening and speaking practices really boring. My teacher suggested me to watch American TV shows. It turned out to be a very good (useful好一点吧~)way. I can practice my English as well as enjoy the interesting shows at the same time. Finally, my speaking and listening improve dramatically.' D% `5 g3 D  x1 ETo sum up, as the world is emerging into a big family, we should learn more about other countries and cultures. Watching foreign programs is a very good way to achieve the goal. Plus, it also serves as a very interesting way to learn foreign language. So, I don’t agree with the statement that the domestic movies and TV shows are more interesting 总体感觉写得很好啊~文章结构，语言，论点都很好~
只是有一些小错误~我用蓝色标的是写的好的地方，红色是有问题的地方~呵~
楼主加油咯~
另外，plus是介词，在最后一段的用法正确吗？我不太肯定，向楼主请教咯~.2一 L1 `% s, N& Y' P* ?

jywbabyUID: 2874405

09.01.17 NA        
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

As the advertising industry is growing at a tremendous speed, our lives abound with so many advertisements. Particularly, food advertisement has a huge impact on people’s eating habits, and this where dispute arises. Some people think that advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits, while others don’t. From my point of view, although advertising did change our eating habits, it is not the most important factor.
Admittedly, advertising sometimes affect our eating habits negatively. The foods advertised on television as well as the Internet always have good appearances but too much energy which is very unhealthy. My friend Kate, who used to be very fat, determined to lose weight and keep a healthy diet in order to gain a good appearance several months ago. It turned out to be really effective the first few weeks. However, when she saw the alluring ice creams in the commercials, she couldn’t help but to eat those delicious foods. As a result, her plan which is to keep a healthy diet failed. As now we can see, advertising truly has bad effects to our eating habits.
However, advertising sometimes works in a positive way rather than in a bad way. Many foods that are very healthy and contain many nutrients are also advertised. They actually propose a good eating habit. My younger brother refused to eat breakfast before as it took too much time. When he saw the cereal advertisement on the Internet, he had a try on this product. Surprisingly, he liked it very much and decided to eat the product every morning. This example tells us that advertising can help us build a healthy eating habit in some cases.
Moreover, there are other factors which are more important causes of unhealthy eating habits among which is the stress from the work. As our society develops, competitions among people are becoming fiercer. People have to do more work than before, thus reducing the time to have dinner significantly. Then fast foods are becoming more and more popular: they are everywhere in the city and town and sometimes they have to wait half an hour to order the food. People no longer have enough time to enjoy healthier foods and more and more people are developing these bad eating habits. Stress from work is really the major cause of unhealthy eating habits that are more important than advertising.
To sum up, there are many causes of bad eating habits and advertising is surly one of them. But advertising sometimes can help us develop good eating habits. Furthermore, there many other significant factors contributing to the unhealthy eating habits. So I don’t agree with the statement that Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

superchaosUID: 2863434

09.01.17 NA         
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.! d% J$ {' _( R) I* A

As the advertising industry is growing at a tremendous speed, our lives abound with so many advertisements. Particularly, food advertisement has a huge impact on people’s eating habits, and this is where dispute arises. Some people think that advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits, while others don’t.(可以考虑不要..啰嗦) From my point of view, although advertising did change our eating habits, it is not the most important factor./ x0 Z2 I) \2 _$ n7 v: N
Admittedly, advertising sometimes affect our eating habits negatively.(Admittedly后面一般要接but/however来转折,即重点是后半句……考虑换个词, Undoubtedly) The food advertised on television as well as the Internet always have good/appealing appearances but too much energy (别扭...)which is very unhealthy. My friend Kate, who used to be very fat, determined to lose weight and keep a healthy diet in order to gain a good appearance several months ago. It turned out to be really effective the first few weeks. However, when she saw the alluring ice creams in the commercials, she couldn’t help but to eat those delicious food. As a result, her plan of subjecting to a healthy diet failed. As now we can see, advertising truly has bad effects to our eating habits.
However, advertising sometimes works in a positive way rather than in a bad way. Many foods that are very healthy and contain many nutrients are also advertised. They actually propose a good eating habit. My younger brother refused to eat breakfast since it took too much time. When he saw the cereal advertisement on the Internet, he had a try on this product. Surprisingly, he liked it very much and decided to eat the product every morning. This example tells us that advertising can help us build a healthy eating habit in some cases.
Moreover, there are other factors which are more important causes of unhealthy eating habits among which is the stress from the work. As our society develops, competitions among people are becoming fiercer. People have to do more work than before, thus reducing the time to have dinner significantly. Then fast foods are becoming more and more popular: they are everywhere in the city and town and sometimes they have to wait half an hour to order the food. People no longer have enough time to enjoy healthier foods and more and more people are developing these bad eating habits. Stress from work is really the major cause of unhealthy eating habits, which is more important than advertising.
To sum up, there are many causes of bad eating habits and advertising is surly included. But advertising sometimes can help us develop good eating habits. Furthermore, there many other significant factors contributing to the unhealthy eating habits. So I don’t agree with the statement that Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.(最后这句不是自杀么....)

我着重说写不好的地方吧：
1.你说你不同意Ad是主要原因,但是你首先就写一大段说Ad能影响人的eating habits,然后第3段紧接着说Ad给人的影响可以是正面的,最后又说压力是形成不良习惯的罪魁祸首,个人感觉这样有点乱啊...可以考虑换个顺序,先说主要原因,在说Ad对人的不好影响,这里并没让你说Ad的positive effects啊,考虑不写……重新找个原因。。
2.句子挺流畅的,词汇也不错,不过句式可以考虑多样化一点……全篇的同位语从句,论述也可以适当深入一点..似乎都没怎么让人很信服的例子..
3.本人水平有限...如有不对恳请指正~~共同进步~~~:)

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改好了~
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