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jackywei1987UID: 2881849

8月24日交（09.01.23 NA）
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

Nowadays, there is a controversial issue about whether young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term work. According to different background and experience, people may have different answers. Some people may hold the view that young people should try several jobs before they take a long term work. Others may maintain the opposite answer. Although both two opinions have their special reasons, I agree with the former answer, I think young people should try different jobs before they take a long term work. Several concrete reasons and details will be given to support my idea.
其实这段话是模板里面的，由于这是我加入作文小组的第一篇作文，而且写得有些匆忙，没有来得及弄个自己的模板！争取早日有自己的模板！

First of all, since independence is popular recently, most young people must gain the money to afford their living. People gain most of their money through work. 【As few young people could be picked to their favorite job-the job may offer high salary, but with great competition and need experience workers-many of them just looking for a job that is easier to apply】. For example, many Chinese students in America may take a job as librarian in the school library. Although they may be top students from business school or somewhere, they take the job mainly for the aspect of money. They may take different a lot of jobs until they finally graduated from school or even more until they find their life-time work. They may live better with the money for the job during the period they looking for a final work. They really need the money from different work.
【】意思为年轻人想要找理想的工作，理想的工作意味着高薪但是竞争激烈，很难被录用。他们必须做不同的工作来养活自己。知道自己有能力找到好的工作

Secondly, people can't make sense of something until they have practised on it. More peculiar experience comes to your mind through this progress. And you would also find whether it is interesting. When people satisfied with something(work, food or toy), they would pay more passion on it. And they would do their work more effective. It is really a main factor of success. Most famous artists, scientists, and richest people begin their careers with interests and devoted into their jobs in life-long time. Taking different jobs not only provide young people a pecific experience but also offer an opportunity to find a lovely job. How can we keep doing the same thing during a long time? What we need is a love in the work.
这段主要意思是年轻人可以在不同的工作中，发现自己喜欢的工作，这样更容易成功。感觉这例子比较通俗易懂，应该能引起大家以及批卷子老头的共鸣——要不咱举个批卷子老师很成功，因为他喜欢批卷子的例子~

Although many people may think try different jobs before they take a long term work may waste a long of time and puzzled you. Ic think these reasons are too weak to weaken my conclusion.
这段有些鸡肋因为字数偏少，其实是想做个让步段。不过写到这里有些累了所以烧烧偷了下懒~

After ruminating over all these factors, I make a point that young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or career they will do in long term.
貌似结尾段还需要套了模板，否则给人感觉虎头蛇尾！
自我感觉词汇量太少，句式简单，希望通过阅读和单词背诵来提高，GG/MM有更好方法也请指导下我！改作文的G友和大家的帮助真的让我很受用！谢谢~

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我没有办法粘贴附件，所以就直接在这里改了，见谅。

Nowadays, there is a controversial issue about whether young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term work. According to different background and experience, people may have different answers. Some people may hold the view that young people should try several jobs before they take a long term work. Others may maintain the opposite answer. Although both two opinions have their special reasons, I agree with the former answer, I think young people should try different jobs before they take a long term work. Several concrete reasons and details will be given to support my idea.
First of all, since independence is popular recently, most young people must gain the money to afford their living. People gain most of their money through work. As few young people could be picked to their favourate （favorite） job-the job may offer high salary, but with great competition and need experience workers-many of them just looking for a job that is easier to apply. For example, many Chinese students in America may take a job as dish washer in a restaurant, baby-watcher for some native American, and so on. Although they may be top students from business school or somewhat, they take the job mainly for the respect of money. They may take different a lot of jobs until they finally graduated from school or even more until they find their life-time work. They may live better with the money for the job during the period they looking for a final work. They really need the money from different work. （（留学生在国外打工是犯法的，考虑到你是考托福，建议换个例子。）


Secondly, people can't make sense of something until they have practiced on it. More peculiar experience comes to your mind through this progress. And you would also find whether it is interesting. When people satisfied with something (work, food or toy), they would pay more passion on it. And they would do their work more effective. It is really a main factor of success. Most famous artists, scientists, and richest people begin their careers with interests and devoted into their jobs in life-long time. Taking different jobs not only provide young people a pecific (specific) experience but also offer an opportunity to find a lovely job. How can we keep doing the same thing during a long time? What we need is love (passion)

Although many people may think try different jobs before they take a long term work may waste a long of time and puzzled you. I think these reasons are too weak to weaken my conclusion. (这段没有必要单独列出来，如果你要写，融入其他的段落内)

After ruminating （considering）over all these factors, I make a point that young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or career they will do in long term.

建议：
1.        文章条理清晰，用词较准确。
2.        第二个例子太过普通，建议找个更有说服力的
3.        检查拼写会让你的文章更完美。
个人薄见，希望有所帮助，谢谢！

jackywei1987UID: 2881849

8月26日交
(09.02.21 NA) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country？
字数：444 时间：很久。。。

When we are leaving for a foreign country, it is better to know that country not only for the culture and customs but also what's going on in that country. So you need a way to learn about that country. According to distinct background and experience, people may have different views. Some maintain that newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country. While others may think there is another way. On behalf of my personality and experience, I prefer the former. I will cite several concrete reasons and evidences to support my conclusion.

First of all, we can learn not only the culture and customs but also what's going on in that country by a quick scanning at several newspapers and magazines. They just provide a wide range of knowledge. For instance, we can learn the history through the "National History" magazine, the geography through the "National Geography" magazine and the staffs which going on through the "National Newspaper". What we should do is to find a place that is comfortable for us to read. Moreover, newspapers and magazines are the media of reflections of a country. By the most popular newspaper and magazine, we can find the taste and faith of most people in a country. Some fashion magazines can reflect the taste of people and popular newspapers will tell you the people's faith.

Secondly, wherever you are, newspapers and magazines are available to you. When you walking on the street, travelling on a plane or sitting in the restaurant. They are cheap and sometimes ever free. Moreover, we can save a lot of time through reading newspapers and magazines compare with other types of materials. You probably spend a lot of time to find a specific book in the bookstore or library. However, you are likely to spend a minute to get a magazine or newspaper in everywhere of a city.

Although the information of newspapers and magazines sometimes appear in a random way, it means you can't determine the information in the newspapers or magazines you bought. The news and the sections may have little effect for you to learn about a foreign country. But it is every single dots\on the line to make circle, you may get the full feature after you read a varieties of information about a country.

In summary, the issue of whether newspapers and magazines are best way to learn about a foreign country is a meaningful but complex one. By both considering factors discussed above and dissecting other circumstances not even mentioned here, I hold the position that newspapers and magazines are best way to learn about a foreign country.