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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try severaldifferent jobs before they take a long term career.


I strongly agree withthe statement that young people could obtain beneficial effects from several different jobs. Even if professional knowledge are also important and necessaryfor humans’ jobs and lives.

As we known, one person,specially young people, lack of knowledge about others and the world aroundthem. They can learn much from different jobs. As a person whose major is art,if she or he could work on a service office of community instead of gallery ormuseum where they can get knowledge of her or his major, the gift from this jobis not only how to communicate with others, but also raising the awareness oflife, which make them more sensitive of love, famine, natural and so on. Thelater one is very helpful for the person’s career in the whole life.

Several different jobsalso make us lives much more colorful and interesting. We have chance to get in touch with different people not only from different backgrounds and generations, but also with unique interesting. In my opinion, large range of friends is an important factor that can affect person’s values. Great friends help us live a better life.

Moreover, different jobs make people aware of many fields, after this process, one can choose a field to build his or her own career for the whole life without regret. We always hear about people who feel regret about their wrong choose of universities theyenrolled in, or jobs they dedicated to, because of they had no idea about thisfield and picked up their major without responsibility and randomly.  several jobs can expand eyesight, and make people make decisions correctly.

In summary, narrow experiences supply blandlife. And colorful life through serving several different jobs is a certainly good idea for everyone.

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1# nishuowoshei

I strongly agree with the statement that young people could obtain beneficial effects (这个地方觉得冗余)from several different jobs. Even if（even if应该和哪句有逻辑关系，但是没有写，或者你换个表达） professional knowledge are also important and necessary for humans’ jobs and lives.

As we known, one person,specially especially for young people, lack of knowledge about others and the world around them. They can learn much from different jobs. As a person whose major is art,if she or he could work onin a service office of community instead of gallery or museum where they can get knowledge of her or hishis or her major, the gift from this job is not only how to communicate with others, but also raising the awareness of life, which make them more sensitive of love, famine, natural and so on. The laterlatter one is very helpful for the person’s career in the whole life.

Several different jobs also make us lives much more colorful and interesting. We have chance to get in touch with different people not only from different backgrounds and generations, but also with unique interestinginterests. In my opinion, large range of friends is an important factor that can affect person’s values. Great friends help us live a better life. 8 J- \' m' a  m% p8 X

Moreover, different jobs make people aware of（觉得应该换个词，这个是觉察的意思更多些） many fields, after this process, one can choose a field to build his or her own career for the whole life without regret. We always hear about people who feel regret about their wrong choose of universities theyenrolled in（可以去掉）, or jobs they dedicated to（可以换个词，这个词太积极，可以换个中性点的）, because of（去掉） they had no idea about this field and picked up their major without responsibility and randomly（自相矛盾了）. Serving for several jobs can expand eyesight（建议自行查找更地道的英文表达）, and make people make decisions correctly.

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In summary, narrow experiences supply bland life. And colorful life through serving several different jobs is a certainlygood idea for everyone.

个人意见：语法，用词，逻辑上面都需要加强，文中很多单词间没有空格，反映出你对自己文章不够认真负责，自己对待文章不认真的话，别人也没有义务对你的文章认真，别人怎么改都代替不了你自己改；我水平有限，先改这么多

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不好意思哈~第一次参加活动，之前写出来还好好的，一转贴就乱了~没发现，谢谢你~你很负责

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不好意思，修改的有点晚。水平有限，多包涵。

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8.27 作业

Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the bestways to learn about a foreign country？

We are living in an erawith explosion of information, different news come around us from alldirections. Such medium help people gain information, like computer, radio, newspaperand so on. As very brilliant medium to deliver information, I think newspapersand magazines are certainly good ways. But considering the reliability andrapid of up-to-date, whether newspapers and magazines are the best way to learnabout other county depends.

Firstly, in my opinion,the best way to learn cultures about other foreign country is to stand on theland of the country to feeling, instead of reading articles about it. Becausewe have no idea about whether the article publicized on newspapers andmagazines is worth to trust. If the author of this article had been in thatcountry, the article would more reliable. But how can a person can understandall aspects of a country? The author’s background might be different fromreaders’, especially they have diverse value of life. In some cases, a author writesarticles for personal purpose, from individual eyesight. When he or she wentthrough a uncommon expriences what made the author unhappy, he or she mostly tookit personally in articles.

On the other hand,newspapers and magazines are certainly helpful to supply information aboutforeign country. Because to some extent, magazines and newspapers are vocational,especially some ones dedicate to deliver travel information. Moreover, onecannot travel all countries he or she wants to. Reading articles about suchcountries fulfill these requirements.

In summary, in my pointof view, reading newspapers and magazines is helpful, indeed. It can raise oursense of other countries and learn about schedule knowledge of foreigncountries. But it is definitely not the best way to learn a foreign country.

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8.28 作业
Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a lowsalary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

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改好了~

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8.31 作业

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修改，8月31日。http://www.rayfile.com/zh-cn/fil ... -823c-0015c55db73d/

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09.06.12NA   Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying inuniversities

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9.4 作业
09.08.01NA  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life.

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9.6  作业
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2009.8.7 NA  是否同意 parents help determined the future of their children or children allow to make their own choices.



AsTo parents, how would they treat their children is a big problem. Right treatment leads their children’s lives withto a hopeful future, on the contrastcontrary, incorrect way to educating their children might build potential trouble in children’s lives. In my opinion, parents should help children to make big decisions. I’ll give concrete discussion in following passages. 有些詞不太合适 比如build  



First of all, children have less experience with life and society than their parents. Take me for instance, I had no idea about which university and which major I should attended when I was eighteen years old. I had no idea about the need of society and what should I learn in certain major, because I had never been in any university before. Then, my parents advised me to take biology as my major, this suggestion depends on their experience of society and career developments. Untill now, I am proud of my major and I have studied it with interesting (interest) what(which) let me study harder and harder. There is a brilliant future waiting for me.
感觉句型有些单一。例子不错



Secondly, children have less confidence to make decisions, and then they obtain supports from their parent, they will be more self-confidence. Admittelly, children have their own idea and value, but they often vacillate in their opinions result from their insufficient experience这是个从句吧，这. If parents help them to make decisions, that means their parents hold the same attitudes and thoughts about the same question, it means a lot for children. When we feel that there are parents stand behind our back, we can encounter any troubles and be self-confidence.

感觉总是不够地道，中文思维很明显，多看文章 细读，培养英文思维很重要。 那个从句语法错误 可以用because of 引出来

On the other hand, excessive controls of parents on children affect independence of children, which impedingimped就好 their growing. To let children express their own opinions and practice such ideas, children can learn which kind of decision is right from what is wrong. (Children can learn how to make a correct dicision from their failure experience.这样比较好)



Above all, as curator, parents have responsibilities to make sure their children to grow up healthyhealthily, they should spend times and energy on helping children make decisions, especially those big ones that can influence one’s life. And, to some extents, parents in order to build their independence should give them appropriate rights to make decisions.


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