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发表于 2010-8-29 15:30:45 |只看该作者

Taking a part time job provides university students more opportunities to get touch with society, and enhance their ability to live on their own. However, part-time work also can lead to the distraction from college study, if one does not arrange his/her time properly.

To begin with, college students who are involved with part-time jobs are more likely to have close access to society, learning to deal with people at work. Since students will enter society sooner or later, keeping contacts with society earlier will provide valuable experience to them. They can gain knowledge of how to deal with customers politely, how to propose properly to others and how to do an excellent job. And this will help them obtain advantages in future job fair.

Equally crucial is that young citizens enhance their ability to live independently by doing part-time jobs and then earning some money . In this increasingly competitive world, it is never too early to learn to rely on one self, because one will ultimately be independent in near future. My roommate, Lee, is a wonderful example for that. She once believed it is a long way to be independent. Therefore, she relied on her parents greatly, and did little to become self-reliant. One day, when her father's company broke down, she found herself nothing but useless for the situation.

However, spending too much time in part time jobs is also not advisable. Learning always comes first for students, and others may not be that critical. If one fails to see this order, no matter how much money she/he can get from part time jobs, one will be a loser as she/he does not succeed in university study. For instance, how could a freshman be defined as successful if he takes too many part time jobs to pass his examinations? In other word, only with enough time for study and proper energy for part time jobs can make one an independent and resourceful student.

In conclusion, although regarding part time jobs too important will be unwise, properly arranged jobs will supply college student with access to society and the capability to be independent .
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