剑桥雅思三作文求拍

catirUID: 2438002

Cambridge ielts 3(Test 1)
小作文：
According to the charts, we can conclude the relationship between the number of Japanese tourist travelling abroad and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market from 1985 to 1995, and some other information.

The first chart indicates that more and more people travel abroad in Japanese from 1985 to 1995. In 1985, there were only about 4.5 million people going abroad. However, in 1990, the number went up to approximately 10.5 million. Then there was a slight decline in 1991. After that, the number keeps growing. In 1995, the number turned to be above 14.5 million, which was the peak value from 1985 to 1995.

Regarding the number of people travelling abroad, there were very close figures in the second chart, which indicates Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. From 1985 to 1988, there is a sharp increase, which is from 2 percent to about 4.7 percent in Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. But, from 1988 to 1989, the share decreased to about 4.2 percent. Then the number keeps growing up to more than 6 in 1993, which was the maximum from 1985 to 1995. After two years, in 1995, it decreased to 6 percent.

From the two charts, it can be concluded that, the trend of Australia’s share of Japanese tourist goes totally the same with the number of Japanese tourist travelling abroad.

大作文
International sporting occasions is very popular all over the world nowadays. Many people agree that international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Others disagree with this opinion. As far as I am concerned, international sporting occasions cann’t act as a peace pigeon according to the current relationship among countries.

Firstly, there are still lots of wars around the whole world, especially in the Middle East. Many people insist on that International sporting occasions can provide a communication platform for people with different opinions. Therefore, there may be less fight based on a whole understanding with each other. But if International sporting occasion works, why people still fight with each other in those areas? In my opinion, the main cause of the international tensions is fighting for useful resources, for example, oil. That’s the main reason why so many people are enrolled in war in the Middle East.



Secondly, countries which are in international tension often is not likely to take part in International Sporting occasions. Take ^ for example, ……(example 没有想出来)。 Moreover, the Olympic Games, which is the most magnificent International sporting occasions ceased for three times because of the three world wars. Therefore, I think International sporting occasions can not ease the tension among countries.

According to the above analysis, it is not hard for us to conclude that international sporting occasions can not worked as a method of easing international tension, although they can increase the understanding of the whole world.

第一次写作文，有点疑惑，雅思作文评分与内容有关吗，比如我这篇大作文，如果文章思路想法比较奇特，与考官的思路不同，但是表述正常，会不会扣分呢？？

angelwypUID: 2803734

我没觉得你思维奇特，我觉得你偏题了，而且逻辑不清晰。。。

bqianaUID: 193168

大作文是美式风格的，和雅思不太吻合。思路和考官不同没事，关键是逻辑

catirUID: 2438002

谢谢，我写到最后觉得好像不大对头，你能不能讲的清楚一些？那些方面比较偏题？
2# angelwyp

catirUID: 2438002

受托福影响太深了……，您觉得我应该看一些什么资料？方便我转向雅思写作呢？
3# bqiana

eweUID: 2891191

我觉得你的思路还是挺好的,就是没把问题写清楚....

可以写...我不觉得体育运动会有什么帮助,因为以下两方面原因...

第一,因为战争爆发的根源不是什么压抑太久的爱国主义热情,而是因为对稀缺资源的争夺...然后BALBALBAL

第二, 那些老被打的国家对参加国际体育会也没什么兴趣... 比如什么阿富汗拉,伊拉克拉....你有几次在奥林匹克运动会里听到这些国家的名字? 人家自己国家乱成一团那,还参加各P运动会阿.....

所以说...其实运动会也没什么帮助...

bqianaUID: 193168

受托福影响太深了……，您觉得我应该看一些什么资料？方便我转向雅思写作呢？
3# bqiana
catir 发表于 2010-8-27 16:23

看剑桥雅思567后面的范文即可

catirUID: 2438002

thx very Much
7# bqiana

catirUID: 2438002

wonderful。 thank you
6# ewe