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TOPIC: ARGUMENT51 - The following appeared in a medical newsletter.
"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."
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1 study 不严谨
2 抗生素与二次感染不成立
3 普及抗生素疗法不科学

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The author's conclusion would be reasonable if antibiotics could successfully relieve patients who are suffering from severe muscle pain by preventing secondary infection. However, the study mentioned by the author is not rigrous enough and the author is too hasty in arriving at the conclusion that all those patients should take antibiotics before considering the undesirable side effects of doing so.
Firstly, these two groups of people are not excellent experimental groups and control groups. The odds are that Dr. Newland is better than general physician in curing muscle pain since the former specializes in sports medicine. Perhaps it is Dr. Newland's experience other than antibiotics that helped to reduce the patients' recuperation time. Moreover, maybe patients in the first group were in better physical conditions and suffered from less severe muscle pain, and were thus bound to recover sooner. Either of the two likelihoods may cause the deviation of the recuperation time. Besides, the possibility that the procedure of choosing patients is limited in certain ways could not be excluded. Perhaps they are all from the same age group or same region, so that are not representative of patients nationwide or worldwide. In sum, it is far from enough to announce that the result of the study is trustworthy.
Secondly, even if antibiotics do hasten the healing process, the hypothesis is still not proved. Admittedly, doctors often prescribe antibiotics for infections. However, it is impossible to say antibiotics have no other functions. Perhaps, the use of antibiotics could help certain drugs work better. Since we cannot eliminate this possibility, the hypothesis remains unproved.
Finally, the author’s advice that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain should take antibiotics as part of their treatments shows his lack of general medical knowledge. It can be fatal to prescribe antibiotics to people who are allergic to them.
Besides, for patients who can recover muscle pain with the help of only other common drugs, there is no need take antibiotics, since taking antibiotics may bring about several undesirable side effects.
We must be very careful when recommending patients to use certain drugs. However, the author fails to do so. He has to use the final results of a mature study other than these preliminary results of a limited study to show the efficacy of antibiotics. Besides, he ought to discover the antibiotics’ mechanism for curing muscle pain, so that we could decide whether and how much patients should take antibiotics.

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1 开头虽然没有硬去restate但是也依然没说什么实质性的东西。。。
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