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screwUID: 135321

Issue19:（孙远书题号）
“Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however, unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem.”


Syllabus ：
1.        首段说明背景，引出问题，并表示自己的立场。
Position: 学者应追求自我兴趣，但要以不危害社会为前提。
2.        提出没有一个完美的标准来审判研究的价值性来质疑题目的”contribution”，另说明并举例each study 都拥有他的价值，而且这些价值都会发生作用，只是可能是从不同的角度、方法是至在不同的时间发挥作用。以Copernicus 及 Viagra 为例。
3.        虽是仅仅追求个人的目标，但仍可以对社会造成重大的影响。以Einstein及Watt为例。
4.        说明专家追求自身兴趣的同时，靠考虑他的兴趣及研究成果是否危及社会，以复制人科技为例。
5.        结论（summarize各段重点）


（正文)
In a society that is oriented toward utilitarian, all things and people are estimated and judged whether they can benefit the society. It, therefore, raises a public debate over the issue of whether or not the scholars should spend their time in the study that will provide contribution to the society. Some people claim that the researchers should devote to develop something that avails the society progress. Others argue that people have the right to pursue what they are interested. In my view, scholars and researchers should dedicate to achieve the goals that they enthusiastically seek for in their own life; of course, their goals should not be to jeopardize the society.（我开头的方式会不会有些冗长跟无趣呢？困扰…）

People believing that study must elevate the advances in society might consider the practicably of study. The assertion sounds plausible, but it raises a question --how to definitely assess the value of a study. There is, in fact, no criterion to examine the contribution that the study provides. For example, Copernicus, Polish astronomer, addressed the theory that the earth revolved around the sun in fifteen century, which were regarded as a heretic study as well as a ridiculer one by his contemporary scholars. People do not respect his research at that time. However, in these days, no one can deny the essential contribution of the Copernicus’ theory that h has been the foundation of the modern astronomy. For another example, Viagra was the medicine for heart disease but it could not reach its original anticipation, however in an incidental situation, its side effect unexpectedly yields unusually brilliant results in another medical treatment.（这里原本是想举有关社会学的例子，来和自然科学相互呼应，但实在想不到，而Viagra只好上来替补了，只是觉得怪怪的，不知道高手们有没有怎样的看法？） Hence, it is obvious that there is no perfect standard to evaluate the contribution of study and in fact, each research can be the fertilizer to nourish the society only just with different ways, angles or even in the different time.

Besides, there is ample evidence that many astonishingly great achievements are brought because of certain professionals who merely pursue their genuine dreams. Einstein Albert who simply put his effort in the theoretical physics eventually promoted the advances in natural science. Watt James who just interested in the mechanism of the steam engine eventually propelled the Industrial Revolution in the eighteen century. In fact, the curiosity is an important driving force for the scholars doing research. Because of it, the scholars persist with their work and devote to accomplish their destinations, which profits the development of whole society.

Although, people have the right to pursue their individual interests, however, the prerequisite is that their interests or goals should not imperil other people or the society. Try to image that what will happened if the researchers just work for their self-serving desires. For instance, the scientists regardless of the value system illegally clone the human being, and even make for money. It will be a disaster for the society. The scholars and researchers are the people who specialize in some professional fields and therefore their work and study always strongly impact the society, so they should take responsibility on the effect resulting from their study.

In conclusion, I agree with that we should allow the scholars and researchers freedom to carry out their individual interests and destines, because it is impetus to help the society progress. However, while the scholars and researchers dedicate their dreams, they should discreetly consider the effect causing by their work to the society. Meanwhile, the scholars and researchers whose works bring the positive influence for the society will be respected. (579)


谢谢各位大侠的指正及建议….^_^

KaliUID: 110664

oriented toward utilitarian => oriented toward utilitarianism
right to pursue what they are interested. => right to pursue what they are interested in
their own life => their own lives
of course, their goals should not be to jeopardize the society => given that their pursuits do not harm the society as a whole
elevate the advances in society ---- ??
practicably of study => practicability of study
no criterion to examine = no definite criterion to evaluate
a ridiculer one => a ridiculous one
no one can deny the essential contribution of the Copernicus’ theory that h has been the foundation of the modern astronomy => no one can deny that Copernicus's theory has been a part of modern astronomy's foundation
Viagra was the medicine => Viagra was a medicine
could not reach its original anticipation => could not effectively fulfill its original expectations
however in an incidental situation, => however, by sheer incident,
contribution of study = contribution of individual works
each research can be the fertilizer to nourish the society only just with different ways, angles or even in the different time.  ---- Americans don't usually use the "fertilizer" simile

Sorry I only finished half, but I am out of time. Even though it may seem that I pointed out a lot of grammar mistakes, be assured that they are small and will not affect the essay's overall readabiliy.

However, you might want to reconsider Viagra's example. Also, it might be nice to consider the question from "the right of the individual" angle----I.E., even if a research is worthless by all means, if it makes the individual happy, SO WHAT? Something along those lines.

PS: Albert Einstein, not Einstein Albert. :P

paisleyUID: 64183

呵呵，kali出手,我们就不用说什么咯.

谢谢kali.希望以后经常过来看看:)

KaliUID: 110664

哪里哪里，我自己也是新手，前天还在跟WINGSHOCKER抱怨作文太麻烦呢。 请大家多
多指教。:)

paisleyUID: 64183

哈哈，那我还是一样的建议哦！精华区有好东西，kali你不妨去看看。可能很多对你来说没用，不过宝贝肯定还是有的：）

对了，昨天有个批评我们的帖子，里面说的情况，如果你发现我们的确存在，别客气，尽管提出来吧。：） 我们赶快改咯

KaliUID: 110664

好，我EXCEL做完就去挖宝咯~~虽然还是很不明白整个过程的结构
(前天还在问WINGSHOCKER蓝宝书是什么，FT)

这个假期因为有强化外语课又要做INDEPENDENT RESEARCH，所以虽然很想静下来复
习GRE也不大可能。 作文版的事情，我尽力而为吧。:)

tomatoeggsUID: 82073

真的谢谢kali啦！

screwUID: 135321

谢谢kali的指正，真没想到我的文法错误百出啊….惭愧
下去努力钻研，感谢….

screwUID: 135321

Syllabus ：
1.        首段说明背景，引出问题，并表示自己的立场。
Position: 学者应追求自我兴趣，但要以不危害社会为前提。
2.        提出没有一个完美的标准来审判研究的价值性来质疑题目的”contribution”，另说明并举例each study 都拥有他的价值，而且这些价值都会发生作用，只是可能是从不同的角度、方法是至在不同的时间发挥作用。以Copernicus 及 Viagra 为例。
3.        虽是仅仅追求个人的目标，但仍可以对社会造成重大的影响。以Einstein及Watt为例。
4.        说明专家追求自身兴趣的同时，靠考虑他的兴趣及研究成果是否危及社会，以复制人科技为例。
5.        结论（summarize各段重点）

Issue19:（孙远书题号）
“Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however, unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem.”

In a society that is oriented toward utilitarianism, all things and people are estimated and judged whether they can benefit the society. It, therefore, raises a public debate over the issue of whether or not the scholars should spend their time in the study that will provide contribution to the society. Some people claim that the researchers should devote to develop something that avails the society progress. Others argue that people have the right to pursue what they are interested in. In my view, scholars and researchers should dedicate to achieve the goals that they enthusiastically seek for in their own lives; of course, given that their pursuits do not harm the society as a whole.

People believing that study must elevate the development of society might consider the practicability of study. The assertion sounds plausible, but it raises a question --how to definitely assess the value of a study. There is, in fact, no definite criterion to examine the contribution that the study provides. For example, Copernicus, Polish astronomer, addressed the theory that the earth revolved around the sun in fifteen century, which were regarded as a heretic study as well as a ridiculous one by his contemporary scholars. People do not respect his research at that time. However, in these days, no one can deny that Copernicus’ theory has been a part of modern astronomy’s foundation. For another example, Viagra was a medicine for heart disease but it could not effectively fulfill its original expectations, however, by sheer incident; its side effect unexpectedly yields unusually brilliant results in another medical treatment. Hence, it is obvious that there is no perfect standard to evaluate the contribution of individual works and in fact, each research could be valuable for assisting the development of society only just with different ways, angles or even in the different time. （想请问各位高手，有没有那个学者他的研究在他的领域上不算成功，但却在其它的领域上大放异彩？这个例子是用来说明 ”研究也有可能在不同的角度或方法来影响社会的 ”，我实在想不出来，只想到了Viagra，可这例子放在这有些怪怪的）

Besides, there is ample evidence that many stunningly great achievements are brought because of certain professionals who might merely pursue their genuine dreams. Albert Einstein who simply put his effort in the theoretical physics eventually promoted the advances in natural science. Watt James who just interested in the mechanism of the steam engine eventually propelled the Industrial Revolution in the eighteen century. As the matter of fact, the curiosity is an important driving force for the scholars doing research. Because of it, the scholars persist with their work and devote to accomplish their destinations, which profits the development of whole society.

Although, people have the right to pursue their individual interests, however, the prerequisite is that their interests or goals should not imperil other people or the society. Try to image that what will happened if the researchers just work for their self-serving desires. For instance, the scientists regardless of the value system illegally duplicate the human being, and even make for money. It will be a disaster for the society. Because the scholars and researchers are the people who specialize in some professional fields and hence their work or study always strongly impacts the society, they should take responsibility on the effect resulting from their research.

In conclusion, I agree that we should allow the scholars and researchers freedom to carry out their individual interests and destines, because it is impetus to help the society progress. However, while the scholars and researchers dedicate their dreams, they should discreetly consider the effect causing by their work. Meanwhile, the scholars and researchers whose works bring the positive influence for the society will be respected.

经过了kali姐的指导，小弟再将文post上来，还望大家指正，感激不尽….^_^

gteryyUID: 114434

没有那个学者他的研究在他的领域上不算成功，但却在其它的领域上大放异彩？这个例子是用来说明 ”研究也有可能在不同的角度或方法来影响社会的 ”，

这样的人太多了。学术界有很多很讽刺的现象就是一个学者搞的是某一方面，结果却意外地因为另一方面的成功而为人们所记住。暂时我倒是想不起来了。。。不好意思。

paisleyUID: 64183

余秋雨啊. 这个例子典型。他的本行是戏剧, 但是他更著名的是他的历史散文.虽然我挺讨厌他的，但是这个例子倒很典型 .  不过screw不知道你有没有听说过他. 可能你对大陆的文人不太了解.

还有就是许多古代的皇帝了。正经国事不管, 书法\音乐\绘画\文学却精通的。这样的例子好多，比如南宋的赵拮,还有南唐后主李煜. 不过这几个例子有点偏了。可能用不上.

还有就是COCA COLA的产生，也是一个药剂师无意之中配出来的。(这个好象也有点偏)

gteryyUID: 114434

paisley，HAND & HUG，我也讨厌他，尽写些我看不懂的玩意儿，附庸风雅！

screwUID: 135321

呵呵…..谢谢paisley及gteryy的意见….^^
余秋雨…是文化苦旅的作者吗…呵…原来他是学戏剧的，我以为他就写散文..的确是好例子啊
不过皇帝的例子也挺好，李后主…问君能有几多愁，恰似一江春水向东流，唉….可怜的皇帝
可乐的idea我也想过，不过那时也觉得怪怪的…呵…好喝的感冒药水
倒是HAND & HUG是谁呀…?

paisleyUID: 64183

哈哈，hand 表示“支持你！”  hug表示“我来拥抱你！”

screw你要是有兴趣就多做大陆大学生的论坛上泡泡，还有很多鲜活的语言呢：）