issue130 处女作 作文 一直很差 希望大家帮助 尽量修改啊

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已经大三了 很久都没有写过作文了 但是深知自己的作文水平其实是很差的 应为四六级的作文分数就是一般 今天第一天动手写作文  就感觉写了很久很久 举步维艰 不过还是挣扎着写了出来 希望大家给予我帮助啊 这人不太会表达 宗旨大恩不言谢了~~

According to the statement, the arguer seems put children's socialization at the first place, while i hold the different idea, productivity is the determined elements of the society's destiny. Further, i think we know what should be done to build a better society, rather than to be absolutely ignorant of everything.

Socialization is a special process that one take actions to make himself in accordance with the social standards, learn the life skills so as to adapt to the group life. The famous Austrain psychoanalyst Sigmund Freud ever said :"socialization is one master how to control one's inherent impulse, that is 'keep the beast in the cage'!" For instance, the Wolf-cub is the typical
consequence of no socialization.

How children are socialized is the basic foundation of
social interaction, not the decisive force of the destiny of the society .Instead, the productivity. plays a more important
role. In the light with the Karl Max's ownership theory ,the determined element of the development counts to productivity which is the
most energetic and revolutionary in the relation of production. Although human beings dominant the productivity by modifying the mode of production .Provided that a socialized man can get along well with others, but he
sits on his laurels, to be content with things as they are, lack the innovation-mind, I don't there is any chance to advance for his country.

Notwithstanding some problems exists in current education system ,we can't deny the achievement we get in the society. Different period have different definition of the better society. In primitive society, a better society means more food ,while people may think
do without nobles' oppression is the biggest happiness in Feudal Age. When comes to contemporary society ,we would ask for perfect social security system, wholesome law system and
the harmony between the human and nature .If we don't know how to bring out a desirable environment, how can we walk out of the primitive cave and into the information and technology age?

In summary, the higher productivity determines the progress of a society, rather than the socialized children .The socialization is the decisive fact in the social relationship. What's more ,the quality of the producer depend on education, so we should always on the way of searching the better way to cultivate more talent people so that we can effort halved, result doubled.