亲们帮我改改918的机经作文嘛~谢谢了

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:) 平时基本上都没咋练作文，前些天机经出来，就照到上面的题目写了一个。。。

好难得把它写完。。。战友们帮忙看看下，有没有什么语法错误什么的哈，结构正确不。。欢迎狠批！~~~


topic：playing sports teaches people lessons about life

During our daily life, so many things are worth considering carefully. As what has been come up with, when you face up the problem has been brought into the focus that whether playing sports teaches people lessons about life. What is your choice and what is your opinion? Some hold the view that playing sports are able to make people understand the life; however, the others do not think so. With all aspects considered carefully, I agree that the sports could teach a person more things than we image.

There is no denying that playing sports contributes directly to a person’s fitness. In latest surveys show that quite a few people have unpleasant associations with playing sports. They prefer to playing computer games and watching TV at home. In the view of the seriousness of this problem, many experts point out that taking exercise is closely related to health. Generally speaking, a proper physical exercise dose not occupy us too much time. For instance, in my free time, I would go to the public swimming pool. I always believe that swimming is a relaxed sport for me to keep me fit and get me lots of rest. On the other hand, some people who lead a healthy lifestyle such as playing sports in regular time will be less likely to get sick, and will live longer. If we all like those people, it seems clear that we would have a chance to improve the quality of life and enjoy life better.

Another reason can be seen by every person is that playing sports allows us to develop our interpersonal skills and the ability to socialize well with others. Many popular sports involve a group of people, ranging from two people to twenty people working together as a team. In these situations, it is always of utmost importance to be a team player. For example, Football and basketball both encourage a person to treat others with respect. This is known as having good sportsmanship. Of course respecting others is a social skill that we all must learn if we are to succeed in life. Certainly, playing sports is full of challenges and obstacles that a team must overcome together.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that playing sports teaches us how to work well with others, how to have a fun in daily life and it enable us healthy. Maybe playing sports itself is an important lesson of life.

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playing sports teaches people MORE lessons about life
貌似少了一个词~这样会不会很不一样？？

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我觉得差不多喃。。。 2# yueruying