issue96

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96"Although, critics who write about the arts tend to deny the existence of any objective standards for evaluating works of art, they have a responsibility to establish standards by which works of art can be judged."  
When reading newspaper, you may find some evaluation from critics about a film, a picture and so on. Some people, like me, think nothing of those criticize, for there are often inaccuracy in what critics write. Thus the speaker proposes that critics should establish a standards for evaluating the works of art, which I disagree. It is impossible for the quality of the standards demanding. And It is as well unnecessary since there already exists one—whether the mass accept the artpiece or not. (84)
  Rules are rigid, while art can be expressed by a variety of ways. Following these standards probably close doors to the original form or content of art, as well as regard a conventional one a model of classical art, for the establishment of new standards is sure to after careful study of the past evaluation. And the latest art form or art content may be excluded. If one evaluate the literary works of clear structure and a description according to time, he/she can hardly think “Wuthering Heights” a charming novel, for the simple reason that instead of describing from past to present , the author took a form of narration from present to the past.(114)
Critics in different time have various opinions about the same piece of art. The rules set up today probably need adjusting, and even reestablishing. The instability of the standards makes them useless. Take  “Wuthering Heights” for example. When this novel came about, it received no understanding from contemporary critics, even the author’s sister, another famous writer, feel sorry for this work. However, several years later, this novel became one of the best novels in literary history. William Somerset Maugham, a well-known critic sung highly for this work. If the former critics set up the standards, the latter break it, what meaning do they exist?(104)
In addition, critics living in the same period still show different views about the same works of art, which means the standards they establish is possibly a compromise considering all the ideas. While some emphasize the careful structure of a picture, others may find its rigidity. Although this problem can be easily solved by agreeing on what the majority hold, we should not neglect the fact that “Truths are always held by the minority”. And what happens if critics on both sides are one of six and half of a dozen? Too narrow a standard means rigidity, critics following that rule may think wrongly of the works, and even give the opposite evaluation of what it really deserves. Too broad a rule means ambiguity, and loses its function to judge: such as “the masterpiece should be beautiful”, it does nothing to the judgement but only a nonsense.(147)
However, when the mass take the responsibility to choose their favorite, it is another case. Admittedly, not all of them have enough knowledge about art, but most of them have the value of beauty. In some sense, they are critics each, for they have their own opinions and judgement of the works of art. And they willingly to preserve and spread what they appreciate, and discard what they dislike. In summary, if the artpiece reserved and widely-spread, it is a classical one; if it is discarded or even prohibited for justifying reasons, it is a failure.(96,all547)

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这个题目好难。我也没什么想法：（ 说得不一定对啊。




96"Although, critics who write about the arts tend to deny the existence of any objective standards for evaluating works of art, they have a responsibility to establish standards by which works of art can be judged."

When reading newspaper, you may find some evaluation from critics about a film, a picture and so on. Some people, like me, think nothing of those criticize（该处应用名词）, for there are often inaccuracy in what critics write. Thus the speaker proposes that critics should establish a standards for evaluating the works of art, which I disagree. It is impossible for the quality of the standards demanding（这句话费解。不明白）. And It is as well unnecessary since there already exists one—whether the mass accept the artpiece or not. (84) （我觉得这个标准如果改说the taste of the grass-root people可能更明白些。）

Rules are rigid（什么rules最好说明一下）, while art can be expressed by a variety of ways. Following these standards probably close(少s) doors to the original form or content of art, as well as regard a conventional one a model of classical art, for the establishment of new standards is sure to after（after不能做动词啊） careful study of the past evaluation. And the latest art form or art content may be excluded（如果你认为设立了一个标准，就使得后来者难以有创新，那latest一词就不太妥当，因为已经暗示了“新”的意思了）. If one evaluate（少s） the literary works of clear structure and a description according to time, he/she can hardly think “Wuthering Heights” a charming novel, for the simple reason that instead of describing from past to present , the author took a form of narration from present to the past.(114)
我觉得这段有点偏了。题目要讨论的是，“欣赏（evaluate）艺术”这一过程，这一行为是否存在特定的标准，而不是艺术本身是否有特定的标准。所以我觉得你讲的内容和形式的问题，更多的像是在讲艺术，而不是欣赏艺术、批评艺术这一活动。当然这个还可以再探讨，可能两者本来就很难区分。

Critics in different time have various opinions about the same piece of art. The rules set up today probably need adjusting, and even reestablishing（应该再来个时间名词，跟today表示对比啊）. The instability of the standards makes them useless. Take “Wuthering Heights” for example. When this novel came about, it received no understanding from contemporary critics, even the author’s sister, another famous writer, feel（少s） sorry for this work. However, several years later, this novel became one of the best novels in literary history. William Somerset Maugham, a well-known critic sung highly for this work. If the former critics set up the standards, the latter break it, what meaning do they exist?(104)
这段是不是在说，这个标准没用，因为经常变来变去。可是这不是和你第一段最后一句矛盾了吗？你认为的确存在的啊。
另外，道德标准也经常变来变去。古代的三从四德，现在不是早变成糟粕了。可是你不会否认道德的重要性吧？

In addition, critics living in the same period still show different views about the same works of art, which means the standards they establish is possibly a compromise considering all the ideas. While some emphasize the careful structure of a picture, others may find its rigidity. Although this problem can be easily solved by agreeing（用agreement好了） on what the majority hold, we should not neglect the fact that “Truths are always held by the minority”. And what happens if critics on both sides are one of six and half of a dozen? Too narrow a standard means rigidity, critics following that rule may think wrongly of the works, and even give the opposite evaluation of what it really deserves. Too broad a rule means ambiguity, and loses its function to judge: such as “the masterpiece should be beautiful”, it does nothing to the judgement（拼错拉。没有e） but only a nonsense.(147)

However, when the mass take the responsibility to choose their favorite, it is another case. Admittedly, not all of them have enough knowledge about art, but most of them have the value of beauty（taste of beauty比较好）. In some sense, they are critics each（应说everyone of them is a critic）, for they have their own opinions and judgement of the works of art. And they willingly to preserve and spread what they appreciate, and discard what they dislike. In summary, if the artpiece reserved and widely-spread, it is a classical one; if it is discarded or even prohibited for justifying reasons, it is a failure.(96,all547)
这段好象说理弱了点。从你第一段来看，这是你的中心论点,但是到最后才来说，前面铺垫得太久了，这个篇幅也稍微少了点. 而且，你上文认为即便是专家,也有不同的意见。那么人民大众的观点也有不同啊。这个还没有很好的解释.



你语言上的问题，
1．        许多没有冠词的名词，一般都要用复数来处理。你文中这样的很少。最好改一改哦。
2．        有些不该用and或从句连接的地方都连起来了，感觉理解吃来很吃力。还是分开说比较好
3．        有些词语你的掌握程度还不够，总觉得不够准确，其实有更好的词可以代替的。要靠自己想一想，才能清楚你的意思。但是批卷老师不一定有这个耐心啊。
4．        总之我觉得这篇文章我不是很看的懂。不知道是你表达的不够，还是我的问题（今天我有点晕，哈哈）。另外还有些细小的语法错误。


立意上，我觉得你说人民大众的选择，就是鉴赏艺术品的标准。这个我不同意。大众喜欢的不乏好的东西，张爱玲的小说在那时也卖得很好，而国外一些受过万众热爱的歌曲也已经成为经典.但是更多时候, 大众喜好的东西, 只是流行而已，往往流于庸俗. 历朝历代流行过的艺术品非常多，但到今天, 所剩无几. 而今天流行的TITANIC, 还珠咯咯, 流星花园, 再过十年，五十年，还有谁记得?

另外，推荐你去看张承志写的一篇评论。是讲”什么才是好的艺术”. 那里面很多观点可以值得借鉴.
我提供几个论点。也许对你有用. 一，评判好的艺术，可以用”它是否真实”; 二,评判好的艺术，可以用”它是否具备震撼人心的伟大力量”, 三,评判好的艺术，可以用”它是否具备未来感”,指向未来.等等。这些都是有人提出过的。当然肯定都有各自的偏颇.不过GRE作文讲究自圆其说, 所以你上面那个论点，如果能说的圆,也可以用啊.

happyman2000UID: 136936

96"Although, critics who write about the arts tend to deny the existence of any objective standards for evaluating works of art, they have a responsibility to establish standards by which works of art can be judged."

When reading newspaper（s）, you(one) may find some evaluation from critics about a film, a picture and so on. Some people, like me, think nothing of those criticize, for there are often inaccuracy in what critics write. Thus the speaker proposes that critics should establish a standards for evaluating the works of art, which I disagree.(这句话读者有些别扭！) It is impossible for the quality of the standards demanding. And It is as well unnecessary since there already exists one—whether the mass accept the artpiece or not. (84) （我觉得这段意思表达的不是太清楚）
Rules are rigid, while art can be expressed by a variety of ways. Following these standards probably close（s） doors to the original form or content of art, as well as regard a conventional one a model of classical art, for the establishment of new standards is sure to after careful study of the past evaluation.(这句话是否有问题，仔细检查一下!) And the latest art form or art(去掉) content may be excluded. If one evaluate(s) the literary works of clear structure and a description according to time, he/she can hardly think “Wuthering Heights” a charming novel, for the simple reason that instead of describing from past to present , the author took a form of narration from present to the past.(114) 我觉得这个例子说服力不强，你怎么知道艺术评价在形式上设了这么一条标准？不过，理由还是挺好的，艺术本来就是捉摸不定的东西，设立标准可能扼杀艺术的本质。你可以谈谈僵化的标准对艺术发展的负面作用。

Critics in different time have various opinions about the same piece of art. The rules set up today probably need adjusting, and even reestablishing. The instability of the standards makes them useless. Take “Wuthering Heights” for example. When this novel came about, it received no understanding from contemporary critics, even the author’s sister, another famous writer, feel sorry for this work. However, several years later, this novel became one of the best novels in literary history. William Somerset Maugham, a well-known critic sung highly for this work. If the former critics set up the standards, the latter break it, what meaning do they exist(have)?(104)
这一段very cogent，例子也挺好的！随着时间的推移，以前的金玉良言也可能变成糟粕！

In addition, critics living in the same period still show different views about the same works of art, which means the standards they establish is possibly a compromise considering all the ideas. While some emphasize the careful structure of a picture, others may find its rigidity. Although this problem can be easily solved by agreeing on what the majority hold, we should not neglect the fact that “Truths are always held by the minority”. And what happens if critics on both sides are one of six and half of a dozen? Too narrow a standard means rigidity, critics following that rule may think wrongly of the works, and even give the opposite evaluation of what it really deserves. Too broad a rule means ambiguity, and loses its function to judge: such as “the masterpiece should be beautiful”, it does nothing to the judgment but only a nonsense.(147) （改为to the judgment, it means nothing but a nonsense! ）
主要谈设立艺术评价标准的困难性，也很cogent。不过，是否可以谈谈权威在设立标准时的负面作用。你只是讲大家争论不休，而没有注意很多情况下会有个一言九鼎的人。

However, when the mass take(s) the responsibility to choose their favorite, it is another case. Admittedly, not all of them have enough knowledge about art, but most of them have the value of beauty. In some sense, they are critics each, for they have their own opinions and judgement of the works of art. And they willingly to preserve and spread what they appreciate, and discard what they dislike. In summary, if the artpiece reserved and widely-spread, it is a classical one; if it is discarded or even prohibited for justifying reasons, it is a failure.(96,all547你这段和前面有什么关系？我看不出来。

总体上，除了开头和结尾以外，这篇文章写得不错。基本上把设立艺术评价标准的主要负面作用都指出来了，比较令人信服。

caichongbaobaoUID: 136935

多谢两位！我会改正的：）