急!!麻烦各位大虾帮忙修改下这篇作文!!

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我再隔一个月就要考试了,最近正在写作文,这是其中一篇.
我写完之后觉得还是需要修改一下,但是不清楚要怎么改了....
麻烦各位指点一下!再此谢过!!!
改词换句都可以,我想把文章结构改的再好一些,其中的不足之处大家也可以明确指出!

Topic: It has been said,”Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

The knowledge is accumulation of our forerunners’ experience. We can choose to learn them from books, and then put them into practice. The other choice is to suffer from life experience and make a summary of our essence. In my opinion, the method “Know it, and test it” is better than “Do it, and realized”.
Knowledge gained from experience should summarize from many similar situations, but the question is, not all the things has a chance to repeat, such as life and health. A typical example is heat an egg with its curst using microwaves. We won’t do it if we have read the instruction and knows that it will lead to a explosion like a bomb. However, if we don’t know this principle and put the egg into the microwave directly, the results are not only cost more money, but also place ourselves in danger. Is it worth to suffer such a horrible class and get a philosophy of life but exchanges with our health? Absolutely the answer is no. Most of people will tend to make a presentation before performing a plan, and the themes of books will provide a board range of knowledge associate with what we want to do. In most major events, books are more valuable than individual experience.
Moreover, we can not gain all the knowledge in our life from experience, the fact is, most of knowledge we knows comes from books or the elder generations. Maybe “not everything that is learned is contained in books”, but we can not deny that books broaden our horizon, cultivate our minds, promote our creativity. From some travel notes, we could know the foreign culture and customs even though we are not traveling aboard. Through the newspapers and magazines, we know current affairs and fashionable things, even though we lived in lonely island. After read about history materials or some science fictions, the imagination of the past and future will picturesque in our mind. Yet these are not we can experienced.
In a conclusion, knowledge gained from books is more important than it from experience. Yet books may have give us some wrong information, and sometimes it is unreliable, may be misprinted, or even deliberately distorted, but we will catch up our own ideas as long as we read enough books.
改完之后麻烦发我邮箱里,谢谢啦!!
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或者就改在这里也可以,麻烦各位了!!

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Yet books may have give us some wrong information------>
Yet some information from books are wrong