issue13 Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer

xxxyingUID：138077

今天写的:
People’s current languages have evolved for a long time, and changed greatly. With the need of communication between nations, people has preferred to use language which are used by majority. And many lesser-known language are facing the extinction fate. It would be none of us hope to see. So some people propose the government should act to prevent such languages from extinction. In my opinion, preventing such language from extinction is of cause necessary, but the more important things is what is the proper attitude to such language and how to protect them is more essential and in time.

Every different languages was formed from generations. It represents much virtues of its nation. It was the (结晶)elite of generations people’s wisdom. It (蕴含)contained many beautiful and magic history stories. For any age of people to abolish their mother language, it would be a tragedy. But does that mean its afterwards must hold it forever, and no considering of other language? Of cause it is not in such case.

In fact inspecting the development of a language, we find none any language hasn’t experienced a long evolve, abolish and emigrating history. Many western language comes from Ancient Grace, Latin language. With they developing in different places, they have became various. And the original language has become history. With the time going on, many words and phrases have been obsolete. In China, the language changed greatly also. Before hundreds years, people’s language must have a unique rhythm, which we call it (之乎者也)“Zhi Hu Zhi Ye”. But with the more communication with Western countries, we found it was very not convenient. With ages of amelioration, now form the current simplist Chinese language. And now as the science, Internet are developing, more new words have invented.

Though the change, obsolete of language are (不可避免) inevitable. The elite and the wisdom which expressed of the ancestral language should be (了解)known by afterwards. In China there are numbers of beautiful archaic poems and prose. Some of them describe the magic nature, some inspired courage, and some give us a picture of that society. All these literature works are great treasure of their offspring. When the current teenage study the modern cyber science, economy, or science technology, they should been taught the treasure heritage.

And falling all the preserving extinction language’s job on the common citizen is unfair and impracticable. After all now people have much information to remember, and much technology to grasp. Preserving the obsolete language is a large and longtime work. It must need enough human source and funds. So I plan the government should set apart monetary and institution for people working together and studying the language, just as the archaeology, history.

xxxyingUID：138077

这是几个月前写的,我都搞不清那个好一些了，是进步，退步？
The generation of human language is an important inspection during the history of human evolution. With the language, people can communicate with each other conveniently, people can understand with each others freely.
With the human society development, the communications between different places, and different nations are more and more often. No matter in economic or in scientific fields, every nation are trying to open their boundary and strength the dialog with other nations. So many people begin to flow to the more use-often language. Those minority language is used lesser and lesser.

But does that mean the government, could do nothing to those lesser-know language, and left them emerge and perish of itself? When a citizen make a choice, he may mainly stand on his own benefit, but for a government, the government should stand from a higher position to make any decision, and should consider wider and more long-term.

First any language, no matter it is minority or majority, it is the elite of a nation. It contains the spirit and the wisdom of that nation. Though the world became more and more open, there are still so many different languages. Every people has a great feeling with his mother language, and in many times, other language can not express their emotions clearly.

Second understanding a nation’s language maybe is very useful to its history and culture exploring study. In ancient ages, their legends and their livings were always written down or recounted down from years to years. Through these legends and documents, historians can picture ancient people’s living and know what had happened during ancient days.

And another factor, sometimes, minority language or being annihilating has great importance to modern use. Such as, in the World War Two, American using the Indian Language in the war as the military cipher, and successfully avoiding being deciphered.

Destroy a thing is easier than found a thing. If a language extinct, it would be impossible to relive it. When facing a such great treasures, support or nonsupport is really should be carefully considered.

celinaUID：137391

People’s current languages have evolved for a long time, and changed greatly. With the need of communication between nations, people has (People是集合名词，谓语动词应该是复数)preferred to use language which are used by majority. And many lesser-known language are (language是单数，谓语不应是复数)facing the extinction fate. It would be none of us hope to see. So some people propose the government should act to prevent such languages from extinction. In my opinion, preventing such language from extinction is of cause necessary, but the more important things is what is the proper attitude to such language and how to protect them is more essential and in time(timely).

Every different languages(Every修饰的应该是单数) was formed from generations(by one generation handing down another会不会好一点). It represents much virtues of its nation(是generation还是nation呢？). It was the elite of generations people’s (generations’)wisdom. It contained(这几个并列句的时态不一致) many beautiful and magic history stories. For any age of people to abolish their mother language, it would be a tragedy. But does that mean its afterwards(是adv.) must hold it forever, and no considering of other language? Of cause it is not in such case.

In fact inspecting the development of a language, we find none any language hasn’t experienced a long evolve, abolish and emigrating history. Many western language(Many修饰的应该是复数) comes from Ancient Grace, Latin language. With they developing in different places, they have became(become) various. And the original language has become history. With the time going on, many words and phrases have been obsolete. In China, the language changed greatly also. Before hundreds years, people’s language must have a unique rhythm, which we call it (之乎者也)“Zhi Hu Zhi Ye”. But with the more communication with Western countries, we found it was very not convenient(inconvenient). With ages of amelioration, now form the current simplist(simplified) Chinese language. And now as the science, (The)Internet are(is) developing, more new words have invented.

Though the change, obsolete of language are inevitable. The elite and the wisdom which expressed of the ancestral language should be known by afterwards. In China there are numbers of beautiful archaic poems and prose. Some of them describe the magic nature, some inspired courage, and some give us a picture of that society. All these literature works are great treasure of their offspring. When the current teenage study the modern cyber science, economy, or science technology, they should been taught the treasure heritage.
(花了太多的篇幅论述任何语言形式都会be changed, even be abolished.这一段看起来是说还是要保护。但是转折句意思并没有转过来，论述地也不充分)

And falling all the preserving extinction language’s job(the entire job to preserve lesser-knowen languages) on the common citizen is unfair and impracticable. After all now people have much information to remember, and much technology to grasp. Preserving the obsolete language is a large and longtime work. It must need enough human source and funds. So I plan the government should set apart monetary and institution for people working together and studying the language, just as the archaeology, history.
(这就是结论么？还是您限时完成的呢？)

贸然发表意见，说的不对之处请不要放在心上J希望大家能够共同进步

我个人认为文章的结构不是很好，这是最主要的问题，这使得论点（论点在文章中也没有明确提出）不能够有效地确立。文章用了太多的篇幅论述了起让步作用的观点，没有及时准确地转入主要论点，而且没有明确的结论。语言方面也有些欠缺。

xxxyingUID：138077

非常感谢 celina, 论点不明确，确实是我老大的毛病。
考虑问题总是想双方兼顾，结果故此不彼。