【1106G Snickers小组】11月12日 argument160 by彼年豆蔻

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1没有信息说明N的作用具体是什么，N的存在到底是有利于还是有害于记忆。如果是有害的，那么分解N反而会有利于记忆。
2rats有用不代表人也有用。也许还会带来意想不到的伤害。
3即使N对记忆是有利的，也没有证据证明对集中注意力有作用。
4没有证明记忆力与集中注意力与学习表现好之间有因果关系。记性好，注意力集中，但不善于思考成绩也不会好。
结论：提供更多信息：N的具体作用，对人进行试验的结果，学习成绩不好的原因调查。

The arguer states that there is a compound which can develop the students's school performance by restoring thier memory. To support this argument the arguer provides a clinical research on rats which had a satisfied result. And he also offer some reasons about the bad performance in school which he believe it can be solved by this compound. At first glance, this argument seems to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.

First of all,there is no information showing what is the special effect of neuropeptide chemicals works on memory and learning.The arguer doesn't provide any evidence to suggest whether the effect of neuropeptide is beneficial or harmful to memory.If it is harmful to human's memory and learning,then it's broken-down would instead be favored to increase the memory.

Second,the research which the arguer provides is not scientificall.Memory mechanisms of rats and human may be different.Although the compound works on rats,it doesn't necessarily mean it can store human's memory.Perhaps it may cause some other troubles.

Moreover,even assuming the neuropeptide chemicals can really impede the memory and thus rhe compound's function could help to restore it,we still cannot get the conclusion that it is good for concentrating.There is no evidence to show the relationship between memory and focusing attention.

Last but not least,the arguer fails to offer any information to show there is causal relationship between memory or concentrating attention
and school performance.In fact,there are also many other reasons to influence students' performance in school,such as whether they are diligent on their studying.If a student who is not good at thinking by himself,even though he has a good memory and is concentrating in class,his school performance might not be satisfied.

To sum up,this so weak argument that we cannot believe its conclusion.To make this argument more convincing,the arguer should provide more information about the nuropeptide chemicals' special effect,the result of clinical study on human beings and the arguer should also investigate all the reasons that affect students' perfomance in school.

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argument160 of 彼年豆蔻_修改建议_by_zhangwanying

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The arguer states that there is a compound which can develop the students's school performance by restoring thier memory. To support this argument the arguer provides a clinical research on rats which had a satisfied result. And he also offer some reasons about the bad performance in school which he believe it can be solved by this compound. At first glance, this argument seems to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons. （感觉有点长，能简洁些就更好了）
First of all,there is no information showing what is the special effect of neuropeptide chemicals works on memory and learning.The arguer doesn't provide any evidence to suggest whether the effect of neuropeptide is beneficial or harmful to memory.If it is harmful to human's memory and learning,then it's broken-down would instead be favored to increase the memory.

Second,the research which the arguer provides is not scientificall（好像没有这个词）.Memory mechanisms of rats and human may be different.Although the compound works on rats,it doesn't necessarily mean it can store human's memory.Perhaps it may cause some other troubles.

Moreover,even assuming the neuropeptide chemicals can really impede the memory and thus rhe compound's function could help to restore it,we still cannot get the conclusion that it is good for concentrating.There is no evidence to show the relationship between memory and focusing attention.（有待深入）

Last but not least,the arguer fails to offer any information to show there is causal relationship between memory or concentrating attention
and school performance.In fact,there are also many other reasons to influence students' performance in school,such as whether they are diligent on their studying.If a student who is not good at thinking by himself,even though he has a good memory and is concentrating in class,his school performance might not be satisfied.

To sum up,this so weak argument that we cannot believe its conclusion.To make this argument more convincing,the arguer should provide more information about the nuropeptide chemicals' special effect,the result of clinical study on human beings and the arguer should also investigate all the reasons that affect students' perfomance in school.
总体还好，只是觉得第一点有些单薄，或许可以在多增加一下攻击点