11-20homework issue 130

zcsdtcUID: 2875047

The statement claims that a child’s socialization determines the destiny of society, and we don’t raise our children in a proper way to bring about a better society. To some extent, the claim that society’s destiny hinges on how children are socialized, while appealing in some respects, is exaggerated. Meanwhile the claim that we have not learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, which seems reasonable and pertinent, is poorly supported by empirical experience.
Admittedly, a person who survivals in the world is required to communicate with other people whether he is familiar with or not, so socialization, in some degrees, is indispensable for us to survival. A person who isn’t able to chat with friends in suitable tone can lose friends easily. Similarly, a company’s employer, who has a poor capacity in negotiating with competes, is a dangerous factor for the company. A governor who has a poor relationship with the mass media often results from his terrible socialization.

However, a person who is only good at communication is not adequate for the society. He is only a bombastic person and don’t have any practical value for society’s progress. A person who is capable in almost everything is a huge treasure for any society, which is impossible to achieve. We, who can’t be perfect in every aspect, can pick up some aspects that we are capable to accomplish, such as music, physics, medicine, etc. If a person is good at composing, he will be an excellent musician who can bring melodious music, enlighten people’s mind, and clarify people’s heart, and contribute to the destiny of society. Doctors, who heal people’s body and spirit, give a tremendous contribution to the society. They sometimes may not be good communicators, but their contributions are undeniable and promote the development of society.

Turning to the second claim, if we define a “better” society as one characterized by greater tolerance of differing viewpoints and people who are different from ourselves, greater respect for individual rights, and greater cooperation across cultural and national boundaries, then the children of the most recent half-century are creating a better society.
Nevertheless, a better society, in my opinion, is a balance with compromise and competition. If the compromise is our priority for every decision, the society cannot arrive at such high level. To some extent, it is the combat that push the world forward. Copernicus did not compromise the theory which had existed for thousands years, and changed people’s thoughts totally. If he compromised the main society, we may live in dark until now. We should respect individual rights, but it will be dangerous without any limitation for people’s willingness, which will cause social problems and criminalities.
In conclusion, it is not enough for children’s education that they just study how to socialize. It is a complicated work for children’s education to teach them from different aspects. And now we have done a great job in children’s education, they will bring us a better society, I believe.

彼年豆蔻UID: 2791778

The statement claims that a child’s socialization determines the destiny of society, and we don’t raise our children in a proper way to bring about a better society. To some extent, the claim that society’s destiny hinges on how children are socialized, while appealing in some respects, is exaggerated. Meanwhile the claim that we have not learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society, which seems reasonable and pertinent, is poorly supported by empirical experience.
Admittedly, a person who survivals in the world is required to communicate with other people whether he is familiar with or not, so socialization, in some degrees, is indispensable for us to survival. A person who isn’t able to chat with friends in suitable tone can lose friends easily. Similarly, a company’s employer, who has a poor capacity in negotiating with competes, is a dangerous factor for the company. A governor who has a poor relationship with the mass media often results from his terrible socialization.

However, a person who is only good at communication is not adequate for the society. He is only a bombastic person and don’t have any practical value for society’s progress. （A person who is capable in almost everything is a huge treasure for any society, which is impossible to achieve. We, who can’t be perfect in every aspect, can pick up some aspects that we are capable to accomplish, such as music, physics, medicine, etc. If a person is good at composing, he will be an excellent musician who can bring melodious music, enlighten people’s mind, and clarify people’s heart, and contribute to the destiny of society. Doctors, who heal people’s body and spirit, give a tremendous contribution to the society. ）感觉这里有点偏题了，以论述这些人不善交流为主可能要好一些。 They sometimes may not be good communicators, but their contributions are undeniable and promote the development of society.

Turning to the second claim, if we define a “better” society as one characterized by greater tolerance of differing viewpoints and people who are different from ourselves, greater respect for individual rights, and greater cooperation across cultural and national boundaries, then the children of the most recent half-century are creating a better society.
Nevertheless, a better society, in my opinion, is a balance with between ？compromise and competition. （If the compromise is our priority for every decision, the society cannot arrive at such high level. To some extent, it is the combat that push the world forward. Copernicus did not compromise the theory which had existed for thousands years, and changed people’s thoughts totally. If he compromised the main society, we may live in dark until now. We should respect individual rights, but it will be dangerous without any limitation for people’s willingness, which will cause social problems and criminalities.
）偏了题，没有围绕这段的中心思想论述
In conclusion, it is not enough for children’s education that they just study how to socialize. It is a complicated work for children’s education to teach them from different aspects. And now we have done a great job in children’s education, they will bring us a better society, I believe.
感觉对第一句话的论述比较浅显，对socialization的论述也比较片面。