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argument97
The following appeared in a memo from the manager oftelevision station KICK.
"A nationwide survey reveals that a sizeable majority of men would like to see additional sports programs on television. After television station WACK increased its sports broadcasts, its share of the television audience in its viewing area almost doubled. To gain a larger audience share in our area, and thus increase company profits, KICK should also revise its broadcast schedule to include more sports coverage."

提纲：
1，调查类错误，全国范围内的调查不能体现KICK的情况，权威性，真实性值得怀疑，调查样本只有男性，不能代表全体人；
2，因果关系+错误类比，没有证据表明WACK地区电视观众份额的增加是由于体育类节目的增加；即使是，那也是wack地区的情况

，KICK采取相同措施不能保证同样的效果；
3，成本利润，有可能增加体育类节目的成本超过了增加的收入，从而导致利润下降。

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正文：
The manager recommends that to increase company profits KICK should increase its sports broadcasts. To support this recommendation, the manager cites a nationwide survey revealing that a sizeable majority of men would like to see additional sports programs on television. He also points out that the share of the television audience in the viewing area of the television station WACK doubled after WACK increased its sports broadcasts. This argument is flawed in several respects.

Firstly, the manager provides no evidence that the survey is statistically reliable. The number of the respondents does not assure the representativeness, suppose that those men who like sports tend to respond the survey, while women, children and other men who show less interest in sports may not take in part. Even if the result of the survey is reliable, the survey only reflects the average condition across the nation, it is not the local condition for station KICK, maybe local residents like music programs more than sports ones.

Secondly, There are many other assumptions for the increase of audience, for instance, the station added more entertaining programs which most people like. Even if doubling of audience is due to added sports programs of station WACK, no evidence shows that KICK would get the same result after adding sports programs, it is entirely possible that  the two TV stations specialize in different broadcast respects with different anchormen, sharing different kinds of audience. Without accounting such possible difference between two stations, the manager cannot prove that KICK would reap the same benefits from the proposed method.

Finally, growing ratings of a TV station does not necessarily increase profits, for profits depends on both revenue and costs. The manager fails to consider the cost of adding sports broadcasts, thus may put the company at risk that profits would decrease if the cost of adding sports broadcasts surpasses the revenue of the increasing of audience.

In sum, the manager's recommendation is ungrounded. To make the recommendation convincing, To bolster the argument the manager should provide evidence to prove the authority and authenticity of the survey, and must assure that the cost of adding sports broadcasts is less than the revenue of the increase of audience.

Andrew_zwiUID: 2670942

The manager recommends that to increase company profits KICK should increase its sports broadcasts. To support this recommendation, the manager cites a nationwide survey revealing that a sizeable majority of men would like to see additional sports programs on television. He also points out that the share of the television audience in the 此处用the 不太对吧，前面并没有提到viewing area。建议改成its viewing area of the television station WACK doubled after WACK increased its sports broadcasts. This argument is flawed in several respects.（此句每篇argument都会说，所以，LZ可以找一句比较的好，改写一下，当作模板）

Firstly, the manager provides no evidence that the survey is statistically reliable. The number of the respondents does not assure the representativeness, suppose that those men who like sports tend to respond the survey, while women, children and other men who show less interest in sports may not take in part. Even if the result of the survey is reliable, the survey only reflects the average condition across the nation, it is not the local condition for station KICK, maybe local residents like music programs more than sports ones.

Secondly, There are many other assumptions for the increase of audience, for instance, the station added more entertaining programs which most people like. Even if doubling of audience is due to added sports programs of station WACK, no evidence shows that KICK would get the same result after adding sports programs, it is entirely possible that  the two TV stations specialize in different broadcast respects with different anchormen, sharing different kinds of audience. Without accounting such possible difference between two stations, the manager cannot prove that KICK would reap the same benefits from the proposed method.

Finally, growing ratings of a TV station does not necessarily increase profits, for profits depends on both revenue and costs. The manager fails to consider the cost of adding sports broadcasts, thus may put the company at risk that profits would decrease if the cost of adding sports broadcasts surpasses the revenue of the increasing of audience.

In sum, the manager's recommendation is ungrounded. To make the recommendation convincing, To bolster the argument the manager should provide evidence to prove the authority and authenticity of the survey, and must assure that the cost of adding sports broadcasts is less than the revenue of the increase of audience

LZ文章，逻辑上比较清晰。总体不错。
建议可以将文章模板化，将比较重要的常出现的句子，写成框架。