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发表于 2010-12-8 23:03:31 |显示全部楼层
小弟12号一战,由于无人指导不知道综合写作这么写是否符合要求,有哪些地方要注意。望各位大虾赐教···
题目是TPO1的综合写作···
The lecturer talks about some drawbacks that the four-day work policy may bring about, which contradicts
what the passage indicates.

First, the profit of company could decrease. With the same amount of work to be done, more employees needed to be hired if they worked less days a week. And more emplpyees means more costs, as more money should be paid to train new members and cover their medical insurance which changed little as employees worked a four-day week.This directly contradicts the statement that this policy could increase profits as employees felt more rested and alert in the passage.

Second, company may force employees to work overtime during the limited four days. As above, profit's decreasing force company to expect employees finish five-day's works in four days. Thus, on one hand, the company would not hire more people, differs from what the passage says. On the other hand, heavy workload may cause unpleasant work experience.

Third, this policy may reduce quality time of employees, which is very different with what the passage indicates. The
lecturers says that the company would be more likely to promote five-day employees instead of those worked four days a week. Worse still, those who worked a four-day week are more likely to be fired when economic crisis breaks out. This will reduce the quality time employees.

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发表于 2010-12-8 23:37:09 |显示全部楼层
这是xdf老师给我们的范文,虽然不是针对TPO1的,但是大致的行文脉络是一样的,你可以看下。貌似综合写作要求找出阅读和听力的对应点,并对应着写出来,主要是把理由说清楚。尽量在阅读的要点总结上不要丢分,听力的内容听到了的话可以直接写上去,不用做句式变化什么的。。

The reading and listening passages debate the pros and cons of the practice of salvage logging. The reading material outlines (provides) its three major benefits, which are contradicted by the following lecture.

First, the reading passage claims that salvage logging provides spaces for forest growth. However, the speaker claims that salvage logging makes the soil less nutritious because damaged trees can provide nutrition for the soil after they decay. This practically refutes the reading’s claim.

Secondly, the reading passage argues that salvage logging controls harmful insects, for instance, spruce beetles. However, the speaker believes that spruce beetles are not harmful. And he argues that salvage logging reduces the numbers of beneficial species.

Finally, the reading claims that salvage logging provides economical benefits. Two reasons are provided. For one thing, it helps local companies to reduce losses by recycling damaged trees. Second, it provides job opportunities to local people. However, the speaker believes that this is not the case.  For one thing, salvage logging needs very expensive transportation, e.g. helicopters. For another thing, salvage logging needs skillful workers, who do not come from the local community.

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发表于 2010-12-8 23:37:46 |显示全部楼层
之前在寄托上看到了很不错的写作的帖子,LZ也可以找一下看看。。。

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发表于 2010-12-9 12:50:13 |显示全部楼层
感谢解答··感觉IW里的时态很混乱。。什么该用一般现在时?听力内容还是阅读内容?看OG范文也很混乱,一下过去时,一下一般现在时 3# summer6_6

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