argument 158彼岸小组第六次作业 muzhihao

muzhihao1UID: 2959675

In thisargument, the arguer advocates that it sounds unnecessary to restrict the sizeof the garbage sites and the number of homes built near them in our state, forthe current system of garbage sites have a limited effect. To demonstrate itsconclusion, he cites a survey about the effects of garbage sites on the healthof people around the nation, which seems cogent and logical at first glance.

However,we can perceive that the arguer's point is entirely based on the survey. Withdeep consideration, we find that this survey regard the existence of rashes asthe only criterion to measure the negative effects of the garbage sites have onthe health of nearby inhabitants, which is inadequate. The emergency of therash is just a sign of the inner harm. If the severity of the rash isirrelevant to the progress of the true harm to people's health, this surveybecomes invalid to support any point.

Furthermore,the samples investigated, about five sites and 300 people are insufficient toreach conclusion, for the arguer average the people who have the rash, bothnear the site and far away of the five sites. Under this situation, any specialcondition, such as most people who live next to one site are infirmity andprone to have rash, will immensely affect the outcome. And it's unwise toignore the higher incidence of the rashes near the largest site over theothers. Even though the severity of the rashes, claimed by the arguer equal tothe health, don't change with the size of the sites, the high incidence of therashes may indicate we should consider the existence of the inner harm.

Finally,the conclusion that restricting the size of the garbage sites and the number ofnearby homes is unneeded are imprudent. Even if the garbage sites act nonegative effect on people's health at present, the indulgence of the size ofgarbage sites places a latent danger under the shadow of temporaryharmlessness, which can
bring aboutdisastrous consequence with the increase quantity of nearby homes.

In sum,this argument is based on invalid survey and the conclusion is inconsiderate.To confirm it, the arguer should seek for more convincing survey and deal withmatters of the garbage sites with caution.

nofeelings811UID: 2388638

你是没有组的人吗？我来帮你改改，值得注意的是，你需要更清晰的内在的逻辑结构

argument 158 muzhihao

In this argument, the arguer advocates that it sounds unnecessary to restrict the size of the garbage sites and the number of homes built near them in our state, for the current system of garbage sites have a limited effect. To demonstrate its(his)conclusion, he cites a survey about the effects of garbage sites on the health of people around the nation, which seems cogent and logical at first glance.(缺少了表现自己观点的句子) However,we can perceive that the arguer's point is entirely based on the survey. With deep consideration, we find that this survey regard the existence of rashes as the only criterion to measure the negative effects of the garbage sites have onthe health of nearby inhabitants, which is inadequate. The emergency of the rash is just a sign of the inner harm. If the severity of the rash is irrelevant to the progress of the true harm to people's health, this survey becomes invalid to support any point.(garbage sites can possibly cause other disease也是对这个观点的突破口) Furthermore, the samples investigated, (没必要断句)about five sites and 300 people are insufficient to reach conclusion, for the arguer average the people who have the rash, both near the site and far away of the five sites. Under this situation(Because of this), any special condition, such as most people who live next to one site are infirmity and prone to have rash, will immensely affect the outcome. And it's unwise to ignore the higher incidence of the rashes near the largest site over theothers. Even though the severity of the rashes, claimed by the arguer equal to the health, don't change with the size of the sites,(对文章的断章取义，文章说的是slightly higher) the high incidence of the rashes may indicate we should consider the existence of the inner harm. Finally,the conclusion that restricting the size of the garbage sites and the number of nearby homes is unneeded are imprudent. Even if the garbage sites act nonegative effect on people's health at present, the indulgence of the size of garbage sites places a latent danger under the shadow of temporary harmlessness, which can bring about disastrous consequence with the increase quantity of nearby homes.(for example, jam the traffic) In sum,this argument is based on invalid survey and the conclusion is inconsiderate.To confirm it, the arguer should seek for more convincing survey and deal withmatters of the garbage sites with caution.

choupgheadUID: 2969431

In this argument, the arguer advocates that it sounds unnecessary to restrict the size of the garbage sites and the number of homes built near them in our state, for the current system of garbage sites have a limited effect. To demonstrate its conclusion, he cites a survey about the effects of garbage sites on the health of people around the nation, which seems cogent and logical at first glance.(标准模板开头，去掉开头只余300字了，注意内容的提升)
However, we can perceive that the arguer's point is entirely based on the survey. With deep consideration, we find that this survey regard the existence of rashes as the only criterion to measure the negative effects of the garbage sites have on the health of nearby inhabitants, which is inadequate. The emergency of the rash is just a sign of the inner harm. If the severity of the rash is irrelevant to the progress of the true harm to people's health, this survey becomes invalid to support any point.（other diseases）
Furthermore, the samples investigated, about five sites and 300 people are insufficient to reach conclusion, for the arguer average the people who have the rash, both near the site and far away of the five sites. Under this situation, any special condition, such as most people who live next to one site are infirmity and prone to have rash, will immensely affect the outcome. And it's unwise to ignore the higher incidence of the rashes near the largest site over the others. Even though the severity of the rashes, claimed by the arguer equal to the health, don't change with the size of the sites, the high incidence of the rashes may indicate we should consider the existence of the inner harm.（调查的fice sites and 300 people不能代表普遍情况这个点忽略了攻击）
Finally, the conclusion that restricting the size of the garbage sites and the number of nearby homes is unneeded are imprudent. Even if the garbage sites act no negative effect on people's health at present, the indulgence of the size of garbage sites places a latent danger under the shadow of temporary harmlessness, which can
bring about disastrous consequence with the increase quantity of nearby homes.（健康上没有问题，可能会影响正常生活，例如交通，味道，处理垃圾的噪音等，例子给全一些）
In sum, this argument is based on invalid survey and the conclusion is inconsiderate. To confirm it, the arguer should seek for more convincing survey and deal with matters of the garbage sites with caution.
（给出我的攻击建议，仅供参考：
5sites and 300people 的调查不一定具有普遍性 ——》 即便普遍，但是对于皮炎的状况不一定适用于其他病症，而且仅仅给出最大的垃圾场的状况是不可信的，有可能小一些的垃圾场周围的影响反而大，那么垃圾场的规模和对健康的影响就无规律而言，不能武断的说不可以扩大规模 ——》 （可以附带说调查的方法没有提出，作者的结论让人很难信服）即便确实垃圾场对于健康没有影响而且规模的扩大也不会带来更多的健康问题，不限制也不一定是正确的，可能会影响除了健康的其他方面）
（下次注意处理一下传到论坛上会出现连词的问题）