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144 "It is the artist, not thecritic,* who gives society something of lasting value." *a person whoevaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.


翻译:是艺术家而不是批评家,给了社会一些永久的价值。



Some people claim that critic provide art works of everlasting value tosociety, while others argue that it is by artist whom create these art works.From my point of view, these assertions are tremendously narrow. Artist and critichave different functions and both of them give society something of lastingvalue.

To begin with, it is undeniable that art works are created by artists, not by critics. True arts are the intuitionistic reflections to artists’ imaginations, creativities and passions. The real value of art occurs at the moment we encounter it----a visceral impact on our sense, spirits and souls. For instance, it is Schubert who wrote Ave Maria, clarifying our mind; it is Leonardo da Vinci who drew Mona Lisa, displaying the most beautiful and mysterious smile; it is J. K. Rollin who gave birth to Harry Porter, making us laugh and cry. The value of art depends on the comprehension and introject between artists and readers. Just as Shakespeare said that if there are one thousand readers, you will find one thousand different Hamlets in the readers' eyes.

However, it does not mean that critics have no utilities in providingthings of everlasting value. Critics are also members of readers but they aremore professional than any other, having certain insights that the laypersonswould not. The critics read works and make comments, with which we can sharedifferent ideas and get better understanding – they add condiment of variousflavors to enrich our mind. The critics’ greatest effect is that they can helpthe art which was ignored by masses in the past to emerge its original value tothe public. They can also help artists promote their works. If critics’constructive criticisms are taken to heart, better works will be resulted in.


In addition, without artists, those famous art works will never appear, andthere would be no critics. And at the same time, if there are not critics, amajority of art with true value would be ignored and finally disappeared. Forexample, later proper critics, the works of Van Gogh would be sunk in garbagecan for centuries. Only when artists and critics work together will the artworks of everlasting value be reflected in masses. For instance, as almost theonly one art type for expressing emotions for hundreds of years in Europe, religious art always favors the subjects of peopleand stories from the Bible and all religious buildings, mainly churches, werefull of those colorful paintings, from which we can abstract some mainstreamideas of that time.


In sum, artists create artworks while critics discover them and help masses to comprehend their value intuitionally.Only when these two kinds of people work together will we enjoy the art worksof lasting value.
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呃.....好吧,编辑编毁了,能看就好....
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3天前的帖子了 ,不知道现在回晚不晚。

开头第一段写的有点八股,这样写可以理解,因为比较好写。不过如果能写的更好点的话,更能吸引改卷人的注意力。比如用个疑问句:WHO PROVIDES THE art works of ever lasting value to society? The artist or the critic?

你写了一个疑问句,读者自然就会跟着你去想答案。另外,开头第一段里还有些语法错误,比如 THE CRITIC (加THE), 并且用单数等。

第二段,下面这个长句:For instance, it is Schubert who wrote Ave Maria, clarifying our mind; 。。。 看着感觉语法不对啊。这个 CLARIFYING 的主语是哪个?看你句子结构,似乎是IT?

后面还没看。。。。

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嗯,还不是很适应,刚开始限时写,唉.....
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了解。加油吧

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thx~~~
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发表于 2010-12-31 17:43:51 |显示全部楼层
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哇,咖啡已经限时啦?强力啊!马上改……

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发表于 2010-12-31 18:15:55 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 shawn_pys 于 2010-12-31 18:18 编辑

1# 咖啡盐
嗯,虽然短点,还是挺有质量的,加油!

Some people claim that critic provide art works of everlasting value tosociety, while others argue that it is by artist whom create these art works.From my point of view, these assertions are tremendously narrow. Artist and critic have different functions and both of them give society something of lasting value.



To begin with, it is undeniable that art works are created by artists, not by critics. True arts are the

intuitionistic (intuitional) reflections to artists’ imaginations, creativities and passions. The real value of art occurs at the moment we encounter it----a visceral impact on our sense, spirits and souls. For instance, it is Schubert who wrote Ave Maria, clarifying our mind; it is Leonardo da Vinci who drew Mona Lisa, displaying the most beautiful and mysterious smile; it is J. K. Rollin who gave birth to Harry Porter, making us laugh and cry. The value of art depends on the comprehension and introject between artists and readers. Just as Shakespeare said that if there are one thousand readers, you will find one thousand different Hamlets in the readers' eyes. 【这里感觉讨论艺术家的作用在最后有点偏离了】

However, it does not mean that critics have no utilities in providing things of everlasting value. Critics are also members of readers but they are more professional than any other, having certain insights that the laypersons would not (have). The critics read works and make comments, with which we can share different ideas and get better understanding – they add condiment of various flavors to enrich our mind. The critics’ greatest effect is that they can help the art which was ignored by masses in the past to emerge(render) its original value to the public. They can also help artists promote their works. If critics’constructive criticisms are taken to heart, better works will be resulted in.



In addition,【这里感觉in addition不太恰当,建议改成Finally】 without artists, those famous art works will never appear, and there would be no critics. And at the same time, if there are not critics, a majority of art with true value would be ignored and finally disappeared. For example, later proper critics, the works of Van Gogh would be sunk in garbage can for centuries. Only when artists and critics work together will the artworks of everlasting value be reflected in masses. For instance, as almost the only one art type for expressing emotions for hundreds of years in Europe, religious art always favors the subjects of people and stories from the Bible and all religious buildings, mainly churches, were full of those colorful paintings, from which we can abstract some mainstream ideas of that time.【感觉这个例子中再加上评论家的工作就好了】



In sum, artists create artworks while critics discover them and help masses to comprehend their value intuitionally.Only when these two kinds of people work together will we enjoy the art works of lasting value.

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唉,其实其实不是标准限时....我超了....
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最讨厌写这种意识流的issue了,唉,想不到什么比较好的例子,真是比较麻烦
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