lhy 1.14独立 作业

lhywinUID: 2754801

Do you agree with the following statement? Good looks and dresses are more important that good ideas.

Just imagine a simple world in which people judge others only depend on how beautiful dose the person wear or how gorgeous is the one' face, what will be awaited? Obviously, no one can say exactly what it looks like when such case comes into reality, but it probably will happen if we do not care of the notion of value. While I concede that a good looks as well as dresses can bring in some respect from others, but the good idea of your own ,at least in my view, is more important the anything else. There are mainly three conspicuous aspects I would like to explore in this essay.

First and foremost, from my personal and psychological perspective, it is generally accepted that the outstanding idea of us is more useful than the impressive figure in our affluent society. The man with a nice face can never take over by the one with a powerful mine. For instance, when a new technology has been invented or a notoriously difficult research project has been done, no one would like to judge whether they, who contribute to such triumph, looks good or not, but to cheer for their intelligent idea. Therefore, it is never too much to emphasis the importance of idea.

In addition, the good look or dresses, compared with the good idea of our own, will not stay with us for a lifelong time, because we are mortals and everyone has to face growing old. The pretty well mind that can nurture large sums of excellent idea has become more and more crucial. It is not exaggerate to say that everything may leave us alone except our mind. Besides, I believe that most of us want to make friends with the people who really appreciate your idea not just instead of your outline.

Notwithstanding the fundamental status of good idea, a good looking or a well dress has also plays a very important role in nowadays society. Since, admittedly, no one can ignore the importance of first impression, especially for some special place such as a banquet for social activity. A nice dresses or a priceless jewelry can help us draw more attention and gain more opportunity.

Taking all above mentioned into consideration, I still insist my point of view that a good idea is more important than a good looks or dresses.

juliagoUID: 2912431

楼主，不好意思，昨天太困了，没能改完

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Just imagine a simple world in which people judge others only depend on how beautiful dose the person wear or how gorgeous is the one' face, what will be awaited? Obviously, no one can say exactly what it looks like when such case comes into reality, but it probably will happen if we do not care of the notion of value. While I concede that a good looks as well as dresses can bring in some respect from others, but the good idea of your own ,at least in my view, is more important the(than) anything else. There are mainly three(two) conspicuous aspects I would like to explore in this essay.

First and foremost, from my personal and psychological perspective, it is generally accepted that the outstanding idea of us is more useful than the impressive figure in our affluent society. The man with a nice face can never take over by the one with a powerful mine(mind)(这句到底什么意思？感觉和原文有冲突)). For instance, when a new technology has been invented or a notoriously difficult research project has been done, no one would like to judge whether they, who contribute to such triumph, looks good or not, but to cheer for their intelligent idea. Therefore, it is never too much to emphasis the importance of idea(这句写得真好， 例子不错哦).  

In addition, the good look or dresses, compared with the good idea of our own, will not stay with us for a lifelong time, because we are mortals and everyone has to face growing old. The pretty well mind that can nurture large sums of（一般和钱连用，这里可用a great number of） excellent idea（加s ）has become more and more crucial. It is not exaggerate to say that everything may leave us alone except our mind（用wisdom更好）. Besides, I believe that most of us want to make friends with the people who really appreciate your idea not just instead of your outline（感觉好怪， 用good figure好些）.

Notwithstanding the fundamental status of good idea, a good looking or a well dress has also plays a very important role in nowadays society. Since，admittedly（这一般用在句首让步的）, no one can ignore the importance of first impression, especially for some special place such as a banquet for social activity. A nice dresses or a priceless jewelry can help us draw more attention and gain more opportunity.

Taking all above mentioned into consideration, I still（不要，显得自己心虚） insist my point of view that a good idea is more important than a good looks or dresses.
楼主，写得这次很好啊，例子和观点都很有说服力，词汇不错,句式也丰富