求咖啡盐等高手狠拍，快考试了，T.T

wuz1990UID: 3003116

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咖啡盐UID: 2973669

乃说得偶很不好意思鸟....

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT37 - Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been unique to the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could only have crossed it by boat, but there is no evidence that the Paleans had boats. And boats capable of carrying groups of people and cargo were not developed until thousands of years after the Palean people disappeared. Moreover, Paleans would have had no need to cross the river-the woods around Palea are full of nuts, berries, and small game. It follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea.

logic fallacy: 只从P人的角度去思考问题，忽视了L人。 Woven只能通过P人传入L。


Grounding the recent discovery that a "palean" basket, which were believed to have been unique to the Palean people, were found in Lithos, an ancient village across the deep and broad Brim river from Palea,这里就可以得出结论了：the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea. To support the argument 后面的是论据了assuming that the Paleans can't use boats to cross the river, the author accordingly draws the conclusion that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea. Convincing as it seems, close scrutiny of the argument reveals that it suffers from several logical flaws.

First of all, the author treats a lack of prove that Paleans had boats as constituting sufficient proof that Paleans had no boats. It is entirely possible that Paleans people had boats, but such evidence was not found. Perhaps Paleans used a specific kind of wood to build their boats, and this kind of wood was destroyed by erosion over time, so that no evidence that the boats exited could be found. Possibility also exists that some fragments of the boats can still be found, but were deeply buried underground or under the river. The archaeologists haven't dug that deep so that they didn't discover them. It's also possible that a fire has ruined all their boats after the Palean people disappeared. Any of these scenarios, if true, would cast significant doubt on the author's assumption that Paleans had no boats.
这段就比较失败了，你的假设是毫无根据的。文中已经提到说P人没有boat，并且即使有也不能载很多人。这样去否定原题设不好。证明要无限接近于事实。既然speaker已经告诉了你P人没有boat，而我们在考试的时候不可能有其他外界证据，只能承认speaker。但可以往speaker忽视的地方去找，这篇文章最大的漏洞无疑就是L人的情况，speaker完全没有交待。L人可以有船啊，P人不过去，L人可以过来啊。还有其他人啊，文章没有说当时只有P人和L人吧？其他有船的的人也可以的嘛。

Moreover, even assuming that Paleans had no boats, the author simply assumes that Paleans would have no other ways and no need to cross the river, which is unwarranted. On the one hand, the author fails to take into account other ways for Paleans to cross the river. It is entirely possible that due to climate change or plate movement, the river has changed significantly over time. Even though the river is now deep and broad, the river might be shallow and narrow in the ancient time when the Paleans lived. Therefore, the Paleans may swim across the river. Possibility also exists that there were some bridges through which the Paleans can cross the river. On the other hand, the author fails to consider other possible reasons for the Paleans to cross the river. The Paleans may cross the river to do some business. It's also possible that they cross the river simply to explore the outside world. Without ruling out these and other possibilities, the author cannot unjustifiably assume that the Paleans would have no other ways and no need to cross the river.关于P人需不需要过河的问题，我想最大的应该是之前P地区也很富饶吗？文中只提及说P现在很富饶。就像BR一样，可能经过地貌变动，P地区的富饶是几千年后形成的，P地以前可能很贫瘠，而L地很富饶，那么P人需要去L。

Last but not least, even assuming that the Paleans never crossed the river, the author fails to consider other possible means by which the "Palean" basket was transported to Lithos. It is entirely possible that some merchants have brought the "Palean" basket to Lithos. Or perhaps the basket was transported to Lithos after the boats capable of carrying groups of people and cargo came into being. It is also possible that the basket spread to Lithos after a war, people from Lithos brought the basket back home from the villages they conquered, including Palea. Without considering all these alternative explanations for the "palean" basket's discovery in Lithos, the author's conclusion that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea is dubious at best.

In conclusion, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To make it more valid, the author should provide more evidence that the Paleans didn't have boats and that they had no need and no alternative ways to cross the Brim River. The author should also take into account other possible explanations for the basket's spreading to Lithos.




嗯嗯，想到的就这么多了，这篇还没看到哒。我觉得你可以适当把文章稍稍缩短提炼下，因为考虑到最近我开始限时模拟之后字数和时间问题都挺紧巴的，不知你是否也有这样的问题。

wuz1990UID: 3003116

4# lasselore 这个，还是我给双份吧

wuz1990UID: 3003116

3# 咖啡盐 啊，谢谢谢谢。这篇文章当时限时是30分钟480字，最后没时间检查了，结果12个拼写错误。:L现在的长度是我后来又加上去了一些。你觉得字数多少比较合适呢？

咖啡盐UID: 2973669

拼写错误感觉有点多，虽然人家不考察，不过还是仔细点吧。

字数看个人速度啦~我也说不好，俺也是菜鸟上阵呢。个人觉得，起码400多才能把事情说得比较通透吧

咖啡盐UID: 2973669

不过又听人家说，380+也凑活

咖啡盐UID: 2973669

关键是要你的思路清晰，让人家明白你的条理

wuz1990UID: 3003116

9# 咖啡盐 我现在就思路不太清晰啊，求指导

chinese_idiotUID: 2854284

擦 我是看标题进来的
小妹竟然称高手了

chinese_idiotUID: 2854284

我能把我自己算在等里面么

chinese_idiotUID: 2854284

LZ用这个头像是故意来诱惑咖啡的

wuz1990UID: 3003116

12# chinese_idiot 可以啊，拍我吧，求拍求拍求拍