Do you agreeor disagree with the following statement:
People who gooutside are more successful and happier than people who stay in villages.
Withinrecent decades, with the development of the society, people who go outside arewhile facing more pressure on all kinds of aspects such as life, work and study,which make some people believe that staying in village would be happier andmore successful for without so many pressure and trouble they need to face.However, it is not the thing. Why? Because going outside posses many essentialspecial experience and chance that can hardly be provided by staying invillage. For the better development prospect, I prefer going outside to lookfor more successful and happier life.
Firstof all, going outside greatly acquires the dissatisfied appetite (这句话学习了)of people for being success andhappy. Comparing the limitation of staying in village, going outside offersmore knowledge and experience that are the key factors for success and happy.Take art history as example, during 18 century, as the art capital of theworld, especially painting field, Paris attracted more and more people whodesired to become an artist to learn art there. For artist, Paris is not aplace to go; itis the place being necessary for all artists to be successful.这句话不太理解,是不是改成强调句的格式会更好些呢?
Whatis more, going outside provides more chance for people to be successful andhappier. Outside always while means more chance for people to choose thatpeople could rely on their own situation to do the things they are interest inand hence are more likely to be successful and happier. New York, (这里加上for example是不是比较好), a big city where is full ofchance for all the people to pursue their own dream of success and happy wherethe small villages can not match. In this big city, it provide huge kinds ofpossibilities for people looking forward to, no matter struggling for ownbusiness or looking for one admired job.
Onemore thing, I have to admit that staying in village does not necessarily mean nothing(在否定句中nothing应该改成anything). For example, as without thepressure on working or living, people living in small village are more likelyhappier than those going outside. However, with the seriously comparison, Istill think that going outside is one choice being more worthy to do,especially for youths who need more experience and opportunity to fulfill theirlifetime.
With the high rocketed(我晕,从来没见过这种用法,楼主这样的用法有保证吗? With the rapid increasing development of the society更保险,楼主三思) development of the society, movies and televisions are more and more popular/deep into the people's life(这个句子是两个不同的句子,应该这么说movies and··· are more popular and tightly connected
with the people’s
daily
life). However, one’s issue is also concerned by people. Should movies and TV programs follow the standard of
(that这个是相等的关系不是从属的关系)good people being rewarded and bad people being punished? I admit that in certain scope movie and TV program are necessarily show people what is the real value,(这里究竟要表达什么意思,楼主改改吧) However, in many other situations, this is not the case, movies and TV have more multiplied meanings.
First of all, I have to admit that in certain aspect, movie and TV program should take role of education, especially for young kids. That is, the movie and TV program should show audience good people being rewarded and bad people being punished. This kind of educational movie and TV program could teach our young kids proper behaviors in the society or teenagers would imitate the violence shown on grogram and make behavior aggressively threatening to society. For example, during the 80s, when a movie called The Guilty being popular in Japan which told a story about gangs and their violent battles, the rate of juvenile delinquency also soared which account to(楼主要表达归结于···should be attributed to) a bad conduction from the movie.
However, except the education movie and TV program, many movie and TV program also show us more colorful and meaningful points
such as the views
of life. A movie, for instance, called Black Swan, well exploits the means (meaning) of life. The heroine is a ballerina who loves her ballet career so much and she is extremely particular to her dance and tries (to do) everything perfect. However, she finds(realizes) that she could not make her dance perfect as she expected (as desirable as she expected)and finally end her '(这个明显不用’)imperfect life. This is a sad story but is also tell me(us文中尽量避免第一人称) that we should have a well-planned life and focus on doing thing carefully rather than paying too much attention on the result.
Also, there are other kinds of movies and TV programs that do not necessarily to show audience good people being rewarded and bad people being punished, such as the documental Movie and TV program. The main role of these shows is to illustrate the real history and tell people what is
going in the past.(显然的时态不对what had happened in the future) That’s the reason why we might see good people got killed(别扭) by bad people in some documental movies.
In sum, I admit that as for the education mission of movie and TV show, in order to teach our future generation,(这句已经与educational重复 了) we should tell our next generation the proper standard. However, we also need to permit more varies kinds (aspects
为了不显重复还是去掉)of movies and TV programs to shows more aspects about the life.