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3.2的独立改好了，有些问题，加油！

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3.4 号作文TPO 综合 + 独立
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TPO 12

The speaker doubts the claim of the passage that the recent appeared professionally painted portrait was Jane Austen's by refuting all three reasons given in the passage.

First, the speaker points out that it had been 70 years after Austen' death in 1882, when Austen's family claimed to recognize that portrait.  Thus, at that time the Austen family members had not even seen Austen, so their claim that the subject of the full-length portrait was Austen is open to question.

Second, the speaker argues that the Austen family is a big one and there were many teenage girls when Austen was young. So that we can not make sure that the person in Cassandra’s sketch is Jane Austen. Actually there is expert state that the sketch is about one of Jane's relative, instead of Jane. Therefore, even there are much resemblance between the full-length portrait and the sketch, we can't conclude that the portrait is Jane's.

Third, the passageassumes that the portrait is by Ozias Humphrey, who was most like the professional that Austen family would hire, and therefore could be Jane's. However, as the speaker points out, this statement is based solely on the style. What's more, based on recently evidence, during the time of Humphrey was active; Jane is not a teenager but about 27 years old. Thus this evidence gives no support to the conclusion that the full-length portrait is an authentic one of Jane Austen.



Do you agree with the following statement? For future career success, is relate well to other people more important than studying hard at school?

With limited time to allocate, students always struggle to keep a balance between making friends and learning. Take the future career in consideration; I personally prefer to keep a good relationship with other people for this will play a bigger role in future success.

To begin with, I'd like to argue that making friends with others is a crucial ability in our future career. After all, it is the people that you will deal with when you go to work, if you could relate to people around you well, you can't even keep you position, let alone make progress and succeed. I have a friend who could not deal with the interpersonal relationship well when he was in school. After he graduated and entered a company, he could not handle that with his boss; as a result he was fired.

Second, having a good relationship in school will help you a lot in your future career. Because the friends you made in school would most likely to be helpful when you work. There are plenty examples that the good friends at university then become the most successful partners in business. Such as the founder of New Orient School, a training company in China, become extremely success in this industry with the help of many of friends he made at Peking University.

Last but not least, studying hard without a good relationship with other makes it very hard for others to recognize your achievement and your capacity. We all know that in this highly competitive world, everyone should show his/her best side to other to gain recognition. Thus, if we spend all our time in learning but ignore people around us, we could probably been ignored by them and lost the opportunities to further strength our capacity.

Take all factors into account, I strongly agree that relate well to other people is far more important than studying hard when we are students.

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18# Go2011Go 谢谢！！

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（独立作文有点偏题了，唉，一完写立刻觉得不对劲！！）
多谢修改的童鞋！！


TPO13
The speaker strongly disagrees with thestatement made by the passage that commercial trade of fossils influences bothscientists and the public negatively. To support her argument, the speakergives three lines of reasoning.

First, the speaker points out that thepublic actually benefit from the sale of fossils, instead of suffers as thepassage claims. Because there are high degree of publicity of fossils duringthe process to sale them, the folks could view them many times even withoutcharge. What more, the fossils in museums and laboratories are rarely allowedto be viewed by publics.

Also, the speaker argues that commercialtrade never decreases the scientists' chance to access to the most importantfossils. The speaker points out one important fact that every important fossilneed to be identified by scientists, therefore, scientists could get everydetail of a private collection and get the first hand data before the own makesure to buy it.

Third, the speaker refutes that thecommercial fossil collectors destroy valuable scientific evidence by comparingit to what the universities and research institutions’' misdeed. Though thecommercial collectors might destroy some subtle clues and ignore how fossilslie in the ground or the smaller fossils surround big ones, at least they makemany discoveries, unlike the universities who just let the fossils buried underearth, which waste the value of the fossils even more.


独立作文
Do you agree with thefollowing statement? People should work quickly and risk making mistakes orshould work slowly and make sure that everything is correct?

Given the limited resources and theimperfect information-processing system of human brain, we should make atrade-off between accuracy and speed when we deal with tough problems. Throughin many cases a hand of mistakes are acceptable, I still believe that peopleshould work slowly to make sure that everything is correct.

First and foremost, under manycircumstances, a tiny error could result disastrous consequences. History hasgiven us numerous lectures on this problem; almost every catastrophe in humansociety is originated from a very obscure mistake. Take a recently fire inShanghai for example, this brutal fire had kill almost 80 people and destroy awhole building. When people investigate the case and found that it began withan occasional misdeed. If everyone in that building did everything correctly,this kind of tragedy could be avoided.

Second, doing everything accurately is alsocrucial for our personal study. As a student, know exactly how this kind ofworking style influences our grade. I still remember clearly once I wrote a 6in a mathematic examination where I should write an 8, as a result I lost thechance to be the No.1. In other subjects such as English, physics, etc., doingeverything correctly is equal important.

Last but not least, making sure thateverything is correct could help us achieve to success in future career. Thereis a famous saying that details determine everything, this saying perfectlyillustrate what role details play in our career. Every aspect of our behavior,our language could change other's impression of us. There is a classic exampledemonstrate the power of details: one famous company organized an interview andmany graduates go to the interview and was refused, but one young succeeded.When the young man asked the interviewer why they gave him the position, theofficial said: because you pick up the paper in the corner and put it into thedustbin!

In sum, in all aspect of our life, workingslowly but accurately is superior to working quickly but making mistakes.

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3.5的综合我还没有写，等我写完了再来给你改吧，先占个座~
不好意思~

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独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? ”"The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries'.

There are always debates on how to improve the quality of education given by teachers. Someone, from a purely economical view, argue that just inscrease（increasing/ to increase） salaries will make teachers do their best. However, other people, including me, strongly against this over-simplified solution（这个词挺好的~）. Instead, they proposed a comprehensive way to improve the educational quality.

First, the claim that rising salaries will improve teachers' performance over-estimates the importance of money. Numerous psychological and behavioral studies have shown that money, as a kind of external reward, is never the most powerful incentive for most of us. Once we have enough wealth to satisfy our basic demand, we begin to pursue other more meaningful goals, such as self-fulfillment, especially for those who have accepted higher education. When this principle is applied to teachers, we have no reason to doubt
that simply giving more money to them in order to make them perform better seems ridiculous.(貌似是语法错误吧？这一句看不太懂)


Even we assume that higher salaries will drive teachers to perform better, it is still open to question whether this kind of improvement is only performance-oriented or true improvement of education quality. In other words, it is probably that teachers might just teach (the) knowledge that would appear in future examination. In this case, the rising of salaries backfires and actually lower the quality of education.(好像这一段后面解释的表现不太符合performance-oriented吧？这个performance-oriented的含义有些含糊，过于抽象)

Instead of simply increase salaries of teachers, we should take a coordinative approach to bolster quality of education. For instance, knowing that internal motivations are crucial, we should find way to associate the quality of education given by a teacher to his/her internal motives, such as feeling of achievement. Further, we could try to give teacher more opportunities to exert their own strong points in his class and thus increase his love of teaching. Together, these solutions may be better than simply adding salaries.

Improving the quality of education is a complex problem and many factor play a role in teacher's instruction. Accordingly, we should take all these factors into account and take a comprehensive approach instead of simply raising teachers' salaries.

结构很好，分两步递进式地反驳了题目观点错误面，并提出了解决错误的方案，思路清晰，但有些细节上描述含糊，用词不太准确，使人有点不明白，加油~~~综合我还没写，写完了再改哈~~


我咋不能贴附件呢？是级别不够么？囧

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晚了点

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22# daisy8936
第二段结尾原句是这样的： When this principle is applied to teachers, we have no reason to doubt it won't, simply give more money to them in order to make them perform better seems ridiculous.
呵呵

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3.5综合修改，来晚了，不好意思
TPO13

The speaker strongly disagrees with the statement made by the passage that commercial trade of fossils influences bothscientists and the public negatively. To support her argument, the speakergives three lines of reasoning.
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' R2 ]5 U9 B! T/ TFirst, the speaker points out that the public actually benefit from the sale of fossils, instead of suffers as the passage claims. Because there are high degree of publicity of fossils during the process to sale them, the folks could view them many times even without charge. What’s more, the fossils in museums and laboratories are rarely allowed to be viewed by publics.) O  Q. v7 K- r2 u% s
这句话好像和听力里不一致，听力说的是As a result, and library cannot routinely buy interesting fossils and display them to the public. 意思是说public school的fossil是从commercial 那买的。

3 o% P3 l, L, l! s3 w1 R, NAlso, the speaker argues that commercial trade never decreases the scientists' chance to access to the most important fossils. The speaker points out one important fact that every important fossils need to be identified by scientists, therefore, scientists could get every detail of a private collection and get the first hand data before the own make sure to buy it.1 V, x9 T* R$ w# p4 {) Q: l
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Third, the speaker refutes that the commercial fossil collectors destroy valuable scientific evidence by comparing it to what the universities and research institutions’' misdeed. Though the commercial collectors might destroy some subtle clues and ignore how fossils lie in the ground or the smaller fossils surround big ones, at least they make many discoveries, unlike the universities who just let the fossils buried underearth, which waste the value of the fossils even more.
哇，这一段听的相当全啊~赞！

总体上写的非常好，听力特别全，向你学习了！

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真的不好意思啊！这几天开学了，一直没有网！ 今天才上上，这就给你改了！ 对不起啊，耽误这么长时间！
那天综合作文我也没来得及写，所以也不知道什么内容，就没有改，但是你的独立写作我改的挺详细的！ 你参考一下！

再一次表示歉意！！！ 2011-03-03 TPO 11 综合 + 独立.doc (24 KB, 下载次数: 1)

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27# Ivan1989 谢谢修改！
原来你们刚开学，要是提前说一下就更好了，呵呵
一起加油

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今天写得完全没状态，请修改的童鞋狠批！！


TPO 14综合
First, the speaker points out that thoughremoving the dead trees quickly provides more space for new trees, this doesn'tnecessarily mean it create a good condition for the growth of new trees. Infact, the composition of dead trees gives many nutrients for the soil andtherefore provides a good condition for new trees. Moving all these dead treesno doubt decrease the quality of the soil, this makes it harder for therecovery of the forest.

Second, the speaker argues that thedecaying wood not only gives a suitable habitat for insect, but moreimportantly it brings many benefits for the forest. For example, there would bemore birds because of the increased insects, which is essential for the forestin the long run.

Third, the speaker points out that theeconomic benefits mentioned in the passage is short-sight. Salvage loggingcould cost a lot from a long-term perspective. For example, the equipment madeof wood from salvage logging usually need higher price to maintain. What more,the job provided by the salvage logging is temporary and couldn't create jobsas the passage claims.


独立作文
Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eatinghabits？

Nowadays, one problem that many parentsworried most is the healthy of their kids, because those young children indulgein junk food and ignore the importance of health diet. For the food child loveto eat are extensively advertised, thus many people conclude that it is theadvertising that result in the unhealthy eating habits. However, as far as I amconcerned, unhealthy eating habit is cause by many factors and the fundamentalreason is the instinct our ancients evolved from evolutionary history.

To begin with, I'd like to point out thatadvertising can not explain all the unhealthy eating habits. One obvious factis not all children who expose to advertising form junk food; this indicatesthat commercial alone can determine the eating habits. Psychological studieshave shown that many other factors such as loneliness, lacking social supportor insufficient education and guidance together decide the probability of theformation of unhealthy eating habit. A well educated kid never eat unhealthilyis a good example of this point.

What more, even we assume that advertisingdo tempt children to eat those food. However, we still can not identify it asthe main reason. As I mentioned above, there are many other factors alsoinvolved in. So the relationship between advertising and unhealthy eatinghabits is superficial but never reveals the real reason. Thus, thoughadvertising and unhealthy eating appears together, we can not make cause-effectinterference based on concurrence, there could be other reasons cause both ofthem, such as technology advancement make it easy to advertise and eat to makejunk food.

Third, under all these factors , the innatepreference for high fat food we involved from evolutionary history is the mostpowerful drive. The most important feature of unhealthy eating is theunbalanced intake of fat and other nutrients such as vegetables. This istotally reasonable under the circumstance where fat is rare and vegetable issufficient. That’s the environment our ancients lived in. Today, our environmentchanged, but our preference for food change for more slowly. In this case, weare vulnerable to the high fat food and advertising.

In conclusion, I don't think advertising isthe main cause of unhealthy eating habit, instead I believe the lag between thechange of our preference and our environment is the underlying mechanism.

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综合：
开头不要写个开头段吗？
First, the speaker points out that though removing the dead trees quickly provides more space for new trees, this doesn'tnecessarily mean it create a good condition for the growth of new trees. Infact, the composition of dead trees gives many nutrients for the soil andtherefore provides a good condition for new trees. Moving all these dead treesno doubt decrease the quality of the soil, this（which） makes it harder for therecovery of the forest.
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Second, the speaker argues that thedecaying wood not only gives a suitable habitat for insect, but moreimportantly it brings many benefits for the forest. For example, there would bemore birds because of the increased insects, which is essential for the forestin the long run.) j5 b8 P! E# h9 l" |2 t

$ g2 K) c3 ~# \0 m1 D7 n2 c$ [Third, the speaker points out that theeconomic benefits mentioned in the passage is short-sighted. Salvage loggingcould cost a lot from a long-term perspective. For example, the equipment madeof wood from salvage logging usually need higher price to maintain.(这里应该是运输的工具直升机等很贵) What more,the job provided by the salvage logging is temporary and couldn't create jobsas the passage claims.
写得挺好的，不过最后一点信息不太准~加油~