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发表于 2011-3-9 02:34:10 |显示全部楼层

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, |% e: @# X! O- `8 K6 PDo you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eatinghabits？
/Nowadays, one problem that many parentsworried most is the healthy of their kids, because those young children indulgein junk food and ignore the importance of health diet. For the food child loveto eat are extensively advertised, thus many people conclude that it is theadvertising that result in the unhealthy eating habits. However, as far as I amconcerned, unhealthy eating habit is cause by many factors and the fundamentalreason is the instinct our ancients evolved from evolutionary history.: c- y2 V3 W4 [* X% o

* ]4 h2 e. a* X0 g# p2 ]) J- Y7 fTo begin with, I'd like to point out that advertising can not explain all the unhealthy eating habits. One obvious fact is not all children who expose to advertising form junk food; this indicates that commercial alone can determine the eating habits. 这句话不是很理解..跟下面一句有联系吗？Psychological studieshave shown that many other factors such as loneliness, lacking social supportor insufficient education and guidance together decide the probability of theformation of unhealthy eating habit. A well educated kid never eat unhealthilyis a good example of this point.
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What more, even we assume that advertisingdo tempt children to eat those food. However, we still can not identify it asthe main reason. As I mentioned above, there are many other factors alsoinvolved in. So the relationship between advertising and unhealthy eatinghabits is superficial but never reveals the real reason. Thus, thoughadvertising and unhealthy eating appears together, we can not make cause-effectinterference based on concurrence, there could be other reasons cause both ofthem, such as technology advancement make it easy to advertise and eat to makejunk food.
- Third, under all these factors , the innatepreference for high fat food we involved from evolutionary history is the mostpowerful drive. The most important feature of unhealthy eating is theunbalanced intake of fat and other nutrients such as vegetables. This istotally reasonable under the circumstance where fat is rare and vegetable issufficient. That’s the environment our ancients lived in. Today, our environmentchanged, but our preference for food change for more slowly. In this case, weare vulnerable to the high fat food and advertising.
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In conclusion, I don't think advertising isthe main cause of unhealthy eating habit, instead I believe the lag between thechange of our preference and our environment is the underlying mechanism
首先不得不说的是作者作文能补个空格吗..好多都忘了打空格了在者感觉每段都说的不是很清楚。。也许你说的观点我没看懂... 感觉有点乱说的上句和下句没有明显的转折..
结尾好象点题点的也很模糊说的错误的请谅解...