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我非常需要作文上高分  虽然现在水平真的非常不够
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但是希望大家能帮忙给意见 让我改进 :handshake

Do u think people should buy things made in their own country, even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else.

Purchasing goods can be a serious thing at any time. Then, the goods itself are taken into account when we decide to buy it or not. Is it good enough to have such high pay? Or, a question I would like to discuss in this essay, where it made from? Some extremists may say, people absolutely need to buy things made by their own country since it totally expresses how patriotic they are. However, others, like me, do not think that idea can hold water. There are some discussions I tend to show for approving my disagreement.

People embrace the idea for a long time, which is if they frequently purchase things outside the country, domestic products will be ignored and local economy can get a recession. As I see, it is misleading. We all know that how important the international trade is. In another word, it can stimulate the development of a country. In china, after opening to the outside world in Qing Dynasty, foreign trade invigorates the domestic economy to a larger extent. Similarly, Europe never would have prospered and never will prosper if they do not look to wider horizons. Hence, certain extremist’s idea which seems to be justified is actually detrimental to their own country.

Considering the choice of buying something, the price is a key element. It is hard to imagine that even though we can not afford the price given by local state, we still need to select the one. How ridiculous it is? A real powerful and influential country is inclusive, like American today, that they are probably to take a positive attitude toward other country’s development but not contradict to it. The cognition of narrow nationalism harms natives and they push themselves to make a wrong choice of things as well as a reputation of their own country in that a country with narrow minded, and inward looking will not be respected by others.

Of course, some advocators claim that does not buy foreign country’s commodity make them feel better, emotionally. I will not fight against the idea. For their own good, they absolutely can choose the one they prefer to as some people can select the one which is cheaper or cater to their taste randomly.

To wind up, people buy things which maximized benefit to them, but not for some odd reasons to force themselves to give up a right choice. In addition, details can always show how a country is especially when the details spur demotic economy. Why should have to pessimistically say that it seems wrong to cheap foreign country due? Only through trading with other counties in a friendly way, can we sell goods to other countries for maximized profits either.

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TPO17 综合

In the listening material, there is a discussion that the human population, the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use has caused much harm to wildlife in American. However, the professor will use 3 reasons to fight against it.

First of all, while reading claims that human populations and settlements make bird’s habitats to vanish, the professor said that even though some species of birds disappear, other types of birds is actually getting a increase is population since the urban development offer larger space for these birds.

Second, the lecture points out that the growing agricultural activities will destroy bird’s habitat. By contrast, the professor said that nowadays, less and less agricultural land is needed and most crops will be produced as agricultural production increase, so they do not need to destroy.

At last, the professor said that unlike the traditional condition, new and toxic pesticide today is invented today and a growing trend of making more unattractive crops for pests has been introduced to people so it to a large extents reduce the need of pesticide.

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独立修改

Purchasing goods can be a serious thing at any time. Then, the goods itself are taken into account when we decide to buy it or not. Is it good enough to have such high pay? Or, a question I would like to discuss in this essay, where it made from? Some extremists may say, people absolutely need to buy things made by their own country since it totally expresses how patriotic they are. However, others, like me, do not think that idea can hold water. There are some discussions I tend to show for approving (to approve) my disagreement.
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People embrace the idea for a long time, which is if they frequently purchase things outside the country, domestic products will be ignored and local economy can get a recession. As I see, it is misleading. We all know that how important the international trade is. In another word, it can stimulate the development of a country. In china, after opening to the outside world in Qing Dynasty, foreign trade invigorates the domestic economy to a larger extent. Similarly, Europe never would have prospered and never will prosper if they do not look to wider horizons. Hence, certain extremist’s idea which seems to be justified is actually detrimental to their own country. , m" D& k0 z! w- ^- h% h$ t

" H& {4 W5 r- PConsidering the choice of buying something, the price is a key element. It is hard to imagine that even though we can not afford the price given by local state, we still need to select the one. How ridiculous it is? A real powerful and influential country is inclusive, like American today, that they are probably to take a positive attitude toward other country’s development but not contradict to it. The cognition of narrow nationalism harms natives and they push themselves to make a wrong choice of things as well as a reputation of their own country in that a country with narrow minded, and inward looking will not be respected by others. ! J7 _( y2 g, N; B5 u5 D2 P
感觉这段写的有点乱，一开头观点不错，但是后来怎么又转向上一段的国家那个角度了？我觉得从消费者的利弊角度些比较好。
Of course, some advocators claim that does not buy foreign country’s commodity make them feel better, emotionally. I will not fight against the idea. For their own good, they absolutely can choose the one they prefer to as some people can select the one which is cheaper or cater to their taste randomly. ; {$ C2 F/ I9 E& z+ B" N
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To wind up, people buy things which maximized benefit to them, but not for some odd reasons to force themselves to give up a right choice. In addition, details can always show how a country is especially when the details spur demotic (domestic) economy. Why should have to pessimistically say that it seems wrong to cheap foreign country due? Only through trading with other counties in a friendly way, can we sell goods to other countries for maximized profits either.

作者一看就是功底不错呀，结构，语言都很纯熟，我觉得应该是高分了，加油！

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In the listening material, there is a discussion that the human population, the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use has caused much harm to wildlife in American. (赞概括能力~) However, the professor will use 3 reasons to fight against it. ; S# r9 j3 g, `) p6 w
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First of all, while reading claims that human populations and settlements make bird’s habitats to vanish, the professor said that even though some species of birds disappear, other types of birds is actually getting a increase is population since the urban development offer larger space for these birds.
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2 I2 b/ C9 q6 O2 x% SSecond, the lecture points out that the growing agricultural activities will destroy bird’s habitat. By contrast, the professor said that nowadays, less and less agricultural land is needed and most crops will be produced as agricultural production increase, so they do not need to destroy.
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At last, the professor said that unlike the traditional condition, new and toxic pesticide today is invented today and a growing trend of making more unattractive crops for pests has been introduced to people so it to a large extents reduce the need of pesticide.

听力的部分需要在充实一下，另外，建议听力部分多用听力中的原话。信息量是得分点~
我觉得楼主水平不错，应该能得高分~

乡亲们跟我上UID: 2363614

Purchasing goods can be a serious thing at any time. Then, the goods itself are taken into account when we decide to buy it or not. Is it good enough to have such high pay? Or, a question I would like to discuss in this essay, where it made from? Some extremists may say, people absolutely need to buy things made by their own country since it totally expresses how patriotic they are. However, others, like me, do not think that idea can hold water. There are some discussions I tend to show for approving my disagreement. （个人觉得第一段稍微有点长）

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People embrace the idea for a long time, which is if they frequently purchase things outside the country, domestic products will be ignored and local economy can get (into) a recession. （觉得这一句的语序有点别扭，我觉得可以这么说 There is a prevalent saying that if people frequently pruchase...）As I see, it is misleading. We all know that how important the international trade is. In another word(改成actually 或者 in fact 好像更通顺~), it can stimulate the development of a country. In china, after opening to the outside world in Qing Dynasty, foreign trade invigorates the domestic economy to a larger extent. Similarly, Europe never would have prospered and never will prosper if they do not look to wider horizons. Hence, certain extremist’s idea which seems to be justified is actually detrimental to their own country.

Considering the choice of buying something, the price is a key element. It is hard to imagine that even though we can not afford the price given by local state, we still need to select the one. How ridiculous it is? A real powerful and influential country is inclusive, like American today, that they are probably to take a positive attitude toward other country’s development but not contradict to it. （有点读不懂）The cognition of narrow nationalism harms natives and they push themselves to make a wrong choice of things as well as a reputation of their own country in that a country with narrow minded, and inward looking will not be respected by others.

Of course, some advocators claim that does not buy （改成ing形式）foreign country’s commodity make them feel better, emotionally. I will not fight against the idea. For their own good, they absolutely can choose the one they prefer to as some people can select the one which is cheaper or cater to their taste randomly. 9 f$ v4 ]. Q$ S+ d

To wind up, people buy things which maximized benefit to them, but not for some odd reasons to force themselves to give up a right choice. In addition, details can always show how a country is especially when the details spur demotic economy. Why should have to pessimistically say that it seems wrong to cheap foreign country due? Only through trading with other counties in a friendly way, can we sell goods to other countries for maximized profits either.（结尾段又这么多论证的部分，这些内容应该放在中间的部分吧）

呵呵，你给我改的时候说我开头结尾太短，可是我觉得你的又太长。。
另外，有些过长的句子尽量少用，毕竟ibt不是gre aw

ChwyUID: 3027653

3.11 独立

People would be happier if they had fewer possessions.

When we see millionaires presented in television, we may admire them for their reputation and we arbitrarily regard them as happy person. However, as a bystander, we can not really understand the rich’s life and whether they are happy or not. There are some arguments for my point.

Pursuing for what we want can make us feel happy while we have few possessions. Conversely, the rich might have already got everything they want, so they are living under a satisfied condition that has no target. Coly Rudner is, of course, a chairman in Photo Mon Company. He said after he got richer, he was not eager for pursuing higher salaries anymore, which directly lowered his efficiency in working. Lacking the motivation, people do everything can not be happy since they do not know what they are seeking for.

Millionaires always attract people’s eyes. People tend to make friends with them in that they are successful people and own a huge property. Whereas, some ill-intended person because of it, connect with them for obtaining something, such situation can broke the rich’s heart, and cause them to doubt every one’s heart. It can never be cheerful when people find someone approach him or her just for money. Also, bad person are probably to do things detrimental to them for money, and to endanger the rich, their families, even their friends. How terrible it is？ They can not feel happy since they need to be aware of each person around them.

Admittedly, when people have more possessions, they can do things they want to do but not worry about how they can raise enough money for tuition, price of purchasing a car and so forth. However, in the process of struggling for it, they can make real friends and get more happiness.

To wind up, while people have few possessions, few things can bother him or her but happiness since they do not need to worry about people’s motivation around them and what they are lacking of spur them to get better. In addition, they can make real friends which are hard to access for the rich. Why should pessimistically say that they will not happy because they can not buy a car or something else? Only through endless pursing for better life, they can improve themselves and be happier.

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综合

The reading passage claims that a type of evergreen tree started to die out in the 1950’s Torreya taxifoha and there are some solutions to save it while the professor in the listening materials considers all of them will not be successful.

First of all, the professor points out that Torreya will not have the condition to grow any where, although the reading passage refutes it in that Northern Florida’s microclimate is very favorable to Torreya’s growth.
这个点听了好多遍没有听懂！！！不知道没有听懂的时候可以怎么瞎掰？

Second, the lecture deems that moving Torreya to an entirely different location can be a good solution. However, the professor said that this solution has been used to a kind of tree and the result was the tree spread out quickly and kill the native plants, including those trees originally have already endangered.

At last, according to the reading passage said, preserving Torreya in research centers, the professor maintains because of the population of those trees, research do not have the capacity to afford such a huge number. In addition, the population of Toreeya can be captured trees can not resist diseases in the center since they need a larger space to survive as in wild.

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6# Chwy 3.11号独立作文修改 3.11 independent writing by Chwy (rev. by hcp4715).doc (30 KB, 下载次数: 10)

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When we see millionaires presented in television, we may admire them for their reputation and we arbitrarily regard them as happy person. However, as a bystander（bystanders）, we can not really understand the rich’s life and whether they are happy or not. There are some arguments for my point.(第一段太含蓄了，没给出明确观点啊)- g# R) m
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Pursuing for what we want can make us feel happy while we have few possessions. Conversely, the rich might have already got everything they want, so they are living under a satisfied condition that has no target. Coly Rudner is, of course, a chairman in Photo Mon Company. He said after he got richer, he was not eager for pursuing higher salaries anymore, which directly lowered his efficiency in working. Lacking the motivation, people do everything（do和后面can not 两个谓语了，改成no matter what they do, people can not feel happy since blablabla） can not be happy since they do not know what they are seeking for. 3 ^6 h: m$ d$ Z9 e& x7 D; K! G5 t

Millionaires always attract people’s eyes. People tend to make friends with them in that they are successful people and own a huge property. Whereas, some ill-intended person because of it(??没看懂), connect with them for obtaining something, such situation can broke the rich’s heart, and cause them to doubt every one’s heart. （这句话太长了，我觉得尽量避免写这么长的句子）It can never be cheerful when people find someone approach him or her just for money. Also, bad person are probably to do things detrimental to them for money, and to endanger the rich, their families, even their friends. How terrible it is？ They can not feel happy since they need to be aware of each person around them.

Admittedly, when people have more possessions, they can do things they want to do but not worry about how they can raise enough money for tuition, price of purchasing a car and so forth. However, in the process of struggling for it, they can make real friends and get more happiness. 3 z- l/ }3 t3 _; N) n
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To wind up, while people have few possessions, few things can bother him or her but happiness since they do not need to worry about people’s motivation around them and what they are lacking of spur them to get better. In addition, they can make real friends which are hard to access for the rich. Why should pessimistically say that they will not happy because they can not buy a car or something else? Only through endless pursing for better life, they can improve themselves and be happier.

我觉得lz想的太深了，想表达的思想有点多，我觉得可以写的简单一点，毕竟不是gre作文。
另外，长句里语法错误有点多，读着有点费解。但愿能帮到你

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The reading passage claims that a type of evergreen tree started to die out in the 1950’s Torreya taxifoha and there are some solutions to save it while the professor in the listening materials considers all of them will not be successful. 3 O( U. P( ^9 l) V

vFirst of all, the professor points out that Torreya will not have the condition to grow any where, although the reading passage refutes it in that Northern Florida’s microclimate is very favorable to Torreya’s growth. 9 z. Z3 P, [' H% L: }4 i* J
这个点听了好多遍没有听懂！！！不知道没有听懂的时候可以怎么瞎掰？(是lecture refutes reading passage加油哦！Second, the lecture deems that moving Torreya to an entirely different location can be a good solution.不是lecture是reading passage However, the professor said that this solution has been used to a kind of tree and the result was the tree spread out quickly and kill the native plants, including those trees originally have already endangered.
At last, according to the reading passage said, preserving Torreya in research centers, the professor maintains because of the population of those trees, research do not have the capacity to afford such a huge number. In addition, the population of Toreeya can be captured trees can not resist diseases in the center since they need a larger space to survive as in wild.建议精听材料 对照着原文 然后多多模仿模板 范文 加油

ChwyUID: 3027653

9# 乡亲们跟我上


  我不是刻意写长句 因为之前用短句 别人说我一段看起来散散的 我也怕这样

ChwyUID: 3027653

3.12 独立

For future career success, is relate well to other people more important than studying hard at school?

When we step into the society, we are hunting for job. At the moment, the first that people are thinking about is whether they possess enough knowledge or if they know some familiar people in related department has excited people’s attention. As far as I am concerned, knowledge learned from school is prior to making more friends for future career success, since getting along with a wide variety of people is energy-consuming, and only can actual strength determine things in most cases.

Concerning the development of company, employee would like to take in fresh blood that can bring uncountable benefits for company. Little boss choose to take a risk of receiving an unskilled staff regardless of the pressure given by other staff and the progress of firm originally should have since the employment pattern is wrong and probably enable them to miss the real talents. In this way, people who want to get a job through the back door have little chance to reach it. Besides, compared with past, lots of people have already revealed the truth in Social Censor Report magazine that even though they have relatives in the company, they still could not be enrolled in. Congratulations for the good social atmosphere day by day, people who master the real knowledge and useful skills is respected and can be taken into account by famous company to a larger extent.

People who can not deal with things good will be weeded out by company in any cases. Even though they are working for certain company thanks to the assistance of friends or family, they do not contribute to the firm at all. As the time goes by, not only staff cast doubt on the real reason he or her was chosen into the company, but his or her own work can not lead to success as well. Think about it, they realized how easy they get the job is, and they did not experience how hard other people are seeking for jobs, hence the idea that they take all of these for granted and are not worry about the possibility of losing the job if they do not work well one day. That is to say, they, in some sense, have absence of sense of crisis. Consequently, they got nothing about the carrier.

Admittedly, relating well with others can anyway have relatively more opportunities to win a position in a company on the grounds that friends take great efforts to help them, such as introducing them to a high-level administer of a company so that they can show themselves as good as they can. However, this alone is insufficient to contradict the discussion I mentioned above.

To wind up, studying hard is always a good thing allow for the future daily life or career while relationships can not serve everything and is easily to from a bad social climate. Why should pessimistically to day that it is a must to choose one for benefiting future career? Only though combine with these two factors, they will make their jobs more successfully.

Go2011GoUID: 3006241

没有看到你的3.12综合哈

ChwyUID: 3027653

13# Go2011Go

抱歉 写晚了



3.12 独立

In the reading materials, there is an argument that buzzers should reveal that they are being paid to promote anything. However, the student in the listing materials uses three reasons to fight against it.

First, even though the reading passage claims that buzzes should tell truth, the student maintains that buzzers indeed express what their real thinking to people but not lying so that consumers can get the truth about the product from buzzers.

Second, the student says that unlike the passage’s perspective, even if buzzers do not show their real identity, people do not believe everything from them. They’d prefer to ask questions to buzzers, such as the price, service and so forth. But if buzzers do not have answer, they’ll buy it.

At last, the reading passage considers the behavior of buzzer’s hidden for real identity will harm social relationship. By contrast, the student said that if product is bad, a company will not hire buzzers. So, if people buy it, they would gonna like it. In this case, they are more likely to trust and open to people.

好混乱…

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