Michelle薇若谰的作文贴---Daily Writing

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With the advent of the diverse entertainments, various kinds of movies and TV programs are bombarding our young generation. Today children are bewildered from how to kill the time to what to be done to make their time killed(和前半句意思一样？). As parents, some argue that if a child wants to do well in school, they should undoubtedly limit the time of watching TV programs and movies（argue that后面是从句吧 但是主句不完整啊，还有，句子的主语应该是parents吧）. Others do not agree with it for they deem that TV could provide certain knowledge and joy for the children. However, I will side with the former for a couple of reasons. 7 }0 [8 L0 d7 z9 U. p. T0 ~4 D


To begin with, the process of watching TV is a passive way of receiving information, so children cannot develop positive thinking and critical thinking ability. In the meantime, children are not able to control themselves and they will unconsciously spend far more time in front of it. It is reported those children who spend long time in front of the TV set and movie have a higher ratio of obesity and shortsightedness. What’s worse, they are likely to be autistic and less capable of communication. The additional time to watch TV should be distributed/spent/allocated（…去掉…）on more meaningful things such as cultivating a hobby of reading, singing, dancing, sporting, or playing a music instrument. Sporting enhance health.（这句有点突兀） If doing well in positive hobbies like dancing and playing instruments, the children could more easily build confidence and perseverance.  

Moreover, the quality of the TV programs has gone worse than before. Programs and movies which are detrimental to children spring out one after another. Programs like violence, pornography, and soap opera are often seen on TV and movie theatre. However, the children lack proper judgment on these programs, thus it is hard for them to tell right from wrong. Therefore they will be easily influenced by the negative content of the media. What’s worse, they will even form bad habits from imitating the characters in the TV serials and movies. Take my nephew as an example. He is big fan of Hong Kong TV serial “Young and Dangerous” which depicts stories of juvenile gang group. He feels that it is so cool to be a leader of a team and suppress others by violence. Nevertheless, this is a misconception but popular among many adolescents of his age. Under such circumstance, for parents, of course, it is right time to offer certain guidance and restriction to the immature kids instead of leaving them to the easy “TV babysitters”. / ?' }9 J* _+ d& D  X0 }
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To conclude, if a child want to do well in the school, parents certainly should limit the TV and movie time for too much of which will do harm to the child’s both physical and mental health.
逻辑很完整，用词很用心 真的不错！
小小的建议，文章结尾处提到了生理和心理，这两个方面很完整，很好，为什么不能再两个分论点中提到呢？就是在开头句，首先在生理方面。。。然后再心理方面。。。这样显得文章更有逻辑！