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1# austen06
3.17号作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people at your age?


Every day in our lives, we might encounter problems of various kinds: we might fail in an important exam, or do not get along well with our classmates or even have our money stolen. Under most of these situations, we need to turn to others for advice whether they be people older than us or people who are of the same age as us. Both of them could offer us with the suggestions, which will help us, yet I think the advice from those at our age would be more valuable.

Admittedly, older people could provide us with quite essential advice for us to get out of trouble because it is likely that older people have had similar problems themselves and they are more experienced than us in dealing with the problems. For instance, last week I was trying to cook some dishes by myself. Not long after I put some oil in a pan, the pan caught fire. I was too frightened to take any actions. Just at that time, grandpa quickly told me to put a lid on the pan. I did that and several seconds later, the fire was put off. It is the experience grandpa has that helps me out.

However, we could not count on the advice of older people. On many occasions, our peers or classmates would give us more beneficial advices than the older people.

First, our peers or classmates are of the same age as us and they could understand our problems better than the older people do. Thus, their advice is especially valuable in many areas. For example, there is a chasm in understandings of love between even the adjacent two generations. If we have problems in our relationships with our girlfriends or boyfriends, we certainly would not ask our parents what we could do. They would give us the advice based on their own understanding of love, which we would find of no great help. On the contrary, our friends would better understand our problems and give advice, which are more appropriate.

Moreover, it is undeniable that the communication between older people and us would be very formal. Just think what we would talk with our teachers or parents. We would definitely talk some topics with them while hold back others. In this situation, the older people would not provide useful information to us simply because we do not tell them the whole story. Nevertheless, the opposite is true when we talk with people of the same age. We could talk everything we want and they can grasp our worries better. Therefore, their advice would be of higher value.

To sum up, older people could help us in many ways with their advice. But our peers and classmates who are the same age as us would understand our problems better and offer us more useful and valuable advice.

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3.17 综合


The main idea of the listening that dinosaurs were not endotherms is contradictory to the main idea of the writing that dinosaurs were endothemes.

First, the author maintains that fossils of dinosaurs were found in the polar regions, the environment of which were not suitable for non-endotherms animals to survive. So this is a proof that dinosaurs were endothemes. However, the professor refutes this evidence by saying that the climate when dinosaurs lived was much different from that of today. And dinosaurs could either migrate or hibernate when it was freezing in the polar regions.

Moreover, according to the writing, the reason that dinosaurs put its legs underneath its body is that it would be suitable for them to run, just like modern endotherms. On the contrary, the professor thinks that the leg position allows the dinosaurs to support more weight, which is beneficial to their survival.

Finally, the writer has an idea that the haversian canals in the bone strctures of dinosaurs indicate that they could grow rapidly, which is also a trait of endothermys. However, the professor disagrees. She thinks there are also growth rings in dinosaurs' bones and there growth rings show that the growth is periodically, which deviates from the characteristic of endotherms. Thus dinosaurs could not be endotherms.

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The main idea of the listening that dinosaurs were not endotherms is contradictory to the main idea of the writing that dinosaurs were endothemes.2 C* q/ P0 z; k

First, the author maintains that fossils of dinosaurs were found in the polar regions, the environment of which were not suitable for non-endotherms animals to survive. So this is a proof that dinosaurs were endothemes. (前面的这句有点罗嗦了)However, the professor refutes this evidence by saying that the climate when dinosaurs lived was much different from that of today. And dinosaurs could either migrate or hibernate when it was freezing in the polar regions.! ^" C3 ?3 e( p; K/ v. V
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Moreover, according to the writing（passage?）, the reason that dinosaurs put(改为have好) its legs underneath its body is that it would be suitable for them to run, just like modern endotherms. On the contrary, the professor thinks that the leg position allows the dinosaurs to support more weight, which is beneficial to their survival.（加上一句，不能说明是恒温动物）
# _, w! ^# s6 rFinally, the writer has an idea that the haversian canals in the bone strctures of dinosaurs indicate that they could grow rapidly, which is also a trait of endothermys. However, the professor disagrees. She thinks there are also growth rings in dinosaurs' bones and there growth rings show that the growth is periodically, which deviates from the characteristic of endotherms. Thus dinosaurs could not be endotherms.

要点很全，很好！加油

austen06UID: 2841836

3.18独立
Do you agree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.


Economic issues have always been in the center of both the public life and the personal life. What economic policies should the government make in order to boost the development of the economy? Where the individuals should put their money so that they could get a profit in return? The list goes on and on. To answer the series of economic questions, it is necessary for everyone, especially the high school students to learn basic economics.

To begin with, many high school students argue that there is no need for them to learn basic economics because they do not want to have a career as an accountant and things like that. However, this belief is completely wrong. Everyone in the society has to make personal finance decisions no matter what job he or she would like to do in the future. Only those who have basic understanding of the economics can make the best decision beneficial to them. For example, suppose someone has some money he has not spent. He could use this money to buy stocks or government bonds or simply put them in the banks. Basic economics knowledge could tell him that the higher benefits, the higher risks. Having known the nature of the three, the person might come up with a plan to distribute money on the three so that he could get certain dividend or interest under comparatively small risks. Therefore, an understanding of basic economics is vital in the success of personal finance.

Furthermore, learning basic economics could enable the high school students to understand politics better, thus they would better participate the public life whose core is politics. For instance, in 2008 when the world financial crisis was sweeping around the global, the Federal government decided to bail out the banks on the Wall Street instead of helping the people who suffered. If a high school student has learnt economics, chances are he would know the importance of the financial institutions in the development of the economy. So he might stop complaining the government's decision and support it. It is just a training to be a good citizen in a society where public decisions are made collectively.

To sum up, high school students should pick up some basic economics, which could equip them with the knowledge they need in the future to have better personal finance and a decent participant of the public life. So each high school should put basic economics in its curriculum.

austen06UID: 2841836

3.18 综合


The professor refutes all of the three theories explaining the function of the Chaco structures inthe Chaco Canyon in New Mexico.

First, according to the reading material, the Chaco structures were purely residential, because there seems to be some similarities between Chaco great houses and "apartment buildings" in which many people lived for centuries at Taos. However, the professor disagrees. He thinks that the outside of the building resembles that of a living place, but in the inside, there are simply not many fireplaces for the residents to cook. So it could not be purly residential.

Moreover, the author thinks that the Chaco structures were suitable for storing grain maize for they were quite spacious. In contrast, the lecturere refutes the idea by saying that no evidence including traces of maize or maize container has been found to support the food storing function of the Chaco structures.

Finally, another theory in the passage that the houses could be used as ceremonial centers because many pots were found in a mound close to one house, called Pueblo Alto, and this finding could be interpreted that people gathered at Pueblo Alto for special ceremonies. On the contrary, the professor thinks that this interpretation might not be right, and the mould may be just a place where people dumped trash because building material and construction tools were also found there.

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3.17独立改
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people at your age? 9 ?6 c/ s9 O: ~+ `/ H7 r

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& [- G! F7 F! T8 W) q" `Every day in our lives, we might encounter problems of various kinds: we might fail in an important exam, or do not get along well with our classmates or even have our money stolen. Under most of these situations, we need to turn to others for advice whether they be people older than us or people who are of the same age as us. Both of them could offer us with the suggestions, which will help us, yet I think the advice from those at our age would be more valuable.
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: r! _3 w9 C9 f  lAdmittedly, older people could provide us with quite essential advice for us to get out of trouble because it is likely that older people have had similar problems themselves and they are more experienced than us in dealing with the problems. For instance, last week I was trying to cook some dishes by myself. Not long after I put some oil in a pan, the pan caught fire. I was too frightened to take any actions. Just at that time, grandpa quickly told me to put a lid on the pan. I did that and several seconds later, the fire was put off. It is the experience grandpa has that helps me out.0 N2 J/ O5 ~+ s* x) v0 r4 a1 u

" {& K: e4 v; T( y' C+ Q/ S. d+ Z/ @However, we could not count on the advice of older people. On many occasions, our peers or classmates would give us more beneficial advices than the older people.
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First, our peers or classmates are of the same age as us and they could understand our problems better than the older people do. Thus, their advice is especially valuable in many areas. For example, there is a chasm in understandings of love between even the adjacent two generations. If we have problems in our relationships with our girlfriends or boyfriends, we certainly would not ask our parents what we could do. They would give us the advice based on their own understanding of love, which we would find of no great help. On the contrary, our friends would better understand our problems and give advice, which are more appropriate.
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2 z- u8 U. P& K. q$ h1 HMoreover, it is undeniable that the communication between older people and us would be very formal. Just think what we would talk with our teachers or parents. We would definitely talk some topics with them while hold back others. In this situation, the older people would not provide useful information to us simply because we do not tell them the whole story. Nevertheless, the opposite is true when we talk with people of the same age. We could talk everything we want and they can grasp our worries better. Therefore, their advice would be of higher value.. e3 G2 _8 N" `% y7 n/ E' G
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To sum up, older people could help us in many ways with their advice. But our peers and classmates who are the same age as us would understand our problems better and offer us more useful and valuable advice.

基本上没发现什么问题，但是第3段最好补上一些hold back的例子。只有理由太空洞了

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3.19 综合
The listening material refutes the drawbacks of the communal online encycolopedias that are presented in the reading material.

First, according to the reading material, there are many inaccurate information or even errors in the online encyclopedia due to the lack of academic credientials of the contributors. Traditional encyclopedias are more accurate. However, the listening material has a point that traditional encyclopedias are not perfect either, and the errors remain in them for decades.

Also, the author maintains that the online encyclopedias are vulnerable from hacking and even if the original information on the online encyclopedias is right, it could be changed. In contrast, the lecturer talks about two ways that could prevent hacking. One is to set some crucial facts to read-only formats. The other is to have some special editors to monitor the changes made to the encyclopedia and delete the malicious changes.

Finally, the writer continues to complain that the encyclopedia focus on many trivial and popular topics which could creat a false impression of what is important and what is not important. On the contrary, the professor thinks the wider coverage of topics reflect people's diverse interests, unlike the traditional encyclopedias, whose topics are selected only by scholars. And the wide coverage feature of the online encyclopedias is not a demerit but the strongest benefit.

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3.19独立


Do you agree with the following statement? In order to be successful, it is more important to be like others other than to be different from everybody else.


How to be successful is the central topic of this world. High school students may consider seeking further education in one of the top Universities as success. Businessmen may equate success with promotion and rising salaries. No matter how people define success, they generally agree that in order to achieve success, one should either copy what others do, that is to be more like others or have his/her own characteristic, that is to differentiate him/her from everybody else. In my opinion, there is no universal answer to this; every success person have some common habits while they succeed in their special way.

To begin with, there are some traits that nearly all successful people should have: hard-working and perseverance. The road to success is not an easy one; everybody longing for success should work hard no matter what their occupations are. For example, Thomas Edison, the great inventor of the 19th century, tried about six thousand times before he discovered the suitable material to make the filament of the bulbs. Another example would be Mark Zuckburger, the founder of facebook which is now the most famous social network around the global. He and his teammates have a huge facination on social networks, and devoted enormous efforts and time in developing the network applications that are used on Facebook. What drive Edison toward success is the same as what drive Zuckburger toward success. In terms of some universal traits of success, everybody eager for success should have. And there is no exception on this. Therefore, one should be like others when it comes to these traits.

However, having the success characteristics do not guarantee success for the individuals. Every successful people is different; each of them have their own specialties and drawbacks, thus they succeed differently. For example, Bill Gates and Steve Jobs are the most eminent names in the computer industry, they have designed their operation system Windows and Mac respectively. Yet there are massive difference between Windows and Mac and they have their own ways to meet the needs of the customers. So to succeed it is not enough to copy what others do, one has to have his own ideas.

To sum up, success is something cannot be obtained by solely copy what others do nor by differentiate oneself from other people. Besides having the common successful characteristics, one should develop his special idea in order to achieve success.

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6# austen06

3月18独立修改
Economic issues have always been in the center of both the public life and the personal life. What economic policies should the government make in order to boost the development of the economy? Where the individuals should put their money so that they could get a profit in return? The list goes on and on. To answer the series of economic questions, it is necessary for everyone, especially the high school students to learn basic economics.
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9 Z' @$ q3 X, v4 ]1 o# M8 v6 r# C1 JTo begin with, many high school students argue that there is no need for them to learn basic economics because they do not want to have a career as an accountant and things like that. However, this belief is completely wrong. Everyone in the society has to make personal finance decisions no matter what job he or she would like to do in the future. Only those who have basic understanding of the economics can make the best decision beneficial to them. For example, suppose someone has some money he has not spent. He could use this money to buy stocks or government bonds or simply put them in the banks. Basic economics knowledge could tell him that the higher benefits, the higher risks. Having known the nature of the three, the person might come up with a plan to distribute money on the three so that he could get certain dividend or interest under comparatively small risks. Therefore, an understanding of basic economics is vital in the success of personal finance.
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Furthermore, learning basic economics could enable the high school students to understand politics better, thus they would better participate +in the public life whose core is politics. For instance, in 2008 when the world financial crisis was sweeping around the global（global是形容词，应改为globe或world）, the Federal government decided to bail out the banks on the Wall Street instead of helping the people who suffered. If a high school student has learnt economics, chances are he would know the importance of the financial institutions in the development of the economy. So he might stop complaining the government's decision and support it. It is just a training to be a good citizen in a society where public decisions are made collectively. z8 m3 ^2 L' C/ P  t: L, o/ o
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To sum up, high school students should pick up some basic economics, which could equip them with the knowledge they need in the future to have better personal finance and a decent participant of the public life. So each high school should put basic economics in its curriculum

写得很棒，字数多、词汇量大、逻辑通顺，语言也很流畅，继续加油！

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6# austen06


3月18综合修改
The professor refutes all of the three theories explaining the function of the Chaco structures in the Chaco Canyon in New Mexico.
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First, according to the reading material, the Chaco structures were purely residential, because there seems to be some similarities between Chaco great houses and "apartment buildings" in which many people lived for centuries at Taos. However, the professor disagrees. He thinks that the outside of the building resembles that of a living place, but in the inside, there are simply not many fireplaces for the residents to cook. So it could not be purely residential.(阐述似乎有点太简单，要是能多提供些细节就更好了，如可以容纳100户人家，却只有10个火炉)- V: Y, K7 b) X% e0 x, M$ k
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Moreover, the author thinks that the Chaco structures were suitable for storing grain maize for they were quite spacious. In contrast, the lecturer refutes the idea by saying that no evidence including traces of maize or maize container has been found to support the food storing function of the Chaco structures.
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Finally, another theory in the passage that the houses could be used as ceremonial centers because many pots were found in a mound close to one house, called Pueblo Alto, and this finding could be interpreted that people gathered at Pueblo Alto for special ceremonies. On the contrary, the professor thinks that this interpretation might not be right, and the mound may be just a place where people dumped trash because building material and construction tools were also found there.
其实点都还抓的挺准确的，要是能阐述的再详细点就更好了，再多讲些听力中的内容，加油！

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3.17 revised
不好意思啊，这周有点忙，呵呵

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.18 综合改
The professor refutes all of the three theories explaining the function of the Chaco structures inthe Chaco Canyon in New Mexico.

First, according to the reading material, the Chaco structures were purely residential, because there seems to be some similarities between Chaco great houses and "apartment buildings" in which many people lived for centuries at Taos. However, the professor disagrees. He thinks that the outside of the building resembles that of a living place, but in the inside, there are simply not many fireplaces for the residents to cook. So it could not be purly residential. （前面reading的内容可以简略一下，然后把lecture中的例子描述一下最好）

Moreover, the author thinks that the Chaco structures were suitable for storing grain maize for they were quite spacious. In contrast, the lecturere（lecturer） refutes the idea by saying that no evidence including traces of maize or maize container has been found to support the food storing function of the Chaco structures.

Finally, another theory in the passage that the houses could be used as ceremonial centers because many pots were found in a mound close to one house, called Pueblo Alto, and this finding could be interpreted that people gathered at Pueblo Alto for special ceremonies. On the contrary, the professor thinks that this interpretation might not be right, and the mould may be just a place where people dumped trash because building material and construction tools were also found there.（pots的点漏掉了！！！）

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.19 综合改
The listening material refutes the drawbacks of the communal online encycolopedias that are presented in the reading material.

First, according to the reading material, there are many inaccurate information or even errors in the online encyclopedia due to the lack of academic credientials of the contributors. Traditional encyclopedias are more accurate. However, the listening material has a point that traditional encyclopedias are not perfect either, and the errors remain in them for decades. (lecture给的论点有写到了，但是论据还是应该提一下的 traditional …. Last for a decade )

Also, the author maintains that the online encyclopedias are vulnerable from hacking and even if the original information on the online encyclopedias is right, it could be changed. In contrast, the lecturer talks about two ways that could prevent hacking. One is to set some crucial facts to read-only formats. The other is to have some special editors to monitor the changes made to the encyclopedia and delete the malicious changes.

Finally, the writer continues to complain that the encyclopedia focus on many trivial and popular topics which could creat a false impression of what is important and what is not important. On the contrary, the professor thinks the wider coverage of topics reflect people's diverse interests, unlike the traditional encyclopedias, whose topics are selected only by scholars. And the wide coverage feature of the online encyclopedias is not a demerit but the strongest benefit. （最好提一下，是因为space的原因，才导致两者的不同。）

看过你几篇的综合作文，总体说逻辑、语言、衔接都很不错！！你比较喜欢先把reading讲了什么，然后再说lecture怎么反驳的这种方式。但是，个人认为，在你阐述lecture的时候，不要过于简单。虽然论点都有，但是支撑他的论据还是应该提出来的。否则给人的感觉就是你写reading写得比较完整，但是在lecture那方面就有欠缺。。。 继续加油！！！

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3.19独立


Do you agree with the following statement? In order to be successful, it is more important to be like others other than to be different from everybody else.
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How to be successful is the central topic of this world. High school students may consider seeking further education in one of the top Universities as success. Businessmen may equate success with promotion and rising salaries. No matter how people define success, they generally agree that in order to achieve success, one should either copy what others do, that is to be more like others or have his/her own characteristic, that is to differentiate him/her from everybody else. In my opinion, there is no universal answer to this; every success（ful） person have some common habits while they succeed in their special way.
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To begin with, there are some traits that nearly all successful people should have: hard-working and perseverance. The road to success is not an easy one; everybody longing for success should work hard no matter what their occupations are. For example, Thomas Edison, the great inventor of the 19th century, tried about six thousand times before he discovered the suitable material to make the filament of the bulbs. Another example would be Mark Zuckburger（nice example！）, the founder of facebook which is now the most famous social network around the global. He and his teammates have a huge facination on social networks, and devoted enormous efforts and time in developing the network applications that are used on Facebook. What drive Edison toward success is the same as what drive Zuckburger toward success. In terms of some universal traits of success, everybody eager for success should have. And there is no exception on this. Therefore, one should be like others when it comes to these traits.+ `; I: K4 `% J: ~1 q  L( j

However, having the success characteristics do not guarantee success for the individuals. Every successful people is different; each of them have their own specialties and drawbacks, thus they succeed differently. For example, Bill Gates and Steve Jobs are the most eminent names in the computer（建议改成IT） industry, they have designed their operation system Windows and Mac respectively. Yet there are massive difference between Windows and Mac and they have their own ways to meet the needs of the customers. So to succeed it is not enough to copy what others do, one has to have his own ideas.1 S; d- _! g; v$ H' K



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To sum up, success is something cannot be obtained by solely copy what others do nor by differentiate oneself from other people. Besides having the common successful characteristics, one should develop his special idea in order to achieve success.


文章采用的是中立的观点，不过似乎第三段的内容稍显单薄了一些（例子还是蛮多的，不过要是多些因果论述就好了）。其实个人不是很推荐使用中立观点，因为篇幅和时间原因，不大容易把两方面的观点都说清楚。个人建议，有什么改的不对的再多讨论哈~
一起加油！