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3月21号 独立作文 （402字，30’）
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Do young people have to be able to pan and organize due to the complex society?
With the increasingly development of society, the demographic situation of society is becoming more complex. Thus it's more crucial for young people to improve their ability to maintain competitive. And I firmly believe that the ability to plan and organize is one of the most essential characters required to elite youth. Here I am going to demonstrate some reasons for this statement.
First of all, a good plan could accelerate the working efficiency considerably. In the complex society, the competition among young people is fierce. Thus efficiency and effectiveness weight significantly in the process of success. If a person is as twice efficient as another one, he/she could complete as twice amount of work as another does. The employer would definitely hire the previous one. A good plan in daily life could help you know clearly of what the goal is and how to approach this goal. Therefore, with high cognition in mind, we could be more easily to achieve higher efficiency during work.
In addition, a good plan brings benefits to help us concentrate on our own work. In modern society, there are too many alternatives present in front of us. We may be distracted away from what we need to do. With the help of organizing, however, we could concentrate more to the right business. For instance, while we are searching materials for academic issues in the Internet, we could be easily distracted by other things more attractive, such as Facebook, chatting in skype. As a result, we may spend a whole morning without any proceed in academic issue. On the contrary, once we have had organized well before browsing, we could know what we should now and when we should finish it. Under this pressure of organizing, we would be more concentrated to finish the tasks.
All in all, a good plan is one necessity in the path to success, especially in the complicated modern society. Without a good plan, we may get lost in numerous businesses need be dealt with in the same time. Once we get a good plan, we can concentrate on one thing and go through it effectively.

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修改好了，写的不错

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3月22号独立作文

Should parents take a hand in the future of children?
There is always full of controversial discussion in the topic that whether parents should intervene the future of their children. Most parents cannot help stopping taking a hand in the decision of their children after kids are grown up. Admittedly, the parents are more experienced when encountering unexpected situation. Moreover parents have obtained more social resource which could be significantly advantageous to the development of their children in society. Nevertheless, I still suggest children should be allowed to have full rights to exercise their life.

First of all, I think that children should not rely on their parents after eighteen. And if parents continue to determine the future of children, the kids would never learn to be independent in their life. Independence is of most importance in man's life. Parents could help their children once or twice within their capacity. However, as children grown up, parents would finally find they could no longer be capable to help them. Therefore, it's always a wise decision to cultivate the independence property of children as early as possible.

In addition, the decision of parents may be not suitable to their children in most cases. Only the children know what is most attractive and suitable to themselves. The way that parents decide, in most cases, are boring to their children. Without interest and passion, children could not achieve to the expectation of parents even though with the help o parents. Moreover, I believe children are rational enough when making decisions related to the future. The most frequently used reason of parents' intervening is the claim that children could not make the rational decision by themselves, which I think is nonsense. Nowadays, as people get information from numerous media, people are becoming mature earlier. And kids could be fully aware of what they are doing and what they want to become. In today's situation, kids are completely capable to make rational decision by themselves. Therefore the worries of parents could not be the reason to intervene.

All in all, parents should liberate their children as long as they are capable to make rational decision. By full freedom of managing their life, children could become more independent and mature.

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3.25 independent writing

Is health care more important than environment forgovernment?
The discussion about whether government should emphasizemore on health care issues than environment issues is controversial evenbetween the officials and senators in the congress. Despite that both aspectsare essential to current society, I believe that health care issues are more detrimental.
First of all, health care issues could bring direct benefitsto citizens in the short run, while environment issues would cause effect inindefinite long-term period. Like the health care bill proposed by Mr. Obama,the health care issues could protect the health care welfare of citizens rightafter endorsement. Consequently, citizens could pay less to see the doctor andreceive better care for their bodies. Thus, the satisfaction about thegovernment of citizens would rise up significantly due to direct benefits tothem. Therefore, government would be supported by more people. And thisgovernment would be viewed as a really responsible one. With predominantsupport by civilians, a lot of policies proposed by government would encountermuch less suspicions and doubts, including the issue about environment.
In addition, health care issues could be influential to awider aspect of society. A health care reform bill could require the developmentof public and private hospitals, children and senior care centers, medicinemanufacturing corporations etc. Therefore emphasizing more on health care couldimprove more on the configurations of society than the environment issues.
Some people would argue that environment issues are moreimportant because bad environment condition would cause problems to yourhealth. It's true, admittedly. However, there are a lot of factors thatinfluence the health condition, some are more detrimental to the environment,like the medicine quality and food quality. Improving the health care systemwill always be the central target of government. Therefore it's cannot beemphasized more. The environment issues, although, is also crucial. However,it's not as important as the health care issues. Therefore, I firmly believegovernment should pay more attention to the health care issues.

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才疏学浅，见谅。
语句用词都很流畅，举例也很恰当。比我强好多><
考试加油！！话说我们同一天的。。。

Is health care more important than environment for government?

The discussion about whether government should emphasize more on health care issues than environment issues is controversial even between the officials and senators in the Congress(大写). Despite that both aspects are essential to current society, I believe that health care issues are more detrimental.

First of all, health care issues could bring direct benefits（是政府关注多带来直接利益吧？不是问题带来）to citizens in the short run, while environment issues would cause effect in indefinite long-term period. Like the health care bill proposed by Mr. Obama, the health care issues could protect the health care welfare of citizens right after endorsement. Consequently, citizens could pay less to see the doctor and receive better care for their bodies. Thus, the satisfaction about the government of citizens would rise up significantly due to direct benefits to them. Therefore, government would be supported by more people. And this government would be viewed as a really responsible one. With predominant support by civilians, a lot of policies proposed by government would encounter much（去掉much）less suspicions and doubts, including the issue about environment.

In addition, health care issues could be influential to a wider aspect（用range好点吧？）of society. A health care reform bill could require the development of public and private hospitals, children and senior care centers, medicine manufacturing corporations etc（这个最好不要在作文里用，显得不正式）. Therefore emphasizing more on health care could improve more on the configurations of society than the environment issues.

Some people would argue that environment issues are more important because bad environment condition would cause problems to your health. It's true, admittedly. However, there are a lot of factors that influence the health condition, some are more detrimental to（改成than）the environment, like the medicine quality and food quality. Improving the health care system will always be the central target of government. Therefore it's（去掉is）cannot be emphasized more. The environment issues, although, is also crucial. However, it's not as important as the health care issues. Therefore, I firmly believe government should pay more attention to the health care issues.

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The discussion about whether government should emphasize more on health care issues than environment issues is controversial evenbetween the officials and senators in the congress. Despite that both aspects are essential to current society, I believe that health care issues are more detrimental（good！）.

First of all, health care issues could bring direct benefits to citizens in the short run, while environment issues would cause effect in indefinite(觉得这个词多余了) long-term period. Like the health care bill proposed by Mr. Obama（the example is native, but in fact, the care bill is effective or not is still in controversy）,the health care issues could protect the health care welfare of citizens rightafter endorsement. Consequently, citizens could pay less to see the doctor andreceive better care for their bodies. Thus, the satisfaction about thegovernment of citizens would rise up significantly due to direct benefits tothem. Therefore, government would be supported by more people. And thisgovernment would be viewed as a really responsible one. With predominantsupport by civilians, a lot of policies proposed by government would encountermuch less suspicions and doubts, including the issue about environment.. M- `" U! @0 _; {/ A; P



In addition, health care issues could be influential to awider aspect of society. A health care reform bill could require the developmentof public and private hospitals, children and senior care centers, medicinemanufacturing corporations etc. Therefore emphasizing more on health care couldimprove more on the configurations of society than the environment issues." B( d/ l1 N" ?% v# A2 b% b# I$ X



Some people would argue that environment issues are moreimportant because bad environment condition would cause problems to yourhealth. It's true, admittedly. However, there are a lot of factors thatinfluence the health condition, some are more detrimental to the environment,like the medicine quality and food quality. Improving the health care systemwill always be the central target of government. Therefore it's cannot be emphasized more. The environment issues, although, is also crucial. However,it's not as important as the health care issues. Therefore, I firmly believegovernment should pay more attention to the health care issues.


文章整体的论述还是可以的，不过第一段的例子建议换一个，再就是第二段的论述稍显得薄弱了些，建议再加上一些解释比较好。
个人建议，有什么不对的再多多讨论哈！

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这些天出差了，修改晚了不好意思

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3.28 independent writing越来越没有写作感觉了，求大家指导。For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities?

There is always controversial discussionagainst which is more important between very young children education anduniversities education. Some people vote for young children claiming that theyoung are the future of our whole society. On the contrary, some opponents votefor universities since university education provides society elites and well-educatedgroup. In my opinion, I believe that young children education weights more.

Admittedly, the university educationprovides the society talents in specific areas. These personnel have improvedthe productivity in many industries. Also a lot of innovations are attributedto the researches in universities. However, the education provided by universityto a student is pinpointed to one specific field. On the contrary, theeducation of young children is based on improving the all-around ability of oneperson. And as far as the whole society is concerned, I think the society needsa population of well behavior more than a group of people with high technique.

In addition, the children education isfundamental to his/her development. By receiving good education in primaryschool and middle school, the young could form a better understanding abouthuman life, as well as, the world. A man could not contribute to the society untilhe/she has a right understanding of the things all around. We can see a lot oftalents with high intelligence, who actually do nothing good, even harmful, tothe society, since they have some deficiencies in minds about the society andworld. In this case, I think a well education of young children could preventthis tragedy to our society.

Furthermore, better young childreneducation is the precondition of better university education. The quality ofuniversity education does highly depend on the quality of students thatuniversities recruit. With outstanding primary school and high schooleducation, we could provide more eligible students to universities, which couldmake university education be conducted more smoothly and reach higher achievements.

In conclusion, it's undeniable thatuniversity education is essential to the development of country. However, sincethe young children education cultivates people with all-around ability andyoung children education is the fundament of other higher educations, I believethe government should pay more budgets on young children education.

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3.28独立修改

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修改好了

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4.2号独立作文 题目：Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between peopleShould we always tell the truth?

Quite a lot people believe that telling thetruth is substantial criteria to judge one person. They think people shouldtell the truth under no matter what kind of circumstance. In my opinionhowever, we should better not always tell the truth in some situation, such asin conservation between your business competitors.

Admittedly telling the truth is concernedabout honesty and loyalty. When we are talking with friends and families, thebest choice is to tell the truth whatever the truth is. Cheatings and lieswould not work in relationships with them. Some people are afraid to confesswhen they have done something wrong. During my primary school, I have no enoughcourage to tell my mother if I fought with my peers or had a quarrel with them.However once I told my mother the truth, she would forgive me due to myhonesty. Therefore being honesty will make things easier to solve.

On the other hand, we should better notalways tell the truth in some particular relationships. We should havestrategies because in some relationship honesty and loyalty is underweight comparedto winning. In the relationship between business competitors, many businessmenchoose to lie. When being asked how much profits are generated in one year,many CEOs would say they do not know the exact number. The fact is usually notin this case. However the CEOs lie because they do not want their competitorsto know the number then. It's common in business world, and it's not illegal aswell. After all, people would not mind this behavior because everyone wants towin against the competitors.

In conclusion, it is not a wise decision totelling to the truth in any relationship. Between friends and families, weshould do so since they are of most importance to us. By contrast, we should nottell whatever we know to people when they involve in relationships such asbusiness competitors.

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Quite a lot (of) people believe that telling the truth is substantial criteria to judge one person. They think people should tell the truth under no matter what kind of circumstance. In my opinion, however, we should better not always tell the truth in some situation, such as in conservation between your business competitors.
    Admittedly telling the truth is concerned about honesty and loyalty. When we are talking with friends and families, the best choice is to tell the truth whatever the truth is. Cheatings and lies would not work in relationships with them. Some people are afraid to confess when they have done something wrong. During my primary school, I have no enough courage to tell my mother if I fought with my peers or had a quarrel with them. However once I told my mother the truth, she would删除，改为过去时 forgave me due to my honesty. Therefore being honesty will make things easier to solve.
    On the other hand, we should better not always tell the truth in some particular relationships. We should have strategies because in some relationship honesty and loyalty is underweight compared to winning. In the relationship between business competitors, many businessmen choose to lie. When being asked how much profits are generated in one year, many CEOs would say they do not know the exact number. The fact is usually not in this case. However the CEOs lie because they do not want their competitors to know the number then. It's common in business world, and it's not illegal as well. After all, people would not mind this behavior because everyone wants to win against the competitors.
In conclusion, it is not a wise decision to telling to the truth in any relationship. Between friends and families, we should do so since they are of most importance to us. By contrast, we should not tell whatever we know to people when they involve in relationships such as business competitors.

总体写的挺好，有少许觉得有问题的地方我用红色标记出来了，仅供参考。

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4.5号独立作文