自写口语 求各位批改

sunhmtUID: 2906248

个人口语好烂啊 各种语法错误啊 that的用法很不会啊 托友们帮帮忙吧

什么东西进步是你觉得你国家在过去20年里最重要的。

The computer science is the most important development in my coutry in the past 20
years. Only computer lab had computers 20 years ago. Now the computer is  used in
everywhere. Now it is most used in the chip. For example , the chips are all used for
helping the  cellphone working. It also help people work in office. When we go to bank
or go to buy tickets for travelling. There are  a lot of computers working for the
services. We can't live without the comupter now.

sunhmtUID: 2906248

自己顶顶

nieyongUID: 2742661

Now the computer is  used in everywhere
everywhere. Now it is most used in the chip.

这句话不好吧  首先两个now  不是太好 考虑改一下