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发表于 2011-4-14 18:38:09 |只看该作者
改好了~~~

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发表于 2011-4-14 22:29:30 |只看该作者
4.13独立。写的不错

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发表于 2011-4-17 23:40:51 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-4-18 13:15:18 |只看该作者
:loveliness:

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不喜欢工作,不喜欢工作,什么工作都不喜欢

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发表于 2011-4-26 18:53:33 |只看该作者
4月25日 综合 修改下次可不可以按照规定的作业来写,我都不记得TPO3的具体内容了,不好改。
PS:你还没改我的作文,麻烦了。

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发表于 2011-4-26 22:14:03 |只看该作者
你23写的综合和我不是一个,我没时间再做一篇,所以给你改这个了~ 21# zhaopan0558

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发表于 2011-4-29 13:55:51 |只看该作者
Nowadays there is a strong discussion about whether today’s people can succeed more easily
than ever before/ it is easier to succeed in the past than it is today. Some people claim that it is more likely to have a success previously due to the less fierce competition. However, I believe that succeeding at present is more prevalent for the three following reasons (I will give below).


To begin with, development of society provides contemporary people with more advanced technology and equipments, which will contribute considerably to their success. Take the actor of the famous 3D movie Avata, Cameron for example. It is hardly to image that he can create such a successful movie 10years ago,simply for the reason that the technology at that time is not advanced enough.
Also(,) with the help of powerful telescopes, an astronomer is more possible to make a remarkable discovery about the origin of the universe at the present than in the past.


In addition, more healthy and complete systems of society/ comprehensive welfare systems provide people another crucial factor to be/ achieve a success. To look for examples, we need to look no further than boys and girls, who are supported to further their study in universities by National Loan Program. These people might lose their chances to advance/ finish their studies if they lived 100 years ago.
Also when someone has a good idea/ when people have good ideas, the government will help him to create his own business/ help them to create their own business in various ways,which is impossible just last century.


Last but not least, various ways/approaches to acquire knowledge and improve ability are another factor that makes people nowadays more likely to succeed. Number/ Numerous universities and colleges provide more education opportunity for people. They can learnabout knowledgeof various subjects, which will be advantageous to their future success. Alsopeople can obtain nearly any information/ all kinds ofinformation they need on the Internet. Moreover, one can participate in certain training clubs to improve his ability in certain/ particular aspects. For example, to improve his spoken English, one can joinvarious English Corners conveniently./ People can join various English Corners toimprove their spoken English.


To sum up, considering the high technology,healthy systems/ welfare systems, and numerous ways to acquire knowledge in present society, I claim that it is easier for people to be successful today than in the past.

抱歉,昨天有事來不及幫你改
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发表于 2011-5-1 22:59:40 |只看该作者
TPO 4
The speaker states that three evidences provided in the passage to demonstrate that dinosaurs are endotherms(?,查无此词啊)are unconvincing, apparently refuting the idea made in the reading.

First of all, the professor points out that discovery of dinosaurs fossils in polar regions doesn't necessarily means that dinosaurs used to live in the extremely cold environment. Maybe at that time polar regions were much warmer than now. Also dinosaurs may just live in polar regions in warm periods, and they emigrates to other regions in cold periods.

Second, the lecturer claims that the facts that the legs of dinosaurs are underneath their body doesn't lend strong support to that this kind of leg position is for running. The legs are under their part probably because this kind of structure supports more weight, which allows dinosaurs to grow (growing)to greater sizes, favorable to their existences.

Finally, the professor mentions that bones of dinosaurs also contains (contain) another component, indicating that sometimes dinosaurs grow (grew) slowly or even stopped growing. Exchanges between rapid growth, and slow growth or no growth are just the strong features of endotherms. On the contrary, the author just focuses his eye on the Haversian canals contained in dinosaurs' bones, inconceivably concluding that this kind of bone structure demonstrates continuously rapid growth of dinosaurs.

个人感觉每个对应点还是要提一下reading的
麻烦你帮我改一下4.27号我的综合哈~~

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