【Daily Writing】das_postkarte的作文贴~请大家多多批评~！

凉言UID: 2996787

不好意思，有点迟了

das_postkarteUID: 3012913

是我交作业太晚了~~给添麻烦了~:loveliness: 16# 凉言

Yvaine198831UID: 2956487

17# das_postkarte

来改5.5独立的，没有找到~

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实在不好意思，今天去听学术报告会了，还以为只要一上午，结果是一天，晚上还聚餐，才回来~明天中午之前补上，实在抱歉！ 18# Yvaine198831

das_postkarteUID: 3012913

5.5独立~抱歉，发晚了，给批改的同学舔麻烦了！

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已改好 20# das_postkarte

das_postkarteUID: 3012913

5.7独立~辛苦批改的同学啦~

Yvaine198831UID: 2956487

5.5 独立改好

liwu1028UID: 2921130

Is it easier to be a success in the past than it is today?


In the modern society, people are suffering increasing pressure and facing more challenges, hence some people complain that it is easier to be a success in the past than it is today. However, this complaint is ridiculous, ignoring the advantages today.

Useful and timely information plays an important role in making success. Modern society is a civilized and developed world, full of all kinds of information and different thing fulfilled our increasing requirements. We can get information more conveniently and faster in many ways today than our ancestors. Internet is a giant database including almost all fields' information, which is meaningful and important in our daily life. And computers are becoming more and more popular and the more available to access to the Internet, （这个地方不是很理解，是要用the more.....the more.....句型吗）we can get almost everything on the Internet just by clicking the mouse. Also with the universality of mobile phones, there is another method in linking to the Internet by using mobile phones, especially the ones with wifi. Of course, libraries with numerous books are still wonderful places to gain information. While in the past, perhaps libraries were existed, but the number of the books in libraries was far behind that today. The ancestors can hardly obtain information what they needed.

In addition, we need cooperation to fulfill the goals and meet success. In the past, bad traffic condition limited the teamwork with partners who were far away from in the case of no airplanes, especially some works asked for face to face to solve the problems. While today, our world is smaller and smaller because of the comfortable and rapid traffic system. Meanwhile, thanks to the invention of phones and the Internet, it makes us closer. When we get confused, a video conferencing can let us discuss like we are face to face. Moreover, ancestors' experience and intelligence, as well as lots of inventions are huge treasure which can guide us in a right way, making success more easily.

Therefore, there is no way around the fact that it is easier to success than it in the past.

写的很好，论据充分，例子恰当，我只找到一处不是很理解的地方，见谅。

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批改好啦   加油啦~~~~~

das_postkarteUID: 3012913

5.10独立，交晚了。。。

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5.10 已改好

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5.12独立~~辛苦批改的同学了~

tidus_xuanUID: 172013

5.12 独立 改好了

美丽小黑你UID: 3057440

楼主，我看了你的作文，我觉得你提高的空间很大。这是我帮你修改的一篇作文，你可以看一下。里面提到了你的问题和可能的解决方法。希望能帮到你。
现在回帖的人是越来越少了。。。怎么说呢，希望你能在交流中有所进步吧。如果你觉得批改的人少，或者自己的文章还想进一步修改的话，我愿意帮忙。因为我平时没什么事干，呵呵，进寄托就是爱过来水的。

呵呵，发一篇改过的你的作文，你看看怎么样吧。
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1264310&extra=


顺便：楼主不能怀疑我的居心哦！百分百好意。