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4月26日
独立
同意与否：团队合作中不能接受批评的人不会成功？
Whether a person will succeed or not is depend on their working circumstance. Some leaders, as one of their successful elements, are keen on the one who insist on their own ideas. They called the characteristic as individuality. However, according to the recent survey, the majority of the employers are more likely to choose the one who accept others’ criticism because this kind of person is easy to be administrated; moreover, they will bring the friendly atmosphere and efficiency to their teamwork.

First of all, almost all the leaders hope their teammates to abide the rule they ordered. There is no doubt that the leader is more capable than the teammates. So as a member in the team the first thing should be learned is to accept the criticism. One team could only contain one core goal, all the person should service this aim and follow the working arrangement established by the leader.

Secondly, due to the diversity of people in the team, accepting the criticism means friendly. There is no barrier in the commutation between people who would like to take other’s criticism. For example, when I was a student, I was listed as a president of my school union. Not for my good mark of major, but for   my happy attitude to accept other’s criticism. They feel relax when talking with me and don’t worry that I would be angry.

What’s more, accepting the criticism also means the effective in the team work. All the members could take others’ attitude into seriously. They can take in some good ideas from the criticism. As the Chinese old saying goes there is a teacher among three people. So what you will do it take the criticism and compared it with yourself. If you have the flaw, corrected it. If not, just smile.

In the society, working or cooperating with a person who would like to accept the criticism has more advantages. These people have more chance to be successful.

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4月27日
独立
Which one do you prefer learning by yourself or learning with teacher?
    As an old saying goes learning is a life time thing. So the learning significance is quite obvious in our daily life. But which way is the best selection for us to choose? Learn by ourselves of learn with a teacher. In my opinion it depends on different circumstance. As a younger teenage, learning with a teacher is wise choice. On the contrast, as a university student or adult, learning by their own is more suitable.

    Under the teacher’s supervision, the teenage could concentrate on their study. It is common to see that a teenager is lake of self-control. With the quick pace of our daily life, most of the parents have no time to take care of their child. Consequently, without parents’ supervision, some children spend their studying time watching television or playing computer game. Moreover, wallowing in these entertainments may ruin their physical health. With the teachers’ company, these children could avoid felling into the bad habits.

    On the contrast, as a university student, learning by our own is a good challenge. Through the self-study, our independent thinking ability is well cultivated. For instance, when I was abroad my computer suddenly crashed down, due to my language obstacle, I couldn’t find anyone to help. So I have to go to the university library to find solution. After one day study from the book, I not only solved the problem but also learn some other computer technologies that I never know before. According to this self-learning experience, I realized my strong study ability which enhances my confidence.

    Meanwhile, as an adult, self-studying can be more flexible. With a number of responsibilities, adults have to work for money to maintain the life and do housework after daily life. So it is difficult for them to take fixing time to study with teacher.

    In conclusion, whether self-learning or learn with a teacher depends on your age. It is helpful to learn with teacher when you are young teenage. As a university students or adult, self-study brings you more advantage in your whole life.

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    As an old saying goes learning is a life time thing. So the learning significance/significance of learning is quite obvious in our daily life. But which way is the best selection for us to choose: Learn by ourselves or learn with a teacher? In my opinion it depends on different circumstances. As a young teenage, learning with a teacher is wise choice. On the contrast, as a university student or (an) adult,learning by their own is more suitable.+ N% i9 s  ?) ?2 L) ~' D
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    Under the teacher’s supervision, the teenage could concentrate on their study. It is common to see that a teenager is lake of self-control. With the quick pace of our daily life, most of the parents have no time to take care of their child. Consequently, without parents’ supervision, some children spend their studying time/ spend the time when they should study watching television or playing computer game. Moreover, wallowing in these entertainments may ruin their physical health. With the teachers’ company, these children could avoid felling into thebad habits.



A child refers tosomeone who is before 14 year old; a teenager is 13~19

    On the contrast, (as a university student, learning by our own is a good challenge.)/ (self-learning provides a chance for college students to try something challenge.) Through the self-study (topic), our independent thinking ability (controlling idea)is well cultivated. For instance, when I was abroad my computer suddenly crashed down, due to my language obstacle, I couldn’t find anyone to help (me).So I have to go to the university library to find solution. After one day study from the book, I not only solved the problem but also learn some other computer technologies that I never know before. According to this self-learning experience, I realized my strong study ability which enhances my confidence.9 R- L& f8 E# K
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    Meanwhile, as an adult, self-studying can be more flexible.With a number of responsibilities, adults have to work (for money to maintain the life)/(as their livelihood) and do housework in daily life/ after work.So/Therefore, it is difficult for them to take fixing time to study with teacher.
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    In conclusion, whether learning with a teacher is a  \good idea depends on your ages.It is helpful to learn with teacher when you are young teenage. As a university students or adult, self-study brings you more advantage in your whole life.

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