请教问题

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申直博容易还是硕士容易？据说直博容易拿到钱？
还有，这是我新写的套磁信，我想申请工程电磁学直博，请大家看看，有何不妥之处。

Dear Dr Wong:

I am an undergraduate of A university. I am applying to Illinois Institute of Technology for a phd.

I looked at your page, and your research areas area were very interesting to me. I also read one of your articles, Multi-Nanosecond High Power Pulse Generation at 7.8 GHz with a Dielectric- Loaded Power Extractor. The generation of RF pulse with the use of laser splitting-recombination under precision timing control is present in this article, which I think is an interesting subtle method to me.

I know your research need a lot of work about numerical computation of electromagnetic fields. I am interesting to these work. I can use the relative compute software and simulation software such as Matlab and CST well. I am also like to accomplish the hardware system to carry out my idea.

If you are interested in my application, please let me know soon.

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自己顶一下

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必然是申硕士容易呀

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Dear Dr Wong:

I am an undergraduate of A university. I am applying to Illinois Institute of Technology for a phd.

I looked at your page, and your research areas area were very interesting to me. I also read one of your articles, Multi-Nanosecond High Power Pulse Generation at 7.8 GHz with a Dielectric- Loaded Power Extractor. The generation of RF pulse with the use of laser splitting-recombination under precision timing control is present in this article, which I think is an interesting subtle method to me.

I know your research need a lot of work about numerical computation of electromagnetic fields. I am interesting to these work. I can use the relative compute software and simulation software such as Matlab and CST well. I am also like to accomplish the hardware system to carry out my idea.

If you are interested in my application, please let me know soon.

首先有语法错误

其次，我认为你不仅仅表明兴趣，你也要说你会什么啊，能做什么，为什么他就一定要找你

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请问文中第三段（专门说明会什么）不行吗？ 4# mcnuonuo

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一句话我觉得不够吧。

主要是专业的东西我不懂。

我认为陶瓷信和求职信是一个道理

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然后
美硕不需要陶瓷，因为基本不会有offer

但是如果只是想入学，可以自费的话，美硕比phd好申

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我将内容充实了一些，并改正了语法错误后如下：
Dear Dr. Wong:
I am an undergraduate of  ABC university in China. I am applying to Illinois Institute of Technology for a PH.D.
I looked at your page, and your research areas were very interesting to me. I also read one of your articles, which is about multi-nanosecond high power pulse generation with a dielectric-Loaded power extractor. The generation of RF pulse with the use of laser splitting-recombination under precision timing control is discussed in this article, which I think is an interesting subtle method to me.
I think your current research efforts, such as broadband communication systems and dielectric-loaded structures for accelerator applications, need some work about numerical computation of electromagnetic fields and electromagnetic fields simulation. I am interesting in these work. I want to finish my PH.D research about the application of computation of electromagnetic fields, especially in the broadband communication systems. I can use the relative compute software and simulation software such as Matlab and CST well. I have simulated the pattern measurement of Phased Array Antenna for the HF radar. I am also like to accomplish the hardware system to carry out my idea.  I have designed the HF radar echo simulator with DDS chip.
If you are interested in my application, please let me know soon.  
        Sincerely yours
据说不宜太长，这样可以吗？

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有点长，看能不能精简，我个人感觉内容到位了