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头痛UID: 138636

110. "When we concern ourselves with the study of history, we become storytellers. Because we can never know the past directly but must construct it by interpreting evidence, exploring history is more of a creative enterprise than it is an objective pursuit. All historians are storytellers."

I agree to the statement that since people can never know the past directly but must construct it by interpreting evidence that the ancestor has left for us,the study of history is more of a creative enterprise than it is an objective pursuit, and all historians become storytellers when they concern with the study of history.

First of all, it must be agreed that exploring history is naturally an objective pursuit. The duty of historian is to reappear the past event but not create the past. All the explication made by the historian must be based on the objective evidence, such as fossils, documents, antique, etc. Without the evidence, the historian cannot and should not discover any history event. A good example for this is  the discovery of the fossil, which has exhibit people an ancient view, such as the archaeopteryx that is so different to today's bird. If without the fossil, the ancient world will be absolutly close to our human in despite of how imaginative we are. So the objective evidence has buid up the foundation of the history study, and the 'creative enterprise' mentioned in this statement is not the traditional one, it is full of objective content.

Then, How many evidences have our ancestors left for us? Documents, due to the bad technology, are always fragmentary. And  because of some natural reasons, the remnants of the fossils or antiques is badly scarcity. Moreover, all these remnants are unspeakable. Base on these deficient information, how can the historians continue their studies? Imaginative and creative ability, certainly base upon the professional technology, is indispensable, which  distinguish from our normal person. From the antiques of some woman dresses in certain age, historian may get conclusion about the level of the fabric technology, or even further about the dressing custom or even the whole culture in that age. Without these creative actions, the history would have told us much lesser than now it is.

Moreover, the obligation of the historians is not only exhibit but interpret the history. It mean the historians should recurrence the past with their own comprehensions and thoughts, which could give a guidance for our nowday's society and prevent us from repeating the mistakes that have occured in the past.  To illustrate, the study of the tragical 911 event occured in American has showed the value of this creative enterprise. It reveals that the event  is not inevitable, there is some factitious factors that result in it. Some historians have said(and I paraphrase),'It is that some mistakes in the strategy of the goverment and the neglect of some institutions that together result in this disaster'. And we wish that the study of these historians could make people understand the mistake and could benefit us from prevent from these tragedies.

Thus, As an interpreter of the past, the historians should not only exhibit the evidence of the past, but interpret it for further depth, commentate it with their own thoughts, which will make the history more valuable for us. So we could find that if without the creative action, the history would seem too superficial and lose its brilliant luster. Therefore, we could get a conclusion that exploring history is more of a creative enterprise than it is an objective pursuit, and as the storytellers, the historians has give the history ample meanings.

imongUID: 140258

I agree to （with, to agree with sb on sth or to agree with sth）the statement that since people can never know the past directly but must construct it（换一个动词） by interpreting evidence that the ancestor has left for us, the study of history is more of a creative enterprise than it is an objective pursuit, and all historians become storytellers when they concern with the study of history.

First of all, it must be agreed that exploring history is naturally an objective pursuit. The duty of historian is to reappear(换，demonstrate?) the past event but not create the past. All the explication(explanation) (made by the historian，没有必要再重复) must be based on the objective evidence, such as fossils, documents, antique, etc（好）. Without the evidence, the historian cannot and should not （should not 不好）discover any history event. A good example for this is the discovery of the fossil, which has exhibit people an ancient view, such as the archaeopteryx that is so different to today's bird. If without the fossil, the ancient world will be absolutly close（close是近的意思,用点unfamiliar还是distant之类的） to our human in despite of how imaginative we are. So the objective evidence has buid up the foundation of the history study, and the 'creative enterprise' mentioned in this statement is not the traditional one, it is full of objective content.

Then, How many evidences have our ancestors left for us? Documents, due to the bad technology, are always fragmentary（？）. And because of some natural reasons, the remnants of the fossils or antiques is badly scarcity. Moreover, all these remnants are unspeakable. Base on these deficient information, how can the historians continue their studies? Imaginative and creative ability, certainly base upon the professional technology, is indispensable, which distinguish from our normal person. From the antiques of some woman dresses in certain age, historian may get conclusion about the level of the fabric technology, or even further about the dressing custom or even the whole culture in that age. Without these creative actions, the history would have told us much lesser than now it is.还可以再说得细致一点啊，而且开头没有说清你这一段要说什么

Moreover, the obligation of the historians is not only exhibit but interpret the history. It mean the historians should recurrence（recurrence是名词啊） the past with their own comprehensions and thoughts, which could give a guidance for our nowday's society and prevent us from repeating the mistakes that have occured in the past. To illustrate, the study of the tragical(tragic) 911 event occured in American has showed the value of this creative enterprise. It reveals that the event is not inevitable, there is some factitious factors that result in it. Some historians have said(and I paraphrase),'It is that some mistakes in the strategy of the goverment and the neglect of some institutions that together result in this disaster'. And we wish that the study of these historians could make people understand the mistake and could benefit us from prevent from these tragedies.911例子（小心用，很敏感的）用得太突然了,historian部分说得不够细,结果就不够convincing.

Thus, As an interpreter of the past, the historians should not only exhibit the evidence of the past, but interpret it for further depth, commentate it with their own thoughts, which will make the history more valuable for us. So we could find that if without the creative action, the history would seem too superficial and lose its brilliant luster（这么搭配很别扭）. Therefore, we could get a conclusion that exploring history is more of a creative enterprise than it is an objective pursuit, and as the storytellers, the historians has give the history ample meanings.
用词原则是要生动而不造作。还有发挥的余地。
我得休息一会儿了，现在连单词都想不出来了，晚上有时间在改吧。

头痛UID: 138636

确实我的用词还很匮乏，还需要经常借助金山词霸，这是很糟糕的一点，因为平常在脑子中出现的总是一些我们中学或者大学的时候学的一些十分简单的单词，明显不够用。。不知道该如何解决了。。。。疯狂背单词的结果是看到单词认得出来，真正能从脑子里冒出来的单词却非常少：（

imong能不能帮我评个分数呢？真是很感谢你啊。。。。

imongUID: 140258

我也是一样啊
有的时候灵光一闪有的时候打死也想不出来

评分还是算了吧，我觉得自己写的时候不限时间最后都可以6分
关键是45分钟搞定的能力

头痛UID: 138636

那你是否能给个评价呢？比如说很差，或者是还可以之类的，因为我最初几篇贴出来的时候版主给的评语是很差的，用词，语法，逻辑什么的都不行，现在我也不知道是不是有了提高，自己看不出来，所以希望别人给个评语啊。。。

imongUID: 140258

我也没有看过你以前的文章，没法下评语的
比如和feier，happyman，rain and rainbow的作文比起来还有一定距离的

头痛UID: 138636

谢谢～我想距离是肯定有的，至少一点是我才练了10篇差不多，不过就是不能知道自己到底有没有提高，不过你说的是对得，因为你没有看过我以前得文章，所以没法比较，还是十分谢谢你的～