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发表于 2011-11-24 00:39:08 |只看该作者
1123-100924NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? College or University should offer students more preparation before they start working.

College or university education plays a significant role in socialization, through which students not only learn the basic norms and customs of their culture, but also grasp fundamental knowledge and the latest development of the world, in order to better adapt to the society. As such, there is no doubt that college or university education should help students become more qualified to their future career, which however does not mean that the only task schools take is to teach their students specific skills or techniques.

Without question, in order to help students better prepare for the future pressure of finding a good job, schools, especially at the level of college and university, should design specific curriculum for their students to learn and even become an expert in that area. For example, if one's dream is to be a great sociologist, he or she will benefit a lot from the curriculum that is aimed at teaching students basic theories put forward by some greatest sociologists in the world, and from the researches which are designed to aid them to associate the theory with the reality. In this way, school education offers their students good preparations for their career.

What's more, in pursuing an advanced career and self-realization, students also need to study a broad range of general knowledge which is not only limited to their major. Let's take the position of managers as an example. There is no doubt that an excellent manager should have a profound understanding of the economic circumstances in order to maximize the profits of his or her company. In addition, he or she also need to have a grasp of the political policies and even laws in order to have a whole view of the situation his or her company in. Thus, college and university are responsible in [url=]nurturing[/url][U1] [url=]well-developed students.[/url][U2]

However, future career is not the only concern of schools or even individual student, because moral senses, responsibility as a civil man or basic ideas of human rights are more important for the future of the individual and the whole society. Even if all the students could become the leaders in their own area, the society will not be in a harmony and peace if they fight with each other without sticking to principles and laws. In a word, cultivating students' moral senses and some other qualities is also of great significance to the human society.

All in all, college and university should adopt a curriculum aimed at imparting fundamental knowledge and skills to students in order to help them pursue career success. However at the same time, don't forget to cultivate their students to be more responsible and self-disciplined.

写的很好
论证地很精彩
都不知道可以改哪里了。

[U1]查了这词,好像更倾向于是培养植物的。



[U2]不太明白 well-developed student就不培养吗?

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发表于 2011-11-24 12:56:28 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-11-25 15:55:07 |只看该作者
妞儿,今天写得很不错呢。加油哦!!我明天考试啦,祝福我吧,给我攒攒人品,嘿嘿
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决定了就去做,不犹豫

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发表于 2011-11-25 17:17:30 |只看该作者
恩恩,加油哈!!!一定会很顺利的!! 48# Fenjuan.Hu

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发表于 2011-11-25 18:52:12 |只看该作者
Parental education plays a significant role in socialization, through which children not only learn the basic norms and customs of their culture, but also grasp some fundamental and latest knowledge of the society. As such, parents should offer wise advices to their children when they are encountered with difficulties and help them avoid some unnecessary troubles. On the other hand, parents should allow their children to learn from their own experiences instead of restrict every decisions made by their children.

Generally speaking, parents are mature and have more life experience than their young children, which means that when there is a conflict between the decisions of children and the opinions of their parents, it is more likely that parents are right. As such, taking suggestions from parents is of great importance for us to avoid some loses and troubles brought by our inappropriate decisions. Suppose that without the directions of his(感觉介个来的有点突兀,最好直接写是Mozart father, a court musician and a diligent teacher for his children, Mozart would not persistedwould后面不是要跟动词原形吗?阿我不太记得了) his career, and might not become such an influential composer and created so many significant compositions in his life. That would be a great lose for human civilization.

On the other hand, parents should also allow their children to think and act freely on some less important issues(很赞!~, by which they could offer more opportunities for their children to learn. There is a saying, live and learn. Without question, if one had ever been frustrated by some mistakes, it will be so impressive that they will have better chances to keep that mistake and the related experience in mind, which will have a positive effect on improving their thinking patterns, their behaviors and their final decisions in the future. For example, Warren Buffet, a famous financial investor and one of the richest people in the world, would not learn his knowledge of investment and the stock market if his parents didn't allow him to predict the economic tendency and invest in the stock market on his own because of the wasted money.

All in all, parents should allow their children to make mistakes because this may be a more efficient way for them to learn experiences and lessons. However, when comes to some big issues which are of great importance, parents had better give advices and guide their children get through the difficulties.

折中很难写哈。不过你写的很棒 ^ ^
我觉得你蛮爱用长句的,试着长短换着用下~ 感觉看着就不会太累~
依旧。。我找不到可以改的地方,学习了!

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发表于 2011-11-25 19:41:12 |只看该作者
弱弱地問一句你們這個word是怎麽放上去的啊???

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发表于 2011-11-26 14:39:00 |只看该作者
我word是放不上去了的,格式不允许。所以是写字板的文件。

在回复框右上角点“高级回复”,打开的回复页面里面就有上传附件了。 51# jetafull

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发表于 2011-11-26 19:33:50 |只看该作者
改好了,欢迎讨论!
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发表于 2011-11-26 21:47:29 |只看该作者
改好了~不好意思迟了。我的还没写。明天帮忙批改一下吧~ 麻烦你了~ 加油!
word是可以上传了。。。只是论坛不支持docx格式的。你传doc格式的吧~不然我们下载来都要复制到doc中 再加批注~呵呵


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发表于 2011-11-29 23:38:44 |只看该作者
非常感谢你在综合写作里面提的意见,确实,每次我觉得用professor 很费劲,影响打字速度,,,谢谢啊
这是改完的一片独立写作,个人建议,如有不适,还请谅解,加油啊!
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发表于 2011-11-30 00:59:13 |只看该作者
同学,你这个是空白文档== 55# pwang09

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发表于 2011-12-2 22:35:58 |只看该作者
帅哥,TPO21的综合,修改了,你看看,加油啊!
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发表于 2011-12-6 19:18:04 |只看该作者
sorry 没办法发文档 看的时候可能会有点辛苦
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发表于 2011-12-6 19:22:31 |只看该作者
独立修改好了~~

抱歉综合目前没办法帮你修改,我电脑里只有tpo1至19,没有tpo22。等我去下载了,再帮你修改~~
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发表于 2011-12-6 19:50:12 |只看该作者
写得还不错哦 再接再励!
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