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wwz1234UID: 89824

45分钟写完后，还花了些时间修改，感觉时间太紧了

Issue 57
“The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience.”

Books, a kind of media from which one can acquire knowledge, carry nearly all kinds of information. So, is the depth of knowledge to be gained from books much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience as the speaker claims? Actually, however, knowledge gained from books and experience is equally rich and broad for the following considerations.

The knowledge one can get from books is limited no matter how books contain knowledge abundantly. It is widely known that the life time for everyone can be no more than 150 years, and usually only 70 to 80 years. Even though one reads at the pace of one book per day(be not suitable for most people), the total books he can read is less than 6,000  books, and without obviating the years when one cannot read such as 1 to 3 years old. So the knowledge one gets is like a corner of an iceberg to that of books. Nothing is more ridiculous than to compare one's own knowledge with the total ones from books. Another important factor may limit one's knowledge is that we are forgetting knowledge everyday. It seems like a reservoir for a person's memory, whose cubage cannot be changed, if the water dimension going out exceeds that of the reservoir, the excessive water must be flown away, keeping the water amount in the reservoir all the same. In fact, the knowledge one forgets during his life is much more than that of he remembers.

Experience always can be the alternative to books for getting knowledge. If we experience something we have just learned from books, it can help us remember the knowledge, and the forgetting time can be diminished greatly compared to that of just learning from books without experiencing. The reason why experience has this function is that experience usually describe the knowledge with real ones that we can see or hear by our bodies, while on the other hand, books teach us knowledge using a relatively abstract way, which makes us frustrated and hard to understand. So we can get more impression when experiencing. Also, some knowledge got from experience cannot be found in the books. For example, there are so many skilled workers working in factories. They know exactly how to manipulate the machines and how to produce the products. However, they do not get the knowledge from books but other workers who worked earlier. The knowledge is all from experience, passing down from one generation to another.

Therefore, we should acquire knowledge both from books and experience, which may be a best way for learning. After studying from a book for some knowledge, then going out for experiencing the one we have just learned. Books can teach us new knowledge we have never contacted, and experience can make us more impressed by the real object that we can either see or hear. The effect of combination of the both two may be much better than only one of them. On no accounts can students ignore the importance of experience any more, while paying too much attention to the books.

In sum, both books and experience should be placed equal emphasis on, neither of which can be ignored.

paisleyUID: 64183

Another important factor may limit one's knowledge is that 这里有语法错误，may limit应改为limiting

Experience always can be the alternative to books for getting knowledge. (此处the最好改为an,而且can应该在always前面.)
If we experience something we have just learned from books, it can help us remember the knowledge, and the forgetting time(什么叫做fortetting time? 应说the period that we keep knowledge in mind) can be diminished greatly compared to that of just learning from books without experiencing. The reason why experience has this function is that experience usually describe(describe一般主语是人，不能是事物) the knowledge with real ones that we can see or hear by our bodies(还不如说sense organs), while on the other hand, books teach us knowledge using(in a如何如何的way,不能用use) a relatively abstract way, which makes us frustrated and hard to understand.


你的语言已经没什么大问题了。有个别地方还不够好，另外有点中文的痕迹。但是比大多数人来说你这样的水平已经可以了。

你的思路上有几个问题
1.我们大致认为ISSUE不要采用折中的方法. 已经讨论过很多次了。最近的可以看看happyman2000对这个问题的看法.是一篇标记精华的文章

2. 你文章的第一段讲的是"吾生也有涯,而知也无涯"的问题。可是这和我们从那里得到知识, (从书本和实践) 有什么关系吗? 个人能学习到的知识相对于人类的文化遗产来说当然是不可能穷尽之的，但是这不能说明那种学习知识的方法更好。你的论证偏了。

3. 从实践中学习的作用仅仅在于使我们记住从书上学到的东西吗? 而且以你说的，书上学的东西很快会忘,其实从实践里学的也一样. 只不要不复习\不操作,很快就会忘记，跟书本还是实践,没有太大关系。

我觉得你平时思考的太少了，还需要多看书多思索.


你这篇文章，类似的和相关的文章已经有许多前人写过，还有范文。你可以搜索一下，对照一下这些文章。 或参照置顶的帖子。


希望你也能多多修改其他朋友的文章。尤其是提点结构上和想法上的建议。因为你不可能每个题目都练过来啊，看别人的题目，自己脑子过一遍,既可以给别人提建议，自己又多了一次训练的机会.为别人服务的人优先得到斑竹的修改哦！

wwz1234UID: 89824

多谢建议。