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[作文] 【Daily Writing作文特训小组】小呆的作文贴,求监督求指导~ [复制链接]

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发表于 2011-7-22 13:06:42 |只看该作者
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我今天要坐车去济南考试了==(小城市木有考点)
所以今天和我一组的同学,请问我23号考完回来再改可以吗?
PS:God bless me~~~~(>_<)~~~~
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发表于 2011-7-23 22:07:10 |只看该作者
加油~
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发表于 2011-7-23 23:00:08 |只看该作者
改好了。感觉你的进步太快了。考场要是能写出这个水平,满分跑不了吧
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发表于 2011-7-23 23:33:14 |只看该作者
同组的人给我说我才发现,21号改的你们的文章都没上传成功。好像是我网络卡了的原因。。
然后我才发现改的你的也没上传成功。。。。


现在再传一次。。八好意思了
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发表于 2011-7-27 22:34:00 |只看该作者
今日之计,只能把这货扔在这儿了==
愿意的来帮帮忙吧==
雅思论坛和寄托的雅思板块真的不给力吖,帮他们改了也不会回来帮我一下==
阿西吧==

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笔考,40min完成,其他要求似乎和托福差不多==

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Some people say that governments should pay for the public health care and education, while others say that it is not the government’s responsibility. Please discuss both views and give your own opinion.


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With the development of people’s life, there is more and more attention paid to the public service, especially public health care and education. Some people hold the view that these service should be paid by the government. Others take the opposite point. From my point of view, this question does not have an either-or answer. In other word, government alone should not take the whole responsibility.

First and foremost, even if the most powerful government can not pay for all the expense of public health care and education. As far as I know, the GDP of my hometown last year was only 5.3 billion yuan. Thus you will know how much tax the government of my city gets. As there are so much construction needs to be paid, there may not be enough money for public health care and education. Furthermore, there are more and more elder citizens all around the world. The decrease of working fore is accompanied with the increase of old people. As a result, the financial stress of the government is very huge.

However, on the other hand, the government has collected so much tax that it should do something for its people, such as offering some free assistance to public health care and education. What’s more, this assistance will do good to the government itself. With healthy and educated people, the society will operate more efficiently. Finally, only government has the ability to control and manage the whole public health care and education system. As a result, government should take the responsibility to provide its people with public health care and education.

All in all, from my perspective, government and the society should work together to build up a reliable health care and education system. Either one of the two can not hold the whole responsibility alone.
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前来学习29的作文!

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