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screwUID: 135321

Issue20: （孫遠七月新增題）
“The widespread idea that people should make self-improvement a primary goal in their lives is problematic because it assumes that people are intrinsically deficient.”


The speaker strongly suspects the idea that people should make their life goal about self-improvement and he asserts that all individuals are flawless. But however, in our real world, is there anyone so perfect that unnecessary to pursue self-improvement? Possibility no. Therefore, I would argue in favor that the reason leading human progress actually lies in people’ desire for seeking to improve their intrinsic deficiencies.

As we know, our human kind have limited ability, which also indicates that, no matter in physiology or psychology, intrinsic deficiency is one of those qualities that actually make us human. As to physical limits, human beings could hardly conquer them without the help of any other implement. Mankind, for instance, are unable to fly over the sky like birds and they also unable to swim into sea like fishes. Then the psychological imperfection, considered as a congenital absence of knowledge, could be mended by acquired study. For example, one could improve his or her knowledge through the process of exploring and learning. In fact, inherent deficiency, part of human nature, strongly influences the development of humanity.

Because of many inconveniences resulting from their inherent limits, people, therefore, raise a positive desire for defeat them, which, in fact, is a significant force driving people to attain today’s achievements. Since the ancient times, for instance, our ancestors have been already aware their little physical power to confront the challenges from huge creatures or even from the merciless nature; thus, they have to work into group, and they invite various implements, like knife and spear, for complement their defects, which not only maintains their life but also makes human beings become prominent from diverse animals. Nowadays people, though worry less about the problem of survival, are still struggled to seek effective solutions to eliminate their inborn limits. For example, Airplane satisfies people’ dream flying over the sky; Submarine realizes people’ imagination diving into the sea. And scholars and researchers, eager to make up their psychological imperfection, devote to explore and clarify the knowledge remains unknown. Apparently, the desire for exceeding human’s congenital limits actually, to a large extent, promotes the development of humanity.

Nevertheless, realizing one’s own deficiencies does not want to guide him or her sinking into the abyss where, contrast to the positive desire, full of undue pessimism and helplessness, which would damp his or her attempt to keep forging ahead as well as damage the source leading to progress. Education system, hence, should be in charge of preparing people a proper idea: in spite of being restricted by innate weakness, people should, with confidence, dedicate their whole life to pursue self-improvement.

In conclusion, although being bonded by intrinsic deficiency, human beings, however, are continuously progressing through the process of pursuit self-improvement. In addition, education system should take the responsibility of cultivating people a correct idea of adequately judging their own merits and flaws, which not only refrains people from undue complacency or inferiority but also ensures the significant driving force that compels human beings progress.

好抽象的題目，請大家幫忙指點指點，謝謝…:)

for your sakeUID: 141183

As we know, our human kind have limited ability, which also indicates that, no matter in physiology or psychology, intrinsic deficiency is one of those qualities that actually make us human这个推理好是没有
什么逻辑爸?
第二段的说理似乎不是太清楚
不过总体不错,特别是第3段挺好的.

有一些语法错误,还有一些句子要雕琢一下

feier521UID: 109747

The speaker strongly suspects the idea that people should make their life goal about self-improvement and he asserts that all individuals are flawless. But however(去掉一个), in our real world, is there anyone so perfect that unnecessary to pursue self-improvement? Possibility（possibly） no. Therefore, I would argue in favor（in favor可以用在这里吗？没见过） that the reason leading human progress actually lies in people’ desire for seeking to improve their intrinsic deficiencies.

As we know, our human kind have limited ability, which also indicates that, no matter in physiology or psychology, intrinsic deficiency is one of those qualities that actually make us human（make us human？有点别扭）. As to physical limits, human beings could hardly conquer them(selves) without the help of any other implement(s). Mankind, for instance, are unable to fly over the sky like birds and they also unable to swim into sea like fishes. Then the psychological imperfection, considered as a congenital absence of knowledge（天生的缺乏知识不是心理方面的缺陷吧？）, could be mended by acquired study. For example, one could improve his or her knowledge through the process of exploring and learning. In fact, inherent deficiency, part of human nature, strongly influences the development of humanity.
人类有很多身体上和心理上的缺陷
Because of many inconveniences resulting from their inherent limits, people, therefore, raise a positive desire for defeat（to defeat OR for defeating） them, which, in fact, is a significant force driving people to attain today’s achievements. Since the ancient times, for instance, our ancestors have（注意时态，过去时）been already aware their little physical power to confront the challenges from huge creatures or even from the merciless nature; thus, they have to work into group, and they invite（invented）various implements, like knife and spear, for complement their defects, which not only maintains their life but also makes human beings become prominent from diverse animals. Nowadays people, though worry less about the problem of survival, are still struggled（主动语态） to seek effective solutions to eliminate their inborn limits. For example, Airplane satisfies people’（s） dream（of） flying over the sky; Submarine realizes people’（s） imagination（of）diving into the sea. And scholars and researchers, eager to make up their psychological imperfection（什么是心理缺陷？）, devote to explore and clarify the knowledge remains unknown. Apparently, the desire for exceeding human’s congenital limits actually, to a large extent, promotes the development of humanity.
古代和现代的人们不断弥补缺陷
Nevertheless, realizing one’s own deficiencies does not want to guide him or her sinking into the abyss where, contrast（ing） to the positive desire,（is） full of undue pessimism and helplessness, which would damp his or her attempt to keep forging ahead as well as damage the source leading to progress. Education system, hence, should be in charge of preparing people a proper idea: in spite of being restricted by innate weakness, people should, with confidence, dedicate their whole life to pursue self-improvement.
这一段论述没有展开。教育的作用
In conclusion, although being bonded by intrinsic deficiency, human beings, however, are continuously progressing through the process of pursuit （pursuing）self-improvement. In addition, education system should take the responsibility of cultivating people a correct idea of adequately judging their own merits and flaws, which not only refrains people from undue complacency or inferiority but also ensures the significant driving force that compels human beings progress.（结论：Education system should…，可见是很重要的一部分。可是论述只在4段末尾提了一点）

头晕乎乎的，也不知道说得对不对？将就着看吧，呵呵
加油，screw 什么时候考啊？

screwUID: 135321

谢谢for your sake 建议以及feier ”细致性的报复性的” 评改 ：D
你们的建议都对我很有启发啊，谢谢，我赶紧下去思索思索….
这题目实在感觉抽象，写起来很别扭，不知道大家对这题有没有什幺看法？
feier我28就考啦…程度又没你们这幺好，很紧张啊…*_*