issue56 觉得写的挺顺利的,不知道大家看后感觉怎么样:)

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Issue 56
Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future


Doubtlessly ,our modern society has became more and more profit-oriented. So the evaluation of the problem “Whether the government should focus more on solving the immediate problem or else focus more on solving the anticipated problem” should put much more weight on the profit basis. That is to say, which one of them can do our society more benefit?

Maybe all the people have been driven mad by the implementation in our economy the belief that we should “use the minimum investment to get the maximum product”. Many allege ,that government should for sure put more emphasis on the present problem ,through which we may get benefit quickly ,efficiently and evidently. But from a future-oriented prospective, this statement has just simplified the issue and tow examples I would like to present weigh heavily against this statement.

  Let’s first dated back to the 1950’s and evaluate the road of development and downfall or the once-powerful Soviet union. After the victory of World War 2, Soviet union grew ambitious and wanted to control the whole world by its own, not to share  it with the USA. The laid down their short –term plan ,and considered the development of heavy industry critical : of course ,it was critical at that moment if they wanted to catch up the USA, but unfortunately ,they put too much emphasis on this that the government has neglect the ordinary people’s living in the future-thought at that time, people’s life was really well off. As time went by, it is the Soviet union who had became the victim of their own short –sighted decision. As the  structure of whole industry have been completely malformed, and the light industry –which related  directly to people’s everyday life –been severely neglected, the quality of life worsen . The whole economical system was on the verge of collapse, with inflation uncontrollable ,price of common goods soaring like rocket, beggars everywhere  .All these miserable scene can be ascribed to a short –sighted decision, which at  the beginning  not to mean harm but rather to solve the immediate problem of that time.
Another example ,maybe not directly point to a individual country, is the environmental problem of developing countries. Doubtless, the immediate and the crucial task for the them is the task of how to improve the economic state, or in other word ,how to become wealthy. Maybe these countries have been too keen in their course of pursuing wealth to pay enough attention to the deterioration of environment, anyway ,the fact is that the accelerated pave of economy has indeed exert a strong and negative impact upon environment . Countries affluent with trees do their best to export lumber, countries affluent with oil do their best to export petrol ,with no regard of the future. It seems that they  follow the principle of the “ maximum profit” well, but really? I can describe a vivid picture of the future of these countries ,home land torn , not by the war but by the country itself:  skyscrapers everywhere, people throng in the dark streets full of petrol fumes ,no trees, no wild animals , no natural resources. At that time ,then can we positively say that these countries have got the “maximum  benefit “they are looking after for so long.

  Here comes the conclusion. Maybe it is too arbitrary to say that we should put all emphasis on the problem that we might encounter in the future ,at least ,we should achieve a balance between the two, after all we are all seeking a solution to gain our society the maximum benefit .but the results vary. For a wise and prudent government ,I firmly believe ,that applying my suggestion is better.

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Issue 56
Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future


Doubtlessly ,our modern society has became more and more profit-oriented. So the evaluation of the problem “Whether the government should focus more on solving the immediate problem or else focus more on solving the anticipated problem” should put much more weight on the profit basis. That is to say, which one of them can do our society more benefit?

Maybe all the people have been driven mad by the implementation in our economy the belief that we should “use the minimum investment to get the maximum product”. Many allege ,that government should for sure put more emphasis on the present problem ,through which we may get benefit quickly ,efficiently and evidently. But from a future-oriented prospective, this statement has just simplified the issue and tow（动词?） examples I would like to present weigh heavily against this statement.

Let’s first dated back to the 1950’s and evaluate the road of development and downfall or （of?）the once-powerful Soviet union. After the victory of World War 2, Soviet union grew ambitious and wanted to control the whole world by its own, not to share it with the USA. The laid down their short –term plan ,and considered the development of heavy industry critical : of course ,it was critical at that moment if they wanted to catch up the USA, but unfortunately ,they put too much emphasis on this that the government has neglect the ordinary people’s living in the future-thought at that time, people’s life was really well off. As time went by, it is the Soviet union who had became the victim of their own short –sighted decision. As the structure of whole industry have been completely malformed, and the light industry –which related directly to people’s everyday life –been severely neglected, the quality of life worsen . The whole economical system was on the verge of collapse, with inflation uncontrollable ,price of common goods soaring like rocket, beggars everywhere .All these miserable scene can be ascribed to a short –sighted decision, which at the beginning not to mean harm but rather to solve the immediate problem of that time.（短视的后果，来凸显解决未来问题的重要性，以苏联为例）
Another example ,maybe not directly point to a individual country, is the environmental problem of developing countries. Doubtless, the immediate and the crucial task for the them is the task of how to improve the economic state, or in other word ,how to become wealthy. Maybe these countries have been too keen in their course of pursuing wealth to pay enough attention to the deterioration of environment, anyway ,the fact is that the accelerated pave of economy has indeed exert a strong and negative impact upon environment . Countries affluent with trees do their best to export lumber, countries affluent with oil do their best to export petrol ,with no regard of the future. It seems that they follow the principle of the “ maximum profit” well, but really? I can describe a vivid picture of the future of these countries ,home land torn , not by the war but by the country itself: skyscrapers everywhere, people throng in the dark streets full of petrol fumes ,no trees, no wild animals , no natural resources. At that time ,then can we positively say that these countries have got the “maximum benefit “they are looking after for so long. （短视的另一例子，环境保护，一样来凸显解决未来问题的重要性，）


Here comes the conclusion. Maybe it is too arbitrary to say that we should put all emphasis on the problem that we might encounter in the future ,at least ,we should achieve a balance between the two, after all we are all seeking a solution to gain our society the maximum benefit .but the results vary.（标点不清） For a wise and prudent government ,I firmly believe ,that applying my suggestion is better.


写得很好啊，语言好流畅…佩服…:)
是不是使用ETS专才和通才的范文的论证方法，全部从单面来说明另一面的重要性，但我觉得如果用一小段来说明solving the immediate problems的好处（譬如你的第二段），后两段再来说过度重视的immediate problems的坏处，这样就更像ETS那篇的论证方法了，个人浅见，说错了，别笑我啊…:P

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Issue 56
Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future


Doubtlessly ,our modern society has became more and more profit-oriented. So the evaluation of the problem “Whether the government should focus more on solving the immediate problem or else focus more on solving the anticipated problem” should put much more weight on the profit basis. That is to say, which one of them can do our society more benefit?(最好在第一段将观点提出）

Maybe all the people have been driven mad by the implementation in our economy the belief that we should “use the minimum investment to get the maximum product”. Many allege ,that government should for sure put more emphasis on the present problem ,through which we may get benefit quickly ,efficiently and evidently. But from a future-oriented prospective, this statement has just simplified the issue and tow （？）examples I would like to present weigh heavily against this statement.

Let’s first dated back to the 1950’s and evaluate the road of development and downfall or the once-powerful Soviet union. After the victory of World War 2, Soviet union grew ambitious and wanted to control the whole world by its own（？what）, not to share it with the USA. The(they) laid down their short –term plan ,and considered the development of heavy industry critical : of course ,it was critical at that moment if they wanted to catch up the USA, but unfortunately ,they put too much emphasis on this that the government has neglect the ordinary people’s living in the future-thought at that time, people’s life(living) was really well off. As time went by, it is the Soviet union who had became the victim of their own short –sighted decision. As the structure of whole industry have been completely malformed, and the light industry –which related directly to people’s everyday life –been severely neglected, the quality of life worsen . The whole economical system was on the verge of collapse, with inflation uncontrollable ,price of common goods soaring like rocket, beggars everywhere .All these miserable scene can be ascribed to a short –sighted decision, which at the beginning not to mean harm but rather to solve the immediate problem of that time.
Another example ,maybe not directly point(pointing) to an individual country, is the environmental problem( 最好用复数）of developing countries. Doubtless, the immediate and the crucial task for the（/） them is the task of how to improve the economic state, or in other word ,how to become wealthy. Maybe these countries have been too keen in their course of pursuing wealth to pay enough attention to the deterioration of environment, anyway ,the fact is that the accelerated pave of economy has indeed exert a strong and negative impact upon environment . Countries affluent with trees do their best to export lumber, countries affluent with oil do their best to export petrol ,with no regard of the future. It seems that they follow the principle of the “ maximum profit” well, but really? I can describe a vivid picture of the future of these countries ,home land torn , not by the war but by the country itself: skyscrapers everywhere, people throng in the dark streets full of petrol fumes ,no trees, no wild animals , no natural resources. At that time ,then can we positively say that these countries have got the “maximum benefit “they are looking after for so long.

Here comes the conclusion. Maybe it is too arbitrary to say that we should put all emphasis on the problem that we might encounter in the future ,at least ,we should achieve a balance between the two, after all we are all seeking a solution to gain our society the maximum benefit .but the results vary. For a wise and prudent government ,I firmly believe ,that applying my suggestion is better.
除了少数几个文法错误，写得挺好的，例子子举得恰到好处，论证挺简洁

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hehe谢谢两位啊

的确我是应该在第一段把观点写出来,这样回比较清楚