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[作文] Daily Writing——【Carol】作文帖 求批改 求进步! [复制链接]

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发表于 2011-8-13 19:25:30 |只看该作者
改过了,希望对你有帮助
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发表于 2011-8-13 22:33:16 |只看该作者
楼主,12号应该是TPO7吧,你做错了。我也不改了,因为楼主的tpo6实际上做得不错,抓点都抓到了。

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8.13  TPO8

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The professor provides sufficient evidences which contradict the conclusion of the passage. In her view, the long memoir wrote by Chevalier is real. Thus, he did not distort or invented many events in the memoir.

First, the professor argues that the Chevalier had seems not very rich. According to her, Chevalier borrowed money does not means he is poor. Because every businessman knows that you should loan enough money to go around while you are selling something. So before Chevalier’s money arrived, he has had to borrow money from Swiss merchant.

Second, the professor opposes the point in the passage that the memoir cannot possibly capture these conversations accurately about Chevalier had chat with Voltaire. The professor explains that Chevalier wrote down exact details every night after the conversations end up. Therefore, the point in the passage that it is impossible to remember exact phrases from extended conversations held many years earlier is seriously attacked.

Third, the professor contradicts the passage by demonstrating the Chevalier’s escape from Venetian prison. She says that other prisoner in that prison has more powerful friends than he did. However, those people were not able to bribe jailers to have freedom. What’s more, the old government documents indicated that the event of having escape from Venetian prison is true. Because the ceiling in the room has been repaired, it confirmed that Chevalier preparing escape.

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